**My first story AT PG 4 :)** - Page 5

Originally posted by: snehal.

Feww!! Finally you managed to post the story!

Good idea but the execution could have been better! Like instead of writing abhijeet apne haath kaise bhi chuda leta hai, you could have elaborate that kaise bhi!

Being your first attempt its really good i must say! But i when i read the promo i was expecting the brains of CID being used to find the culprit and then save abhijeet without scratch.. U know he being shot in front of the whole team( and that too when team knows this will happen) is kinda failure of team.. N our CID cant fail.. right?

Dont take me wrong but this is what i actually felt..

Keep it up! I m waiting for more from you!!

Originally posted by: neeme

Hey Shiva First of all Congratulations On ur First Story. 😊.

i read it last nite.. This Is ur first Attempt so As first attempt u r Very good.😊

Emotional part in ur story was Much.. But one thing i like That till the end There was somethng new and some Suspense was there..That was Very Good Attempt...

I want to give u some suggestion... ur story thinking is good.. u can be a Very good writer in future... Emotional bond of Daya and Abhijeet was so much.. Which is not happning in CID Show..

Ur Investigation style is good.. Concentrate on that. And Next time write Investigation part in detailed with more suspense.

Also write in english other Than Dialogue part in story.

And Presentation of Story..ur font style was so small.. i read it By quoting ur story post and then change the font style and size... Always Use style and size which i m using in my this post.. and Bold or use bigger font size To Point out somethng in ur story..

Good Attempt... Gud Luck for Future 😊

Originally posted by: Shruti_HR

Brilliant story 👏
I enjoyed every bit of it and just love your writing style. Keep it up! 👍🏼

Originally posted by: rashi.rose

Hey shiva di:-) I love your story a lot... DI its your first story na so Saari mistakes maaf ... I love the way you write the Dialoges loved it :-) Daya-ABHI rocked the story... Di you are a good writter :-) I LIKE the TITLE OF YOUR STORY... Keep it up...

Originally posted by: Soonaali

Hey Shiva

I from mobile so not able to post what i want to post

First So many claps ... Its really a verry good first attempt

U did a gr8 job

Others give u comment on emotional things

please take care in ur future attempts

and yes U have so many things so please do not rush please elaborate more...

as u have a fantastic plot and good writing skills

Dear please write more stories me waiting

A hug from me