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Posted: 3 years ago
#81


I'm hoping ye story thodi lambi rakhoon cos mujhe revenge stories likhna bahut pasand h.


And in THR, I always wanted to see Malhar and Kalyani in a completely different roop. Khai Shera naam ka lollipop ka laalach to diya tha CVs ne, magar jab Malhar shot Kalyani, I always wished Kalyaani to become a completely different person and give Malhar a taste of his own medicine. These are the three things I could never forgive CVs for: ek vo 26 July ke secret ka fuski bomb, doosra leap kr baad Kallu's character and third wasting Shera's character.

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Posted: 3 years ago
#82

Originally posted by: Phlo004

ohh aisa kya mujhein padhana hai vo agr link hai to bhejna pls mujehin padhana hai 👍🏼


Vanshu. Agar teri mail ho to pm kar. Bhejti hoon tujhe...

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Nice update Pragya..

Madhav, Asawri aur Aao Saheb..

Teenon hi sar phire hain... Useless hai useless.

Each has their own words to hurl at one another. Unfortunately Malhar is the one bearing the brunt of it and to an extent Moksh too.

Asawari has tried poisoning Moksh's mind about his mother.. 😡

Lekin Pillu kitna innocent hai.. That he asked his dad if he has a mother.. 😭

Show me bhi mujhe yahi lagta tha ki Malhar pagal kaise nahi hua... Aur yahan toh Malhar ko khud hi lag gaya ki insab ke beech rehke abhi tak pagal kyun nahi hua..

Kitne saare dhoke khaaye hai Malhar ne bhi..

He did hurt Kalyani but he exactly hasn't been having any cake walk. He has been living through hell too.. One betrayal after another doesn't allow a person to think straight..

Madhav and his nonsense about working for a woman.. 🤪

Thank god Malhar ne electricity katwa di..

Pillu thinks Agni Naidu is beautiful.. Aww he felt a connection with her and even told her that his mother would be as beautiful has her.. ❤️❤️❤️

Malhar Moksh ko thappad maarne wala tha.. 😐😐 This felt a bit out of character..

Agni let down her guard on the phone and called Moksh as Pillu.. At first Malhar ko strike nahi hua but later he thought about it..

Hope Pillu apne parents ki galat faimiyan dur hone me instrumental hoga...

Revenge on the actual perpetuators who destroyed the lives of both these individuals, an innocent child and an unborn child sahi hoga... Donon saat milkar ye karen toh aur fit lagega.. (this is just my opinion)

By that I didn't mean that Malhar should be forgiven easily for his misunderstood punishments to Kalyani. Just that they should sort themselves out. Malhar does owe an apology to her. Kalyani / Agni does need to understand his frame of mind was and is not stable having undergone so many emotional tortures.

Please continue as per your plot.. Waiting for next update. Your writing is awesome as always..

Edited by rekha_crm - 3 years ago
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Posted: 3 years ago
#84

Chapter 9


Malhar was feeling really uneasy in the transition of his role from ACP to a secretary. He was not like his Baba and he had no problem working for a woman. In fact Agni was much smarter and hardworking than Commissioner but Malhar used to be the Singham of Aurangabad and here he felt like a toy lion. He was used to chasing criminals in harsh heat of summer, the air-conditioned glass building felt too tame compared to it. And adding to the fact, that Agni looked just like Kalyani. It was as if someone was peeling the skin off his wound then stitching it back then peeling it again. He wasn't eating properly these days. He still couldn't believe it happened with him. He could think himself without his eyes but not his uniform. Why did it happen to him? Why did every bad thing in the world happen with him? What had he done to deserve it all?

"Malhar," Agni called him in her cabin, "Get me a cup of tea."

Malhar didn't know what he was thinking when he made Kalyani's favourite elaichi wali chai and served it before Agni.

"What the hell is this?" Agni's face was dark.

"Tumhari favourite chai," Malhar replied absentmindedly.

"Tum? Aur ye hai meri favourite chai?" Kalyani said, throwing the hot tea on Malhar, "You bloody stupid moron. Aaj din bhar tum saara kaam khade rehkar karoge. Understood?"

"Yes ma'am," Malhar said quietly.

