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Juanita

@BlurredLines

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Posted: 8 years ago

#121

Well you know how much i hate this word.. Yet still couldnt get time to read yours..Feeling bad..I want to read soon..So will comment when i get to read till here you go my most hated word

RES

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Nynaeve

@Nynaeve

Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#122

Originally posted by: iamreader
Dearest Nyna,

Oh my my!

What a fascinating start! Suspense and cloaked identities, vengeance and compassion... Going to be an amazing feast I can presume. . Prologue made me think may be Swara was physically abused.. but neXT chappie relieved Me. The girl with short bob is Swara I guess? May be I'm wrong... So many characters that I've to turn a detective I can see. The Rebel is Laksh? Two other girls are mentioned. One Lakshmi, one the uncared.. wonder who are whom.

Update soon! Otherwise I'll forget the derails of Forgotten Memores!
With love
Dyuti

Dear Dyuti,

I am all😳😳😳 to read your words. I did not use names in an attempt to create suspense, now it seems that there is quite a bit of confusion.But I so love reading all the guesses - most attempt only two or three, though at least all the second generation could be guessed (that is what I thought😉).No Swara is not physically abused though the reasons would be clearer in the following chapters. Rebel is Laksh?? Wait a little bit, Chapter 2 will make it clearer, I hope.

Will update soon.

love,

Nyna

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Nynaeve

@Nynaeve

Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#123

Originally posted by: NitaReid
Well you know how much i hate this word.. Yet still couldnt get time to read yours..Feeling bad..I want to read soon..So will comment when i get to read till here you go my most hated word

RES

Dear Nita,

Take your time to read, and do not feel bad about not finding time to read or comment. It happens. I still have to re read and comment on your BTM - I have a couple of theories about AP, DP and Sanskaar, they just refuse to see light of day😡 Once I am able to write them out, will start rambling on the BTM thread😳

love,

Nyna

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Anahita_Leve

@Anahita_Leve

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Posted: 8 years ago

#124

Originally posted by: Nynaeve

Dear Dyuti,

I am all😳😳😳to read your words. I did not use names in an attempt to create suspense, now it seems that there is quite a bit of confusion.But I so love reading all the guesses - most attempt only two or three, though at least all the second generation could be guessed (that is what I thought😉).No Swara is not physically abused though the reasons would be clearer in the following chapters. Rebel is Laksh?? Wait a little bit, Chapter 2 will make it clearer, I hope.

Will update soon.

love,
Nyna

To my confused soul's defense,
I kind of jumped into this wagon. Regarding the Rebel I'm torn between Sanskar and Lucky... I think Swara's not wanting to be touched is something related to her birth mystery/ her mother's tale. And I think I should read again maybe some one from 2nd gen wants his revenge? I presumed him Sanky.

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Sharon

@Sparkler8

Dazzler

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Posted: 8 years ago

#125

Hi Nyna,

This is not "res" post. I just saw your pm in my inbox. I will have to apologize dear.

I don't think I can read this until I have completed my FF. Its taking up all my thinking memory that my work also has to make do with auto pilot. Luckily, this is Dec and things are moving slow.

So here I am to promise you. I will read the story in parts. And once I complete each part, I will leave a long comment for you.

It will take time. But I will get there.

Take care and keep updating. Thank you for pm. They are going to be helpful when I start reading this.😳

Cheers

Sharon

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Juanita

@BlurredLines

Trailblazer

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Posted: 8 years ago

#126

Originally posted by: Nynaeve
Dear Nita,

Take your time to read, and do not feel bad about not finding time to read or comment. It happens. I still have to re read and comment on your BTM - I have a couple of theories about AP, DP and Sanskaar, they just refuse to see light of day😡 Once I am able to write them out, will start rambling on the BTM thread😳

love,
Nyna

Yay Nyna got theories about AP, Dp and sanskar..looking forward to read it dear but do take time as I can wait and I will in the meanwhile try to catch up chapter one of this Lovely FF.. Which I am very eager to read..

