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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: ...Shakti...

unres so i haven't read this before 😲😲 i'm shocked at how i missed it!!

Part 1:
OMGGG this is the cutest idea ever! i've always been a sucker for tutor romances ever since haley and nathan in OTH <3 and this just brought back those vibes!!
😆😆😆 i love twinkle's fiestiness in this!! and kunj saying his name as if she should know who he is 😆
awww the deal is set! poor twinj don't know that poor verma doesn't stand a chance 😆😆
btw this should be some movie plot! loll it's perfect teen rom-com material!!! i would watch something like this

Part 2:
🤣 OMG YOU INCORPORATED CHERRY!!! 😆 that too as Kunj's roomie! loll that made me LOL so hard!
oh yuvi, you're advice is not going to be heeded at all 😆😆 kunj is def gonna fall for the tutor!

Part 3a:
EWWW she walked in on that!! so gross!!! 😆😆
but she saw kunj shirtless so...😆😆
who can resist kunj's puppy eyes

Part 3B:
aww poor kunj! fathers can be so harsh sometimes!!! and so sweet of twinks to be there for him
LOLLL yuvi shoulda just listened to her advice from before, he woulda won the game so much faster!
btw are you a video game fan nemo??
🤣🤣🤣 HOW DOES SOMEONE EXPLODE MAC AND CHEESE!! 😆😆😆
and you killed it for me nemo, he's planning on talking to verma for the date 😕 *face palm* why are boys so stupid, takes them so long to understand their feelings!

loll i loved this and you need to update soon!!!


It's fine, better late than never dude 😆

A lot of people have said it gives them OTH vibes and it's such a shame that I didn't watch that show! I'm a sucker for high school romances and good girl falls for the bad boy type of genres too so this was a must!

Omg Shakti, I wish I could take all the credit for the idea but the whole thing is actually based on a book series I read last summer 😆 Unfortunately there's no movie on it and I'm still waiting for the last book to be released or be available online for that matter.

Cherry is the perfect comic character. You always need one of those in stories, especially rom com ones. Yuvi might end up being the Cupid here, I'm still deciding on how I want to go about it thought lol

LOOOL I was going to make her walk in on worse but I thought I'd save myself the chappals 😆 who can resist HIM?

I read way too many books where teens have daddy issues so I thought why not? 😆 YO I LOVE VIDEO GAMES! It's such a shame I don't get to play anymore though, damn life. 😔

It's possible I swear. Not that I have because I'd like to think I'm a decent cook

Dude the whole thing started off with the deal so I have to bring it back up. Dw I'm sure you'll enjoy what's to come. I agree, boys are so stupid, LOOOL is that personal experience talking Shakti? 😆Anyway Who is Verma compared to our Sarna please? 😎

Thank you so much dude!
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Sdea

Omg omg how did I not see this update. I was dying for it from ages.
Okkkaayyy sooo how amazing was this Nemo
Firstly I love their surname basis conversation. Like yoo sarna and taneja is the like new cool.
And omg twinkle ok I find it weird calling her twinkle now so Taneja is such a rockstar. Like she cooks, studies and plays video games.
And what's with kunjs father being a pain everywhere the show and the stories. Loved how twinkle wanted to stay over just to see he was ok. And seriously kunj is going to fix her with that guy.I loved loved the update
Dying for the next one. Do update soon.

PS- typing from phone so can't really add emojis. But my expressions are very heightened after the update.


Omg this is such an amazing response! I'm literally smiling away, thank you so much Sammy!
Yup, I think it's pretty cool too. Twinkle is awesome, she's your ideal beauty with brains with a hint of sass. Kunj is an idiot tbh, he should've bagged her at first sight, but better late than never 😆
There's nothing like bonding over family issues, that takes a whole lot of trust and comfort so it seemed right to make his father the baddie here. Selfish reasons lol.
Of course he is, they had a deal and he has to uphold his end of the bargain at all costs. It's his word on the line after all.

