STORY CONTEST- 2(CASE OF THE MYSTERIOUS KIDNAPPER) - Page 44

😡😡😡 I typed a long essay with some details about some of your stories and I got a 'page cannot be displayed' and everything is gone.😡😡😡

Uff 😭 back ka button try kro agar docs main tha ton recent documents nahi ton check in history it would be saved there... 😲

In story 3 the discussion of ACP, Abhi. The dialogues written were awesome.. Since cannot quote as No copy is there on first page.

Abhijeet stopping Daya while he was about to argue or say fight with media generally its Abhijeet jisse bahut jaldi gussa ata hai.


In story 6 concept was wonderful. In this story well explained forensic part was there. Even that Enzyminocide (hope written correctly). Liked when Freddy said to ACP sir aap nahi chalenge (anyone lase can say but just loved Freddy said) and that politician. kitna famous tha aisa kam karke naam kharab kar liya.


As and when I get time and remember scenes I will write here in this thread

now primarily Congrts to the winners and runner ups. Bhinder Shaggy and Sunny. I think all the participants are winners. And a big thank you to the readers Jiya, Shreela and Priya I cant say much on the stories as i had jus read 3 stories and my health didnt permitted me to read other's story. The day after the contest was announced me 2 was really happy. but some drastic things happened in my life and the excitement was subduded. 1st was the team meet, there were many dropouts from the contest in that week and I remember visrom getting dissaappointed with the dropouts. I also remember Bhavna's hardwork and determination for the contest so finally i decided to participate. Some how I managed to finish the story on thursday eve and pm it to visrom however i coudnt read more than three stories. Many of you insisted me to read I even gave it a try but sorry guys I couldnt manage. But will definately try to read the stories and finally review it.
Story writing was great experience but the biggest mistake was i misread the person to be kidnapped, it was politician and not his son. I came to know this while reading the reviews. how stupid of me. Anyways the thrill the excitement and submitting in time was awesome feeling cant be expressed in words. Talking in terms of growth the contest has given me great amount of growth and development. My 1st story CID Under Pressure was bad, 2nd the 1st story contest story was better than the first 1 and here I got lil apperciation which means its better than that. I am happy I am improving myself. Thanx visrom for organisng everything and giving me a podium to potray and enhance our skills. And you are a good organiser keep it up looking ahead for next contest dont know who is organising. But still looking forward.
P.S. Can you tell me sunny which were the dialogues you exactly liked in Story 8? Actually I am getting desperate to know re

Originally posted by: sunnyp1414

In story 3 the discussion of ACP, Abhi. The dialogues written were awesome.. Since cannot quote as No copy is there on first page.

i have sent you story now you can Quote anything you want to 😆

story 3 few scenes I liked a lot--

Freddy:- Daya Sir appko bhi ACP Sir se "Daya Darwaza Todh do" sun ne ki adapt padh chuki hain 'agar voh hote ton ab tak darwaza todh bhi diya hota..



introduction part well explained
Ram:- yeh hain hamari maa Shrimati yashoda Desayi(ponting towards a lady wearing White saari) yeh hain hamari choti behan Simran(A stylish 22years girl wearing white top) yeh bhaiya ki wife Seema Desayi(A lady wearing black Saree) aur ton app log mil he chuke hain'



They themselves called CID then maan hi maan main regretting why they called.
Yashoda:- dekhiye app log hum pe buvajah ilzaam laga rahe hain'iska ilzaam bahut bura hoga'


next one
ACP:- tv on karo'........ further dialogue
ACP:- Daya tv band karo'


and Abhi-Acp dialogues when ever they interact. they were just too good.

ACP:- yeh lo nawabjade naraz hogaye itni se baat pe....jao Daya aur sambhalo inhe'
Daya:- lekin Sir hum koshish kar rahe hain na'
ACP (shows eyes)
Daya:- jata hoo Sir..


and that Simran
Simran:- main ma main?
Daya:- ab Mr. Ram ne Simran ton appka he naam batayea tha…agar 5 minute main abhi abhi badal liya ho ton kuch keh nahi sakte…

Superb analysis Sunny!! Just too good... 👏 👏

Originally posted by: sunnyp1414

In story 6 concept was wonderful. In this story well explained forensic part was there. Even that Enzyminocide (hope written correctly). Liked when Freddy said to ACP sir aap nahi chalenge (anyone lase can say but just loved Freddy said) and that politician. kitna famous tha aisa kam karke naam kharab kar liya.


As and when I get time and remember scenes I will write here in this thread

Thanks Sunny for liking my concept,I thought there's nothing much in the concept but yes I was missing some emotional moments in CID these days so decided to have them involved in my story and the ting you said about Freddy,weird but its even my favourite part.