Discussion Topic: Poetry

Hi All,

This weeks topic of discussion is somewhat different to the ones we have been having for the past few weeks! We decided to explore your creative side!

Therefore, for the next fortnight, we would love to hear members write a poem on:

- how you feel about Astitva and how it may have influenced your life.

- your own experience of Astitva.

- any of the characters, e.g. simran, abhi, manas, shaguna, simran's dad

- the actual story of Astitva

- basically whatever you feel is relevant to Astitva and yourself.

Please note that no form of any abusive language or rude poems will be tolerated. There should be no double meanings or anything offensive written in the poems. It should be readable for all age groups.

This is all clean, good fun for everyone to enjoy! Poems can be as long or as short as you wish. Please give the poem a title.

We will be eagerly awaiting your responses! Lets get our thinking caps on and get writing !

Thanks

Moderator and Viewbie Team

Hi Aloo_gobi
Nice change of topic.

I have enjoyed Astitva...ek prem kahani from the very first episode.Can't say it has influenced me in any way.Some things did touch my heart and I felt close to some characters at times.

But I choose the story of Astitva and since the main protagonist is Simran,I would like to make her the subject of my poem.



Simran ki prem kahani...ek kavita


It all began when a photographer met a doctor
Not surprising when Ajai Sinha is the director
He made their romance and marriage seem like real
Only for their families it became an ordeal
They fought against all odds to become one
But, sadly for Abhi, marriage seemed dull and no fun
A baby became the bone of contention
Brave doctor Simran nearly became a nervous wreck
Her dream of a smooth sailing life became a trek
Baby Astha gave her strength and motivation
And Abhi sought solace in the arms of Kiran
Good friend Manas was her support and inspiration
The loyal Shaguna stood by her like a rock
Papa Saurabh again her anchor to dock
But, Alas! She committed the biggest blunder of her life
By asking Abhi to make Neha his wife
The loss of many near and dear ones she withstood
But darling Astha's kidnapping deprived her of motherhood
Innocent little Gudiya gave her a reason to live again
Oh,no! Abhi deserted once more and caused everyone pain
Then came the much awaited 18 year leap
But all we see is our dear doctor weep
For her mistakes Simran is paying a heavy price
What a pity, Astha has forgotten all that was nice
Finding Sia and Abhi seems a joy shortlived
The return of vamp Kiran has the audience peeved
What started out to be a new and bold Prem Kahani
Resembles nothing nayi but puraani
Ajaiji, Please, we want the old Simran and her Astitva restored
Don't blame us if we complain we are bored
On behalf of our forum I make this humble request,
Promise us director saab you will do your best.

Thanks
Akshata

Hi,
Thought of something in Hindi...I'm not very good at it but just for fun.Please bear with the errors,if any and many.
Hope more than one entry is allowed 😳

Simran aur Abhi ki Prem Kahani


Abhi aur Simran ki jodi thi nirali
Jo unke parivaaronko bilkool nahi bhaayi
Koi kasar nahi chhodi Kiran aur Mummyji ne
Abhi ne bhi banaye bachhe ke bahane
Toot gaya ek pyaara sa rishta
Simran ke aanchal mein rahi sirf Astha
Simmatli is aurat ne apni zindagi dheere dheere
Abhi aur Kiran ne liye gair kanooni saat phere
Kudrat ne dikhaya sabko apna nyay
Saxena parivaar ho gaya asahay

Bholi si Neha ke roop mein mila Abhi ko aur ek mauka
Par kismet to dekho, phir de gayi dhoka
Chhod gayi duniya mein ek nanhi si jaan
Simran ke havaale karke,chhod diye praan
Liya oos se vaada ki banayegi gudiya ko apni chhavi
Ban jaayegi Astha ke saath woh uski bhi mummy
Taqdeer ko tha khuch aur manzoor
Dukh ka saathi banna jaise tha Simran ka dastoor
Ho gaya London mein beti Astha ka apaharan
Yeh dukh to nahi hua Simran ko sahan
Gudiya ko apnaya sabki baat maankar
Bina apni Astha ko bhoolaye,lekin pyaar se yeh thaankar

Abhi ne phir chhod diya Simran ka saath
Par woh nahi baithi dhare haathon mein haath
Gudiya ko paala Asthu banaakar
Bahuti roothi hui hai ab yeh sach jaankar
Kaise bhool gayee woh sab mamta aur pyaar
Har samay karti hai apni maa pe woh vaar
Achanak hui kismet meherbaan
Mil gaye Simran ko, Abhi aur Sia, uski jaan
Par chhupake kuch baatein kar rahi hai woh badi bhool
Isliye Kiran bana paayegi Gudiya ko apni shool
Saanch ko Aanch nahi,kab jaanege yeh log
Yeh jhoot bolne ki aadat kahin ban na jaaye rog

Haath jodke chalo maangte the hain Ajaiji se hum
Mitado yeh Simran Abhi ka na mitnewala gham.

hey, great topic....

I will be back in sometime with my poem on Astitva...

Well, here is my poem on Love...


