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Posted: 19 years ago
#41
lovely lovely lovely.......
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rit more more more soon...
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Posted: 19 years ago
#42
its really great 👏
write soon
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Posted: 19 years ago
#43
great goin... 👏 👏 👏 plz do continue soon..😊
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Posted: 19 years ago
#44
ok guys, lovely response...
recap: manasvi is sitting near suraj n talking to him,
arjun n bhavri r sitting together n talking,
bhavri blushes.
Bhavri gets up from where she was sitting(near arjun,
when he was talking abt his feelings towards suraj and
then towards her. when she gets up, arjun holds her
hand and stops her. he gets up and suddenly gives
bhavri a hug 🤗 🤗 🤗 ... he doesnt let
her go for a long time. just then, arjuns phone rings.
A: haan keshav, bolo, kya baat hai?
K: arjun, tum abhi office aa jao...
A: is waqt? keshav, raat ke dus baje hai... koi problem
hai kya?
K: nahin arjun, problem to nahin hai, lekin hamare ek
client humse milna chahte hai...
A: hum unse kal bhi to mil sakte hai na...
K: nahin arjun, woh kal subah wapas america jaa rahe
hai, isiliye maine meeting fix kardi. ab tum jaldi aao.
A: thik hai, aa raha hoon(hangs up. then talks to
bhavri) bhavri mujhe jana hoga. office me kuch kaam
hai. bye(gives her a light kiss on the cheek and
leaves. bhavri smiles)

in the hospital, manasvi is asleep on the sofa outside the ward.
Suraj(to nurse): nurse, kya main yaha se khada ho sakta
hoon?
N: haan, lekin dhyaan se...
suraj gets up and goes outside the ward. he sees manasvi
sleeping and goes and sits beside her. he looks at her
and remember the college days when they were really good
friends and smiles. but suddenly his smile fades when he
remembers the day when he proposed to manasvi and she
refused. a tear dropped from his eye. manasvi wakes up n
sees suraj sitting beside her, with tears in his eyes.
she understands what suraj was thinking and wipes the
tears from his eyes. suraj, whose eyes were closed, opens
them to see manasvi smiling at him.
S: manasvi, tum kab uthi?
M: jab tum hamare college ke dino ko yaad kar rahe the..
S(shocked): tumhe kaise pata chala ke main...
M: acchi tarha se janti hoon main tumhe. tumhare aankhon
me aansoon sirf meri wajah se aa sakte hain.
S: nahin manasvi, tum apne aap ko is baat ke liye doshi
mat samjho...
M(stands up): nahin suraj, main janti hoon ke tumne ab
tak mujhe apne dil aur zehen se nikal nahi paye ho...
lekin suraj, zindagi bohot lambi hoti hai... tumhe ek na
ek din to apna ghar basana hi hoga. aur phir tumhari
umar itni choti bhi to nahi hai. tum mujhse sirf che(6)
mahine bade ho, yaani ke chhabis(26) saal ke ho. is umar
mein tumhari shaadi ho jaani chahiye...
S: thik hai manasvi, tum kehti ho to main shaadi kar
leta hoon. meri nazar mein ek ladki bhi hai...
M(really happy): achha, koun hai woh?
S: TUM...manasvi, mujhse shaadi karogi?
manasvi is very shocked and is unable to say anything...
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Posted: 19 years ago
#45
Very veryyyyyy nice 👏.keep up good job.
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Posted: 19 years ago
#46
hi guys, hope u liked the previous part!
recap: keshav calls arjun for some office work, arjun leaves. manasvi tells suraj that he shud get married, suraj says ok n proposes to manasvi.
Manasvi is shocked and unable to say anything. Suraj is also quiet. after some time, manasvi comes to her normal state.
M: suraj, ye ek pal me tumne bohot badi baat kehdi... nahin suraj, main satya ki jaga meri zindagi me kisi ko nahin de sakti...
S(interrupting): aur main tumhari jaga kisi ko nahin de sakta.
both fall silent for a while and then suraj speaks.
S: mujhe is baat ka koi dukh nahin hai ke tum mujhse shaadi nahin karna chahti ho... ek baar pehle bhi tum mana kar chuki ho... ye koi nayi baat nahin hai... jaise pehle jee raha tha, waise hi apni poori zindagi bita dunga...
M: ye baat ghar par kisi ko pata nahin chalni chahiye...
S: fikar mat karo manasvi, jab tak tum kuch nahin kahogi, meri zubaan bandh rahegi.
manasvi looks at suraj with tears in her eyes. suddenly, she feels really sorry for him.
M(in her mind): satya ke jaane ke baad, main ek pal bhi use yaad kiye bina nahin rehsaki hoon... aur suraj to itne saal mere bina raha hai... woh kaise raha hoga?
her thoughts are interrupted by the nurse
Nurse: mr goenka, bohot der ho gayi hai, doctor ne kaha ke ab aap ko so jana chahiye...
S: thik hai nurse, (to manasvi) good night manasvi...
M: good ni... (suraj does not wait to hear the answer)
Manasvi cries a lot that night 😭 😭 😭
next morning, at HH, when bhavri wakes up, she sees arjun on the sofa..
B(to herself): lagta hai kal raat ghar aane me arjun ko bohot der ho gayi. mujhe use jagana nahi chahiye...
she slowly gets out of bed and goes to the bathroom...
after some time, when she comes out of the bathroom, she sees the sofa, but does not see arjun on it.
B: are, ye arjun kaha gaya?(she turns towards the bed and sees arjun sleeping cozily on the bed. she smiles to herself. 😊 😊

