AbhiRa OS: Second Chances - Page 12

Originally posted by: Mushfika_01

BLUES!!!!😲 Blu-- okay

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Only a writer (you) can understand the characters and the scenes and say something so beautiful. I'm in awe of your comment honestly.

@Red: Isn't that how he has always been? And isn't that why we have been falling head over heals in love with this man over and over again? 😳Here I thought it was the jawline and six-pack abs. On a serious note, RS did a good job with creating this one. All you need is the eye to see.

@blue: oh you bet! Going by how protective and possessive he is regarding anything that he considers his, this side is bound to come out - regardless of whether their path is same or not. Soemtimes i feel like even if akshu lived in another part of the world and she faced the slightest of inconveniences, he would just fly out of nowhere, give her an earful for never taking care of herself, resolve the issue, destroy whoever caused the nuisance and then go back to his life again🤣That is so true. He can sense her troubles. Even yesterday when Aarohi walked in the room, he knew she was going blast at Akshu and he took over that situation and diffused it

@green: Absolutely. more than she lets it out on her face. She is just good at handling it all emotionally compared to abhi which is why she doens't come off so intense and broken. Otherwise, she is suffering equally if not more. and yes, she does need that "trigger" to let it all out.

@purple: I'm SO glad you liked the washroom scene. Took me quite sometime to brainstorm it and think about what the dialogues should be that doesn't come off too "needy" and cheesy on either of the individuals, yet is impactful.I totally understand how difficult it gets to transfer what you have in you head into that document.

@pink and yep, he definitely did. I feel like it wouldn't be enough if abhi just start feeling all the love and again goes into his "begging for her acceptance" mode the moment he learns about the truth. what akshara did is not acceptable whatsoever and something that can be equated to betrayal - which Abhimanyu felt in this OS. Anyone would tbh. hence, he asked those questions and left. It definitely didn't mean he doesn't mean love her anymore but he sure as hell felt the need to let go for once, and have akshu to earn it if and when she feels the need to, which she later on does😉. I want a lot of grovelling from Akshu when this is over.

OH my god your comment on the last scene made my mouth hurt from the wide grin that took probbaly a permanent place on face!! so many of you mentioned about how he didn't budge until she said 'i love you' and it makes me feel so happy and accomplished ugh!! Because he never stands up to her. Never calls her out. He just takes the pain she gives him and considers that his destiny.

@brown: THIS!!!!!! couldn't have been said any better. I absolutely love these two lines blues. and this is precisely what it is between the two. thank you for putting the abhira into such simple yet powerful words. Since i have already done the job can I not write the next part of the TS.

@Dark mauve: It means a lot. It truly does. Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment something so kind. Loved reading it.

if you were beside me, i would have done this:

Just saying that this is the lengthiest reply for a reply🤣

Its like once we start typing we can not stop. You don't need a moment, you need to take a bow!

Hugs and love to you. I understand how painful it is to write.

Originally posted by: Nikki_love

I wish it never ended 🤗🤗🤗what emotions and stupendous writing! Thank you for sharing the link to this. I would have missed on a beautiful master piece!

Thank YOU for PMing me for the links to my work!!! IT honestly made my day that people care enough to read all my stories. I'm so glad this one didn't disappoint you🤗

Originally posted by: 2TheMoonAndBack

Hi i'm finally here, got my sanity back after 24 hours and now i can comment😎

first thing first: where and how exactly did you find this abhi? and why would you put this character in your OS and set the benchmark sooo high?! kuch idea bhi hai mush tu kya karrahi hai? now i want this abhi both in the show and a life partner in real life

second question: the dialogues. ok so like HOW DO YOU COME UP WITH dialogues LIKE THIS? like in the washroom scene. i was basically biting my nails while reading that part because i thought arohi exposed will happen here. the way abhi was counting up to 3 for akshu🤣 he was worried shit about akshu after the way he found her in the field and so when akshu opened the door, before aksing anything further, he checked her vitals. a true doctor anda true lover

then comes the akshu's excuse: i slipped in the washroom.

seriously akshu needs to upgrade her excuses. i mean slipped in the washroom for burn marks? really?🤣

and abhi to abhi hi hai. the way his jaw muscle tightened and he kept looking at him intensely knowing very well she was lying but he said "continue"😎 and then akshu elaborated on her so called bathroom mein phisalne wali story

and once she was done abhi be like: "Interesting story"