Thank you so much again dude, so glad you enjoyed it!
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Tranquility123


It's fine, better late than never dude 😆

A lot of people have said it gives them OTH vibes and it's such a shame that I didn't watch that show! I'm a sucker for high school romances and good girl falls for the bad boy type of genres too so this was a must!

Omg Shakti, I wish I could take all the credit for the idea but the whole thing is actually based on a book series I read last summer 😆 Unfortunately there's no movie on it and I'm still waiting for the last book to be released or be available online for that matter.

Cherry is the perfect comic character. You always need one of those in stories, especially rom com ones. Yuvi might end up being the Cupid here, I'm still deciding on how I want to go about it thought lol

LOOOL I was going to make her walk in on worse but I thought I'd save myself the chappals 😆 who can resist HIM?

I read way too many books where teens have daddy issues so I thought why not? 😆 YO I LOVE VIDEO GAMES! It's such a shame I don't get to play anymore though, damn life. 😔

It's possible I swear. Not that I have because I'd like to think I'm a decent cook

Dude the whole thing started off with the deal so I have to bring it back up. Dw I'm sure you'll enjoy what's to come. I agree, boys are so stupid, LOOOL is that personal experience talking Shakti? 😆Anyway Who is Verma compared to our Sarna please? 😎

Thank you so much dude!


loll you didn't miss much i only watched OTH for season 1 and that too in a marathon because my cousin was obsessed with it and the rest of us were too scared of her to say no to her demands 😆😆 no joke tho haley and nathan were adorbs and this def reminded me on them!

😆😆 it must be a really cute book series! well i'm glad you used this idea for twinj 😃

😲 walk in on worse than that 🤣 you can't do that to us 😆

loll it's true the teenagers in my house are driving all of us nuts 😆😆 tbh i feel like it's very common in desi households i know it was in A's house
😆😆 i dont really play that much, not really a fan but i'm very competitive as a person so when i do play i give it all my energy 😆😆 A's best friend refuses to play against me because i always beat him even if i have never played the game before

😆😆 i'll take your word for it! aww i'm sure you're a great cook ❤️ i hate cooking man, i can cook and i have to cause i live alone but i prefer not to. A is an amazing cook and he actually likes it 😆😆

i'm super excited for you to update the story just gets more and more interesting! 🤣 personal experience yes, if personal experience taught me one thing it's that all men are idiots 🤣

can't wait for your update!
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Posted: 9 years ago
Hey di...
I want the nxt update ASAP!!!
Please yaar di!
I can't wait any longer!
Ok wait the this update was AMAZING!!!
Loved it !
And now can u please give us the next update!
As i cant wait any longer!
Please Pretty Please!!!😳😳😳
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Anisha-k.

Hey di...

I want the nxt update ASAP!!!
Please yaar di!
I can't wait any longer!
Ok wait the this update was AMAZING!!!
Loved it !
And now can u please give us the next update!
As i cant wait any longer!
Please Pretty Please!!!😳😳😳


Thank you Anisha 😳😆
Just about to update it 😆
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Posted: 9 years ago
4th part is here and it's a little long I think 😆 Aiming to wrap this up by the next update so just wanted to say a HUGE THANK YOU to everyone who has commented, liked and pestered me for updates so far. You guys are amazing 😎

Part Four - Making Twinkle Taneja Desirable

"So how did it go?"

Kunj glanced at all the worried faces staring at him in anticipation. He had just completed his resit paper and was welcomed home with a series of outbursts and several concerned questions. He looked at the 4 faces gazing back at him, trying to hold back his laugh at how on edge everyone was.

"Dudes you can breathe. It went well. I answered all the questions this time around" He said, finally breaking the silence. A wave of relief washed over everyone's faces and the smiles soon broke out.

"You trained him well Taneja" Said Cherry, praising Twinkle for her hard work to which she just smiled. Truth was, she was glad that he thinks it went well but they weren't safe until the result was officially out.

