Vanshaj SS - The lost time - Page 3

Originally posted by: Pete15rogmourey

Do remember to review after reading the other parts

So did you ever read the entire story? I'm tagging you in your own post

Yaar, I have told you that your usp is your ability to combine humour with core plot...

Humour is the toughest genre to crack.& You are mastering it everyday. You are someone who I wish I could write like & I am not exaggerating.

The moment I read the prologue I started laughing hysterically....Then that smile never left my face..& towards the end you managed to make me Emotional as well

Oh God..My jaws are hurting ....first 3 episodes were laugh riots..How did this idea of Db having a 5 yr mind & playing with trampoline came to your mind.! Such a creative mind you have!

Best part was," NeiVika kooche-koo while Db is counting 1-1000!

Even at this age he was playing chess with Vidur!!!True soulmate..

But then that switch happened...Db has a really sad backstory here. Do you always had this backstory at the back of your mind? That's why you are always so sympathetic! Do you really think his childhood stress turned him towards Gita?

But it shows that you have a sympathetic heart.,full of compassion...you have beautifully put it in words ..

Db-Dhanraj& specially DHANRAJ getting the much required appreciation from Db for his business acumen & Kaabiliyat....These two characters you are most sympathetic about & you have given justice to both these characters here .....

Well from the length of this review you can make out how much I like it

It was really interesting! Keep it up..

Congratulations..

months ago#23

Originally posted by: asmitamohanty

Yaar, I have told you that your usp is your ability to combine humour with core plot...

Humour is the toughest genre to crack.& You are mastering it everyday. You are someone who I wish I could write like & I am not exaggerating.

The moment I read the prologue I started laughing hysterically....Then that smile never left my face..& towards the end you managed to make me Emotional as well

Oh God..My jaws are hurting ....first 3 episodes were laugh riots..How did this idea of Db having a 5 yr mind & playing with trampoline came to your mind.! Such a creative mind you have!

That was inspired from the short story "Teacher , teacher" kind of a last min addition tho

Best part was," NeiVika kooche-koo while Db is counting 1-1000!

Even at this age he was playing chess with Vidur!!!True soulmate..

But then that switch happened...Db has a really sad backstory here. Do you always had this backstory at the back of your mind? That's why you are always so sympathetic! Do you really think his childhood stress turned him towards Gita?

No i don't think this was what which turned him towards his Bhagwad Gita cause i think if you put aside the philandering for a min ,SPM would've been a decent human being to his wife and child ( still a trashbag tho) if him being a domestic abuser was cannon then DB would've actually murdered him.....i just needed a compelling reason for him to read Gita......canonically i think he started reading Bhagwad Gita to supress his urges

But it shows that you have a sympathetic heart.,full of compassion...you have beautifully put it in words ..

Db-Dhanraj& specially DHANRAJ getting the much required appreciation from Db for his business acumen & Kaabiliyat....These two characters you are most sympathetic about & you have given justice to both these characters here .....

Yep i was glad with how the DB-Dhanraj scene turned out to be

Well from the length of this review you can make out how much I like it

It was really interesting! Keep it up..

Congratulations..

Thank you

Hi ,read this SS that i wrote and post your veiws on it

DB did not forget his shuddh hindi

It is funnyDJ ko bhaiyya kaha kitna irritate hua hoga

Originally posted by: Simple_self

DB did not forget his shuddh hindi

It is funnyDJ ko bhaiyya kaha kitna irritate hua hoga

Bold; I actually made a joke about it in the last chapter

Pete you and your writings are just ❤️

It was great , and Neil Jija uff😂 imagine db saying Neil Jiju 🤣🤣

And also Dj ordering Db 😂

Originally posted by: Spandan24

Pete you and your writings are just ❤️

It was great , and Neil Jija uff😂 imagine db saying Neil Jiju 🤣🤣

And also Dj ordering Db 😂

Thank you for your review

Dhanraj part was the best for me, finally DB acknowledged his hard work

Oh God!

From being sooo hilarious to the sudden shift in emotions

Plus the way you have kept EVERY character's Priorities intact

I am amazed is absolutely an understatement

I genuinely don't know how to appreciate this piece of WRITING Pete

You are AWESOME, You are AWESOME