Memory Chronicles (SwaSan FF) - Page 14

Originally posted by: iamreader

To my confused soul's defense,
I kind of jumped into this wagon. Regarding the Rebel I'm torn between Sanskar and Lucky... I think Swara's not wanting to be touched is something related to her birth mystery/ her mother's tale. And I think I should read again maybe some one from 2nd gen wants his revenge? I presumed him Sanky.

Originally posted by: Sparkler8

Hi Nyna,

This is not "res" post. I just saw your pm in my inbox. I will have to apologize dear.

I don't think I can read this until I have completed my FF. Its taking up all my thinking memory that my work also has to make do with auto pilot. Luckily, this is Dec and things are moving slow.

So here I am to promise you. I will read the story in parts. And once I complete each part, I will leave a long comment for you.

It will take time. But I will get there.

Take care and keep updating. Thank you for pm. They are going to be helpful when I start reading this.😳

Cheers

Sharon

Originally posted by: Cogito_Ergo_Sum

Nynu...🤗🤗🤗


I was starting to type out my take on Chapter 1, when I suddenly realized, much to my consternation 😲 😲 😲, that I had not yet Un res'd on the prologue. 😕 I very much fear I need to start popping Memory Plus pills, I had completely forgotten I had not un res'd on this😕. But in the spirit of better late than never ...😉 (the early bird gets the worm all right, but then the early worm gets eaten, is it not? 😉) 😆

Early worm does get eaten - 😆supports the theory that procrastination does pay in some situations😉

I loved the ambience you have created for the starting here. The sunrise painting the sky in shades of cerulean and gold...you can imagine the chromatically obsessed me grinning in delight at the aurulent beams. 😉 The way you described the soft glow lighting up the sky, I almost felt I was right there, watching Swara go through her exercise and meditation routine. 😊

And the chromatically obsessed me loved writing it - cerulean and gold😊

That little snippet of how the Diwali festivities had troubled her----the light and gaiety further reminding her of the darkness in her mind and soul---that was so profound. When one is carrying a burden, even if one is not precisely aware of what that burden or anguish is; the external atmosphere of brightness and celebratory din, must have seemed jarring, even painful.

At times one truly need not know the burden, to feel troubled, actually the very fact that one cannot identify what the burden is, causes even more anguish and agony. For how can one relieve oneself of a burden if it cannot be identified.

The way you had described Swara's concentration, her awareness of her surroundings even while her mind was focused in meditation---that was very well done. As was the description of Sanskaar padding stealthily towards her, like a Tiger through the jungles of the Sunderbans. 😉 😳 Feline grace he has, indeed. 😉 But not enough to catch Swara unawares...who promptly demonstrated her awareness by raising her foot in a superbly controlled attack position, to within an inch of his nose. Ah, Sunny's nose...😉 What a chiseled feature that is! I am even more glad that Sunny himself, that Swara timed and controlled her posture with clinical enough precision to never risk breaking it. 😳

Have you read William Blake's poem "tiger, tiger burning bright" one of my favourites - somehow that poem inspires a lot of awe and Sanskaar does remind me of being a personification of that tiger (not Frank Stolten's - it must have committed suicide after watching Laksh🤣 unable to figure out right and left OR right and wrong for that matter😉

Loved that description of the warmth and happiness that seeps through her, when she registers his presence behind her earlier. She's not acknowledged it to Sanskaar or even perhaps to herself, but she does keenly desire his presence, his company.

She is a little too bewildered with internal conflict to truly analyse why she feels so safe and secure in his company - with time and once she comes to terms with her situation, she will be able understand or at least try to understand.

So they know each other for 8 months...and Sanskaar feels a bevy of emotions towards her; very protective as well as a tad irritable or sulky. 😉 Let me re read Chapter 1 to see if you have answered this question there----one thought which struck me was, Does Swara remember that her name is 'Swara'? Or was this a name which was given to her since she did not remember her own?

