**My first story AT PG 4 :)** - Page 6

Originally posted by: AmanDeep24

hey shiva
ist of all a very very congrats to u on ur first story😃
finally u completed it😉
i m sorry for giving late feedback🤢
now cum to story
i loved it from my bottom of heart😃
bond of daya sir n abhi sir is so sweet😃
plot, ur style of detection, supence everything is mindblowing👏👏




gud luck for ur future project👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼
keep writing👏👏

Originally posted by: shiva17

Ya you are right maine bahut saari mistakes😭 ki hai ..But mai kya karu mujhe kuchh aata hi nahi sachi... Isiliye mai story post nahi kar rahi thi😆😆😆...

Originally posted by: snehal.

Now now now this is called undermining your own capability!

Yaar story writing is not easy and u did a good job with it.. Again no mistakes with story but mistakes with elaboration.. And i want many more from you.. Samzi!!

hey SHIVA dear

was so anxious abt ur story but now m so much bz wid ma schedule dt cant manage time 2 read it... hope u undrstnd...

but ll definitely try 2 read n comment ASAP...

take care dear

gud luk 4 future projects
keep smilin'
regards

Originally posted by: gadhadada

so finally SHIVZ CHASHMA managed sum time to bring out HER TALENT😊😃!!!

WOW👏👏👏...

itni himmat kay PEHLI STORY mein ABHI Sir ko MAARNAY ka PLAN😡

aur wo bhi KAALIYA kay HATH😡

hey SHIVZ CHASHMA😡, kahein TU nay KAALIYA kay bhais mein DADA kay CHASHMAY ki WAAT tou nahi lagany ki KOSHISH ki hay na😲😡😉!!!

khair, very GOOD n THRILLING START👏 which panning NICELY👏

as a FIRST ATTEMPT its was really AWESUME⭐️!!!

sum SUGGESTIONS😉...

plz USE BIG FONTS😡...

warna MERA CHASHMA TERAY CHASHMAY ka GALA DABA day ga😡🤢

try to MINIMIZE DAYA Sir TEARS😉...

and last yaar that PAPER CLUE and the BOMB in Quillas...

bit FW styles😉😆

otherwise, GOOD JOB👏⭐️...

chalo TUMHARA CHASHMA yaqeenun MARA NAAM aagay chall kay KHOOB ROSHAN karay ga😃

jus use ENERGY SAVERS na😉😆!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Originally posted by: PARO..16

So,Finally you posted the Story..uff..kitna Wait karwaya..!!😡
But as it is said "Sabra ka fal meetha hota hai" so we got the good for our Waitings😉
Di,your story was really very good⭐️⭐️
The Duo scenes(which are vanished nowdays😭) were really very good..i loved them all❤️..and also some dialoges were Awesome..!!
The plot, the investigation was quite nice..⭐️..but just one thing i want to say(already said by Dada)..try to minimize Daya sir's tears..
btw Great job done by you..
Keep it up..
waise next story kab aa rahi hai??😲😉

Originally posted by: dayakhtar

hey SHIVA dear

was so anxious abt ur story but now m so much bz wid ma schedule dt cant manage time 2 read it... hope u undrstnd...

but ll definitely try 2 read n comment ASAP...

take care dear

gud luk 4 future projects
keep smilin'
regards

Sorry for late reply. I already read the story but through my mob. so i couldn't comment that time itself.
Now my comments... Excellent work you earn a ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️. friendship of duo is brought out perfectly. Hats off.😛