thats it, hope u like it.
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Posted: 19 years ago
#47
all d parts r gr8 , 👏 keep it up. 😃
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Posted: 19 years ago
#48
hi guys, i havent written for a long time...
recap: manasvi refuses arjuns proposal, arjun comes back late at home.
Next morning, in the hospital, every1 is there.
Doctor(to shaku): mr goenka ki tabiyat bohot sudhar rahi hai... woh pehle se kaafi behtar hai. ab main unhe discharge kar sakta hoon.
Shaku: Bhagwan ka lakh lakh shukar hai ke suraj ab thik hai.
the doctor comes out with some papers and sid signs them. then he tells suraj that he can go.

At HH, suraj is welcomed back and shaku tells him to go to his room and rest. suraj leaves.
After some time, arjun goes to meet suraj in his room.
A: hi suraj, kaise ho?
S: bilkul thik hoon arjun. koi kaam tha kya?
A: tumhe aisa kyun lagta hai ke mai yahan sirf kisi kaam ki wajah se aa sakta hoon???
S: maine aisa kab kaha? actually baat yeh hai ke tum pehle kabhi is tarha bina kisi kaam ke mere kamre mein nahin aaye ho...
A: woh main tumse kuch kehna chahta tha...
S: kaho arjun, kya baat hai?
A: suraj, woh, main tumse maafi mangna chahta hoon. aaj tak tumhare saath bohot buri tarha pesh aaya hoon. tumhe apna bhai maanne se bhi inkaar kar diya.aur tumpar haath bhi uthaya...
S: arjun please, aisi baaton ko bhool jao... main bhi to sab kuch bhool gaya hoon.
A: lekin main jab bhi woh sab bhoolne ki koshish karta hoon, kuch na kuch aisa hota hai jisse mujhe woh sab phir se yaad aata hai... isilie main tumse maafi mangna chahta hoon. I m sorry suraj... i mean, suraj bhaiya..
S: kya, kya kaha tumne? phir se kaho...
A: suraj bhaiya...
they hug each other.

after some time, suraj gets tired and bored of sitting in his room, so he goes in the hall. there, he meets manasvi and khushi.
S: manasvi, tum kahi jaa rahi ho kya?
M: haan suraj, khushi ke school mein aaj ek charity function hai, aur khushi ne usme part liya hai... main use waha chhod ne jaa rahi hoon...(to khushi) khushi, tumhari bag kaha hai?
K: oops, bhul gayi...(runs to get it)
M(to suraj): ek baat kahu suraj.
S: haan kaho...
M: tum jante ho ke tum jisse pyar karte ho woh tumhari kabhi nahi ho sakti hai, to phir use bhool ke tum kisi aur se shaadi kyun nahi kar lete?
S: kya tum satya ko bhool kar kisi aur se shaadi karne ke liye tayaar ho jaogi?
M: kabhi nahi...
S: tumhe tumhare sawaal ka jawab mil gaya..
M: kisi se itna pyar karna sahi nahi hota hai suraj, jab woh insaan apna nahin ban sakta, tab bohot dard hota hai...
S: ab us dard se mujhe koi farak nahin parta hai manasvi, kyun ki is dard ko main college ke dino se jhel raha hoon.
M(with tears in her eyes): im sorry suraj, im very sorry!
S: tum kyun sorry ho rahi ho manasvi? isme tumhari ghalati kya hai?
khushi comes and manasvi has to go...
Arjun has been hearing all this from upstairs.
A: yeh ladki koun hai jisse suraj itna pyar karta hai? aur usne kisi ko ab tak bataya kyun nahi? main pata lagakar hi rahunga...
LK: TATHASTU!

thats it guys... pls post ur comments... no1 seems interested nowadays...
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Posted: 19 years ago
#49
o wow ..............
👏
thats how much i loved it... even more mayb.. read the last parts together.. n its really very very very good.. i always hav a soft corner for s-m parts n they were exceptional 😉 .. n arjun also behaves sooooo sweetly... 😛 i'll always.. always.. always.. b interested in this ff.. so always keep it updated.. for me atleast.. 😃
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Posted: 19 years ago
#50
no i loved it more....
👏 [👏 =D>] 👏

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