Akhir pyar kise kehthe hain…
Kya Simran ko Abhi se hua tha, woh pyaar tha
Yah Abhi ne jo mehsoos kiya… kiran ke liye, Simran ke liye, Neha ke liya, woh pyaar tha…
Akhir pyaar kisse kehthe hain….

Kisike aahat ke intezaar karna… ya unke hone ki ehsaas hona.
Kya pyaar ise kehthe hain….

Bheed mein kisike hone ki ehsaas hona, kisike khayal itna bhaa jana, Abhi ne isiko pyaar samjha…
Par kya isiko pyaar kehthe hain…

Binkahi baathein jab kaanom mein goonje
Bin pooche sawaal ka jawab jab mile..
Hum nikle unki talaash mein..
Jo kahin humare dil ke andar hain..
Jo kahin humare zehen mein hain..
Jo hume humse jyaada samajhthe hain..
Jinke milne se humara adhoorapan na raha..

Aur jab woh humare saamne aaye..
To aisa laga ki koi aur nahi..
humara hi koi ansh humare saamne khada hai…
Yeh koi anjaaana tho nahi..

Aur phir jab nazarein mili,
woh ehsaas hi kuch aur thi..
Woh nazarein hi kuch aur thi…
Aise laga sukhi pathiyon pe baarish ki woh pehli boondein..

Aaj jab Abhi aur Simran ki nazrein mili....
Yehi ehsaas hua….. aur barsoon ki shikayat jaise mit hi gayi….

Aaj yeh ehsaas hai
Pyaar hone ka naam hai.. yeh koi rishte ka naam tho nahi…
Yeh sirf ek ehsaas hai jo mehsoos ki jaa sakthi hai…
Aur yeh ehsaas shayad hi har koi mehsoos kare…
Jo pyaar kartha hai.. woh yeh baath jaantha hai..
Aur jo yeh baath nahi jaantha.. woh isiki talaash mein duniya duniya bhataktha hai… aur sab se ek hi sawaal kartha hai…

Akhir pyaar kise kehthe hain….

Hey Grandmaratha,

Pata nahin Ki pyaar kise kehete hain par aap ne jo likha usko talent jaroor kehete hain.

Very Nice.

I sent you a PM but addressed it to Grand Maratha.Doubt you will receive it.

Cheers

Hey Akshata.. thanks, i got your pm...

And thanks for the compliments..

Aloo Gobi, a Very Nice Topic for a change!!!

Here i am Inspired by Akshata and Greatmaratha to pen in a few words..

So here is my so-called poetry 😆

Astitva Ek Prem Kahaani
Is a feast to the eyes.
It all started with Simran as the Darling of all eyes.
Powerful, dynamic, a winner in all walks of life.
In comes Abhi, a young ambitious photographer full of life
Abhi bit by the bug of Simran's love
Simran succumbing finally to Abhi's love
Their love shapes into an ever-lasting bond
That has to face the darkness of life for long.
A heartbroken Simran moves on in life
As the immature and impulsive Abhi learns the meaning of love life
Life for Abhi goes a full circle as he gets betrayed
In the same manner in which he betrayed Simran
Abhi marries Neha just to please Simran
Simran knows not the future of these entangling bonds.
Simran moves on with her Darling daughter Astha
Life for Simran stands still as she loses her Astha.
In comes Abhi who gives Simran his new born, who becomes Simran's Astha
Astha and Simran share a unique bond of love
But Alas!!!Life again in standstill as Astha knows the bitter facts of life
Simran sees happiness as Abhi and Sia enter her life
They all never know when they will unite in life
A brainwashed Astha hates Simran to the core
Gets sentimental and mislead with the facts she explores
Accepts Abhi as her father, But Simran and Sia are left to ponder
Sia convinces Saurabh and Astha for Abhi-Simran's marriage, this indeed is wonder of wonder
Astha hates Simran, her life's biggest blunder
Kiran re-enters, to poison Astha
We know not where life is headed for Astha
But one thing is for sure
Simran's love for Astha is pure
Astha has loads and loads of Simran's love to procure
We really wish Life is a Bed of Roses for Simran from now on
That Abhi and Simran's love for each other will move on
The love for Simran in Astha's heart should live on
This is a plea we make to director to bring on
A plea to the director to unite all together
Make Simran and Abhi's Prem Kahaani live forever.....

omg I can't believe it that how can so many people write poem. Great poem Sree di, Priya di and Akshata di. 👏 👏 👏 . Are u all inspired by Anand ? Ok U should all deserve a clap again. 👏 👏 👏

