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Jyoe

@Jyoe

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+ 5

Posted: 11 years ago

#21

Aani!!

Thanks for the PM!😊

OMG you literally threw me off edge!!! ..the first few lines I read I thought it was about Ishita and then suddenly it turns out you are talking about Shagun POV 😲. I was like..huh...did i read it right?😲

Ha ha!! Tooo Good man!! loved the twist and the plot and so wish the exact thing happens on the show also now! You indeed are a great writer and am now a fan of yours (just read 2 OS till now even then 😆)

Are you part of YHM creative team by any chance?😉 If not then you should definitely join them 😳

Loved Ashok's part and Raman was brilliant! if he does exactly what you wrote in your OS, I may think of still forgiving him😆 (not really sure though) for what he did until now to ishita and for the hurt he gave. But me thinks this will the most practical and realistic way of redeeming himself! But he will still have a lot to do of things to make up for what he did wrong!

AWESOME OS!!!👍🏼

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ThruMyEyez-Nita

@ThruMyEyez-Nita

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#22

Have to say, I initially thought that it was Ishita that Ashok was talking too and what a surprise it was to read that it was Shagun instead, but loved every bit of it, as always.😊

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FieryLioness

@FieryLioness

Stunner

+ 6

Posted: 11 years ago

#23

OMG Aani this is superb...

man when i started reading, i thought its Ishita untill Ashok said shagun and she was behind bars... i was reading it so curiously thinking its Ishita😳\the moment i read Shagun and whole impact changed it turned into a fun OS for me😆

i so wish to see Shagun falling on her face in show too but don't want Raman as hero in end, like always happens he does everything wrong and then CV's show him hero in the end...

liked ashok in it... Shagun deserves a lesson from Ashok actually more then from Raman , she deserves it from Ashok...

loved it Aani :)

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afsanaanjum

@afsanaanjum

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#24

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Hey there Aani! Sorry for being late. Had a busy day.

When i read the overture i was like gosh man! I was ready to face whatever you had written with one thing in mind and that is this woman (-elder to me-😛) is a hell of a writer hence it has to be something good, so keep scrolling down!😃

I read the quotes which spoke of vengeance and figured out that it is a Shagun based OS hence understood your dilemma!😃

Now the story : this girl is surely the biggest buffoon on this planet and thinks of revenge after being indignant! Like seriously?😲
- Kudos to you to portray the fact that yes few humans are born with brains without any grey matter!
You surely did justice to the character that the CVs have portrayed!👏

Ashok : I did find him disdainful but yes, worthy of respect for being a man in love.
In the near future he might undergo the same situation that Raman did years ago on the show too!
- Liked the depiction of : "I'm in the same situation as he was! He is unfortunately that ONE man whom i hate and is my biggest competitor! Wow!"👏

Raman : Mr.Smarty, pants isn't he always that?😉😃
All RKB lovers are partial towards him.

Genuinely appreciate the flourish of practical thoughts and activities after getting a helping hand.

Hope he chooses the right path on the show too.🤢

Beautiful OS Aani. Yes different but undoubtedly great!👏

Thanks a ton for this buddy. Do keep some more coming.🤗

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Tanya

@tanya_vi

Voyager

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#25

Unbelievably awesome!!! Kudos to you!! I've read all your OSs...you are an amazing writer! We,readers are indeed very lucky to have you in this forum..

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Paru

@paru_rox

Rocker

+ 8

Posted: 11 years ago

#26

Loved this Aani ... Both Ashok and Raman using their brains. Finally ... we can say they are shrewd businessmen :-P

Shagun's character traits were really well used by you here to show the levels she can stoop to. I just loved the Macbeth reference. Recently read an OS where Ashok talks about Gatsby.
Have started wishing that Ashok could have some depth in his character in the show too ... gosh he would be cute (Sangram is kinda cute) if he lost some of the idiotism and is shown as a grey character with some good traits too 😉

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NidhaA

@NidhaA

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#27

For a few horrifying seconds I thought Ishita was in jail (coming to think of it silly me!). This was brilliant Aani and I so wish ( but definitely know won't) will happen in the show.

Shagun deserves this for playing with too many lives. Ashok Khanna is no saint but yeah even him, she was using.

Oh man! I can't envision Shagun coming back for revenge ( or maybe can) She will be lethal.

Brilliant , hats off , fab , fantastic, awesome , superb etc etc etc.

Live

Nidha

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Mohini Singh Narayan

@MSN_Vanny

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#28

Edited on page one. 😳

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afsanaanjum

@afsanaanjum

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#29

Updated the post on page - 5 Aani!😊

Sorry for the delay though.

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WittyFlair

@WittyFlair

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#30

Initially I thought this was about Ishita, but really this is about Shagun. What a brilliant setup! I read the first part again after I read the whole thing, and yes the same words that could describe Ishita's trust in Raman quite surprisingly can also fit in with Shagun too. Brilliantly written :)

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