OS: CHARU A NEW BEGINNING Last Part @ pg.6

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Hi friends,

I am sure we would all agree that initially Charu was shown as a lovely person always willing to help people around her (though she did use people's weakness for her own benefit) ' I wanted her track to end on a positive note ' therefore I created this OS

It has 8 parts : I am posting the first part now 😉

PART I ... Oblivion

The room is silent but filled with the subtle sound of the air conditioner ... the Nurse dips the soft flannel into a bowl of warm water and gently wipes down Charu's still body lying on the hospital bed ...

The Nurse reflects ... "What a pretty girl! Such lovely eyes and lips ... Never thought she would survive the fall ... how her parents are suffering ... God must have heard their prayers and saved her ... I hope she regains consciousness soon ... "

Almost a month ago, Charu was admitted into the intensive care unit in a critical condition with a shattered rib cage, punctured lungs and a single deep gash on her head ... The life giving tubes have long since been removed and she is now in the ward ... however she still has not regained consciousness ...

Suddenly the Nurse feels a twitching movement in the patient's finger ... the Nurse drops the wet flannel into the bowl with a splash and waits patiently to see whether the patient would again show any further movement ... and her patience is rewarded by the very slight lifting of Charu's fingers ...😊
The Nurse quickly runs out and calls the emergency doctor to come and examine the patient ... Charu's parents who are sitting outside are alarmed by all the hustle and bustle going on around their daughter's room ...
Soon the emergency doctor comes into Charu's room and examines the patient's eyes, pulse and blood pressure ... Yes the patient seems to be regaining consciousness ... the doctor requests either the father or mother to constantly monitor the patient and to let them know if she shows any further signs of movement ...
Charu's mother pulls a chair and sits next to Charu's bed ... Charu's father tells her that he will be sitting outside and to call him immediately in case of any change in Charu's condition ... Charu's mother takes up a religious book and softly recites the slokas to herself ... however slowly her tired body gives way and her head nods and everything is quiet and still in the dark room ...
The pain is so excruciating ... Charu groans and whimpers ... her head feels so heavy and her body feels so feeble ... her hands feel like pieces of logs ... she weakly lifts her hand to try and touch her head ... she can feel some kind of bandage around her head ... she opens her mouth but no sound comes out ... her throat is so dry and her tongue feels so thick ... she cries out with great difficulty ... "Mummy ... mummy ..."
Charu calls out in pain again ... "Mummy ... mummy ..." ... hearing her agonised voice ... Charu's mother wakes up with a start and runs towards the bed ... "Charu! Charu! My baby..." she cries out with tears of happiness in her eyes ... 😭
Charu slowly opens her heavy eyelids ... her eyes feel so gritty ... she manages to ask in a low voice ... "Mummy what happened to me ... why do I feel a piercing pain in my head...?"
Hearing the soft voices inside the room, Charu's father peeps in ... Charu turns her head slowly and sees her father ... "Daddy .. is this a hospital ... what happened to me?"...
Charu's father quickly comes over to Charu's bed and gently takes her hand and pats it saying ... "Don't you remember?" Charu replies in a confused voice "No Daddy .. why is my head bandaged and why am I .in this room ?"
Charu's father looks at Charu's mummy and then he resolutely decides ... It's better to keep Charu in the dark regarding the incident that had changed her life ... "You were in a car accident my child ..." he whispers softly.
Charu stares at him and slowly closes her eyes tiredly ... then suddenly she opens her eyes again and looks straight at her father and murmurs "Was it on our way back from my engagement function?"... Charu's Dad gets the shock of his life ...😲😲
Charu continues in a sleepy voice ... "Where is my fiance Daddy? Was he also hurt in the accident?"...🥱

(Thodarum 😉 Part II - page 1)

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Hey Esther...

Story was cool yaar...But pity charu never forgets about her engagement...

