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Posted: 17 years ago
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Thank you all you lovely people 🤗 🤗 Glad you're all enjoying it!

Since the current Dulhan storyline is focusing on memory regain I felt like bringing SV into my FF! Not many parts left now, probably just 2 or 3 more.

Apologies for making this one a bit too long!

Part 6

The next day…

He was joyfully running and jumping through the corridor, in his own world. Divya was coming from the opposite direction. "Ouch!", they both winced together, as their heads banged. "Watch where you're going Mr. Kangaroo", she said with her hand on her forehead. "I'm so sorry, did I hurt you? Let me kiss it better". He gave her several kisses on her forehead. "Okay okay, that's enough. I'm fine now. May I ask why you are so excited?." "I'm going to sneak into that ghost room, and you're coming with me. You know how I love adventures", he informed her. Her hand dropped in shock. "Are you out of your mind? Badi maa will kill us!". The "kill us" comment made him think for a minute. "You know I don't know why but that just sounded very familiar, it felt familiar actually. She'll kill us", he repeated. "Anyways she won't find out, don't worry". "I'm scared", she sounded like a little child. "I thought you were brave! I'll be with you, nothing will happen." It took him quite a few pleases to convince her. He literally begged as he went down on his knees and pleaded with his hands folded.

Some moments later, outside Sagar-Vidya's room…..

Excitedly he walked up to the door and began to open it, he waited but she was still rooted to the ground. He held out his hand. "I'm right here, with you", he assured her. Some of her fear was replaced with a slight smile, and she took his hand. They walked in, hand in hand. As the windows were open, the wind forced the door to close, making her frightened. She jumped and grabbed him, one hand on his shoulder and the other around his neck, clutching his shirt tightly with her eyes shut. He stood there, motionless and clueless. The white ghostly room was completely empty, yet it immediately had an effect on him. "Vidya you are my angel, my wife, my life". "What did you do Vidya? Not fair". "Will you play in the rain with me?". He heard voices in his head, both familiar and unfamiliar. He turned his head to look at her, took her delicate and frightened face in his hands. She opened her eyes and looked at him, she saw tears. "Vidya!", he suddenly said. For a second she was too stunned to react. "Vidya!", he cried out again. "Amar? What happened? Why are you calling me Vidya?, she asked, puzzled. "Vidya!", he said yet again, ignoring her questions. This time he embraced her, tightly with some more tears. She was frozen, and didn't respond. Then she moved away, grabbing his shoulders and shaking him. "Amar! Amar! What's wrong with you?". He suddenly snapped out of it. "I want to get out of here, right now!", he panicked.

Outside…

He was sitting on the ground, breathing heavily and shaking his head. She watched him in horror. "What happened to you in there?", she asked, putting her hand on his shoulder. "Huh? I don't know. I heard some voices, which sounded familiar. Then I felt as if someone took over my soul, like I became someone else", he explained. "But why were you calling me Vidya?". He shrugged. She sat down beside him, thinking deeply about what she just saw and heard. She was stunned when she heard him chuckle. "Got you!", he shouted. "What? Amar that really wasn't funny!", she huffed. "Was I trying to make you laugh in the first place? I win!." "So sir, what can I do for you?". "Give me some time to think. I'll tell you tomorrow." She nodded slowly, and walked off, slightly disturbed. As soon as she left, his smile faded. I'm sorry Dibyaji, I know I'm a cheater. But I had to lie when I saw how worried you became. Initially I had planned to scare you in that room, thinking the ghost stories were just rumours. But I seriously don't know what happened to me all of a sudden, he apologised in his heart.
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Posted: 17 years ago
#42
OMG Aryan, this last part was AMAZING!! I could actually imagine Sagar taking over Amar...

I loved the way you described how he felt - hearing all the voices and old incidents. I can't believe you're going to end this! 😭
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Aryan!!!
You're a soooo talented writer!

I could totally imagine AD sneaking in SV's/their room.
...and aww...so nice to let him hear 'Vidya, yeh tumne kya kiya. Not fair.' 😳 😳

This part was fabulous!
I also can't believe you're ending it. Nahiiii...
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Posted: 17 years ago
#44
OMG THAT WAS SOOOO DAMNNNN GOOD (srry for the damn 😛) but omg i could totally imagine that 😃 😃
that was just brilliant 👏 👏
plez continue soon 😃 😃 😃
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Posted: 17 years ago
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yeh....dis part rocked.... 👏 ..gr8 part....do continue.....and we like long parts....so dont need to Apologies 😆
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Posted: 17 years ago
#46
Ok you're getting all these praises, how can you even think of ending it? Come on man...try to update when you can PUHLEEZ!! 😳 You're seriously really good!! I love how described the tension and aura when they entered the room! Its awesome! 👏
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Posted: 17 years ago
#47
part five was hilarous! Part Six was intense! great job Aryan, really love this story! 😃
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Posted: 17 years ago
#48
OMGGG! Aryan!! 🤣 🤣 Full privacy here 😆 😆 I cant stop laughingg, this is hilarious!

