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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Amreen...


Am sorry Mahi... I am sure u must have written amazingly..
Plz Regina go ahead with ur chapter... a lil busy... Kal poora din IF par zyada der tak nhi thi mai... plz excuse 😭

Koi nahi Amreen... It's OK.. I will start the next part... Shall post in an hour or so
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Posted: 9 years ago
contd after Mahi's

"Arey Verma ji kya hua itne pareshan kyon lag rah hein?" Asked Sameer, sensing Verma's discomfort.
"Nahi nahi Sameer ji, aisi koi baat nahi hai" Verma held his stomach and tried to keep a straight face despite the weird sensations he was having in his stomach.
" Achha, achha..lekin Vermaji, aapne phone pe kaha tha ki aap koi bahut zaroori baat karna chahte hein, aisi baat jisse hum sab ki Zindagi badal jaayegi?" Said Manju, oblivious to what was going on with Verma because of the jamaalgota he was forced to drink.

Verma sensed it as a good opportunity to talk about his engagement with Suman, the reason why suddenly Sameer had become more than a client to him. Verma was a chartered accountant, and Sameer his client, while consulting with him once, Sameer mentioned that Suman was the owner of one third of the property that TIWARIS had. Ever since then Verma started hatching the plan of wooing Suman and getting married to her in order to have her share of the property to himself. He uses to pay visits to her office, and once he even offered her a lift home, when Suman said a polite no, he grabbed her hand and started pulling her in the car. He stopped when he saw Preeta coming, as soon as he left Suman's hand, she gifted her with a tight SLAP on his face... Remembering this humiliation and wanting to give it back to Suman, ignoring the fresh cramp that began to rise in his stomach he said
"Haanji Sameerji, vo main keh raha tha..." , but he stopped half way as he saw Shravan suddenly errupt from the door of the living room, with Preeta signalling a punch with glare in her eyes.

"Vo Sameer ji, muje lag raha hai ki meri tabiyat kuch kharaab si hai, mujhe ghar jaana padega" stating that Verma got up and started towards the door


"Arey Verma kj, khana to kha ke jaiye" Manju said, but before she could insist, Verma had already reached his car. with bullet speed. As he was opening the door of the car,he heard piles of laughter coming from inside. When. He looked back he saw that at the window of Suman's room, Suman with Shravan and Pushkar on either side and Preeta holding Dabbu were laughing uncontrollably... Seething, he sat in the car started it and drove away on top speed.

Suman lay on her bed, patting Dabbu to sleep by her side and the events of the evening started to come back to her in bits, leaving her smiling at times and giggling as well. Suddenly she stopped laughing and her face changed to a thoughtful trance, she closed her eyes and let out a deep breath, with a name that easaped her lips
"Shravan.." Smiling, softly she said

hey.. so i thought of starting with Suman's POV as well... hope you ppl also think the same that's its high time we had clarity about Suman's feelings




Edited by mizzundaztud - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
If I'm right it's my turn next lt me know wat u guys Wild lik to read open for suggestions
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: ravzs

If I'm right it's my turn next lt me know wat u guys Wild lik to read open for suggestions


yes, its your turn ravz, please go with the flow, it was high time we wrote about Sumo's feelings as well, so lets delve into that
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Posted: 9 years ago
My god Regs... That was too good! Mind blowing!
The flashback was aptly dealt with...
Am super happy seeing our unspoken coordination and the way the story is shaping up!
Well done all👏
Keep it up!

PS: I am enjoying this so much... I really don't care if anyone is reading or no...😆
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Artist_Forever

My god Regs... That was too good! Mind blowing!

The flashback was aptly dealt with...
Am super happy seeing our unspoken coordination and the way the story is shaping up!
Well done all👏
Keep it up!

PS: I am enjoying this so much... I really don't care if anyone is reading or no...😆

.yes yes... True, great. Minds think alike 😉😆 and specifically for ShraMan hum sab ki dimaag ke ghode ek hi direction mein daudte hain..

👏👏 to allbof us, let's continue the great work

Over to ravzs now.. Let's see what she comes up with 😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
Here goes the next part
Sumo PoV
While tapping dabhu to sleep she was smiling to herself
Was happy to find people who care for her and her feelings wit a sigh
She went to her dreamland of thinking about her feelings to SM as she could feel something deep
and havin Thought about the same she chided to her self "control ur emotions and dreaming don't be a fool sumo Common get to sleep ".

