*Rantara story-HULCHUL* (updated part 6 @pg 41):P

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HULCHUL-Suspence meets Confusion meets Suspence😆

"A smile is a curve that sets everything straight. ~Phyllis Diller"😃 so haste rehne ka...😆

Hello Everyone😃...I am here with my first ever Story on Rantara..as u all know usually I use to make fun posts bt two yediss of our Forum Hina n Kiret firstly requested sweetly n then blackmailed me😡😆 to write something on Rantara.So for them I agreed to write some funny story (as romantic to mujhse is janam mein nhi banne wali🤣)it might have 2,3 parts.Because of these two people I wrote down this.😆

WE have so many talented writers in this forum n I feel so grateful that I met so many wonderful people in this forum n read fabulous stories on rantara🤗..hatsoff to u guys.👏

WARNING😈-For the first time I am writing any story.I know very well what rubbish I have written🤢.I pleaded both these fellows a lot that I can't write bt they denied both r very innocent and they don't know to whom they have requested.😎After reading this mahacrap I am sure that almost all members will run away from this forum. Yatri aapni suraksha ke khud responsible hain😆...don't blame me that I didn't warned u all before😈..So r u all ready for getting bor?...here it goes.🤢

Here is character sketch n first part of this story.😆

CHARACTER SKETCH
Buntiya Naik- Husband of Daya Naik ,father of Satya,Raghu n Rasika Naik He is very innocent n good at heart person.He was owner of many 5 n 7 stars hotels in Mumbai.Nowdays he handled his business to both his son's staya n raghu.HE loves his wife n childrens a lot.Lives in Mumbai.

Daya Naik-Wife of Buntiya Naik n mother of SAtya.Raghu n RAsika.A very lovely lady loves her hubby n children loves to talk in Punjabi.Lives in Mumbai.

Satya Naik-Elder son of Buntiya n Daya NAik..respects his parents a lot...not so daring in nature loves his siblings.

Ruksana NAik-Daughter in law of DM n Buntiya Naik.A very daring lady n wife of satya naik.She always keep 2,3 big hockey sticks in her room.She was former Hockey player too..loves her in-laws a lot.

RaghuNath Naik-Younger son of DM n Buntiya n hubby of his lovely wife antara.He loves his family a lot..especially Rasika as she is her only little sister.he is very sweet n innocent by nature.

Antara Naik-another Daughter -in-law of DM n Buntiya n wife of Raghunath.She loves her husband n his family a lot.

Aman Khurana-The only son-in-law of DM n Buntiya,husband of Rasika.He handles his textiles business n for that he was living in abroad since 4 years...bt miss his family n wife a lot.

Rasika Khurana- the only Daughter of DM n Buntiya n wife of Aman Khurana.She loves her family n a typical girl which always have a big tension f her makeup from her hairs o her toe.She can live one day without water bt without MAKEUP!! Is next to impossible for her.

Dr.Ashok Kaul-Husband of Geeta Kaul n father of Antara n Machinder kaul.HE was a Retried doctor.Loves his family but trusts on Astrology,Numerology,forecast n vastu shastra a lot.But a very kind person.Lives in Kashmir.

Mrs.Geeta Kaul-Wife of Ashok KAul.Loves her family,a very good lady by heart bt total fiulmy.She is crazy about Bollywood films as she always dreamed to become a famous actoress of bollywood bt it couldn't happened...so to complete her dream she always use to say dialogues...of hindi films.Lives in Kashmir.

