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Nynaeve

@Nynaeve

Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#111

Originally posted by: lucky.m
Nynu🤗

Whoa ..wat a read👏👏 ...too many ends hanging loose. First you need not be apprehensive be of anything you write bcos it's gonna be just loved ...I am trying to make some guesses here ..

Lucky😳😳it is twenty chapters - excluding the prologue and epilogue, not going to tie those loose ends till the final one😉 And you do give me a lot of relief - I kept reading if too many he and she in the whole chapter would end up confusing everyone, so did try writing it with the names, but then I did not like the flow so it was back to without names.😆

Angels fall ..mortals fly ..wow ..I loved the grey shade u used and the pics chosen with black words ...perfectly complimenting each other ..

That quote is good, right? I fell in love with it, but since I could not name the chapter with that I had to use a different twist. And you liking the edits - that is high praise indeed.😳😳

Two babies ..the one left at temple is swara who is left by shomi bcos sekhar might have betrayed her ..or whatever is the case ..unwed mother ? And baby makes her way to dida ..and taken away again by shomis brother ..and martial arts ..its swara i guess and one brought up as princess ..it's ragini I guess

Three babies, sweetheart and you are somewhat correct - more in the next chapter😆 Though Ragini as the princess seems to be the universal verdict😊

Architectural firm - Sanskaar ??I am.bit hung up here last few paras ...trying to connect dots ..may be an third read

That is easy - Sanskaar and the firm - I simply love architecture - my favourite profession, I just do not have the spatial ability nor much of drawing skills 😕😕 but that profession fascinates me - all the more after seeing 'Tere Ghar ke Samne (a very old Dev Anand & Nutan starrer with great songs - I had to get the DVD from the US as it is not available in India😆😆😆 - the title song is simply amazing - I used to dream of having someone singing and building for me - now it is one of those faded dead ones😭)

And you..👏⭐️👏 ..inta complicated story..inta opika itna resrwrch ..evi nee pada padmamulu ..👏this promises to be a roller coaster ride ..a superb one ..so bracing my self and it's gonna be a I repeat ...a superb one

It might not be a very roller coaster ride, more like a drive through Hyderabad roads, (Bangalore too, I guess) - smooth stretches for some time, some bumpy dusty rides, a couple of ditches, a few potholes and then you are home😆

Will be back with few more theories

Keep them coming, Chapter 2 would make most clear.

Love
Lucky

Dear Lucky,

Replied in blue above, and do keep the theories coming.

love you,

Nyna

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Sneha Ray

@sneharay

Voyager

+ 4

Posted: 8 years ago

#112

Superb update.. Quite confusing
Please give a CS if u can
Update soon

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Nynaeve

@Nynaeve

Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#113

Originally posted by: sneharay
Superb update.. Quite confusing
Please give a CS if u can
Update soon

Dear Sneha,

That confusion was intentional, my attempt at keeping some amount of suspense. Chapter 2 should make things a lot more clearer, hopefully a character sketch is not needed. The dates / names of the places should give a clue and would serve to link the names of the characters.😉

Chapter 2 will update soon - mid week?

Best,

Nyna

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Gayathri

@Gayathri93

Explorer

Posted: 8 years ago

#114

its awesome dear. i really loved it.
so i think there are 3 babies
1 the baby that dida took is swara and i think she is the one who is undergoing training
2 the baby princess is ragini
3 the baby whose father hates her

and i enjoyed the swasan scene 😛. This is totally a different story and its always refreshing to see swasan on a different plot and i am loving it. waiting for the next update

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Nynaeve

@Nynaeve

Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#115

Originally posted by: bhymi
its awesome dear. i really loved it.
so i think there are 3 babies
1 the baby that dida took is swara and i think she is the one who is undergoing training
2 the baby princess is ragini
3 the baby whose father hates her

and i enjoyed the swasan scene 😛. This is totally a different story and its always refreshing to see swasan on a different plot and i am loving it. waiting for the next update

Dear Gayathri,

I guess this is the first time we are interacting? And I am so glad to "see" you here.