Little did she know that Verma who was humiliated by them all was planning a
Trap for sumo

Verma residence...
" Samajthe Kya hein apne aapko mujhe kuch karna padega jaldh she jaldh nahi tho vo meri
Hath se nikhal jayeegi 😡 "
" nahi nahi Aisa hone nahi dunga mein kal hi Sameer se Baath Karuga...ya Manju ...
Then he got a evil plan
"Abh Dektha hu ki tujhe mujse kohn bachatha hein "
" iss bhar na vo dono bhai ya vo bodyguard kuch nahi karpayenge"
Verma thinking about today's happenings had a thought Kahi mein jo sooch RAha hu
Kya un dono ke bheech nahi nahi vo achee Se janthi hein ki meine Kya kar Saktha hu
" phir bhi Mujhe usse yaad Dilana padega ki vo kissiki nahi hosakthi mere alava "

Sumo on other hand got to sleep but to her bad luck she couldn't sleep as she was thinking about
D handsome hunk but while thinking she got back to the worst day in her life

Flashback
She was leaving her meeting from the clients place and it was almost 2 in afternoon
She had to prepare lunch for Nanu as no one was there all had gone to temple
" sumo jaldh se Nikal Yahase nahi tho aaj dono Bukhe rahenge " .
When she about to start her car she got a call Looking at d number flashing she was least intrested
But after the continus call she picked it and little did she know...
" Kya he kyu cal kiya Mamu ya Mamu nahi hein so badh mein cal Karna" about to cut call
" Suman Mujhe tumse Baath Karni hein abhi ke abhi tumse gharana ke pass jo cafe hein
Usmle Anna 20 minutes I am waiting aur mein na nahi sunnuga kyu ki is me thumari Balayi ke liye
Kehraha Hun Samji abhi Tumne apne client se milked car mein beiti Ho so yaha tum bees minute 20 minutes jaldhi avo "
" ye mere peeche kyu pada hein yaar ab Mujhe follow bhi kar raha hein hadh hein " chalke Dekthi hu abh kya hein "
She reached cafe n spotted him n she sat opposite to him
" tum Samajthe Kya..." She was cut
" Suman Tiwari angry I like it " " vaise yaha per ane ki liye sukriya "
" abhi mein jo kehraha hu Dyaan she Sunna or samajh na aur uske badh muh Kolna"
" tum kal she koyi kam nahi karogi aur na kissi se ya apne friend se miloge Mujhe bath aye bagher "
" tum hothe kohn ho mujhe Dhamki dene wale "
" tumhe mani Padegi "
" nahi manugi kyu Manu Tumhari Baath hothe Khon Ho mere "
" calm down princess chilavo math tumare liye kholo aur Dekho "
She found her family pictures and hers , there were even she meetin her friends clients but she
Was amused and lucked at him
" ye sirf warning hein AGli Bhaar tumhe ... Bathavuga nahi Karke dhikaunga "
" Kya karoge kuch bhi nahi karsakthe ho "
" aha challenge Mujhe challenge bauhth pasand Hain per agar mein tumare Nanu
Jo abhi gar pe akhele hein agar unhe kuch his ya dabhu jo school mein hein ya tumare family
Unhe kuch kiya tho "
" tum Pagal Ho"
" ha hu mein Pagal Tumhare liye "
" disgusting tumhe mein"
" na na kuch nahi karsakthi nahi police nahi tum " and laughs
" chahthe Kya vo "
" tumhe " He chided
" kabhi sooch na bhi math "
"Soch Chukavon tumhe yaad rahe ki tumhe Kya Karna hein "
End of flashback

" Mujhe us din Pushkar ko batha deni chaye thi "
" abhi bolun " looks at watch
" abhi nahi baad mein abhi Bahuth rath hogayi hein "

Malhotra mansion
The brother duo chatting
" Bhaiya Kya Hua kaha kho Gaye "
" kuch bhi nahi aur batha " Shravan scolded himself fr the slip
Pushkar gave a knowing smirk
" bhaiya abhi vo Sogayi hogi tho tum cal bhi nahi karsakthe "
" mein jantha hu su... " just stared back at Pushkar
" I knew it bhaiya aap Suman ko pasand kar the Ho "
" kuch bhi chup chap so ja "
" bhaiya mujse kuch bhi chupana math "
" aapko patha hain tumare aakon mein Diktha hein aap ko Suman pasand hein
Tabse jab aap us ko Pehli baad dhekha ha ki na "
" uffo bhaiya ... Aab ."
" mein so raha hu bye Kya bakh bakh kar rahe ho tum bhi sojavo "
" vaise bhaiya mein kal soch raha tha ki kyu na hum dinner ke liye chale aur ek drive
Mein ... Soch raha hu ki mein Suman ko bhi bulau aap bath karoge na ... And giggled "
Shravan was happy knowing this was thinking of how to meet her tomorrow now got a chance
And a golden one
Pushkar on other side I know bhaiya aap kabhi Kulke nahi bolthe tho mujhe hi kuch Karna
padega tha ki ye do confess Kare

All slept well thinking of there next day but except one
" Verma hu main kuch bhi karoonga tumhe pane ke liye "


Hope I have done sum justice
Take it over guys
Do tell me how t is suggestion and critics
Hope u guys can make another smashin follow on


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Posted: 9 years ago
Hoping u like d post if it s in right direction n want sum flash back of tat Schumbag so wrote sum thing
Hope u guys joy


Til next time 😊
Edited by ravzs - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
Great work ravs... Have given an interesting twist to the story...
It'll be fun to continue... Good job!
You given a really good base for some action cum drama... I'll continue in an hour or two😉
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Posted: 9 years ago
Awesome
Just read all the part
Lovely
Update soon

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