my fan-fic... - Page 6

realy good 👏 keep it up.we are waiting for the next episod.please fast.

oh my!!! that was a lovely response... n tunna, ur comments made me emotional!!! 😭 neways, here goes!
recap: suraj is discharged from the hospital, manasvi talks to him that he shud forget the 1 who he loves. suraj refuses. arjun hears all this and decides to find out abt the girl whom suraj loves...

After manasvi leaves, suraj sits down on the sofa. arjun comes down.
A: bhaiya, tumhe doctor ne bedrest lene ke liye kaha tha na... phir tum yaha kya kar rahe ho?
S: main room me bore ho raha tha arjun...
A: main kuch sunna nahi chahta, chalo mere saath apne kamre mein.
S: main thik hoon arjun. itni fikar karne ki zaroorat nahi hai.
A: kyun nahi hai? tumhara bhai hoon. tumhari fikar karna hak hai mera.
S: acha thik hai. lekin main kamre mein nahin jana chahta hoon.
Arjun sees the chance to talk to suraj abt his love-life.
A: acha thik hai, ek kaam karo, tum tayaar ho jao. hum dono kahi bahar chalte hai.
S: OK brother!!!
suraj goes in his room and comes out with his normal three-piece suit...
A: uh! bhaiya, tum kitne boring hai. hum bahar ghoomne jaa rahe hai, office nahi. yeh kya suit pehen kar aa gaye. chalo!!!
arjun takes him to his room and takes out a black tight fitting T-shirt and a pair of jeans from suraj's cupboard and hands it to him.
A: yeh lo, isme tum bilkul hero lagenge!
S: bilkul nahi! main yeh nahi pehnunga!
A: nothing doing, ab pehli baar apne bhai se kuch manga hai maine. meri yeh itcha bhi poori nahi karoge?
S: arjun, tum bhi na, bohot ziddi ho!
suraj goes inside the shower and comes out with the jeans and T-shirt.(i can actually imagine it! he is lookin too good!) Arjun turns around and looks at him and smiles.
A: dekha, maine kaha tha na, bilkul hero lag rahe ho tum...
S: accha thik hai, ab itni taarif karna band karo. chale?
A: yeh bhi koi poochne waali baat hai?

they sit in the car and drive off to sunset point(guys, i have just made that up. i dont know if it exists)
S: arjun, yeh kaha le aaye ho mujhe? yaha to romantic couples aate hai...
A: jaanta hoon bhaiya. lekin mujhe tum se kuch bohot zaroori baat karni hai...
S: aisi koun si baat hai jisse karne ke liye tum mujhe yaha le aaye?
A: actually bhaiya, maine tumhari aur manasvi bhabhi ki baatein sunli thi...
Suraj falls silent.
A: bhaiya, main jaan na chahta hoon ke woh ladki koun hai jisse tum itna pyar karte ho...
S: please arjun, mujhse yeh sawaal mat poocho.
A: kyun nahi?
S: kyun ki ab is baat se koi farak nahi parta hai. main jisse pyar karta hoon uski shaadi ho chuki hai. aur teen mahino pehle uske pati ki death bhi ho gayi.
both fall silent for some time. at first, arjun does not realize that the description of the girl given by suraj matches that of manasvi, but then...
A: sorry bhaiya.
S: koi baat nahi arjun, kya hum is topic ko change kar sakte hai?
A: ya sure. tum jante ho bhaiya, jab bhi mujhe ya satya bhaiya ko koi problem hoti thi to.....(stops)
S: kya huwa arjun, ruk kyun gaye?
A: satya bhaiya! unki death bhi to teen mahine pehle huwi thi na...
S: haan, to?
A(suddenly remembering the conversation of manasvi and suraj): bhaiya, kahi woh ladki...
S: koun si ladki arjun?
A: kahi jis ladki se tum pyar karte ho woh, MANASVI BHABHI TO NAHI??????
suraj falls silent...
A: kab se?(silence) BHAIYA!!!!! KAB SE PYAR KARTE HO TUM UNSE?
S: jab se hum dono mein dosti huwi...
A: yaani ke tab se, jab manasvi bhabhi satya bhaiya ko jaanti tak nahi thi!!!!!
suraj has a few tears in his eyes.
A: aur kya manasvi bhabhi yeh janti hai?
S: haan...

arjun falls silent for a long time, and then suddenly, smiles to himself!
A: suraj bhaiya, agar manasvi bhabhi khud tum se kahe ke woh tumse shaadi karna chahti hai to????
Suraj is shocked!
S: KYA????

thats it guys.... i have left it at a very critical stage...
tunna, i hope this reaches ur expectations...