His dialogues sach mein kill me. too good yaar mush. just too good. and then "now the truth please"😎

achha now i loved that part where abhi literally demands with full haq "Akshara.Story.Now!" uff the power in his voice☺️

and ofc akshara says nothing making our already impatient abhi more and more impatient.

another great thing about this os is how abhi always wants her to look into his eyes while talking because even if she lies, her eyes would never be able to hide the truth. so he holds her chin and raises her face. and when she does, he takes a step back in shock. "It was you" the way he whispered it. kasam se my heart just took a nosedive in that scene. and the pure feeling of joy.

I was soooo sad when abhi said they were done. i didn't know what to think anymore because like i really thought once he gets to know akshu saved him, he would love him even more. but it's MUSH we are talking about. of course she wouldn't make anything so mainstream. so our writer sahiba brings a beautiful twist.

I genuinely loved how abhi felt betrayed because she tried to set him up with her sister. no matter how much want abhira to unite, it will never be complete if abhimanyu doesn't feel betrayed because seriously what akshara did was extremely selfish and just wrong. if you both love each other there shouldn't even be a question about your sister. and here she wanted abhi to marry her. OBVIOUSLY abhi would be furious and feel like he trusted the wrong person. so he says "We are really done akshara. we are really done"

the personal loss wala feeling akshu felt was so so palpable , everything she felt, i loved the description of it. it took her so long to get the taste of her own medicine. and she finally got it and how!!

best was how abhimanyu stayed still on his ground about protecting akshu. my heart skipped a bit when he said "But listen to me and listen to me good, if your filthy presence in the Goenka house makes any, and i mean, ANY inconvenience for MY akshu even for once, i swear on my last breath that i will ruin your whole life, your career included."

this dialogue has my whole heart! the best dialogue of abhimanyu birla guaranteed. and on top of that he called her MY akshu. what a pleasant surprise mush. i wondered how they would get back together now that abhi felt betrayed and hurt but he went away from her to make that path of getting back with her. he was just hurt but he still LOVED her and his love for her didn't lessen even by a degree. if anything it had increased after getting to know about the fire, manjiri's puja and ruby case. such a beautiful beautiful scene mush.

*****last scene needs a separate post because of obvious reasons☺️******

Aagayi mere Ritu ka comment

and as expected, this girl wrote an essay 🤪

@Red: Abhimanyu birla is a character that the makers gave birth to. I simply took him and molded him to my imagination. but you would never leave a chance to leave me tongue tied will you? every single comment of yours always make me so overwhelmed that i never find the right words to express or thank you. Achha tere liya dulha mein dhundungi. Sammy, noor and blues mera sath denge😉🤣

@green: aap ne yeh puch hi liya hai to let me ask you the same: How do YOU come up with such comments?!?!

@blue: bro trust me when i say this, everytime akshu pulled one of her stunts , be it in the show i.e. when she didn't care about her name and just barged into the room to save abhi, or how she never cares about her wellbeing or in this Os when she locked hersle fin the washroom - he turns into a mother hen🤣 he actually treats her like a baby and i absolutely love that he does😳

@purple: LMFAO!!!! I LOVE THIS PART of your comment 🤣 you even pointed out the dialogues omg im dying. idk why the dialogues soujnds ten times more hilarious when you guys mention them like this. 😆 i'm so glad they made you feel the way they did yaar.🤗

@pink: oh i actually find it very endearing when people (esp husband/bf) ask them to speak looking into their eyes. it just shows how well they can read their partners. i'm so happy you liked that bit.

@brown:

@Yellow: THANK YOU for writing this. precisely why i just could not let abhi haul her in his arms and set everything right. regardless of akshara's reasonings, it was a betrayal and abhi needed to feel it and let it go until and unless she comes herself. thank you for understanding and putting it into words 🤗

I absolutely love how detailed your comment is man! idk how you take so much time to write so much about my work. it's actually overwhelming

@grey: really? you liked it that much?☺️

Originally posted by: 2TheMoonAndBack

Okay mush you did not just make the confession the BEST CONFESSION IN HISTORY, DID YOU?????