More than VR and Gayathri it is going to be tamil who is to be shocked...😆

But i feel like visualizing your imagination...Fantastic...
Edited by anituram - 13 years ago
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Nice writing, Esther. I enjoyed reading the story. The description of the scene is really beautiful. The setting you have described is natural and the story is inciting my curiosity. Looking forward to the next part of the story. it is also a good idea to end the Charu track in a postivie note. Thanks for the entertaining piece of writing!
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Thanks thendralfan007 for the first chapter. looking forward to the next chapter to find out how VR & Gaya are going to react to charu remembering abt her engagement .. lie TA's dead or .. ?
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Posted: 13 years ago
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The first part of the story is verry nice👏. Tnx Thendralfan. I'm waiting for the next part😊

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Thanks friends for the comments to the previous part ...
Here is the Part II 😉

PART II ... Recollection

After asking about her fiance ... Charu closes her eyes wearily and goes to sleep without waiting for a reply ...
When Charu wakes up again ... the Chief Doctor examines her and speaks to her at length ...

Charu's Dad hurries out to meet the Chief Doctor in his room to discuss Charu's condition ... the doctor tells him that Charu has no memory of certain past events ... Charu seems to remember that she had an engagement ... and though she does not remember the face of her fiance ... she remembers that she is madly in love with him ... she is worried that he has not come to see her ... she keeps asking for him ...

Charu's dad tells the doctor that he had told Charu that she had been in an accident ... the doctor says that that information is probably better than letting her know that she had tried to commit suicide ... the doctor adds that he has got in touch with a specialist Dr. Gokul who will have a look at Charu and give his expert opinion regarding her condition ... Charu's dad thanks the Chief doctor and returns to Charu's room with a worried expression ...
Charu is sitting on the bed and slowly chewing the apple slices that her mother had placed on a plate ... suddenly she calls out broodingly ... "Mummy, what is my fiance's name?" ... Charu's mother's hands stop peeling the apples as she thinks furiously on what to reply ...

Suddenly a voice calls out "Don't you remember Charu ... his name is Gokul!" ... it is Charu's Dad ... he blurts out the first name that comes to his mind ...
Charu beams "Gokul! Nice name! Gokul and Charu ... the names sound nice together ... but Daddy why is he not coming to see me?" ... Charu's Dad replies that Gokul is busy at a conference but he keeps getting regular updates about her condition ... Charu smiles wistfully ...

Charu then continues recollecting a few details from her vague memories ... "I remember my engagement day ... I was wearing a lovely blue saree ... Mummy you were looking so beautiful and Daddy you were looking so smart on that day ... but Daddy I don't recall your mapillai's face ... how does he look? ... his face is so vague and blurred ... I can't recall his family too ... ooohhh my heads aches when I try to recollect these details" ...
Charu's dad feels very guilty and tries to reassure Charu ... "Charu my child, the doctor told you not to think too deeply ... as days go by your memory will slowly come back ... so don't worry" ...

Charu mutters "I wish Gokul would throw away his work and come to see me ... then at least I will know what he looks like and whether he still loves me ..." ...
Charu's Dad replies soothingly ... "Of course he loves you Charu ... he is just so busy ... don't worry ... here mummy and I will make some juice for you ... after drinking the juice try to rest your head..."
While Charu's parents are busy peeling the oranges to make the juice ... the door quietly swings open and a young man walks in ' Charu looks at that man ... his face looks very familiar ... she has seen him somewhere before ... he also stares at her in wonder as though he cannot quite believe she is here... Charu wonders "Could this be ... Could this be..."

Charu whispers inquiringly ... "Gokul!?" ... and the young man smiles warmly and says "Yes Charu ... it's me ... Gokul!" ...

Charu shouts excitedly "Daddy! Mummy! Your mapillai has come at last to see me!" ...
Charu's dad and mom turn around shocked to see who has come into the room and whom Charu is calling 'mapillai' ...
Gokul looks astounded "Mapillai? Who are you talking about?" ...

(Thodarum 😉 Part III - page 2)

Edited by thendralfan007 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Nice twist with Gokul, Esther.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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thanks for the second part. good to see gokul involved.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Lol with Gokul in the story...
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Posted: 13 years ago
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The story moving verry good, with Gokul👏

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