Mr. Kangaroo 🤣 I LOOVVVEEE this!! "Vidya you're my angel, my wife... my life." Awwieee! <3 . I want this to go on forever. :[
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Love you guys 🤗 🤗 This FF cant go on forever 😛

Ok the last update for now, I might not update until this weekend.

Part 7

The next day…

He claims that it was all a prank, but out of all the names in the world he said Vidya. The rumours say that some servant's ghost lives in that room, then how did he get the idea of Sagar and Vidya's ghosts? And the tears? How could they be fake?. Amar waved his hand in front of Divya's face, interrupting her thoughts. "Stop daydreaming about me". "If you take an eternity then of course I'll start daydreaming, and it wasn't about you", she complained. "Yeah yeah, okay I've got the perfect idea". "I'm telling you now if it's something crazy then I'm not doing it", she warned. He took a seat next to her, smiling, and placed her hand on top of his. "I know you said that I should never think about that status thing again but…", she opened her mouth to interrupt him but he held up a finger. "Let me finish. I'm trying my best but it's hard. I want to get rid of this insecurity too but I need your help. I want you to change me." "I don't want you to change. I love you the way you already are", she told him. He laughed. "I don't mean change my character but you know make me look a bit more sophisticated. Make me like you, a male version of you. Help me to improve my way of talking, my dress sense, etc. I want to be able to go out with you in front of people without being very self-conscious. I want to feel confident about myself", he explained. She looked at him, touched by his emotions and feelings. "Please?", he pleaded. "If that's what you really want then of course I'll help you. But promise me that my real Amar will not go anywhere". He nodded.
"Right so shall we start now? First of all, stop with the Dibyaji. Call me Divya". "Dibya", he said. "No no no, not Dibya its Divya. There is no B in my name. Say Div-Ya". "Div-Ya", he repeated. "Good! Now keep repeating that and say it in one go". He practised a few times "Divya Divya Divya Divya", he chanted. She embraced him out of excitement.

At the dining table…

A hungry Amar dug his hand into his rice. "Ow! What?" he whined, rubbing his hand as Divya slapped it. She handed him a spoon, fork and knife. "Eat with these", she ordered him.

Amar's bedroom…

He walked out of the bathroom after having a shower, with just a towel wrapped around his waist. He hugged himself to cover his body as he saw Divya standing at the door, laughing. "Oh ho! Mr. Amar is actually feeling shy for once?", she teased. She walked up to him, examining him playfully from head to toe. "Wow what muscles", she poked his arm. He looked down, blushing like a girl. She handed him a black blazer, red shirt and black trousers. "Wear these", she ordered him. He looked at the clothes excitedly, indicating that he likes them, and began to put them on. "Amar! Don't change here. Go in the bathroom silly", she reminded him. He realised his mistake and ran into the bathroom, blushing more than ever. A few minutes later he came out, smiling proudly. Divya slapped her forehead. "You're supposed to wear the blazer on top of the shirt, not the shirt on top of the blazer stupid. And your trousers are inside out.", she informed him. "Huh?", he looked puzzled. She told him which is the shirt and which is the blazer, he went back to change. Few minutes later. "Much better", she approved. "But please brush your hair, it's all scruffy. Also shave more often Mr. Grizzly Bear", she suggested. He nodded and went to check himself in the mirror. "Wow! I look pretty handsome, don't you think?", he asked. "No", she replied. His face fell, and she went to stand beside him, putting her arms around his neck."You look sexy", she winked at him.

Some days later, downstairs…

"We all have gathered here today to witness a transformed Amar Shivdhar Uppadhay. For the better or worse? That's for you to decide", she announced as the whole family waited. "Come in Amar!", she called. He appeared at the top of the stairs, dressed in a white blazer, black shirt and jeans, clean shaven, hair nicely styled with only a decent watch on his wrist as an accessory. He shoved his hands into his pockets, and walked down the stairs professionally and proudly. Several stunned faces stared at him in amazement. "Oh my god! He looks just like Sagar", chachi commented. He put his arm around her shoulder, and their heads touched. "Thenkoo", he said. She glared at him. "Joking! Thank you Miss. Divya", he laughed.
Edited by A r y a n - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
#50
omg that was soooooo good....YAY HE TRANSFORMED 😃 😃
hahahaha divya was checking him out eh 😆 😳
i can just imagine him coming down those stairs *sigh* 😳
lol anyways aryan that was soooooooo good....and ya u gotta continue 😃 😃 so do it soon 😃 😃
i loved that update 😊

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