Sanskaar is confused - she is a complication in his life and he needs answers, which he thinks she might be able to give. Regarding her name, chapter 1 does not answer it.

Chapter 2 will give you a hint as to why precisely the name Swara!

Her reluctance, almost fear of being touched----the only exception to this being Sanskaar----filled me both with a keen fear, a worry of what she might have undergone; underpinned by a melancholy sense of ...I don't know how to describe it precisely...I guess, I can describe it best as feeling very moved, at the implications of that exception made. The fact that she trusts him so implicitly, despite something very unpleasant and emotionally scarring, which must have happened to her.

It is more of emotional neglect, a case of absence of emotional involvement rather that outright abuse - it is there in Chapter 1😊, and yes as to why Sanskaar is the only one she trusts - as of now there is no specific reason, but she just feels she can.

Will be back soonest I can, for Chapter 1. 😊

Take your time, no stress.

Lots of Love,

-----Viji

Originally posted by: NitaReid

Hi Nyna dear..

I am here for Chapter 1..But frankly i am not sure what to say😆..It hard for me to guess anyone ....I saw Viji has posted and eagerly opened it in hopes it was for Chapter one..So i can read her comment and find out who is who😆..My luck she unres for prologue..But girl you did an amazing job if you want me to be clueless about the character then i am 100% clueless ..Except Swara i guessed her..😉..Well not that it deserves an star it an easy guess i suppose but the rest 😕.. The person who cant spend birthday is Ragini i guess.. Not sure..

And I am grinning away like a Cheshire cat😆😆😆So you guess Swara and Ragini😉, but there is a twist there also - a tiny one, will be clear in Chapter 2😆

Who is Swara father who is so bent on Revenge plan, and who is his Supporter 😉..I need names for all this characters😆...But regardless of my current state of confusion, Chapter 1 was amazing ..Be it this surprise guess who feature or be the interesting information revealed about the characters and some are connected right..Currently i need few more chapters to atleast make some educated guess..For now..I love this suspense.. Way to go girl..You keep making me go speechless with you amazing chapters.. You are an amazing writer Nyna dear.. So much work went in to this FF and i am so amazed at that.. 👏...Post Chapter 2 soon and let me crack atleast one percent of this suspense😉...Until then..Will be waiting..

Most of the names will be revealed (😉, in Chapter 2, with some hints to a few. Some names are meant to be hidden and will come to the front as and when the tale progresses. I am currently basking in the warmth of your praise,😳😳😳so chapter 2 might be delayed😊. Actually should have posted it today, but then office and stupid happened so simply could not even open the doc. Will do it ASAP and do not worry, I will be giving quite a few names, so it will be quite easy.

Love

Nita

Originally posted by: NitaReid

Blue Sweater theory indeed..I can never crack it , the only thing i was sure was Swara, Sanskar and Adaarsh are not guilty..😆

Originally posted by: NitaReid

@Nyna dear- Congratz ..Your are Dazzling.. I was meaning to wish you but well as always gotten around to it very late

Originally posted by: Nynaeve

And I am grinning away like a Cheshire cat😆😆😆So you guess Swara and Ragini😉, but there is a twist there also - a tiny one, will be clear in Chapter 2😆

Most of the names will be revealed (😉, in Chapter 2, with some hints to a few. Some names are meant to be hidden and will come to the front as and when the tale progresses. I am currently basking in the warmth of your praise,😳😳😳so chapter 2 might be delayed😊. Actually should have posted it today, but then office and stupid happened so simply could not even open the doc. Will do it ASAP and do not worry, I will be giving quite a few names, so it will be quite easy.

Dear Nita,

Replied in blue above,

love,

Nyna

Originally posted by: Nynaeve

Nita, never worry about being late, it is the thought that counts. The next is Rockerz, right? If you write another FF, I can reach that "ladder" faster😊😊

Originally posted by: Nynaeve

I am not going to give up, till Viji posts the Chapter - so...expect a lot more of my ramblings😆😆😆