"I'm going to wait for the result to be released before I officially take the credit for gracing all your lives with such immense happiness" Twinkle remarked sarcastically. The boys broke into grins and agreed that they'd wait out the next two days before going out to celebrate Kunj's victory.

"Okay, well now that that is over and done with, Taneja, I believe I owe you a date" Kunj said.

"Excuse me?" His statement caught Twinkle off guard. The rest of the guys seated themselves comfortably, awaiting the drama that was about to unfold judging from Twinkle's tone of voice.

Kunj rolled his eyes at her before explaining that it was time to make a move on fixing up her date with Laksh Verma. Twinkle's face adorned understanding, remembering the deal that was made between them, a date in return of her tutoring.

"We're going to a party tomorrow, and you Taneja, are going to accompany me" Kunj confidently said pointing at her. Her eyes narrowed at him in accusation.

"Why exactly would I do that?" She questioned. Tutoring Kunj Sarna was one thing but going out with the guy was a completely different matter altogether. If he thought that she would happily accept and jump into his arms then he had another thing coming.

"Relax Taneja, why are you always up for a fight?" He cut her off before she had a chance to speak up again. "First part of the plan involves getting Verma's attention. You said you didn't want a sympathy date so here I am helping you out. You walk into the party with me and you will have the attention of all the guys there" He finished.

"How exactly does that work?" Twinkle asked, confused at how going to a party with Kunj was going to help her out with Laksh. Why would he approach her if she attends as someone else's date? No. Not a date, definitely not a date. This was just a plan. She saw Kunj let out a deep sigh before he spoke up again.

"You're not going to like what you hear but hear me out. Going to the party with me makes you look desirable. Everyone knows that Kunj Sarna doesn't do girlfriends so they're all going to be curious about who you are and why you're attending the party with us. You come across as a mystery and there you have it, every guy will be tailing you all night, including Verma."

"WHAT?" Twinkle couldn't believe what she was hearing. The idea was completely absurd and messed up. Why are all men such idiots?

"It's a guy thing. Right guys?" Kunj told her like it was meant to be some kind of logical explanation before turning to the other lads who were watching them with great interest. They all nodded their heads in approval.

"I don't believe you guys, seriously?" The hint of disgust didn't go unnoticed by any of them. Yuvi cleared his throat eventually trying to help his brother out.

"Look Taneja, Sarna has a point. As far as I'm aware, everyone is already curious about you, I know even you've noticed the change of behaviour and weird looks right?" Yuvraj glanced at Kunj seeing Twinkle ponder on his words. It was true, of course she noticed how people she didn't even know said hi to her these days, how the supposed mean girls were suddenly no longer mean, even some of the guys from the team acknowledged her on campus... all because she agreed to tutor Kunj Sarna.

"Let's just go to the party. If it doesn't work then atleast we all partied but if it does work, then that's great for you Taneja, you'll have yourself a date. What do you say?" Twinkle looked at Yuvi and then at Kunj. No wonder these two are best friends, she thought to herself, they really knew how to pull the right strings and damn their adorable faces too, urgh! Watching them all gaze at her with such expectation, she eventually gave in to their demands.

"Fine." What could possibly go wrong, right?

*****

Twinkle looked at herself in the mirror once again, adjusting the straps of her dress and brushing through her straightened hair one last time. Kunj had told her to wear something nice and classy and nothing spells class like good old black. The knee length dress still fit her like a glove. She doesn't remember why she even bought it anymore but atleast she finally had a chance to wear it. Hearing the horn blare outside her apartment, she quickly applied a coat of lip gloss and darted for the door.

"Wow. Erm... you look good Taneja" Kunj finally managed to get out. He was awestruck. The girl really brushed up well... or was she always this pretty? Twinkle slid into the passenger seat mumbling a small thank you, trying hard not to blush at the compliment. The journey in the car was weird, maybe because Twinkle was now feeling very self-conscious about the dress and the whole idea seemed to sound stupid now. Her fidgeting didn't go unnoticed by him.