WONDERFUL !!!!!!!!!!!!!

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thats a really very good part..
its too sweet.. n if that cud b.. its better than my expectations..
n plzz.. if ur thinking of getting them married n ending the story.. think again... i want this to continu.. long time.. okay... 😉
waiting for the next part.. post quickly as i'll b going out of station next week..

heyi.. why havnt u updated it today !!
thats bad !!! 😡
now u shud update 2episodes tomoro .. okay... 😃

its very nice keep it up
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heyi where r u yaar !!!!
havnt updated it today too.. n i'm going out of station next week.. i hav to read lots n lots .. so update quick.. got it 😡

hi guys, sorry tuhina, read ur comments... truly sorry, i couldnt update for a long time... maaf kardo yaar. neways, here we go again...
recap: arjun and suraj go to sunset point to have a private brother-to-brother talk... arjun finds out abt suraj's crush on manasvi, and asks him whether he would get married to manasvi if she told him to!
S: KYA?
A: karoge ya nahi???
S: agar woh apni marzi se karna chahegi, to main usse shaadi zaroor karunga. lekin agar tumne ya kisi aur ne uspar dabav dalna ki koshish ki, to main khud is shaadi se inkaar kardunga.
A: is baat ki fikar tum mat karo bhaiya, manasvi bhabhi khud tumse kahegi ke woh tumse shaadi karna chahti hai, aur woh bhi apni marzi se... um, kaafi der ho gayi hai, hum ghar chale?
S: haan chalo!
At HH, suraj and arjun enter...
A: bhaiya, tum thak gaye hoge, tum jaa kar kuch der aaram karo.
after suraj leaves, arjun goes to baisa's room. bhavri is also there.
A: baisa, kaisi hai aap.
Baisa: main thik hoon arjun, kaha the tum?
A: woh sab chodiye baisa, pehle meri baat suniye.
Baisa: haan bolo...
A: actually baisa, baat suraj bhaiya ko lekar hai...
baisa: suraj bhaiya???? tum dono me usla ho gayi kya?
A: haan baisa, maine use apna bada bhai maan liya hai.
Bhavri: yeh to bohot acchi baat hai...
baisa: haan bhoomi, (to arjun) waise tum kya kehna chahte the arjun?
A: baisa main suraj bhaiya ki shaadi ki baat karna chahta tha...
baisa: suraj ki shaadi, yeh to bohot accha socha hai tumne arjun, lekin kya suraj kisi ko pasand karta hai?
A: haan baisa, bhaiya manasvi bhabhi ko pasand karta hai.
baisa and bhavri both are shocked.
A: kya huwa?
baisa: kuch nahi arjun, agar woh dono is rishte se raazi hai to phir hame bhi koi problem nahi hai...
A: problem yeh hai baisa ke bhaiya raazi hai, lekin manasvi bhabhi ke baare mein kuch nahi keh sakte...
baisa: yeh to bohot acchi baat hai... is ka matlab hamara 50% kaam ho gaya, lekin ab baaki 50% karna thoda mushkil hoga... (looking at the clock) are, bohot der ho gayi hai... tum dono jao, hum kal baat karenge...
A: thik hai baisa...

arjun and bhavri both go to their room.
B: arjun, bohot der ho gayi hai. hame so jana chahiye.
A: haan, lekin ek baat batao bhavri, jab main baisa se baat kar raha tha bhaiya aur manasvi bhabhi ke baare mein, tab tum itni chup kyun thi?
B: actually arjun, baat ye hai ke, bhagwan na kare ke, agar manasvi bhabhi ke dil mein agar surajji ke liye aise koi jazbaat na ho to?
A: bhavri, aise jazbaat pehle se nahi hote, unhe jagana parta hai...
B: baat to sahi hai, lekin...
A: lekin-vekin kuch nahi... tumne kaha na ke der ho gayi hai... chalo so jao...
bhavri gets in bed.
A: good night bhavri!
B: good night!
bhavri closes her eyes. as arjun is about to close his eyes, his eyes fall on bhavri...
A(in his mind): shes so pretty! maine bhavri ki yeh khoobsurati pehle kyun hai dekhi?

thats it guys, n sorry tuhina, its a bit short. and i m not sure whether i will update tomorrow! i hope when u come back from where u r going, u get some very pleasant surprises...(i mean sm wedding)

WELL DONE
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KEEP IT UP

good job Arjun_Bhanvri. 👏 👏 👏

arjun-bhavi where r u i m waiting for your fan fic plzzzzzzzzzzz continue plzzzzzzzzz