the fact that she came to birla house on her own, went to abhi's ROOM with her heart in mouth and asked him "Would you like to take me back...please" OMGGGGGGGGGGGGG

oh but the way abhi thinks he was just dreaming her so he doesn't pay attention and grabs his towel to take a shower😆 and when he realizes it was really akshu, and his famous dialogue comes in "WHAT THE F*CK!"🤣🤣🤣 i just love when abhi swears. idk why but i do! it's just so....sexy?

and not a single words akshu says goes into his head and he keeps aksing what is that she wants because he is not understanding naything. and akshara wanted to throw the soundbox athim LMFAOOOOO🤣

and finally the bestestest part comes. akshu hugs him and asks for a second chance and uff the way abhi says "give me one good reason why i should give you a second chance" i am honestly not sure which dialogue of abhi love the most. and then way he keeps probing her by saying "try again" and "you need to be more speciifc" i mean the swag this man has even in serious moments like this, i swear to god makes me weak in the knee

and finally akshara says because i love you? but that wasn't the best part. best was how abhi asks her to repeat. first he orders, and then demands and finally his voice become so soft and so desperate as if he wanted her to keep repeating this forever and ever. and i understand his emotions because he actually did wait so long and today he didn't even expect akshara to come like this, in birla house, in his room and confess like this.

and finally he slowly traces his hand over her back until it reaches the perfect position and he hugs her fiercely ufffff

buttttttt then the best was yet to come:

THEY KISSED.,

this was me and i'm not even joking here:

i could never imagine that yu would include a scene like this mush. they actually kissed SHIT SHIT SHIT SHIT SHIT!!!! like ACTUAL KISS!!! SHITTTTTTTTT!!!

the description of the hwole scene made MY toe curl ok. not akshu, MY TOE CURLED!!! that scene was so hot my goddddd i forgot to breathe! and the way he pecked her lips at the end and apologizes for getting carried away and asks if she was okay.

talk about the smooth transition from hot and fierce scnees to utter tenderness! i just couldn't stop blushing and aww-ing. the entire scene left me in awe, nothing else.

i just want to say mush that you are GIFTED GIFTED GIFTED writer. the kind of dialogues, characters, scenes, settings and in general DETAILS we get in your stories is something that attracts me to read your stories more and more. it's like the best gift anyone can get. Thank you! than you so very much for listening us when we stalked you and writing this masterpiece🤗

will reply to this very soon❤️

Originally posted by: 2TheMoonAndBack

Bold: yaar same here. The number of times mush made this abhi swear in all her OSs🤣🤣🤣 i sctually find it so sexy☺️

Originally posted by: iheartChai

How did I miss this OS from you?! 😲

Fantastic writing. I could see it all played out on screen. You really have captured the essence of each character ehich makes it a joy to read. I liked how you solved the Arohi problem nicely done with the letter and kicking her off the team. The confession scene 😳

Thank you gifting us with another one of your works.

Graceeee!! thank you so much my love for the kind words. Means the world coming form you. and honestly, just the fact that you read a 23 page long OS makes me love you even more. 🤗 thanks for always being one of my biggest supporters❤️

Originally posted by: Gurveen

Fantastic story

Finally the truth is out and they confessed too

Arohi is such a disgusting person

Please update soon

Thank you so much!

And i'm really sorry but this was just a One Shot. but might end up adding another part to but no promises. sorry :(

Originally posted by: Anokhi01

It is 67 now🤗And I don't know why you are so surprised. It is well deserved for the kind of story you give us. Btw, I have decided i will start calling you mush too. Mushfika sounds too formal for a person whose work I adore so much. 😉

You are more than welcome to call me Mush. I actually prefer that over mushfika. it just sounds a lot mor endearing🤗and LOL you keeping a count of the likes is the cutest thing😆❤️

Originally posted by: 2TheMoonAndBack

68🥳

LOL tu kya mera personal human-counter banna chahti hai ab?🤣

Originally posted by: ArVi-licious

This was an amazing read!

I did read the whole things, every single word and no it wasn't long!

It was perfect.. the story played out wonderfully and it was great reading Abhimanyu being protective and Akshara finally taking a stand..

Thank you so so sooo much! So glad you liked it. and nah, i will never understand how you guys read it in one go but trust me i couldn't be happier knowing that you did. Just...thank you for loving my workand commenting. love and hugs to you🤗