"I lied by the way" Kunj said as he drove towards their destination.

"What do you mean Sarna?" Her stance suddenly became very defensive. What was he talking about? Were they not going to the party? Was he taking her somewhere else? She couldn't help the slight feeling of panic that rose within her but her face remained calm.

"The guys won't just be just tailing you tonight. They'll be chasing you" He smirked at her. "Relax, you look great, Verma will be clean-bowled." She let out a laugh, somewhat of relief but she couldn't help but appreciate that Kunj Sarna knew how to make her feel at ease.

*****

So it turns out that Kunj Sarna isn't kidding when he makes such obnoxious claims. When they had pulled up outside the venue, Twinkle was taken aback by the number of people at this party. She even contemplated making a U-turn and heading home but her plans were foiled as the passenger door opened wide and Kunj stood there with his hand held out to her. For a moment, she forgot her tensions and chuckled at his chivalry. Who would have thought, the Kunj Sarna and that too such a gentleman? She finally accepted that she looked great, or rather hot, after the other lads let out low whistles of admiration upon seeing her. She giggled at Cherry's cheesy lines but appreciated his unique way of lightening up the atmosphere. So here she was now, sat at the pseudo bar with a coke in her hand. She didn't fancy a drink and quite honestly, she felt an uneasiness being left alone. The looks she was getting from several guys was not helping her feel any more comfortable. She had already politely declined 4 guys and most of them seemed curious of her presence. Was it really because she walked into the party with the boys? This was such a bad idea, she reprimanded in her head.

"Yo Taneja" Relief washed over her as she heard Kunj's voice. Turning her head, she saw Kunj walking towards her followed by... Oh my God. What is he doing? She thought. She quickly straightened herself up and tried to compose her rapidly beating heart.

"Verma, this is Taneja and Taneja, this is Verma." He introduced them casually. Twinkle glanced at Kunj and she saw him nod his head in assurance, magically calming her nerves. She politely smiled and forwarded her hand to meet Laksh's in a friendly handshake. Eventually Kunj excused himself so that the two could be left alone. She laughed inwardly at his pretence, he was such a bad liar but she was glad to see that Kunj Sarna was a man of his words.

"Hello?" Came a voice which snapped her out of her thoughts. Verma stood there waving at her. Sudden panic ran through her as the realisation dawned that she was finally speaking to the guy that she had been crushing on for such a long time.

"I'm sorry, what did you say?" Twinkle asked, embarrassed that she didn't hear his question because she was too busy in her own world.

Their conversation remained quite formal yet casual but guess who asked to meet up with Twinkle Taneja again? That's right, and she most readily accepted his offer. Twinkle was on cloud 9. She was going on a date with Laksh Verma. She had to tell Kunj. But where was he?

She made her way to look for Kunj through the crowds of people sweating from the excessive dancing and too drunk to realise what they were doing. Kunj was nowhere to be seen.

"Boo!" Her heart jumped as she turned around instantly. Cherry stood there laughing like there was no tomorrow, Yuvraj and Anand shooting him disapproving looks. "Your face..!" Cherry gasped out between his chuckles as Twinkle calmed her startled heart. She eventually let out a giggle at his ridiculous antics. "Come on Taneja, let's dance!" He said excitedly, pushing her towards the dance floor.

"Errr no thanks, I'm fine where I am, I don't really..." Twinkle rejected hesitantly. It wasn't that she didn't like dancing but her last time was really uncomfortable and awkward and she did not fancy going through the groped-by-drunk-guys experience again. Her worry must have been evident on her face because Yuvi spoke up.

"We've got you Taneja. You don't have to worry" He said. His words were sincere and his expression conveyed that nothing bad will happen to her as long as they were all with her. She felt herself relax and a smile begin to appear...