Malhar worked standing all day, with his shirt drenched with tea. Due to undereating, his body was feeling very weak. Agni looked at him through her cabin glass. Seeing Malhar so weak, so broken- Agni didn't know seeing Malhar in a state like this could affect her anymore, but it did. There was still some of Kalyani left in Agni and Agni hated this fact. She hadn't return from the mouth of death to repeat the same mistakes. You are not Kalyani anymore- she reminded herself.


Finally his body unable to tolerate any more, and due to fatigue, Malhar got unconscious. Agni left whatever work she was doing and ran towards him.


When she tried to get Malhar admitted to the hospital, the receptionist said, "There was no vacant bed. And doctor was busy in pizza party with his colleagues so he couldn't attend the patient."

"Kya naam hai Doctor ka?" Agni said in a threatening tone.

"Tu kya kahin ki laat sahib h," the receptionist said, "jo main tere ko doctor ka naam bataoon."

Agni called a number, "Am I speaking to Mr. Baljeet Chavhan from Chavhan Hospitals? Nice. Agni Naidu bol rahi hoon. Tumhe ab tak to pata chal hi gaya hoga ki tumhare trusts ke saare members ke unanimous decision ke baad tumhara ye hospital maine khareed liya h. Vaise tumhare hospital ki badtameez receptionist ko to maine fire kar hi diya h baaki kaam ke badle pizza party karne vale apne doctors se keh do ki naukri pyaari h to turant patient Rane ko attend karein varna I'll make sure zindagi bhar kabhi pizza ka muh nahi dekh payenge."


For the first time in five years, Agni had skipped her work but now all she was concerned about was Malhar's health.


"Pata nahi kaisi auladein paida ki hai maine," Agni heard Madhav's voice, "Budhaape me bacche maa baap ka sahara bante hain. Aur idhar in sahab ko apni hi seva karane se fursat nahi h."


Agni turned around so that they couldn't see her face.


"Maine to pehle hi Kaha tha," Asawari spoke, "Ye Malhar bada kamzor hai. Isse kahin accha to mera beta Ahir tha. Jis Kalyani ne ise itna bada dhokha diya, usi ki Aai Anupriya ko us Ahilya Deshmukh se bachane ke liye Women Rights commission walon ko anonymous tip dekar bhej diya tha, maine khud apne kaano se suna tha. Aur vo vakaalat ki kitaabein use chhupkar bhejna. Us bewakoof Anupriya ko lagta hai ki koi dabi kuchli aurton ki madad karne wali sanstha free me use kitaabein deti hain magar yahaan fateecharchand ke paas apna pet paalne ke paise hain nahi, sabka maseeha banna h. Ham sabse kehta firta h ki nafrat karta hai Kalyani se wo magar koi unki maharani ko ek shabd bhi keh de, fir dekho Malhar ka gussa. Are itna kamzor hi to hai tabhi to koi biwi iske paas tik nahi paayi."

Agni was having a hard time hearing their nonsense when Moksh came running towards her, "Agni aunty. Papa ko kya hua?" Moksh was crying, "Dadi keh rahi thi vo mar jayenge. Batao na, Papa bhi Mummy ki tarah mujhe chhorkar chale jayenge?"

Agni could barely stop herself from breaking down. She kneeled on the floor to become equal to Moksh's height and hugged him tightly. Finally she was face to face with her son- and she couldn't tell him that she was his mother whom he was searching so badly.

"Tere Papa ko kucch nahi hoga," Agni said, locking her pinkie finger with Moksh's, "I promise main tumhe aur unhe kucch nahi hone doongi."

"Pakka promise?" Moksh said wiping his tears with his other hand.

"Pakka promise!"

"Moksh tumse kitni baar kaha h ki ajnabiyon se baat nahi karte," Madhav shouted at Moksh.

"Apne baap jaisa ziddi hai ye," Asawari came and raised her hand to slap Moksh, "Lagta hai har baar ki tarah is baar bhi pitaai se hi tera pet bharega."

"Ye galti karne ki kabhi sochna bhi mat," Kalyani said blocking Asawari's hand, digging her nails into Asawari's wrist.

"Kalyani!" Asawari was open mouthed.

"Oh," Madhav taunted, "To Tum laut aayi Kalyani. Marne varne ka naatak khatam ho gaya tumhara? Moksh, is badchalan aurat ne agar tumhe chhua bhi na to tum gande ho jaoge."

"Wow! Mr. Rane," Agni said, "Ek aurat ke haath lagane me aapko gandagi nazar aati hai, magar usi aurat se liye gaye paise kharch karne me aapko koi problem nazar nahi aati."


