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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hey Nalini!
I absolutely loved the concept of your OS:). I am currently quite inactive on IF and hardly reading or commenting on much but I sort of stumbled upon this and am really glad I did. I felt you infused this with such soul, it was a pleasure to read. I am a sucker for what others call "sad" stories and I call hauntingly beautifully if visualised and executed like this:). On my last FF, I had a long exchange with numerous readers and was explaining my views that to me, death is not the real tragedy, never experiencing a love like this is. Here, you brought that out powerfully. SwaSan have the most incredible of soul connects, hence they are my muses for most of my work, and to me their relation and love transcends mere life and death. That is what came across to me here. I don't see things as "sad" in the way other people do perhaps:). To me, I just felt swept along in the poignancy of this piece and to me, that is what made it hauntingly powerful. I am in between meetings on my phone or would have waxed lyrical in greater detail but hope this conveys how much I liked this:)

Love,
Shru

PS: Besides stating the obvious in loving SwaSan and their heartbreaking love, I adored how you portrayed Sujata and her despairing helplessness and yet courage in living the lie endlessly as whilst she lost her son, she wants to keep his reason for living in any way she can 😭
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Posted: 9 years ago
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OMG ! I just can NOT stop crying ! This is beyond beautiful. This was so tragic. The moment I started reading, I knew this was going to make me cry. I absolutely LOVE the way you write. The way youve written each scene is perfect ! Also I absolutely LOVED the concept. Who could have thought of this ? This has to be one of the most touching things that Ive read lately. Im absolutely blown over...! LOVED THIS !! You're amazing 👏👏👏
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Oh God! That was brutal! It started off on such a nice note, I thought SwaSan are finally together after the ML drama but then with Sujju's reaction I guessed something was terribly wrong. I was reduced to tears by what followed next and I rarely cry!! But this 😭

For the second time they were so close, but fate intervened and separated them, this time forever. And isn't it natural for swara to assume that he is alive. She is alive, then how can he be dead? Isn't it what he believed as well? 😭

And sujju...what do I say about her. She has come such a long way! She is willing to pretend for years now just because she knew that is what her son would want. I swear I kept hoping that logic be damned, sanskaar will be back but he wasn't ...and I am tearing up again as I write this comment.

Fabulous work 👏

Edit: This is the sort of story that I will not be able to forget any time soon. Its going to stay with me for a real long time. And now I need to go watch some videos of swasan in happier times. Phew!
Edited by The.Lannister - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#34
oh my god...it was beautiful... 😳 I won't say I loved it because I can't love the things with sad end because it makes me cry... 😭 but your story really touched my heart...its beyond beautiful...❤️
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Posted: 9 years ago
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This was amazing. Beautifully written! :)
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum

Nandini 🤗

One of the most heart wrenching pieces I've ever read.

Thanks you so much dear. I'm thrilled you liked it. Coming from you it means an awful lot. You're one of my most favorite authors here on IF and the fact that you liked this is great.

The pathos and deep tragedy of the situation, Swara's agony at being parted from Sanskaar leading to a kind of denial that he's gone forever, her clinging on to the memory of his still being there, her confused angst as to why he wasn't calling or coming back on time...and Sanskaar, unable to rest or leave either...wanting to be there for Swara as she was not prepared to let him go yet...

How can he rest knowing she's not at peace? I once read a story in which it was mentioned that you don't move on alone. You cross the veil only when your soul mate us there with you. I was thinking of that particular part when I wrote this. So he will comeback to her as long as she need him to, and when she can go on he will wait for her at the other end.


God...so poignant. I cried a fair bit, and had goosebumps all over my arms. Achingly, heart breakingly evocative.

Really? That part feels so good to read. I'm tremendously happy you liked it. I had my doubts about posting this here and I'm happy it's been quite well received.

Hmmm...why didn't I get a pm for this? 😕 😊

I'm so sorry you didn't receive one. I had sent out pls but that was from my phone. which is probably why they never went out I'm guessing. I'm so happy that you came across this without a pm. Yayy

Lots of Love

Viji


Viji dearest! 🤗
Thank you so much for those lovely words. I'm touched that you read and commented on this even without a pm. Replied u blue above.

Love
Nandini😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: piccola1

This was absolutely awesomely heart breaking. Uve reduced me to a puddle of tears.

Superbly written and so beautifully weaving in the illusion with reality. Hats off..👏


Thank you so much dear. I'm so glad you think rthat I've done a good job. Means a lot. :)
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Its such a hauntingly beautiful piece of writing. By the end of it,I was a crying mess but I absolutely loved the concept and the you have woven this story. It was like I was able to feel the emotions the characters were going through. Will belooking forward for more of your work.

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: ...Penknife...


Viji dearest! 🤗
Thank you so much for those lovely words. I'm touched that you read and commented on this even without a pm. Replied u blue above.

Love
Nandini😳


Nandu 🤗 🤗

Yaar...no sorry's allowed between us 😊 How could I not read it...I saw this on the forum page, noted you'd written it, and immediately had to read. 🤗

BTW, I'd greedily re read it just before you replied, wept some more silent tears, and edited my comment to include my emotions about what Sujata is going through. God, I loved how you sketched her anguish as well. So touching, moving, painful, heartbreaking. 😭

Loads of Love

Viji
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Posted: 9 years ago
#40
Hi Nandini, Just read your lovely OS.. And it was awesome .. Amazing OS. I really loved it.. So heartbreaking but wonderfully written.. Do write more..


Love

Nita

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