She was having the time of her life. She doesn't remember the last time she let herself go loose like this, dancing and singing and laughing. The latter credit goes to Cherry obviously, he was an absolute clown on the dance floor and tears streamed down Twinkle's face as she clutched her paining stomach. The guys stood by their word and didn't leave her alone once. She was so used to defending and sticking up for herself but for once, it was nice to feel protected.

She was truly enjoying herself until she saw one of the sleazy guys from earlier make his way towards her on the dance floor. From the way he was walking, it was obvious that he was drunk. Discomfort consumed her as she felt herself beginning to stiffen. Suddenly, she felt a hand slide across her waist, her petite frame now sheltered in front of his hard body.

"We've got you Taneja. I've got you" he whispered into her ear echoing Yuvraj's words from earlier. Realisation struck her as she turned to look directly at the reason for which she felt so safe and protected after such a long period of time... Kunj Sarna.

*****

"Just tell us dude, how did you do?" Yuvi asked him, now getting irritated. Results had been released and they were all gathered in the living room waiting to hear from Kunj but he was adamant that he won't say until Twinkle turns up. The door swung open and in walked Twinkle with a box in one hand and her phone in the other.

"27 missed calls and 38 messages guys, seriously. Who died?" She let out, annoyed at the fact that her phone continuously kept ringing, distracting her whilst she was driving.

"I will in a minute if Sarna doesn't spill! Look even Taneja is here now, well...?" Yuvi said once more. Worry took over everyone as Kunj became dejected all of a sudden. Glances of understanding were shared and the boys slumped down on the sofa trying to deal with the disappointment.

"I passed" Kunj told them ever so gently. He took in their confused faces before he burst into laughter. "I PASSED DUDES!" Arms were thrown, fists were bumped, palms came together in high fives and the squealing laughter that erupted from Twinkle echoed throughout the house as she was spun around in Kunj's arms.

"I knew you'd pass. Idiot!" She lightly punched him on the shoulder as he let her down to the floor. "Ohhh! I have a surprise for you all, it's actually a congratulations gift for Sarna but I know you guys will love it too!" She beamed as she picked up the box that she had walked in with. "Open it!" She told him, clapping her hands in anticipation.

The lads exchanged confused looks as Kunj ripped open the packaging. His eyes lit up as he looked at her in disbelief. Similar reactions came from the other guys.

"You did not just gift me a PS4"

"I just totally did."

*****

"What do you think I should wear? Should I message him? What if he just wants to hang out?" These questions were being thrown at Kunj for the past half an hour. After the arguments of expense and eventually the excitement about her ever so amazing present calmed down, Kunj decided that they needed to work on the Date Plan, his phase 2, as he liked to call it. Twinkle on the other hand, was now tensed about the date. Her insecurities were blatantly portrayed in her pointless blabbering.

"Relax Taneja, once I'm done training you, Verma will be counting his blessings" Kunj told her confidently.

"What do you mean by done training me? What makes you think I need training Sarna?" The defence kicked in as her eyes narrowed at him in accusation once more.

Kunj let out a sigh, "I know Verma quite well, and he likes girls that are... confident..." He was interrupted before he had a chance to finish but his definition of confident didn't sit well with Twinkle.

"And you don't think that I'm confident?" She said.

"I didn't say that Taneja, I'm trying to help you here" He defended himself.

"I don't need your help. The deal was that you'd get me a date and it's done. I can handle myself from here" She argued.

"You're blowing this out of proportion, I'm helping you out as a friend right now"

"We're not friends Sarna, we had a deal."

"Right, if that's the case then why are you sitting in my room on my bed, when you've fulfilled your part of our deal? I passed, you got your date, why are you still here?" He let out, annoyed at her change of attitude. He regretted his words as soon as he saw her face go blank and she made a move to get up and leave. He immediately blocked her way. "Look, I'm sorry Taneja, I didn't mean that. You're welcome here whenever you want, I just don't understand why you're behaving like this...?"

