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Posted: 9 years ago
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Shravan: Yeh Verma kaun hai?
He asked with concern. Preeta was surprised😕 to hear him so involved in their matters, specially this close one. Seeing her expression, Shravan babbled:
Mera Matlab ki... I mean I just wanted to know ki yeh Verma kaun hai... Mere Ek school friend ka bhi naam Verma tha...
He faked. And Sumo caught it very easily.😳

Preeta: Aree wahi ullo da pathaa jisne Uss din...
Sumo immediately grabbed her hand and stopped her. She signalled her to not speak further.

Shravan noticed this and reasoned out that this wasn't going to be so easy. But he was The Shravan, The Shravan Malhotra and he knew how to get things done. He smiled at both and left, without turning back at Sumo.

Sumo thought he had left but actually, he had gone to Daboo's room. Over these two days, this Jodi had bonded quite well. And Shravan knew Daboo could help.

Shravan entered in.
Ahm ahm!
Coughed Daboo.
Shravan couldn't guess the reason for it, so he came and sat beside him on the bed.
Daboo got up and shrieked: Suman Didi ne aapko nahi sikhaaya kisi ke room mein aane se pehle knock karna?
Shravan chuckled at his innocence. But he didn't mind learning a few tips from her.😉😛
"Stop it Shravan... Now do your work!", he thought.

Shravan: Daboo, Ek baat bol... Yeh Verma kaun hai yaar?
Daboo stressed his mind for a second and said:
Aap woh nikkamein, Crow jaise Vulture type Satyarthi Verma Uncle ki baat to nahi kar rahe? Cheee!🤢🤢

Shravan giggled a bit. So,this man was famous for his nautanki.
Shravan: Haan, shayad...
Daboo: Unfortunately woh mere Papa ke friend hain.
He said, looking depressed.
Daboo: Kyun par? Aapko kaise pata chala? Woh AA rahein hain kya?
He worried. Shravan nodded with a yes.

Daboo sat down heavily.🥱
Daboo: Aapko pata hain, kitne Chee🤢 hain woh? Aake , aise aise karke gaal kheechte hain.. He pulled his cheeks.

Shravan , with a cool smirk on his face, chuckled and said.
Shravan: Toh iss baar bataa dein Daboo?
He winked at him😉. This was enough to charge that little dhamakaa battery up!
"Time to give back some fun Verma...", he joked.😆


Continue with lots of fun,troubles for our dear dear Verma... Also let some romance and worry bloom up😉
Edited by Artist_Forever - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#92
Updated!
And Amreen, I always love and appreciate all your updates... I may miss some of them, but isn't it obvious that it's bound to be fantastic and mindblowing😉😆?

Anyways, loved the latest one! Keep it up gal!😛
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Posted: 9 years ago
#93

Originally posted by: Artist_Forever

Updated!

And Amreen, I always love and appreciate all your updates... I may miss some of them, but isn't it obvious that it's bound to be fantastic and mindblowing😉😆?

Anyways, loved the latest one! Keep it up gal!😛


Good one Mahi, just one thing, this girl is preeta, Sumo's manager... Not Preeti her cousin... Preeti is show mein nahi hai, and Verna is not related to Sumo's mama... If so he will be related to Sumo too, so creepy angle nahi theek rahega... I think if u change it to Mamaji's friend or something, it wud be better
Edited by mizzundaztud - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#94

Originally posted by: Artist_Forever

Updated!

And Amreen, I always love and appreciate all your updates... I may miss some of them, but isn't it obvious that it's bound to be fantastic and mindblowing😉😆?

Anyways, loved the latest one! Keep it up gal!😛


Thanks sweetie😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
#95
The update was really awesome Mahi... keep it up!!
Just plz change Preeti to Preeta... 😊
And me lil busy so plz anyone update it!! 😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
#96
Res after Mahi aka Artist_Forever
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: mizzundaztud


Good one Mahi, just one thing, this girl is preeta, Sumo's manager... Not Preeti her cousin... Preeti is show mein nahi hai, and Verna is not related to Sumo's mama... If so he will be related to Sumo too, so creepy angle nahi theek rahega... I think if u change it to Mamaji's friend or something, it wud be better


Changes done! Sorry for confusion😆
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Posted: 9 years ago
#98