"Matlab?" Madhav was puzzled.


"Matlab aap jis ghar me rehte hain na, vo meri company ne Malhar ko provide kiya hai," Agni smirked, "Even kal jo aapne apni music class ke liye Malhar ke diye huye paison se jo taanpoora kharida na, uske paise bhi Malhar ne mujhse maange the."

"Kalyani tum!" Madhav charged towards her.

But as soon as Agni called security, and two giant security guards charged towards him, Madhav stepped back.


"Patient ko hosh aa gaya hai," A nurse called them.


Moksh held Agni by hand and took her with him towards the ward.


"Papa!" Moksh called Malhar.

Despite being in delirium, Malhar kissed Moksh on his forehead.

He turned towards Agni, and said, "I'm sorry Kalyani."


Sorry isme Sampu Athu ke scene nahi rakh paayi.

And this chapter is dedicated to Rekha as she said Agni should at least know what Malhar was going through.

Edited by Autumn09 - 3 years ago
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Posted: 3 years ago
#85

Originally posted by: rekha_crm

Nice update Pragya..

Madhav, Asawri aur Aao Saheb..

Teenon hi sar phire hain... Useless hai useless.

Each has their own words to hurl at one another. Unfortunately Malhar is the one bearing the brunt of it and to an extent Moksh too.

Asawari has tried poisoning Moksh's mind about his mother.. 😡

Lekin Pillu kitna innocent hai.. That he asked his dad if he has a mother.. 😭

Show me bhi mujhe yahi lagta tha ki Malhar pagal kaise nahi hua... Aur yahan toh Malhar ko khud hi lag gaya ki insab ke beech rehke abhi tak pagal kyun nahi hua..

Kitne saare dhoke khaaye hai Malhar ne bhi..

He did hurt Kalyani but he exactly hasn't been having any cake walk. He has been living through hell too.. One betrayal after another doesn't allow a person to think straight..

Madhav and his nonsense about working for a woman.. 🤪

Thank god Malhar ne electricity katwa di..

Pillu thinks Agni Naidu is beautiful.. Aww he felt a connection with her and even told her that his mother would be as beautiful has her.. ❤️❤️❤️

Malhar Moksh ko thappad maarne wala tha.. 😐😐 This felt a bit out of character..

Agni let down her guard on the phone and called Moksh as Pillu.. At first Malhar ko strike nahi hua but later he thought about it..

Hope Pillu apne parents ki galat faimiyan dur hone me instrumental hoga...

Revenge on the actual perpetuators who destroyed the lives of both these individuals, an innocent child and an unborn child sahi hoga... Donon saat milkar ye karen toh aur fit lagega.. (this is just my opinion)

By that I didn't mean that Malhar should be forgiven easily for his misunderstood punishments to Kalyani. Just that they should sort themselves out. Malhar does owe an apology to her. Kalyani / Agni does need to understand his frame of mind was and is not stable having undergone so many emotional tortures.

Please continue as per your plot.. Waiting for next update. Your writing is awesome as always..

I don't know how I missed replying to your comment because I've read it in the morning itself. And written the chapter based on your ideas. Thappad marna was out of character I too felt. Actually I was remembering my friend in that scenario who said ki jab bhi uski 3 yr old beti nahi soti vo dhunti h use raat me hi.

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Posted: 3 years ago
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It's amazing pragya...... And please don't say that you don't have confidence in you write them..... You are writing this so amazingly how can u say we are not liking it.... And don't end it quickly..... You are and u will do a great skill in this.....


Kalyani still has a heart for him and still some care left❤❤❤.....

Malhar knows he did so wrong with her and wants that even worse happen with her then why he imagines her everywhere..... He should not give a damn about her if he thinks she was too wrong😒😒😒😒😒..... Nafrat wali romance😂😂😅😅

Kalyani took him hospital 😊😊😊

Finally mother son duo ka face off🥺🥺🥺..... She saw hima fter so many years

Kalyani got a glimpse how he was living all these days.... And was tortured enough by his loved ones who in response doesn't give a damn about him... 🙁🙁🙁🙁

Thank you tune baapji or agni ka face off bhi dikhaya.... This scene I enjoyed a lot.... Bilkul sahi hua.....

