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Posted: 9 years ago
Hope what I have written is fine do let me next time will make
It better n hope u n joyed t

Actually thought to write swear words but reframed From it

my first one hope there's no mistakes tried to make t more interesting

Tanx guys
Edited by ravzs - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
Great one ravzs, mahi, ur turn 😊
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Amreen...

Res to continue after Mahi 😉


I was waiting for u Amreen...

Res after Amreen
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Posted: 9 years ago
I wasn't sure about the continuation as Ravs confused me bit... So what I have understood of it, I have continued... Here it is:
Everyone gathered around the dining table for the Cake Cutting. As the Tiwaaris started occupying places around Daboo, Verma, Creepy to the core, went to stand beside Sumo so that he could continue with his nautanki. And this time, he planned to finalise his engagement with her.
He looked here and there and started inching towards her step by step. As he was moving, he collided against a figure. As he turned his head around, he saw a really tall man standing next to him. He had to literally cock up his head to see his face. It was Shravan!
His expression turned nasty as this newcomer dared to foil his intention.
On the other side, Sumo stood safe between her newly acquired bodyguards Shravan and Pushkar.
Shravan had a smirk on his face as he talked:
Maine aapko kahin disturb toh nahi kiya? He taunted.
Verma was exasperated at this. He went behind a little and gave a dirty glance to her. Shravan stepped onto his foot to bring him back to his senses.
Ahhh! He shouted.
Everyone turned to him and he was a bit ashamed.
Shravan: Kya hua Vermaji?
Daboo and Pushkar giggled while Preeta was more than happy. Team Verma Ki Dhulaayi had sprung into action and it was just a matter of time when they would see him running away for his life.

After the cake cutting, Sumo went in with the cake to cut it into pieces and serve everyone. Verma noticed that Shravan and Pushkar were busy, so he tip toed into the kitchen behind her.
As Sumo was cutting it, she felt a tap on her shoulder. It wasnt Pushkar or Shravan or she would have known. She grasped the knife with which she was cutting the cake and turned around, pointing it straight.
And sure enough, it was Verma.
Sumo: You! Stay away! She shouted.
Verma: Accha, ab tum aisa karogi? He grabbed her hand and turned it, making her drop the knife. As he was about to pull her closer, a strong Thud on his hand made him leave it. It was Shravan followed by Pushkar, Preeta and lastly Daboo.

Preeta: Kamine, ullo de patthe, chor ki shakal waale Kutte! Aaj to Tu dekh, Tera Kalyaan Hokar Rahega!

They surrounded him. Daboo brought a glass of drink and handed it to Shravan.
Shravan: Woh kya hai naa, aaj aapki khatir daari theek se nahi hui. Toh main personally aapki seva karoonga ab.
He grasped his mouth and forced the sharbat into it.
Verma was disgusted at it. Before he could shout, Preeta kicked in his stomach, making him grunch and growl.

Pushkar signalled the others and in a flash, everyone just disappeared. Verma was puzzled at this.
Verma to Sumo: Dekh loonga tum sab...

His stomach started howling and he felt an urgent need to pay a visit to washroom! As he tried room by room, he found it occupied. Pushkar, Shravan, Preeta, Daboo had occupied all the washrooms from before.

Ashamed, he held his stomach and went and sat uncomfortably on the sofa, twisting and turning , controlling his urgency.


Hope you have a good laugh😉
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Artist_Forever

I wasn't sure about the continuation as Ravs confused me bit... So what I have understood of it, I have continued... Here it is:

Everyone gathered around the dining table for the Cake Cutting. As the Tiwaaris started occupying places around Daboo, Verma, Creepy to the core, went to stand beside Sumo so that he could continue with his nautanki. And this time, he planned to finalise his engagement with her.
He looked here and there and started inching towards her step by step. As he was moving, he collided against a figure. As he turned his head around, he saw a really tall man standing next to him. He had to literally cock up his head to see his face. It was Shravan!

His expression turned nasty as this newcomer dared to foil his intention.
On the other side, Sumo stood safe between her newly acquired bodyguards Shravan and Pushkar.
Shravan had a smirk on his face as he talked:
Maine aapko kahin disturb toh nahi kiya? He taunted.
Verma was exasperated at this. He went behind a little and gave a dirty glance to her. Shravan stepped onto his foot to bring him back to his senses.
Ahhh! He shouted.
Everyone turned to him and he was a bit ashamed.
Shravan: Kya hua Vermaji?
Daboo and Pushkar giggled while Preeta was more than happy. Team Verma Ki Dhulaayi had sprung into action and it was just a matter of time when they would see him running away for his life.

After the cake cutting, Sumo went in with the cake to cut it into pieces and serve everyone. Verma noticed that Shravan and Pushkar were busy, so he tip toed into the kitchen behind her.
As Sumo was cutting it, she felt a tap on her shoulder. It wasnt Pushkar or Shravan or she would have known. She grasped the knife with which she was cutting the cake and turned around, pointing it straight.
And sure enough, it was Verma.
Sumo: You! Stay away! She shouted.
Verma: Accha, ab tum aisa karogi? He grabbed her hand and turned it, making her drop the knife. As he was about to pull her closer, a strong Thud on his hand made him leave it. It was Shravan followed by Pushkar, Preeta and lastly Daboo.

Preeta: Kamine, ullo de patthe, chor ki shakal waale Kutte! Aaj to Tu dekh, Tera Kalyaan Hokar Rahega!

They surrounded him. Daboo brought a glass of drink and handed it to Shravan.
Shravan: Woh kya hai naa, aaj aapki khatir daari theek se nahi hui. Toh main personally aapki seva karoonga ab.
He grasped his mouth and forced the sharbat into it.
Verma was disgusted at it. Before he could shout, Preeta kicked in his stomach, making him grunch and growl.

Pushkar signalled the others and in a flash, everyone just disappeared. Verma was puzzled at this.
Verma to Sumo: Dekh loonga tum sab...

His stomach started howling and he felt an urgent need to pay a visit to washroom! As he tried room by room, he found it occupied. Pushkar, Shravan, Preeta, Daboo had occupied all the washrooms from before.

Ashamed, he held his stomach and went and sat uncomfortably on the sofa, twisting and turning , controlling his urgency.


Hope you have a good laugh😉


🤣 🤣 oh my god mahiii... Tooo hilarious... Ohh...jeejas, I m still laughing... They gave him jamaalgota, verma kahin sofa na Ganda kar de 🤣🤣
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Posted: 9 years ago
eekk...hilariously hilarious...but awesome at the same time. This collective is idea is doing wonders...really loved everyone's part
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Posted: 9 years ago
Hilarious loved it

I wanted to make a solid background fr


The sleuth Verma so tat he gets kicked nicely by them tats reason I wrote

Tat next time giv suggestion as to wat u guys expect wil toe d same line


Edited by ravzs - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
Ravs... That's OK... You did well
I hope I wrote according to your expectations

Amreen... Where are you???? Update soon dear!😭
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Posted: 9 years ago
Tat was bang on I thought of writing it but I wanted to finish up free ends so later
Who ever writes thy came write smashin ones like u did

Edited by ravzs - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Artist_Forever

Ravs... That's OK... You did well

I hope I wrote according to your expectations

Amreen... Where are you???? Update soon dear!😭


Am sorry Mahi... I am sure u must have written amazingly..
Plz Regina go ahead with ur chapter... a lil busy... Kal poora din IF par zyada der tak nhi thi mai... plz excuse 😭

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