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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: samairaxx

Comment for part 2


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the mirror description of how the glass was perfectly intact and yet akshara saw broken pieces because her broken self was making it - what a scene man. what a SCENE!!! the guilty conscience, and the sense of loss she finally felt . it was like how we don't really feel the loss of something until and unless it's fully gone, akshara felt that today. you again proved how different it can be to say something and actually doing it!


the way arohi just barged in and started blasting at her syaing she is placed on a probation and kicked out of abhi's team HAHAHHAHA i couldn't stop laughing 🤣


but the bestestestestestest part mushfika was the flashback!!! Abhi there my god!!! what was he?! it was like he turned into a ruthless boss of the hospital and i couldn't help whistling when he said all that to arohi. and when arohi exposed herself on her own 🤣 trust me in this scene there were so many moments i was grinning like a mad woman and on the verge of dancing and whistling!! and the besttttttttttt dialogue by abhimanyu birla in the history was this:


“I have never despised a woman more in my life than i despise you at the moment. The fact that you can even think of your own sister as low as you do, makes me pity akshara that she got someone like YOU as her sister, who she can give everything up for. EVERYTHING! It’s my bad luck that I can't do anything to change it. But listen to me and listen to me good, if your filthy presence in the Goenka house makes any, and i mean, ANY inconvenience for MY akshu even for once, i swear on my last breath that i will ruin your whole life, your career included. I’m an extremely possessive man Dr. Arohi Goenka. And I absolutely loathe it when someone tries to mess up with something that’s mine. and You seem to have messed with probably the most significant part of my life, my akshu, and made it far too personal for me. It is your lucky day that I haven’t done something even remotely close to what I said I would if she faces any kind of hardship because of you, yet.”,


i think i have lost all my existence to this part mushfika! and especially the part where calls her "MY akshu" . man i seirously thought this was a sad os because of the way they part their way in part 1. never in my dreams could i imagine that you would show this side of abhimanyu!! I mean the way you kept the consistency in his character, how he is so passionate and has this much faith on akshara and no matter what happens to this broken relationship of theirs, is something that messed up my mind big time (in a good way ofc). where do i get a person like this in my life mushfika? please tell me i really need a guy like this who would love me to such extent☺️


andddd this man didn't even hesitate to threaten arohi for causing the slightest inconvinience for HIS akshu in the goenka mansion that's not even his 🤣 uff this is called swag and power that you , mushfika, very well know how to portray in your story!


and finally this dialogue:


“And one more thing, Dr. Arohi, I have accepted that my love will never be reciprocated by your sister, thanks to you, but that will never stop me from protecting her from this filthy world. She will always be my priority regardless of where life takes us”


the repsect i feel for this guy is on a different level. you have proved yet again how beautiful love can be.


and finally the sherni in akshara is seen. the transformation from being the tamed down girl who was giving up her love for that witch to becoming a woman of power, a ruthless one just like our abhi who said "I free myself from seeraat moms promise. i now will think about my happiness first" YOU GO GIRLLLLLLLLLLL THIS IS THE AKSHARA I GUESS WE ALL HAD BEEN DYING TO SEE!!!


arohi when she stops her and asks in fearful voice what she means about that she will think about her own happineess🤣🤣 now you will know what it's like to not have your sister have your back girllll!!!!


ok i think i have reached the limit to the length of my comment so the last and the best part will be on the next post. sorry for this.




Your reactions to almost every dialogues and scenes are making my day samaira!! Undoubtedly you just entered this 'comment-game' and you are already holding the slots of my fav readers🤗


Awwh omg you liked the flashback that much?!

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@Red: Oh my god this is the sweetest thing i read today!!! and i absolutely hate the fact that i can not give you one of my famous bone-crushing hugs because i think you need it the most today for saying something so ridiculously kind! I honestly don't consider myself that great of a writer but I would write over and over again on Abhira if I get to read such comments - and i'm absolutely not joking whatsoever.

