Ehsaas Track: Collection of 10 OSes - Page 49

Originally posted by: shalu79

Thanks for this Sunday treat Lucky :)

Reserved

Will update by evening

Very beautiful Lucky.👏

loved it.

n love the u connect each of ur os with a song.👏

poor Ishu was worried why Raman is in a way avoiding her. Usse kya malum last part mein Mihika n Vandu ne bechare ko ullu banaya😆

N here Raman was feeling embarrassed thinking Saaliyo ne uski pol khol di hogi

loved the way u expressed their inner feelings.

n also loved how Mihir whistled for Ishu. Can't expect such naughtiness from Mihir towards Ishu.

Hope this Jija-Sali/devar-babhi bond become more close in show.

also, loved how u made them talk n clear all doubts they had abt last few days.

N Sonali Kotnis was really a surprise.

Waiting to know what will happen next.

Pls do continue 😊

thanks n 🤗 To u for writing this Lucky

as I said earlier its always a pleasure to read ur stories

Originally posted by: dreamy-sa

one good os to read on sundays. btw sonali kotnis...😆😆 hoping to see how ishita will react😳

Originally posted by: daisydee425

Lovely

Originally posted by: pinkky

great

Originally posted by: Tanyaarora11

This is amazing! Please continue :)

Originally posted by: sai14

Lucky- this one is one of my favorite.

I love how both of them looked at their phone to see if the other texted. such a couple thing to do. I also like how she used Ruhi to find out where Raman was and her restlessness to find out Raman and also the misunderstanding each had thinking the other was miffed. These are all normal things that happen during initial days. You captured them all beautifully!

My fav line

"She's trying to get me to be more in control, and I am trying to get her to lose it. Some day, the twain shall meet".

and man you stopped at the most crucial part! you should definitely continue this. How can it not be continued with Sonali Kotnis in the party 😛

Originally posted by: modernfamily

I was so looking forward to reading a lot of stories today, especially yours. Thanks a lot. You're too good with words, I'm not. So I'll simply say it was great😊

Originally posted by: PreciousPri

Lucky this has to be one of your best OS !!

I just LOVED IT!!

You are such descriptive writer 👏... and the line of she trying for him to be in control while he is trying to lose it... PERFECT 😉

And and is that even a question to ask??... You have to continue this Lucky... The actual Sonali Kotnis aka Sona is at the party...God I so want to know aage kya hota hai .. please continue

Originally posted by: happenstance

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- updated.

Lucky this was just fab! I completely loved the build up to the 'entry' of Sona and am intrigued as to how you will continue it. As always I love the continuity of your work (the reference to the film party) I defo want you to continue this on, I want to see the domino effect of Sona's presence.

I really liked how you used the analogy of the grocery list as a means of showcasing the change in Raman and the fact that he too realises the effect that she has had upon him. She has 'taught' him so much and i think in any good relationship both parties help build upon and make the other person a more complete individual.

i do not know the song you quoted😳, going to go listen to Nikki's version now😊

Originally posted by: Indian_Isha

Hahahahah! That was something Lucky! LOL, Sonali Kotnis! Bechaari Ishita must have frozen! 😃

The whole OS had a good flow and switch overs between present and past. Loved the way you brought out the whole whatsapp thing too.

Really liked these lines - "She's trying to get me to be more in control, and I am trying to get her to lose it. Some day, the twain shall meet".

Very very apt for their current state! Very nice Lucky, good continuation for the last one! 😊

Originally posted by: rajji-cutest

it was excellent, absolutely loved it ! how they were both anxious of what the other one was thinking of them, i really really adored it!

now i don't know if i want you to continue with sonali because in the show she is a married woman so i don't know where you could go with that. but if you write her as a newly divorced woman, maybe you could show a bit of ishita jealous of sonali, thinking she is raman's first love. and on the other part raman will explain that ishita has nothing to worry about since he and sonali where only goodfriends, and both a bit dorky so they weren't "attracted" to each other back then.