Mr.Machinder Kaul-HE is the only younger son of Ashok n Geeta kaul.He is partner of Aman as they both were besties n runs their business together n lives in abroad.Loves his sister n parents a lot.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Introduction-😊
Both Naiks n Kauls are very sweet n wonderful families.Naiks lives altogether in Naik Mansion.Kauls comes to Mumbai to celebrate their sweet daughter's first wedding anniversary.This story will revolve around not only with Rantara bt their families too... something will happen before their wedding anniversary...😆

INDEX😊
PART - 1 :- PG 1
PART - 2:- PG 12
PART - 3 :- PG 20
PART - 4 :- PG 26
PART - 5 :- PG 35
PART - 6 :- PG 41
Edited by Tsuchi - 10 years ago
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Part -1
It was 11th of December lots of preparation were going on in Naik Sadan after all it was first Wedding Anniversary of Raghu n Antara,both of their families were super excited fr this party..which was to be held on next day yes..12th of December was their Wedding Anniversary.NM was beautifully decorated with series of lights,bulbs.Naiks and Kauls were gathered to celebrate this day.Raghu was busy in some discussion with his father n father-in-law and all ladies Mrs.DayaNAik,Mrs.Geeta Kaul,Rasika,Ruksana and Antara were busy in selecting jewelries ,dresses in Rantara's room...whole day rantara were so busy that they didn't get time to talk with eachother fr few mins..like this whole day passed and after dinner all members get back to their room.

Rantara's Room at 11pm

Raghu entered in room and straightly fell down on bed...he was hell tired.
Raghu-baap re!itni saari preparation to apun ne khud ki shaadi mein bhi nhi ki..jitni ki usko ek saal ke baad celebrate krne mein ki
Antara came and laid down beside him...she was tried too.
Antara- hmm..sahi kaha raghu..pr plan bhi to tumhara hi tha.
Raghu(he thought to tease her )-hmm..life mein ye apun ki dusri mistake hai..pehle shaadi ki aur ab celebrate bhi kr raha hun.
Antara-what do u mean?its ur mistake..how could u say..I hate u!
Raghu(smiles)- I hate u too!
Antara- I knew it!u don't love me!!
Raghu-I love that u hate me ,hate that I hate u n love that I love u.
Antara-huh??? So u love me or hate me?
Raghu(laughs )-I think we should sleep now.goodnight antu!
Antara-no!! u first tell me u love me or not!
Raghu-ofcourse I love u...nhi to ye party arrange kyun krta?
Antara-to seede seede nhi bta sakte the..seede btate to kya gadhe ban jate!
Raghu-haha..that's true...now we should sleep.goodnight
Antara-goodnight
And they both slept in eachother arms.

12th December 2AM

All members were sleeping peacefully..cold winds were blowing atmosphere was calm and quiet
At the very moment two men opened the gate of Naik Mansion very slowly so that it couldn't make noise..both were tall and wearing heavy overcoat and their faces were covered with monkeycaps(thand bhut jayda hi thi🤣)carring bags on shoulders n hands.
Men1-itna sannata kyun hai bhai!
Men2-hmm..lagta hai sab so rahe hain
Men1-raat ke do baje log soyenge nhi to kya karenge?
Men2-mujhe kya pta main to tere saath hun na?
Men1- okay...lets go inside its too cooolldd!!!
Both were shivering in cold.
Men2-hmm..chalo..main doorbell bjata hun.
Men1-nhi pagal..doorbell bajega to sab jag jayeinge..i have my masterkeys..we can easily open it.
Men2-kamaal hai...chal jaldi khol.
Both opened the door and entered in hall very quietly..at the same moment power went off.
Men1 n 2 together-batti chali gayi!!!hum aaye aur tum chali gayin..
Both moved further and reached in centre of the hall.Hall was not so arranged so many things lying on floor like bucket,basket,balloons..and lots of things were spread here n there..as it was dark they were unable to see things properly.
Men1-arey yr..kuch dikahyi nhi de raha.
Men2-aur kuch sunai bhi nhi de raha...main light ke bandobast krta hun,
As he moved forward his hand gets collide with a vase which was kept near sofa..vase brokedown on floor n cracking sound echoed in hall.
Both of them-mar gaye!