Also, about getting someone like that in real life part:🤣 I think they only exist in the fictional world, however, i would be the happiest to be proven wrong because i'm also waiting for my Mr. perfect☺️


@green: 🤣🤣 trust me, only Abhi could do something like that🤣i merely wrote what he was thinking of doing😎


@blue: oh you don't know how much i'm waiting for akshara to do just that. so much so, that I ended up making her do it in my OS😆 I'm quite impatient that way😳 and LOL definitely. you only realize what you have lost once that person is really gone. Akshara felt it here and so did Arohi



@purple: Oh there is more?! LMFAOOO🤣 oh god ok i guess i will thank you properly in your last comment then😆

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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: 2TheMoonAndBack


Aiye aiye barkhudaar! Isse apna hi thread samjhiye. Aur dekhiye kya bawal macha rakkha hai hum yaha😳


First bawal to tune shuru kiya tha the moment you said "RES WTF" 🤣 no seriously, i'm actually going nuts reading at all these comments

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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: jani_faizal

Mush OMG you posted your OS…


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Heading straight to reading it, will comment after…



SAMMYYYYYYY

mera piya ghar aya, oh ramji

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Can not wait to read your thoughts on this🤗

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Posted: 3 years ago


I read sammy's comment long time ago and this was literally my reaction at that time🤣

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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: Anokhi01

I don't know what to say about this story Mushfika. every time i read your work, I always think that your writing, your OS plots and the scenes you include can't get any better than it already is. but you prove me wrong every.single.time!!! how?


It was suchhhh a long OS but trust me i just didn't want it to end. like ever!! from how abhi helps akshu' get breathing to normal to how he roars like a lion when arohi shows her fake concern (even i got scared lol), the way he bangs at the washorom door and treats her like a baby by counting up to 3 (i know it was a serious moment but i found it soooo cute) , and thne the way he purposely touches her arms when akshu says "im fine" but then cries out in pain and he says "No you are not" and then the way he finally realizes without her uttering a single word that it was akshara who saved her from the fire

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that full scene was just so good. i was so scared when abhimanyu backed off and said they were done. i thought it ended there because there was a huge gap in the post before i saw "part 2" and i almost jumped from my bed realizing i have another part left to read. trust me i have neever been this happy.


they way abhi threatened arohi,

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my jaw just dropped!!! i can't believe after everything that happened int he washorom with akshu, he would still care to protect her the way he did. but he DID!!! and do you even now how beautilfully you have curved abhi's character by including this scene? how beautiful it must be to silently caring, and protecting someone without imposing anything on them. just brilliant yaar mushfika.


and finally akshu let arohi go. she finally says she will thinkabout her happiness before anyones


and finally the last scene my god. the last confession scene made me blush so hard it was truly the best confession of abhira ever!!! i loved how abhi made sure she says that she loves him before he finally hugged her back. that scene how he kept saying "you need to be more speciifc akshara goenka" 😆 and "try again" 🤣. akshara got it wrong 4 times before she said "because i love you?" (yes i counted😳). it was SOOO GOOD! I like how abhi held his ground this time. and finally when she said i love you he had to hear it 3 times as if making sure she memorized it and also he took his sweet time to let the whole confession sink in by asking her to repeat "again..say that again. again...again...once more... please...!!!" what a scene mushfika! how do you come up with all this?!


and finally the kiss. I swear my heart was in my throat while reading the kiss. i couldn't believe they actually kissed omg! and abhi made sure to be gentle and pulled back quickly and like a gentleman he is asked her if she is okay and if he scared her away


Mushfika I have no words for your writing. i really don't. i'm just so glad from the bottom of my heart that you bless us with such perfect OSes and make us forget the crap that the show is showing now (todays episode was so bakwas).


i just love you a lot🤗


@Red:

