Fire - A ShraMan Drabble

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crazyparrot

@crazyparrot

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Posted: 8 years ago

#11

Too good! 👏

Shravan's outburst clearly shows how much broken he was from inside!

Love to read more of this kind!

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Diya

@Sonai_02

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Posted: 8 years ago

#12

This is so amazing. U r a very skillful writer dear !!! 👏

Shravan's pain is outraging . 😭

The lines u used in this whole thing had mixed sense of love and woe blended wonderfully !!!

"Kyunki jab andhera roshni ki bheek maangne aaye, toh apna ghar jala dena hi sahi hai.."

This one was damn awesome and made me shiver u know !!!😳

Edited by Sonai_02 - 8 years ago

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adityasingh.246

@adityasingh.246

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Posted: 8 years ago

#13

U are something else ... 👏 I take a bow .. This is one hell of emotional piece ..😭

shravan's hurt was beyond any1's understanding,it was like fire burning him & he writhing in pain more with each moment ..

This lashing out was what was expected coz shravan couldn't do this with his mom or dad but the fact that he has loved sumo beyond measure,limitless,that was the reason that always his feelings & anger was lashed out on her,directly or indirectly,like they say "jisse jita pyar,use utna hi dard" ..

The dialogues were brilliant,especially that andhera roshini mangne aye .. & glad she returned to avoid him from creating self destruction,to bring him out of the darkness to light,however much hard the path ahead is .. for if they are each other's doom,they are each other's light ..

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deltadawn

@deltadawn

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Posted: 8 years ago

#14

So ... Came back and read it again.

Every word is fire personified. Yeah Shravan should have done just that.

Feels like he would just have to set himself ablaze for Sumo to turn around and realize he even exists. There were just too many places where she simply did not see him, See inside him or see beyond her needs and means.

Familiarity was all he ever longed for, none but hell delivered.

Loved it and agreed with it so much.

Aah heart weeps for that poor soul again. Who couldn't even unleash his fury completely before turning to ashes and raising again from them... No one let him.

Edited by deltadawn - 8 years ago