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Posted: 9 years ago
#11

Originally posted by: orion23

You're really good at this man!!

Loved it

Aww..Thank U. 😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
#12

Originally posted by: -rhythm-

Fantastic post . Chick soup ❤️

My heart went to shravan .. When he rested his head after he closed tiffin back .
Apt song u choosen .

I been thinking a song from kites
" Dil kyun ye mera shore karein , idher nahi , udhar nahi
Teri aur chale "


I know...I guess we all had to give our hearts to Shravan for that one moment.

Dil kyu yeh mera shor kare- Yes, wonderful! 👏

Idhar nahi, Udhar Nahi..Teri Aur Chale...
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Posted: 9 years ago
#13

Originally posted by: sapphire3

I am speechless
Beautifully penned chick 👏

Originally posted by: crazy_vaish

Excellent👏👏 and the reference song! Its one of my all time favourites



Thanks, Guys 😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
#14

Originally posted by: --fero--

Excellent 👏
Poetess chick



Thank U, Both of U. 😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
#15

Chick, to say how brilliantly you have captured Shravan's inner turmoil would be stating the obvious. Nevertheless, I can't help but ask how do you manage to surprise me with your every single post? Keep them coming!😊

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Posted: 9 years ago
#16
The poor boy resting his head on the tiffin was the most heartwarming shot after that smile on seeing the feedback form the battle between the dil vs DiMag contd...
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Posted: 9 years ago
#17
I loved the feedback concept too. It's so good to see they continue to show both at work.
The last scene, like you described he couldn't take his eyes off her and the look on somon's eyes- like she hasn't seen him for years. So heartening!

Just came across your post. Busy weekend.
Thanks for writing and have a great weekend.
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Posted: 9 years ago
#18

Originally posted by: chicksoup

The first thing on my mind as I wake up is You.

I check my phone for your message, wait for you call.

Deep down, I hope for a message from you.

The day passes; you continue to give me space.

Then I walk in for lunch...

And I am greeted with your feedback form.

Something from you- Even if it was not exclusively for me.

It brightens my day, I light up.

I sit down with a heart filled with happiness...

Open the Tiffin to fill my senses with the beautiful aroma of your Daal...the one I had asked you to make...

And then I catch myself slipping away...I cannot afford that.

So I close the Tiffin and rest my head resignedly over it...and decide to punish myself for day dreaming again...

I cannot have any reminder of you anywhere near me, so I order that they cancel my Tiffin from you.

LOL. Apparently, everyone is afraid of you, Sumo- My Assistant hesitates as he is asked to call you.

I look curiously at him, wishing I could eavesdrop on the conversation- I am dying to hear your voice.

Your message is delivered to me- You are sensitive about your food...I know that, but I am sorry.

I really can't help this- I badly need my sane self back.

The rest of the day is thankfully filled with court related activities that help me take my mind off you...

I take a drive back home in the afternoon, and you are standing there in front of my eyes like a vision...A Vision, you know.

Are you real? May be not?

Are my feelings real? Perhaps...Though I'd rather not dwell on it much.

But it is as if I am driving through a dream...Your presence fills the emptiness in me...I can't take my eyes off you.

What is it about you that I can't have any control over myself?

How unfair it is that my heart continues to hope...when all I want is just you as my friend.

I would give the world to have you beside me without any of the complexities my mind draws up...

How you torment me, my Sumo!

PS:


Love is an addiction, you see. When you are in the throes of young seemingly unrequited love and passion, reason and logic get wings and fly out of the window.


Your smile

is like my morning coffee-

it wakes my senses,

stimulates my emotions,

clears my vision -

I am addicted.


Your eyes,

are the deep hazel of

my whiskey filled glass,

I drown, but find a footing,

I stutter, but find my voice,

I'm awake, but sleep peacefully

after my nightcap -

I'm addicted.


Your voice,

is the book I love to read,

it crowds my head,

occupies my thoughts,

makes me revisit page after page, every word -

I'm addicted.


You,

are the song I love to hear

on a loop, time after time,

Lyrical, filled with such sweet melody -

it fills my heart.

it shakes up my soul.

it brings immense joy.

And creates such memories,

I'm addicted.


Sorry! I feel very random this morning!




Edited by beagleboy - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#19
Nice one chick. Here is one from Sumo's side. You see we have switched sides today


I have erred in the past
I tried to apologize multiple times
I will do so again in future and wait patiently
I am not one to leave your side - ever

I am not an intense person
But then your intensity can cover us both
I might be spinning tales and cooking stuff all the time
But I have no bad intentions - ever

My love I show through actions
I love you unconditionally inspite of the mixed signals I receive
My intention is not to hurt you
It is to make sure you never get hurt - ever

I want to take you through your nightmares
I want you to get back your mother
I might be hiding the truth - even lying to you
But it is all to make sure you attain peace - ever

Little do I know that I am digging my own grave
Even if I knew I would have happily gone there myself.
EVERY TIME
Edited by JJKKL - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#20
Beautifully written 👏
loved it

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