#1| IshRa : Meherbaan FF | Thread One - Complete. Moved to Thread Two. - Page 18

Originally posted by: Javeria3991

Fantastic update

Raman finally made a dashing entry, he came and conquered. Some are proud of ishita annd her current life while some are jealous and confuse.

Subbu has ruin his life and i think he is more frusturated seeing ishita so happy in her life and move forward. He is angry on himself for being so weak, I am lookinf forward to read Rman and subbu meeting. I really like the way ou potray raman, ishita and ruhi personal and social life.

I love this dialogue.

She was the Tom to his Jerry. The Felicity to his Oliver. The Dean to his Sam. And Rose to his Ten. She could be the John to his Sherlock. The Peeta to his Katniss. Rebecca to his Klaus. 👏

Originally posted by: malini96

awesome update

Awesome updates. !!! Such a treat to read😊

Originally posted by: AraBearxx

Hey,

First of all, Welcome to IF, i assure you that here you'll find friends that stand up and by you despite being strangers and that one day they'll be much more than just online friends.

Now coming to the comment:

Awh. I didn't really notice that that. The next update is once again going to start from the party and then go all the way to the scene and forth. After that I'll keep your point in mind. :)

Thanks.

@Bold Kiara (I suppose that's your name) 😳True words, the people I met here 5 years back are now my best friends :')

By the way, the issue of continuity, that's alright for me, just make sure it has it's flow. Like we know Raman is there already as per the last part, and then you start it by saying that the audience whispering how Ishita is daning with Raman Bhalla. But then out of the blue there's Ruhi calling Raman to tell him to come there.

So you could make that bit the part one, and then continue the part two as from when he take the ladies of his life down the stage. As a reader I had to stop reading and wonder wasn't he present in the party. But as a writer, it's good you explored that way, it's like you are having a past tense narration before the actual scene. Just make sure you break it with "- - - - - - - - - - -" if you want to show different time frame without a continuation in the update

P.s: Just my pov and a genuine advice 😳

HAHA The ending!!! Loved it! Can't wait to read more!

Originally posted by: Liashna

@Bold Kiara (I suppose that's your name) 😳True words, the people I met here 5 years back are now my best friends :')

By the way, the issue of continuity, that's alright for me, just make sure it has it's flow. Like we know Raman is there already as per the last part, and then you start it by saying that the audience whispering how Ishita is daning with Raman Bhalla. But then out of the blue there's Ruhi calling Raman to tell him to come there.

So you could make that bit the part one, and then continue the part two as from when he take the ladies of his life down the stage. As a reader I had to stop reading and wonder wasn't he present in the party. But as a writer, it's good you explored that way, it's like you are having a past tense narration before the actual scene. Just make sure you break it with "- - - - - - - - - - -" if you want to show different time frame without a continuation in the update

P.s: Just my pov and a genuine advice 😳

Originally posted by: nrn1486

Awesome updates. !!! Such a treat to read😊

Raman Kumar Bhalla is truly an enigma in your FF; absolutely droolworthy! I love it when he thinks that he loves his wife in his arms. That one line sounds so romantic and sensuous. And he turns into a human version of Siri in front of Ruhi and Ishita? So cute..That one had me in splits😆

Subbu.. somehow i love that he's still not over Ishita..That bit gives me a lot of sadistic pleasure!

And take that, all you aunties.. Ishita has married the RKB!

Ooh, and that scene you ended with.. can't wait😳

Originally posted by: desikalakaar

HAHA The ending!!! Loved it! Can't wait to read more!

Originally posted by: AraBearxx

Haha, thanks. I'd like to know your name, if you don't mind. I have to reply to you on I guess 5-6 updates and this sounds too formal or you know.

Honestly, compare Siri and him, and then you'll end up laughing at their similarities. :)

Same here, I'm such a sadist when it comes to him. Such a sadist.

Oh. I could have a whole update dedicated to our aunties. A mini spinoff update sounds so good, only with their jealous gossips. I love their theories. I giggle whilst penning them down.

That scene. I'll kill it by tomorrow. :/

-Kiara

Originally posted by: felciya

Awesome update.