Originally posted by: Artist_Forever


Changes done! Sorry for confusion😆

no problem... I am going out for a while... Will keep writing on phone on the way, shall post soon
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Posted: 9 years ago
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So finally the twinkle in dabbu's eyes assured Shravan that he will help him find out the reason why suddenly spark faded from Sumo's eyes giving place to worry and disgust. There was something fishy he knew for sure, and he knew very well why it effected him so much. It effected him because their was a power with which he was being drawn to Suman, and strangely he wasn't trying to resist the attraction. He would have taken this at mere infatuation had he not seen her around her family. She was a perfect woman, beautiful, independent, mature, caring and loving.
He could go on thinking about her endless qualities and admiring them, but right now he had a mission to work on to find out the satya behind Satyarthi Verma. Dabbu was too small to tell him the exact details, who else could he go to,

"Preeta??" Shravan thought aloud, "No, she is too protective about Sumo, in a good way, but he feared that if she got any idea about his feelings for Sumo, she won't care if i was 6'4" she would jump on her tows and punch me repeatedly on my face.
"Nanaji... Umm. Matlab Mr Tiwari... Well no actually, because if i even tried, tiwariji will not let me enter the house ever again.. So tiwariji Bad idea."
Shravan was fixated with what to do, when Shravan called out
"Bhaiya, kya hua,, kahan khoye hue hein aap?? Kisi ke baare mein soch rahe hein kya?? Rukiye, bulata hoon use.. Su.."
Shravan stopped him by keeping his hand on his mouth and pulling him aside "Pushkar, sun to... Ek minute idhar aa" he said pulling Pushkar aside...
"Kya Bhaiya aap bhi, achha theek hai, chalo nahi bulata use, an chalo nanaji chess ki baazi ke saath aapka intezaar kar rahe hein."
Shravan obediently followed Pushkar, thinking how to solve the puzzle.

He was deep in his thoughts when he heard the commotion outside and both Pushkar and Shravan looked from where the noise was coming.
They heard footsteps entering the main door of the house. All they could see was a man, whose face was hidden behind a huge gift and a large bouquet of red roses.
" Hello everyone, main aa gya" the mad said almost singing the n his crooky voice..
"Arey vermaji, ayiye ayiye, arey is sab ki kya zaroorat thi" Suman's mami Manju, almost ran to welcome him followed by Sameer her husband. It was only after sameer took the gifts from him, could Shravan see his face. He was a fair man in his early thirties, with a crooked nose and a bunch of hair that irritatingly stayed on his forehead. He wore a brown coloured tailored suit that fitted well on him, but looked strangely suffocating in a casual birthday party. It seemed that he was dressed like this to impress and trail of stench of a strong male perfume could be very well smelled as he walked inside.
" aur humara birthday boy kahan hai, golu??"
"Uncle mera naam golu nahi Dabbu hai" Dabbu spoke in an exasperated tone and hid himself behind the sofa as he didn't want to get his cheeks pulled.
" aa haa haa haa, happy birthday Dabbu, aur Sameer Bhaisahab, vo.. Suman nahi dikhayi de rahi" the moment Verma spoke 'Suman', Shravan could sense a disturbing sensation in his voice, which irked his senses.
"Iski to main..." For the first time in his life Shravan saw his brother in anger, one look at Pushkar and he could feel how agitated Pushkar was.. Whoaaa, how could he forget, Pushkar was Sumo's best friend.. He must be knowing the reality of this creep. Lo jise dhoonga gali gali, vo chaabi apne hi taale mein mili... "Kya hua Pushkar, what's wrong, ye Verma kaun hai" asked Shravan with genuine concern
"Arey Bhaiya lambi kahani hai, Jo main aapko baad mein bataunga, abhi we have to make sure that Verma doesn't bother Suman"
Shravan became thoughtful and said " don't worry Pushkar, is Verma ki to aaj khair nahi" and he smiled and winked at Dabbu, who chuckled in return.

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Posted: 9 years ago
Hello, so here we come with the third part, its onging right now


The Rain...And The Girl- Part 3


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writers so far
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Shravan: Yeh Verma kaun hai?
He asked with concern. Preeta was surprised😕 to hear him so involved in their matters, specially this close one. Seeing her expression, Shravan babbled:
Mera Matlab ki... I mean I just wanted to know ki yeh Verma kaun hai... Mere Ek school friend ka bhi naam Verma tha...
He faked. And Sumo caught it very easily.😳

Preeta: Aree wahi ullo da pathaa jisne Uss din...
Sumo immediately grabbed her hand and stopped her. She signalled her to not speak further.