In rantara's room

Antara woke up n sat on bed as she heard some loud sound.
Antu-ye kaise awaaz h?someone is there..
she pats raghu's shoulder to make him up
Antara-Raghu,Raghu.Raghhuuu!utho mujhe lgta hai ki hamare ghar mein koi hai.
Raghu was in deep sleep and he was talking with her while sleeping.
Raghu-umm..hmm..haan antu..hamare ghar mein bhut saare log hain..tum ho main hun..meri saas,tumhari saas,mere sasur,tumahre sasur,meri behen RAsika.mera bhai, sahib,meri aur tumhari daring bhabhi ruksana..we have a very big family antu ab so jao..gn
Antara-raaghuu!!main gharwalon ki baat nhi kr rhi hun.utho na pls!
Raghu(in his sleep)-hmm... pyaara doggy sheru..wo bhi hamare ghar mein hain..ab so jao...gn
Antara-kya karun is yede ka?raghu mujhe abhi vase tutne ki awaaz aayi hai...
Raghu-chuha hoga antu..khana dhud raha hoga..use kahna dhundne do tum so jao aur sone do..gn
Antara-haan chuha hi hoga..she slept again hugging raghu..and raghu was sleeping as it is.

In the hall

Men1-lagta hai koi nhi jga.. dekhkr chalo na...
he moves further when his leg tripped over a basket he fell down on floor..and gasped in pain"oouchh"

Antara heard again n thought that something is happening in the hall.she again woke up and starts patting his shoulder raghu,!utho hall mein koi hai..
Raghu-antu chuhe ki family hogi..sab milke khana dhund rahe honge..so ja..gn
Antara pulls his hand and made him sit..his eyes were closed n sleeping while sitting.she shooked him"raghu mujhe lagta hai ki hamare ghr mein chor aa gaya hai...
Raghu-oh chalo wo chuhe ko khana khila dega tum so jao gn...
Antara shooked him badly which made him to open his eyes unwillingly..
Antara-raghu..hamare ghar chor aay hai CHOOORRR!!!!!
Raghu- haan haan..Kya????hamare ghar mein chor aa gaya hai...ab chuhon ko khana kaun khilaye antu?
Antara-raghu!!neend se jago..chor chori krne aaya ahi..aur tumhe chuhon ki padi hai?
Antara told him everything he understood what's happening and thought he was talking while sleeping .He looked at watch and saw it was 2.15am...he says..antu my jaan."happy Anniversary"he hugged her tightly and rest his head on her shoulder..antara too forget and wished him "aww..happy anniversary raghu"she observed that he doesn't gave any response...he again slept on her shoulder she pulled out from hug and cups his face..and shooked his head..which made him wake up again..
Raghu- haan antu..mein jag gaya hun..haan to hamare ghr mein chor aa gaye hain...pr party to evening mein hai na ye log abhi se kaise aa gaye?
Antara was hitting her forehead and keep on saying...main kya karun is yede ka?..raghu tumnne choron ko bhi invite kiya hai kya????
Raghu got back to normal n says..r u sure ki wo chor hi hain? She says "I think so"..okay lets go then..
He gets up and starts doing pushups 1..,2...3,...
Antara-its not the correct time to do exercise raghu!!do it in morning..
Raghu-apun to warm up kr raha tha..
Antara-I think we should inform others too..so that they will get alert and she dialled rukku's number.

Satya n ruksana's room

Satya n rukku were in deep sleep.ruku's phone starts vidrating she gets up and starts blabbering.."ye company walon ko koi kaam nhi hai kya?din raat call krte rehte hain..na khud sote hain..na sone dete hain.But as soon as she saw antu is calling her..she picked up n said"ek ghar mein hokr bhi call kyun kr rahi ho...aur wo bhi itni raat ko?.Antu told her everything happened few minute before.
As rukku heard everything her eyes popped out and she spoke up "HAMARE GHAR MEIN CHOR!!!!!!!"
Antara made her relax and said to be alert as they both were going to caught them...rukku denied n said she n satya will come too.
After their conversation she tries to make satya awake. She goes on trying but failed!.
She pushed him so hard that he rolled down the floor.
Satya-aahh! Janu kya kr rhi ho? Abhi training dene ka time nhi hai.(he was still sitting on floor)
Rukku-sahib hamare ghar mein chor ghus gaye hain!
Satya(irritates)- kya yr...ye chor bhi na, subah nhi aa sakte the!
Rukku-sahib..wo chor hain aur wo raat ko hi aate hain.now lets move we have to help raghu n antara.
Satya-oh raghu is there na..wo dhayn rakega choron ka..chalo hum so jate hain.(n he gets up)
Rukku-no way!!! Kaise bhai ho tum..main bhi dekhto hun ki tumkasie nhi chalet...get up fast.
Satya-okay I m coming.u go first.
Rukku-no!! we both will go together.
Satya-fine!! i m coming with u.
Meanwhile antara dailled number of her mother-in-law.