Asawari shocked kalyani rocked😂😂😂😂


Loved it baby... Or maine jo top pe baat likhi hai use maanna zarur☺☺☺

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Originally posted by: PRAKRITI_12

It's amazing pragya...... And please don't say that you don't have confidence in you write them..... You are writing this so amazingly how can u say we are not liking it.... And don't end it quickly..... You are and u will do a great skill in this.....


Kalyani still has a heart for him and still some care left❤❤❤.....

Malhar knows he did so wrong with her and wants that even worse happen with her then why he imagines her everywhere..... He should not give a damn about her if he thinks she was too wrong😒😒😒😒😒..... Nafrat wali romance😂😂😅😅

Kalyani took him hospital 😊😊😊

Finally mother son duo ka face off🥺🥺🥺..... She saw hima fter so many years

Kalyani got a glimpse how he was living all these days.... And was tortured enough by his loved ones who in response doesn't give a damn about him... 🙁🙁🙁🙁

Thank you tune baapji or agni ka face off bhi dikhaya.... This scene I enjoyed a lot.... Bilkul sahi hua.....

Asawari shocked kalyani rocked😂😂😂😂


Loved it baby... Or maine jo top pe baat likhi hai use maanna zarur☺☺☺


Thank you so much Praku 💜💜💜💜💜

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Nice update..

Malhar's doesn't have any ego working for a woman or taking orders from her. 👍🏼

But he misses his gritty policeman's job. His uniform was everything to him.. Probably othet than his child it was the only solace he had in the madness that surrounded him.


His mind is lingering with every ounce to the memories of Kalyani...


He is now just a broken man. Guess he is just sticking on to his sanity and life for Moksh's sake.


Agni, though unwillingly is also affected to some extent by seeing him in such a state.


In the hospital Agni also got to know how Malhar was treated by his own family.. And also how he was helping Anupriya to study law through some woman's organisation.


Hospital me Baapji and Agni's faceoff was 👏

And Asawari too got a jhatka..



Moksh bechara... Doesn't want to lose his dad too... The innocent child's emotions made me tear up..😭

Agni got a glimpse of how her child is suffering.

And also some of what Malhar is going through.


Let' s see what she does..


Thanks for dedicating it to me.. ❤️❤️

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Originally posted by: rekha_crm

Nice update..

Malhar's doesn't have any ego working for a woman or taking orders from her. 👍🏼

But he misses his gritty policeman's job. His uniform was everything to him.. Probably othet than his child it was the only solace he had in the madness that surrounded him.


His mind is lingering with every ounce to the memories of Kalyani...


He is now just a broken man. Guess he is just sticking on to his sanity and life for Moksh's sake.


Agni, though unwillingly is also affected to some extent by seeing him in such a state.


In the hospital Agni also got to know how Malhar was treated by his own family.. And also how he was helping Anupriya to study law through some woman's organisation.


Hospital me Baapji and Agni's faceoff was 👏

And Asawari too got a jhatka..



Moksh bechara... Doesn't want to lose his dad too... The innocent child's emotions made me tear up..😭

Agni got a glimpse of how her child is suffering.

And also some of what Malhar is going through.


Let' s see what she does..


Thanks for dedicating it to me.. ❤️❤️


Thanks a lot Rekha 💜💜💜💜


Actually the idea of this chapter came from your suggestions.

A female in a higher position than male- even in Kdramas I've watched, it's not much. But it's always interesting. Ev Here I didn't want Malhar to have typical male ego. And koi kitna bhi sensible ho, being cheated upon kills his self esteem. Like in movies and TV shows we always cheer for the woman to ditch her straight laced fiance leaving him at altar to marry hero but seriously in real life it can mess someone up in his mind

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Originally posted by: Autumn09


Thanks a lot Rekha 💜💜💜💜


Actually the idea of this chapter came from your suggestions.

A female in a higher position than male- even in Kdramas I've watched, it's not much. But it's always interesting. Ev Here I didn't want Malhar to have typical male ego. And koi kitna bhi sensible ho, being cheated upon kills his self esteem. Like in movies and TV shows we always cheer for the woman to ditch her straight laced fiance leaving him at altar to marry hero but seriously in real life it can mess someone up in his mind


Glad you thought about my views..

Malhar didn't have that ego of working under a woman even in the show.. Nice that you retained that essence here. 👍🏼


@bold..exactly

A person who faces that kind of betrayal cannot emerge out of it so soon. It takes a long while for them to mend themselves. They don't even realise that they are hurting someone who cares for them in the process.


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