Shravan noticed this and reasoned out that this wasn't going to be so easy. But he was The Shravan, The Shravan Malhotra and he knew how to get things done. He smiled at both and left, without turning back at Sumo.

Sumo thought he had left but actually, he had gone to Daboo's room. Over these two days, this Jodi had bonded quite well. And Shravan knew Daboo could help.

Shravan entered in.
Ahm ahm!
Coughed Daboo.
Shravan couldn't guess the reason for it, so he came and sat beside him on the bed.
Daboo got up and shrieked: Suman Didi ne aapko nahi sikhaaya kisi ke room mein aane se pehle knock karna?
Shravan chuckled at his innocence. But he didn't mind learning a few tips from her.😉😛
"Stop it Shravan... Now do your work!", he thought.

Shravan: Daboo, Ek baat bol... Yeh Verma kaun hai yaar?
Daboo stressed his mind for a second and said:
Aap woh nikkamein, Crow jaise Vulture type Satyarthi Verma Uncle ki baat to nahi kar rahe? Cheee!🤢🤢

Shravan giggled a bit. So,this man was famous for his nautanki.
Shravan: Haan, shayad...
Daboo: Unfortunately woh mere Papa ke friend hain.
He said, looking depressed.
Daboo: Kyun par? Aapko kaise pata chala? Woh AA rahein hain kya?
He worried. Shravan nodded with a yes.

Daboo sat down heavily.🥱
Daboo: Aapko pata hain, kitne Chee🤢 hain woh? Aake , aise aise karke gaal kheechte hain.. He pulled his cheeks.

Shravan , with a cool smirk on his face, chuckled and said.
Shravan: Toh iss baar bataa dein Daboo?
He winked at him😉. This was enough to charge that little dhamakaa battery up!
"Time to give back some fun Verma...", he joked.😆

So finally the twinkle in dabbu's eyes assured Shravan that he will help him find out the reason why suddenly spark faded from Sumo's eyes giving place to worry and disgust. There was something fishy he knew for sure, and he knew very well why it effected him so much. It effected him because their was a power with which he was being drawn to Suman, and strangely he wasn't trying to resist the attraction. He would have taken this at mere infatuation had he not seen her around her family. She was a perfect woman, beautiful, independent, mature, caring and loving.
He could go on thinking about her endless qualities and admiring them, but right now he had a mission to work on to find out the satya behind Satyarthi Verma. Dabbu was too small to tell him the exact details, who else could he go to,

"Preeta??" Shravan thought aloud, "No, she is too protective about Sumo, in a good way, but he feared that if she got any idea about his feelings for Sumo, she won't care if i was 6'4" she would jump on her tows and punch me repeatedly on my face.
"Nanaji... Umm. Matlab Mr Tiwari... Well no actually, because if i even tried, tiwariji will not let me enter the house ever again.. So tiwariji Bad idea."
Shravan was fixated with what to do, when Shravan called out
"Bhaiya, kya hua,, kahan khoye hue hein aap?? Kisi ke baare mein soch rahe hein kya?? Rukiye, bulata hoon use.. Su.."
Shravan stopped him by keeping his hand on his mouth and pulling him aside "Pushkar, sun to... Ek minute idhar aa" he said pulling Pushkar aside...
"Kya Bhaiya aap bhi, achha theek hai, chalo nahi bulata use, an chalo nanaji chess ki baazi ke saath aapka intezaar kar rahe hein."
Shravan obediently followed Pushkar, thinking how to solve the puzzle.