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

@Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 8 years ago

#127

Originally posted by: Cogito_Ergo_Sum
Res for prologue 😊
Nynu...bear with me for some delay in a detailed revert. Will be back as soon as I make a decent progress on final proof of Maheshwari House Murders # 3. 😊

Nynu...🤗🤗🤗

I was starting to type out my take on Chapter 1, when I suddenly realized, much to my consternation 😲 😲 😲, that I had not yet Un res'd on the prologue. 😕 I very much fear I need to start popping Memory Plus pills, I had completely forgotten I had not un res'd on this😕. But in the spirit of better late than never ...😉 (the early bird gets the worm all right, but then the early worm gets eaten, is it not? 😉) 😆

I loved the ambience you have created for the starting here. The sunrise painting the sky in shades of cerulean and gold...you can imagine the chromatically obsessed me grinning in delight at the aurulent beams. 😉 The way you described the soft glow lighting up the sky, I almost felt I was right there, watching Swara go through her exercise and meditation routine. 😊

That little snippet of how the Diwali festivities had troubled her----the light and gaiety further reminding her of the darkness in her mind and soul---that was so profound. When one is carrying a burden, even if one is not precisely aware of what that burden or anguish is; the external atmosphere of brightness and celebratory din, must have seemed jarring, even painful.

The way you had described Swara's concentration, her awareness of her surroundings even while her mind was focused in meditation---that was very well done. As was the description of Sanskaar padding stealthily towards her, like a Tiger through the jungles of the Sunderbans. 😉 😳 Feline grace he has, indeed. 😉 But not enough to catch Swara unawares...who promptly demonstrated her awareness by raising her foot in a superbly controlled attack position, to within an inch of his nose. Ah, Sunny's nose...😉 What a chiseled feature that is! I am even more glad that Sunny himself, that Swara timed and controlled her posture with clinical enough precision to never risk breaking it. 😳

Loved that description of the warmth and happiness that seeps through her, when she registers his presence behind her earlier. She's not acknowledged it to Sanskaar or even perhaps to herself, but she does keenly desire his presence, his company.

So they know each other for 8 months...and Sanskaar feels a bevy of emotions towards her; very protective as well as a tad irritable or sulky. 😉 Let me re read Chapter 1 to see if you have answered this question there----one thought which struck me was, Does Swara remember that her name is 'Swara'? Or was this a name which was given to her since she did not remember her own?

Her reluctance, almost fear of being touched----the only exception to this being Sanskaar----filled me both with a keen fear, a worry of what she might have undergone; underpinned by a melancholy sense of ...I don't know how to describe it precisely...I guess, I can describe it best as feeling very moved, at the implications of that exception made. The fact that she trusts him so implicitly, despite something very unpleasant and emotionally scarring, which must have happened to her.

Will be back soonest I can, for Chapter 1. 😊

Lots of Love,

-----Viji

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Nynaeve

@Nynaeve

Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#128

Dear Viji,

Your comment is indeed a ray of golden sunshine for a day that forebodes storms (workwise😊).

I will get back once I finished working around the blue sweater theory, since the one I gleefully wrote is so absolutely wrong.

loads of love,

Nyna

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Juanita

@BlurredLines

Trailblazer

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Posted: 8 years ago

#129

Hi Nyna dear..

I am here for Chapter 1..But frankly i am not sure what to say😆..It hard for me to guess anyone ....I saw Viji has posted and eagerly opened it in hopes it was for Chapter one..So i can read her comment and find out who is who😆..My luck she unres for prologue..But girl you did an amazing job if you want me to be clueless about the character then i am 100% clueless ..Except Swara i guessed her..😉..Well not that it deserves an star it an easy guess i suppose but the rest 😕.. The person who cant spend birthday is Ragini i guess.. Not sure..

Who is Swara father who is so bent on Revenge plan, and who is his Supporter 😉..I need names for all this characters😆...But regardless of my current state of confusion, Chapter 1 was amazing ..Be it this surprise guess who feature or be the interesting information revealed about the characters and some are connected right..Currently i need few more chapters to atleast make some educated guess..For now..I love this suspense.. Way to go girl..You keep making me go speechless with you amazing chapters.. You are an amazing writer Nyna dear.. So much work went in to this FF and i am so amazed at that.. 👏...Post Chapter 2 soon and let me crack atleast one percent of this suspense😉...Until then..Will be waiting..

Love

Nita

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Juanita

@BlurredLines

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Posted: 8 years ago

#130

Originally posted by: Nynaeve
Dear Viji,
Your comment is indeed a ray of golden sunshine for a day that forebodes storms (workwise😊).

I will get back once I finished working around the blue sweater theory, since the one I gleefully wrote is so absolutely wrong.

loads of love,
Nyna

Blue Sweater theory indeed..I can never crack it , the only thing i was sure was Swara, Sanskar and Adaarsh are not guilty..😆