Fire - A ShraMan Drabble - Page 4

Originally posted by: crazyparrot

Too good! 👏

Thank you so much!!

Shravan's outburst clearly shows how much broken he was from inside!

Love to read more of this kind!

I shall try...

Originally posted by: Sonai_02

This is so amazing. U r a very skillful writer dear !!! 👏

Thank you ya!!!!

Shravan's pain is outraging . 😭

The lines u used in this whole thing had mixed sense of love and woe blended wonderfully !!!

Shukriya!

"Kyunki jab andhera roshni ki bheek maangne aaye, toh apna ghar jala dena hi sahi hai.."

This one was damn awesome and made me shiver u know !!!😳

Yey! It reached its intended purpose😉

Originally posted by: adityasingh.246

U are something else ... 👏 I take a bow .. This is one hell of emotional piece ..😭

Why Thank you! Sorry I made you emotional...

shravan's hurt was beyond any1's understanding,it was like fire burning him & he writhing in pain more with each moment ..

Word!

This lashing out was what was expected coz shravan couldn't do this with his mom or dad but the fact that he has loved sumo beyond measure,limitless,that was the reason that always his feelings & anger was lashed out on her,directly or indirectly,like they say "jisse jita pyar,use utna hi dard" ..

Sahi baat kar di aapne bilkul!

The dialogues were brilliant,especially that andhera roshini mangne aye .. & glad she returned to avoid him from creating self destruction,to bring him out of the darkness to light,however much hard the path ahead is .. for if they are each other's doom,they are each other's light ..

Doom and light! Prefect! 👏

Originally posted by: deltadawn

So ... Came back and read it again.

Every word is fire personified. Yeah Shravan should have done just that.

I know right! He totally should have!

Feels like he would just have to set himself ablaze for Sumo to turn around and realize he even exists. There were just too many places where she simply did not see him, See inside him or see beyond her needs and means.

II totally agree with you on this Deepti! Either she acted like he didn't exist or she simply treated him like people don't treat animals. Woh shayad marr jata tab usko samjh aata.

Familiarity was all he ever longed for, none but hell delivered.

Loved it and agreed with it so much.

Thank you!

Aah heart weeps for that poor soul again. Who couldn't even unleash his fury completely before turning to ashes and raising again from them... No one let him.

So very well put man! 👏

Originally posted by: _Eternity_

zoyi... 🤗

Ranju🤗
no words yr...amazingly written...

Thank you!
dialogues superb.

Yey! Thanks!

fabulous drabble dear... 👏

I'm so glad!

Originally posted by: Safire

I am not very good at expressing myself through words..

So only one word... AMAZING!!!

And that suffices completely!

Originally posted by: CarpeDiem_

Now as drop dead gorgeous as I may be, I'm certainly not a vampire so I could in all honesty die and I choose life. !!

I wish he was one!😉 did I tell u...I looove vampires 😳

Did you know I love them too! 😉 And he would fit the bill too damned well☺️

Kaat ke zuban meri,,keh raha hai wo qatil,,ab tumhe ijazat hai,, haal-e-dil sunane ki...!

Aye haye haye! Mehfil loot li! 👏

If this was an Edkv episode,, would hv been my favourite! !

Mine too😳

Stunning update!

Thank you ya!

Originally posted by: bworm

This was very well written and it drew blood

Drawing blood was its sole purpose😉

I don't enjoy angst...so honestly did not enjoy it.

Oh okay, sorry for having bored you 😛

But can appreciate where it was coming from.

Thanks!

You are an awesome writer and I do enjoy your stories..even if I don't like them sometimes.

Yeh line thodi samjhi nahi mujhe.. You enjoy even when you don't like them at times... I'll take that as a compliment, Thank you😃

And really appreciate the pm.

You're welcome!

Originally posted by: Jerry2308

Amazing drabble.. so intense..Good that Shravan vented out everything..Wish we could see that in the show

Thank you so much! I swear! I would have loved to watch too...

Brilliant dialogues..

Shukriya!

Originally posted by: minho

Its really a fire 👏 dhamakedaar drabble 👏