Twinkle was annoyed, more at herself than at him, for saying that they weren't friends when she knew that they had become good friend over these last few weeks. But the way he was treating her was like she was a 14 year old teenager struck by puppy love for the very first time. She sighed looking at his eyes which held concern.

"You're treating me like I've been a nun all my life Kunj" She finally said. Looking at his confused yet curious expression, she continued... "I'm not a virgin you know." She doesn't know why she just told him that like it was supposed to me some sort of explanation but atleast he'd stop baby-ing her now.

Kunj just stared at her. Did she just say...? He did not see that one coming, but then again, she was a pretty girl, and she had an amazing figure, was he really surprised? But she really isn't a virgin? Double standards Kunj Sarna, you sleep around plenty, so why can't she? He told himself.

"Okay..." He finally said. "When was the last time you had a boyfriend?" She didn't reply to the question at first but his eyebrows were insistent.

"2 years ago" She finally revealed.

"Okay... so when was the last time you kissed a guy?"

She gave him a look which said are you being for real? But replied eventually... "2 years ago"

"So you haven't kissed another guy since you broke up?" Twinkle just nodded.

"Wow. No experience for the last 2 years? Ermm..." He started to say but Twinkle had had enough of his questions now.

"Shut up Kunj Sarna, just because I haven't kissed someone in the last 2 years, it does not mean that I'm not a good kisser. I'll have you know that I'm a great kisser and my experience is pretty good too!" She said fuming, her eyes shooting daggers at him.

"Fine, prove it then" Kunj challenged her.

"What?"

"Prove it. Kiss me."

Edited by Tranquility123 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
res 😃😃😃
unres
uhmhmmm i'm sure he just wants her to prove it for the challenge not like he doesn't wanna kiss her 😆😆 his name should be changed to smart sarna cause that was a smart move right there 🤣
awww loved this update nemo! it was perfect!!
twinj were so adorable throughout the entire thing, like come on can they get any more oblivious they so have the hots for each other! 😉
so now time to bother you for the next update of this! it better be faster than this one :P😆😆 or team #nemoneedstoupdate will retaliate 🤣
loved it!

PS sorry teds for getting first 😳😳😆
Edited by ...Shakti... - 9 years ago
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RESS
teddy ka spot gaga!
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NO FRIGGIN SHIT OMG WHATT!!!!

Ok first of all, that guy thing is so not a guy thing. Kunj just wants to be the one by her side to make sure the deal is fulfilled and he's making excuses at best to prove his own thinking and ego correct.

Also, little black dress does wonders. I loved how he was totally bowled over her and more so then the Verma douche!

PS4 is not cheap and gifting it like that. Man i wis i had that kind of money. But i totally loved the guys' reactions.

the fight in the end had me all tensed up until he asked her to prove him. THEY ARE GOING TO FRIGGIN KISS!

shizz is about to go down!

Amazing update Nemo!

Next one is last or in parts? update soonish okay. no pressure. 😃

Edited by areeba_blossom - 9 years ago
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omg omg omg my update is here at last🤗
I love you for this Nemo
I AM IN LOVE WITH THIS STORY and this update was so amazing.
I am going to start from the bottom, they are going to kiss OMG OMG OMG i am literally blushing ☺️.I could just imagine everything in my head and i have a very good imagination power so you can understand my excitement reading the end😳
So my guy passed of course he did, taneja tutored him after all.And she gifted him a PS4, they be such cutieeesss.
This Verma dude gives me trouble vibes😕 And he seems sooo boring.Why is Twinkle even interested in him😒.
But i can totally see the sparks flying somewhere else😳.Their conversation was so good regarding the whole date.And the guys are sooo cute,loved how they went to being annoyed with each other to good friends ❤️
is the story already getting over?😭 But koi nahi do update soon.
You honestly don't know my excitement when i see this story updated
Edited by Sdea - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
BRO YOU KILLED IT
I absolutely loved it
the dynamic the guys share with Twinkle is amazing
THE ENDING you can't leave me hanging for long plz update soon!
I am overly excited for part 5

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