Trying a hand at Poetry in Hindi now😆😆

Abhi aur Simran ki Prem Kahaani
Ek Anokhi aur Niraali Kahaani
Jo shuroo Huyi Pyaar aur Vishwaas ke Atoot Bandhan se
Tab aaya ek Jhonka hawa ka, Ruk gayi Zindagi usi Mod pe
Tanhaayi, Ghutan, Pyaar Ke tadapMain Bheet Rahi Thi Simran ke Din
Naadaan Abhi ne ki Bewafaai, Na Jaana Kaise Katega Zindagi Simran Bin
Aansoo Main Dhooba Simran ka Subah aur Raat
Astha ki Hansi aur Khilkariyon se milaSimran ko ek Naya Saugaadh
Paschaataap Ke Aag mein Jalkar AbhiNe Samjha Sacche Pyaar ka Arth
Lautaaya Simran ke Jeeven Main Leke Astha ke liye Pyaar Bahut
Par Abhi ne Jaana ke Zindagi Main Bheete Pal Phir Nahi Aate
Abhi aur Simran ne Hamesha kiya Pyaar, Par wo Khushi ke Pal Waapas na Aaye
Abhi ne ki Neha ke Saath Ek Shaadi Samjauthe Ki
Andar hi Andar Ghut rahi thi Simran, Par Lagti to Khush hi Thi
Par Simran ne Na Jaana, Ke Tha to Yeh, Ek Galti
Jisne Barbaad Kiya, Ek Nahi , Do Nahi, Zindagiyaan Teen Teen
Neha Bechari PhisgayiIn Dono Ke Pyaar Beech
Kuch Samaj Na Paayi, Par Abhi Se Phir Bhi Karti Thi Preet
Neha Ne Bhi Dekhi Ghutan Bhare Din
Anjaan The Abhi aur Simran Neha Ki Dukh Se
Undono Ke Rishte Ne Neha ko diya Tadap
Tadap Thi Aisi, Ke Na Jeene Diya Usse
Saumpgayi Neha, Uski Pyaar ki Nishaani Simran Ko
De Gayi Simran ke Haathon Main Abhi Ko.
Zindagi ke Raaste Hai Thede Mede
Khogayi Astha, Rehgayi Simran Akele
Ubhar na Paayi Simran Is Gham Se
Tab Abhi ne di Simran ko Neha ki Nishaani
Jisko Banaaya Simran ne Apni Prem ki Nishaani
Zindagi ne Dikhaya Phir se Khushi
Simran aur Abhi ne Ek Hone ki Sochi
Tab Aaya Ek Jhonka Hawa Ka, Tehergaya Sama, Rukgayi Zindagi
Abhi ne Dekhi, Neha ki Likhaayi
Gir Gaya Abhi Nazar se Apne Hi
Zindagi ke Talaash main gaya Abhi
Chod gaya Simran ko Beech Sadak Pe Wahi
Simran ne Smabhala Apne Aapko
Bangayi Astha ki Maa aur Baap Dono
Nibhaagayi Astha ke Saath Prem ki Kahaani
Par Boli na Woh, Astha ko Sacchi Kahaani
Khath Rahi thi Simran ki Zindagi Asthake Sahaare
Tab Aayi Simran ke Dwaar, Khushi , Na Jaane Kidar Se
Milgayi Simran ko Khushiyaan Ek Nahi Do
Milgaya Badla Hua Abhi
Aur Laut Aayi, Unki Prem Ki Nishaani, Sia, Beti Unki
Abhi aur Simran ka Pyaar Tha Waise Hi
Undono Ne Sia ke Saath Dekhi Khushi
Par Na Jaana, Kaise Kahe Astha se Sach
Liya Sahaara Samay Ka, Kaha Nahi Astha se Sach
Laut Aaya Abhi Simran ke Jeevan Main
Rehraha Tha Sia ke Saath Astha se Bachke
Abhi ke Maa Baap, Milke Abhi Se The, Khushi Se Paagal
Jhooth, Jhooth aur sirf Jhooth Bangayi Simran ki Bholi
Abhi aur Sia se Chupchupke Simran Mili
Zindagi ne Liya Ek Naya Mod
Astha ne Dekhi Simran ko Ek Aadmi Sameth
Astha Ne Simran ko Naam Diya Bacchalan
Tab Aaya Abhi Duniya ke Saamne
Tab Samjhi Astha Sachai Sabhi
Khush Thi Wo Ki Mila Uska Papa
Par Chidthi Thi Woh Simran Se, Kyunki Nahi thi Woh Uski Mama
Dono Bachon Ke Pyaar Main Bhate Abhi aur Simran
Par Zindagi Ne Diya Abhi ko Ek Aur Mauka
Sia ne Kiya Chamatkaar, Maan Gaye Sabhi
Shaadi Karli Dobara Simran Aur Abhi
Par Zindagi Ke Paheliyaan Thi Wahi ke Wahi
Astha ne Na Samjha Simran Ki Preet
Akeli Thi Astha Apne Hi Parivaar Ke Beech
Simran ne Ki Lakhon Jathan
Astha se Hojaaye Uski Milan
Par Naadaan Astha Samaj Na Sakhi
Simran ka Pyaar Hai kya, Jeevan Main Uski
Abhi aur Simran Ladrahe Hai Is Mod Se
Hamari Itni Hi Iccha Ke Astha Simran Ki Pyaar Ko Smajhe
Miljaaye Abhi, Simran, Astha aur Sia
Unki Zindagi Banjaaye Ek Pyaari Si Kahaani
Jisme Ho Prem, Prem aur Bas Prem Ki Kahaani
Itni Hi Asha Hai Ki Abhi aur Simran Ki Preet Ho Amar Prem
Jo Hamesha Bani Rahe Ek Pyaari Si Prem Kahaani