Precap-mujhe Khud nhi pta..🤣


Koi zinda bacha ki nhi.


P.S.-Jab tak tum log ye part read karoge tab tak mein log out kar chuki hongi...😈

Well thanks a lot for reading n bearing the bakwaas part of mahabakwas story🤢...ever of this forum.I know u all will hit me with big DANDA n will sure throw all rotten eggs n tomatoes..i am ready for it.😉
very sorry for typos n grammatical mistakes.
Honey n Kiret I fulfilled ur wish...now u both r happy.😊
Edited by Tsuchi - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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wow suchi
so u finally started a story
keep up the good work
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Posted: 11 years ago
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unres


Yes finally!!!

And it's not bad ok... stop thinking like that!

It's actually really good ok

And it's funny 😆

Thank you for writing this ❤️


Edited by Wahian4lyf - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Unres
Okay...hahahahahahaha 🤣 🤣 🤣 🤣
Sorry..I just can't stop rofling 🤣
This was hilarious... Lol..
I loved it 😳
-rukhsana hockey player 🤣
-DM Punjabi 😆
-buntiya is finally DM's husband yayy 😆 😃
-finally satya got a good role
-Mrs.kaul..filmy mom lol
-rasika married to aman..okay
-why didn't you get a gf or wife for MM?? 😆
-monkey cap..Haha "thand ziada thi" 🤣
-both men1 and men2 seems crazy 😆
-chohe ki family..Haha ..Aww my Raghu is so funny and cute 😳
-chor chohe ki family ko khana khila den ge..Haha
-Raghu doing pushups at 2o'clock in the morning 😛
-satya and rukhsana part was also funny
Suchi( I hope I've spelled your name correctly...if not then I'm sorry 😳 )
This is just mind blowing..this is not a crap..
I love it yaar..
And you've to continue this.. No matter what..and that too very soon..pleaseee its a request as well as blackmailing Lol 😆
itni achii story k lye ek tight wali jhappi and pyari wali pappi 😃 🤣
Edited by hareem27 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Hey suchi🤗
Wow a story from you
That too on Rantara
love the CS and first You are so good girl
So waana read more
so do continue soon
Thanks for the PM
Take care

Lots of Love
Geet
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Nice yaar suchi...very well written. ..I liked the rantara conversation ...awesome yaar
please continue soon 😃
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Suchi meri jaan..yeh tu hi hai na🤗
U hv written such a wonderful chapter 😛
Yar i really bow to ur sense of humour 😆
Mazaaa gya yar..sum lines cracked me😉
Raghu antu was funny side dekhane k liye
Thanks😊😊😊 n yes its sunthing new n different fr
Me...i njyed it yar..sab k sab character ache h..
Ruku ka best h yar.😆😆so funny...
Thanks ..jldi se update krna😳😃 waitibg

Ps..main zinda hun yar.. 🤣 pad k..
Edited by ankusanu - 11 years ago
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HOW DARE YOU!!!!...
Don't u dare call yr work crap..😡
OMG..we discovered a new talent of yours..😊
Your an awesome writer..👏
perfect story..At least there are no villians...pheewww...
BTW I know who the "chor" are..😛
Hint : Abroad walay...😉
RIGHT???..😃

Anyway..Amazing story..😃
You should write ore often..YOUR AMAZING..😊
Mwahhh..KEEP ROCKING..<3 <3 <3..
Edited by Niyaz_Lover - 11 years ago

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