Thread #1: Aafato'n k parindey 'IshaqZaade' Chapters 1 -11

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Neha

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Posted: 8 years ago

#131

Chapter 11

Another great update by you chashmish 👏😃 and I'm so sorry for being late to comment 😳

Alooo I'm becoming your fan just for the dialogues alone, like seriously how do you come up with these 😉😆

"hud par confidence hona samajhdari hoti hai magar over confidence ko bewakoofi kehte hain suraj narayan rajvanshi..."

It's a common phrase but I just liked when you used the dialogue 😃

And seriously, killing bird for competition, not very good Suraj babu you know Chakor's weakness and you used it really well and Chakor cried 😭.. Ohhh my poor little baby, Suraj is a badass here I must say 😳.. But no complaints cause I know you'll definitely justify all the characters in the story..

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Neha

@howler

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Posted: 8 years ago

#132

Chapter 12

Kasturi surprised me in this update😲.. she slapped Imli, arey yeh tappar toh pehle karni chaiye thi paar koi bath nehi, ab jo kar diya na so it's okay 😆..

Chakor was feeling pain in her head she opened her eyes and her vision was blurred ...But when she got back her sense completely her heart skipped a beat because she realized that she's in suraj's room and is on his bed and the blurred image she saw was none other than suraj's who was sitting on the sofa that was easy to look at from bed ( I make no sense here i guess )

Trust me you made complete sense to me 😆, and I like the way you write every detail on how Suraj's warm spreads on Chakor and how her heart skip a beat when Suraj is there.. It shows they are connected in a way 😳...

I'm actually glad in a way that Suraj did not kiss her, at least not under this circumstances 😊...

And girl power-man, I absolutely LOVEDDD Chakor's comeback for Suraj's comment.. It showed how strong she was and I really love it 👏.. Kudos to you aloo for giving us the strong Chakor ⭐️

Andd we got to see a glimpse of Suraj's hurtful past.. Now we know why he has a fear of losing, can't believe that even Tejaswini abused him 😡.. Please do write more about Suraj's past so and hopefully Chakor will be there listening to what happened to him when he was young 😊

A word of advice here aloo, don't beat yourself too much here, you are doing a fantastic job as a writer and you should keep doing so okay.. samjhi tum? Good 😆

Now off to the second thread to post my comment 😃😉