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raveena

@ravzs

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Posted: 9 years ago

#131

Tnx

For Luvin it smash tat Verma creep we though can't see in screen but can now n here

Tc 😉

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Regina

@mizzundaztud

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Posted: 9 years ago

#132

Originally posted by: ravzs
Tnx
For Luvin it smash tat Verma creep we though can't see in screen but can now n here
Tc 😉

wow Ravz, great great part dear... this is perfect...

@mahi & ravzs, do you suggest that we remove Suman's pov as of now, so that the continuity becomes better... we can write it after Shravan deals with verma once and for all ??

jus let me know if this makes sense

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raveena

@ravzs

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Posted: 9 years ago

#133

U hav a point I was mullening over the same thing y don't we do d after Verma s made to pay

It wil give a proper twist n wil make sense @mizzundaztud

Edited by ravzs - 9 years ago

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Mahi

@Mannmohanaa

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Posted: 9 years ago

#134

Regs and ravs...

Am thinking to fuse these two in sync

That is,

Verma+ Shravan face off = Sumo accepting feelings

I hope I m going right...

My next update with clarify it...

Tell me your views if I shall continue coz I too think Sumo needs to accept it now! That too asap!

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Regina

@mizzundaztud

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Posted: 9 years ago

#135

Originally posted by: Artist_Forever
Regs and ravs...
Am thinking to fuse these two in sync
That is,
Verma+ Shravan face off = Sumo accepting feelings
I hope I m going right...
My next update with clarify it...
Tell me your views if I shall continue coz I too think Sumo needs to accept it now! That too asap!

lets do it this way, I will remove sumo's pov part from mine n ravzs posts, let shravan deal with verma, giving it solid base that he LOVES sumo now and he is clear about it, then face off.. at that point, let sumo realize her feelings,

what say??

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Mahi

@Mannmohanaa

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Posted: 9 years ago

#136

Yeah... That would do! But no need to remove it, its fine anyways...😃

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Regina

@mizzundaztud

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Posted: 9 years ago

#137

Originally posted by: Artist_Forever
Yeah... That would do! But no need to remove it, its fine anyways...😃

OK... Done 👍🏼

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Mahi

@Mannmohanaa

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Posted: 9 years ago

#138

Here's the next part:

As Sumo woke up the next day, she heard her cell phone vibrating.

12 missed calls? She checked the time, it was only 7 in the morning. Who was so desperate to talk to her, that too at such an hour?

She opened her dialled call list to see it was Pushkar. She quickly called back and it was received almost instantly.

"Hello?!"

Pushkar: Kya hua... Phone kyun kiya itni subah?

Sumo: kya?! Aur tune Jo 12 missed call diye woh?

He understood who must have become so restless to call

Pushkar: Kitne baje? Tu uthi nahi?

Sumo: Pushkar its 7!! Main ullo nahi hoon... Ki 7 baje jagoon.

Pushkar: Accha theek hain, ab sunn! Humne aaj evening drive aur dinner ka plan banaya hain... Tu aayegi?

Sumo: Humne Matlab?

Pushkar: Aree main aur bhaiyya... Aur kaun?!

Sumo recalled her appointments... They were all empty. Only a client meeting at 5.30 was scheduled which she could wrap up in an hour.

Sumo: Toh shaam 7 baje theek hai?

Pushkar: Perfect! We'll pick you up ghar se!

Sumo smiled in excitement and clapped her hand. Yes! A small outing finally!

Afternoon,4

Sumo was leaving for her clients meeting. She was walking up to her car and talking to Pushkar:

Haan main shaam 7 baje City Mall ke aage pahunch jaoongi, no worries.

Unknown to her, a man in a car was overhearing her convo and smiling to himself.

Verma: Suman Tiwari... Ab dekhta hoon tujhe.

After her meeting, Sumo was walking towards her car when a man caught hold of her hand from behind.

Verma: Sumo! He exclaimed and grabbed her to the corner of the road.

Lagata hain, tumne meri baat seriously nahi li... He smiled wickedly.

Sumo jerked her hand off from him and asked boldly:

Kaunsi baat?

Verma turned his eyes towards his car. When Sumo focussed, she saw Daboo sitting inside it.

Before she could reply, a passerby collided with her, making her purse fall off. On the pretext of picking it up, she slowly slid open her bag and dialled the last call, made to Pushkar.

Verma: Maine kaha usse ki Suman didi ne mujhe bheja hain use pick up karne ke liye. Ab main chahoon toh uske saath kuch bhi kar Sakta hoon...

Sumo: What do you want?

Verma: Aree wah! Tum toh badi smart nikli...

Ab jaisa main keh raha hoon, suno! Kal main tumhaare that aaunga, humaari sagaai ki baat ke liye. Aur tum Haan boldogi... Theek hai? Vaise bhi tumhaare ghar ke accounts mere haath mein hain ... Agar hoshiyaari ki toh Income Tax waalon se tumhe koi nahi bacha payega...

Sumo nodded presently and tolerated his crap. Daboo's safety was more important now. But Pushkar had heard it all and Sumo wasn't alone in this.

He signalled Sumo to take Daboo with her while the Malhotra boys left for Tiwari Quila.

Edited by Artist_Forever - 9 years ago

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Mahi

@Mannmohanaa

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Posted: 9 years ago

#139

Updated!

Hope its fine! The next one is free to continue in whichever way and story... But please try to reach such a situation that Shravan and Verma have to fight a legal case against each other😉