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@green: I'm so happy that finally someone mentioned about these details. thank you, thank you, thank you. and even in the show, abhi does treat her like a baby when it comes to protecting her. have you noticed how his voice become oh-so-tender while speaking to her (not on this Abrohi marriage track but in general)? I have always loved that so so much. it puts a genuine smile on my face. and LOOOL the "no you are not part" 🤣he had to make sure that he was not hallucinating and more importantly, he had to prove his point that he is right before taking off that cardigan😉


@blue: omg you know you are the second person to say that? someone else also mentioned that they thought it would end off with a sad note. I just put it in a second part because i thought you guys would need a break. As it is, this OS was 23 pages long on google doc


LMAOOO I love that gif to the flashback scene🤣 imagining you doing this while reading🤣

@purple: i wanted to save saying i love you for the end of my comment but to hell with it alright? I LOVE YOU for this bit of the comment. Abhi' is one hell of a complicated character with SO many layers and i'm so enthralled by the fact that you think i kept his traits consistent despite writing something that could be considered borderline-overboard, especially because abhi and akshu are not even in an official relationship so technically he doesn't have that kind of right on her. I'm so happy you said that anokhi thank you so so sooooo much!


@Pink; BAHAHHAHAAH Awww omg this is my fav part of your comment🤣you are so adorable, you even counted how many times our akshu got it wrong🤣 oh god! i know i'm repeating myself but gawd your words just making me into a puddle at this point. so so soooo happy you loved the confession so much.


@Brown: One thing i can guarantee you, idk about the show but in my stories, he will be treating his akshu like a glass doll.


@black bold:

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Love you too sweetheart, love you too!

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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: Anokhi01

by the way, i know i sound selfish but please don't make us wait too long for the next OS. will be looking forward to it🤗


Abhi meine sab comments ka rpely bhi nahi kiya hai of this OS😆 thoda break lagaiye pilij😳

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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: slan

I know right!!

Read the whole thing in one sitting!

Koi toh mushfika ki class lo to tell that we will even think about leaving her OS in midway of reading!!!

tu itni mithas se bhara hai, mein aur kya boloon. yeh le meri jadoo bhari pappiyan:

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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: slan

Well, it took sometime to let it sink in that she has posted a long OS for us!

Then after finding a proper time read it all in one go, didn't want to break in between, phir kiya post!

Seriously she is gem of a writer! Kaaash, she had been one of yrkkh writers, hume ye aaj kal ke episodes jaise bakwas nhi sehna padta😢


@bold: STOP IT OMG😲

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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: Mira_Pranali

Mushfika.. what a brilliant piece of writing!!! Don't know what I wait for more now.. Your OSs or the episodes.. I have atleast read it 5 times!! and everytime my heart takes a nosedive to the stomach when i reach the part of the story where Akshara is in Abhimanyu's room..


Brilliant... You should be a writer..

The way she came to Abhimanyu... the way Abhimanyu did not make it easy for her.. despite the fact that Akshara is " his zindagi"!

their happiness was tangible after the confession..

Girl.. You have my heart❤️


you read it FIVE times? Tu kya pagal hai?😲 tu jidhar bhi hai abhi ke abhi wahi ruk and text me the address because:

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Honestly, I have no idea what I did to get a reader like you who appreciates and encourages my posts and stories to such extent. I don't want to thank you because it wouldn't justify what i'm feeling after reading your comment.


Just know that it's people like you who make me feel so content after i post an OS. I'm so happy you liked the confession scene so much. I took a good chunk of time planning it before i typed it out, so definitely makes me feel accomplished knowing that it made you feel that way.


Love you meri jaan

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Also, is your name Mira? How should i address you?

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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: Azraa01

Please tell me that there is a good few parts to follow.

It was an absolutely amazing concept that was well conceptualized.


Awwwhh!! LOL but it was 23 pages already!!! almost like a 5 parts short story!! how do you need more?🤣

Thank you so much for the kind words. Means more than you can imagine🤗

P.S. i *might* end up adding a cute little part to it if i change my mind but no promises 😉

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