He was deep in his thoughts when he heard the commotion outside and both Pushkar and Shravan looked from where the noise was coming.
They heard footsteps entering the main door of the house. All they could see was a man, whose face was hidden behind a huge gift and a large bouquet of red roses.
" Hello everyone, main aa gya" the mad said almost singing the n his crooky voice..
"Arey vermaji, ayiye ayiye, arey is sab ki kya zaroorat thi" Suman's mami Manju, almost ran to welcome him followed by Sameer her husband. It was only after sameer took the gifts from him, could Shravan see his face. He was a fair man in his early thirties, with a crooked nose and a bunch of hair that irritatingly stayed on his forehead. He wore a brown coloured tailored suit that fitted well on him, but looked strangely suffocating in a casual birthday party. It seemed that he was dressed like this to impress and trail of stench of a strong male perfume could be very well smelled as he walked inside.
" aur humara birthday boy kahan hai, golu??"
"Uncle mera naam golu nahi Dabbu hai" Dabbu spoke in an exasperated tone and hid himself behind the sofa as he didn't want to get his cheeks pulled.
" aa haa haa haa, happy birthday Dabbu, aur Sameer Bhaisahab, vo.. Suman nahi dikhayi de rahi" the moment Verma spoke 'Suman', Shravan could sense a disturbing sensation in his voice, which irked his senses.
"Iski to main..." For the first time in his life Shravan saw his brother in anger, one look at Pushkar and he could feel how agitated Pushkar was.. Whoaaa, how could he forget, Pushkar was Sumo's best friend.. He must be knowing the reality of this creep. Lo jise dhoonga gali gali, vo chaabi apne hi taale mein mili... "Kya hua Pushkar, what's wrong, ye Verma kaun hai" asked Shravan with genuine concern
"Arey Bhaiya lambi kahani hai, Jo main aapko baad mein bataunga, abhi we have to make sure that Verma doesn't bother Suman"
Shravan became thoughtful and said " don't worry Pushkar, is Verma ki to aaj khair nahi" and he smiled and winked at Dabbu, who chuckled in return.


In the hall ...

Pushkar was literally annoyed and was giving a hard look to Verma
Shravan was wondering how to teach him a lesson as much he had heard from
Both Dabbu n Pushkar he knew something was wrong so he dint push them for now
Instead was planning on to teach him a lesson

In the room ...

"Suman agar us insan tumhe Chua ya tang Kiya na mein maar Marke khema
Banadhungi." A visibly angry Preetha concluded
" main janthi hu vo kisliye Yaha par aya hein aur atha Bhi hein usse mujse ..."Suman told
but dint conclude just left it there n went into deep thought
Understands something is up as sumo never mentioned to me about I guess it's time to
Speak to Pushkar hope he gets the truth from her n wish she will be safe


In mean time ...
pushkar had come to speak to Suman on the same
Shravan was plotting a idea along with dabu to teach Verma a lesson off his life


" sumo ... Suman " a visibly calm friend was bit worried for his friend now as he could see
She is disturbed . He gestured Preetha to leave n take care outside as he will speak with her .
Now satisfied that she is safe Preetha made way outside to make sure the stooge and low life is
Kept at bay ...


Meanwhile in the room
" sumo " he placed had while calling her out of her deep trance
Suman coming out of trance saw Pushkar looking at her she thought I dint realise
wen Preetha Went out
" Tum Yaha Kay hua ..."
Before she could blabber away she got a glare from her best friend she knew he was upset
But what she dint understand is y s he angry
" uss Kaminey nei kya Kaha tumse"
She tried to speak but he cut her
" mein nei poocha ki usne kya Kaha tumse aur go kya chahtha hain bolo speak up "
Suman while other hand was thinking what to tell but was in fix as he heard say something
And he won't let the matter rest for now
"Don't even think you're going to lie I read through u since childhood and I am surprised you hid something this serious from me "
" it was nothing much bhinahi hua ... " she kept her mouth shut
She knew he wil catch a lie was just praying to God to let this go

But God had other plans ...

Meanwhile Shravan came to call the duo to come out for the cake cutting

But got silent seeing his brother angry on her and she trying to doge his questions
He was a bit concerned now as he never sees him angry or tensed

Everyone gathered around the dining table for the Cake Cutting. As the Tiwaaris started occupying places around Daboo, Verma, Creepy to the core, went to stand beside Sumo so that he could continue with his nautanki. And this time, he planned to finalise his engagement with her.
He looked here and there and started inching towards her step by step. As he was moving, he collided against a figure. As he turned his head around, he saw a really tall man standing next to him. He had to literally cock up his head to see his face. It was Shravan!
His expression turned nasty as this newcomer dared to foil his intention.
On the other side, Sumo stood safe between her newly acquired bodyguards Shravan and Pushkar.
Shravan had a smirk on his face as he talked:
Maine aapko kahin disturb toh nahi kiya? He taunted.
Verma was exasperated at this. He went behind a little and gave a dirty glance to her. Shravan stepped onto his foot to bring him back to his senses.
Ahhh! He shouted.
Everyone turned to him and he was a bit ashamed.
Shravan: Kya hua Vermaji?
Daboo and Pushkar giggled while Preeta was more than happy. Team Verma Ki Dhulaayi had sprung into action and it was just a matter of time when they would see him running away for his life.

