STORY CONTEST- 2(CASE OF THE MYSTERIOUS KIDNAPPER)

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Bhavanab

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Posted: 15 years ago

#441

Bhinder meri karo n,tum achcha analyse karthe ho 😉

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Bhinder

@bhinder.thind

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Posted: 15 years ago

#442

😆 Bhavana, In your story, I loved ACP Sir's confidence in abhi-daya in starting Scene...Moreover, jab ACP Says in bureau nak kata di behosh padhe the dono..loved that part..except this, Abhi's regret when he says hamare hote hoye yeh sab hoya bahut he sharmnak baat hain...and all emotional scenes...waise ton bahut kujh hain likhne ton but can't Quote na So...I loved full story most importantly concept you used there...just awesome..

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Bhavanab

@Bhavanab

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Posted: 15 years ago

#443

heehee maintoh yunhi keh rahi thi analyse karlo,tumne toh sach mein kar diya but thanks yaar

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sneh.

@sneh.

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Posted: 15 years ago

#444

Bhinder u can alalyse my stroy as well yaar woh bhi detail mein flaws bhi, And I have promised you to alalyse all the stories in detail and Bhavana thanx for giving those ratings to me on mail I was wrecked with work and forgotten the story contest suddenly saw the ratings and came back to this thread love you sweety

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Bhavanab

@Bhavanab

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Posted: 15 years ago

#445

@sneha di no problem di,I knew you'd like to know ur ratings but di jab bhi time milega aur aap stories padh,I'd love to read your reviews

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sneh.

@sneh.

Voyager

Posted: 15 years ago

#446

Definitely sweety I had promised this to bhinder too I will read each and every story and give a detailed review of each and every story and its a genuine promise dear

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Bhinder

@bhinder.thind

Dazzler

Posted: 15 years ago

#447

@Sneha dii I Will analysis yours too.. 😉 In short, your story was matured one..By reading , it seems that it has been written by a Professional journalist..Truth of politics was very well explained ...In your I loved opening scene Where ACP Sir is scolding abhi-daya ... 😛 I was reading but i could imagine everything happening in front of my eyes...There were some nice moments between crew.. In detail you PM me your story fer will tell you by quoting dialogues 😆

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Bhinder

@bhinder.thind

Dazzler

Posted: 15 years ago

#448

@Sneha dii You read first 3 so far?

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sneh.

@sneh.

Voyager

Posted: 15 years ago

#449

Ohhk boss I have pmed u d story now send me the analysis heheheh

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visrom

@visrom

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Posted: 15 years ago

#450

I'll try posting again. I'll start off with Sunny's story.

Sunny has some brilliant ideas. Be it this story or the 'clock wala' story or the story where there was a secret code with a 'D' or 'C' or something leading people to suspect Daya. There was another story where Abhijeet fought with a lady in a parking lot. Sorry, I don't recollect the names.

But somehow the narrative is a bit complicated and I sometimes need to read and re-read it a few times.

Otherwise Sunny's stories are unique and 'hatke' as they call it. This one too was very good. But again I got a bit confused with the boy with the laptop and what he was doing with Sachin etc.

I read it a few times and finally got it.

Good effort. 👏👏

Hope to read more stories from Sunny in future too.

(Will come back to the others' stories, give me some time)