After the cake cutting, Sumo went in with the cake to cut it into pieces and serve everyone. Verma noticed that Shravan and Pushkar were busy, so he tip toed into the kitchen behind her.
As Sumo was cutting it, she felt a tap on her shoulder. It wasnt Pushkar or Shravan or she would have known. She grasped the knife with which she was cutting the cake and turned around, pointing it straight.
And sure enough, it was Verma.
Sumo: You! Stay away! She shouted.
Verma: Accha, ab tum aisa karogi? He grabbed her hand and turned it, making her drop the knife. As he was about to pull her closer, a strong Thud on his hand made him leave it. It was Shravan followed by Pushkar, Preeta and lastly Daboo.

Preeta: Kamine, ullo de patthe, chor ki shakal waale Kutte! Aaj to Tu dekh, Tera Kalyaan Hokar Rahega!

They surrounded him. Daboo brought a glass of drink and handed it to Shravan.
Shravan: Woh kya hai naa, aaj aapki khatir daari theek se nahi hui. Toh main personally aapki seva karoonga ab.
He grasped his mouth and forced the sharbat into it.
Verma was disgusted at it. Before he could shout, Preeta kicked in his stomach, making him grunch and growl.

Pushkar signalled the others and in a flash, everyone just disappeared. Verma was puzzled at this.
Verma to Sumo: Dekh loonga tum sab...

His stomach started howling and he felt an urgent need to pay a visit to washroom! As he tried room by room, he found it occupied. Pushkar, Shravan, Preeta, Daboo had occupied all the washrooms from before.

Ashamed, he held his stomach and went and sat uncomfortably on the sofa, twisting and turning , controlling his urgency.

"Arey Verma ji kya hua itne pareshan kyon lag rah hein?" Asked Sameer, sensing Verma's discomfort.
"Nahi nahi Sameer ji, aisi koi baat nahi hai" Verma held his stomach and tried to keep a straight face despite the weird sensations he was having in his stomach.
" Achha, achha..lekin Vermaji, aapne phone pe kaha tha ki aap koi bahut zaroori baat karna chahte hein, aisi baat jisse hum sab ki Zindagi badal jaayegi?" Said Manju, oblivious to what was going on with Verma because of the jamaalgota he was forced to drink.

Verma sensed it as a good opportunity to talk about his engagement with Suman, the reason why suddenly Sameer had become more than a client to him. Verma was a chartered accountant, and Sameer his client, while consulting with him once, Sameer mentioned that Suman was the owner of one third of the property that TIWARIS had. Ever since then Verma started hatching the plan of wooing Suman and getting married to her in order to have her share of the property to himself. He uses to pay visits to her office, and once he even offered her a lift home, when Suman said a polite no, he grabbed her hand and started pulling her in the car. He stopped when he saw Preeta coming, as soon as he left Suman's hand, she gifted her with a tight SLAP on his face... Remembering this humiliation and wanting to give it back to Suman, ignoring the fresh cramp that began to rise in his stomach he said
"Haanji Sameerji, vo main keh raha tha..." , but he stopped half way as he saw Shravan suddenly errupt from the door of the living room, with Preeta signalling a punch with glare in her eyes.

"Vo Sameer ji, muje lag raha hai ki meri tabiyat kuch kharaab si hai, mujhe ghar jaana padega" stating that Verma got up and started towards the door

"Arey Verma kj, khana to kha ke jaiye" Manju said, but before she could insist, Verma had already reached his car. with bullet speed. As he was opening the door of the car,he heard piles of laughter coming from inside. When. He looked back he saw that at the window of Suman's room, Suman with Shravan and Pushkar on either side and Preeta holding Dabbu were laughing uncontrollably... Seething, he sat in the car started it and drove away on top speed.




Edited by mizzundaztud - 9 years ago

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