Yes there are three babies - one who is abandoned and then taken in by Dida / the mystery man

Second whose father hates her for being born a girl and is treated as a curse

And third, the one who is considered a blessing and is brought up as a princess.

The names - partly right, just be patient a little more - Chapter 2 will reveal all, or rather most of them

Glad you liked the SwaSan scene - this story along with a few of my others are set in a completely AU - it is more fun to write.😊 Chapter 2 mostly done, all going well, will post mid-week.

Best,

Nyna

PS: I have sent a buddy request, so that I can PM you whenever I update. In case you are interested in reading my other ramblings, the link to my index is in the siggy below.

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blindassassin

@blindassassin

Inactive

Posted: 8 years ago

#116

Nyna

What a start dear. I am happy you stuck with your original draft...one with no names. It added to the beauty of the concept. Intriguing yet spellbinding..

Swara, ragini and kavitha or uthara?? Drawn towards the young child who was left to dida . Her sudden break down at her third bday brought tears. Feel so connected to her , hence guessed she might be swara. I guess the one with drunk father is ragini...not sure ..there must be a twist in the tale. But I loved everything about the story...Hope we will get a fast update.

Veena..

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krishuuuuuuuuuu

@krishuuuuuuuuuu

Voyager

Posted: 8 years ago

#117

Nyna...baby

It was mind blasting..iim speechless...im very confused too as u kept characters in suspense..though i have got few things...about rape incident...unwanted child...child abandonment...revenge...etc..i figure out swara but other were very complicated...one may be ragini...i dont know it confused me alot...but the overall result was marvellous..i just loved reading it...no names..just characters..layers of story...quite intriguing..im excited...the amount of effort you did to write this creation..hatsoff to u...thank for this n pm...now very excited for further chapters...

Giving short comment...lacking time..love u..muahhh

Talia

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Nynaeve

@Nynaeve

Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#118

Originally posted by: blindassassin
Nyna
What a start dear. I am happy you stuck with your original draft...one with no names. It added to the beauty of the concept. Intriguing yet spellbinding..
Swara, ragini and kavitha or uthara?? Drawn towards the young child who was left to dida . Her sudden break down at her third bday brought tears. Feel so connected to her , hence guessed she might be swara. I guess the one with drunk father is ragini...not sure ..there must be a twist in the tale. But I loved everything about the story...Hope we will get a fast update.
Veena..

Dear Veena,

Thanks for the vote of approval, I am aware it could be confusing without the names, but the other alternative would have been to give some names and leave the others without them😕😕 (for the names and identities of all would be revealed over the course of the tale) which somehow did not read well. So I went back to the original draft and after reading your take, I am glad I did.

All of them - remember in the plot summary - there are seven of them - are the heirs to the victory or vengeance. By now you have got some and guessed the others - wait for chapter 2, the names of them and the link to the incidents in Chapter 1 will be clear. Some identities - however, I would prefer to keep the suspense (hopefully, fingers crossed😆).

Chapter 2 - is quite done - a little polishing, a pinch of glitter and I will post it. But do note, I am quite engrossed in putting my wild theories about the MH murders vide PM to Viji, who very patiently tries to get me to see reason and rationale as to why those half baked ideas and under cooked theories cannot be possible, without giving away any of the suspense😡😡 Any delay in posting of Chapter 2 is to be laid at her door😈

love,

Nyna

Edited by Nynaeve - 8 years ago

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Nynaeve

@Nynaeve

Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#119

Originally posted by: krishuuu
Nyna...baby
It was mind blasting..iim speechless...im very confused too as u kept characters in suspense..though i have got few things...about rape incident...unwanted child...child abandonment...revenge...etc..i figure out swara but other were very complicated...one may be ragini...i dont know it confused me alot...but the overall result was marvellous..i just loved reading it...no names..just characters..layers of story...quite intriguing..im excited...the amount of effort you did to write this creation..hatsoff to u...thank for this n pm...now very excited for further chapters...

Giving short comment...lacking time..love u..muahhh
Talia

Dear Talia,

You are a darling and a very clever one at that and please the length does not make a difference, it is very heart warming that despite not having time, you still write a comment, that is very motivating.

You did get some quite right - and yes, without the names, when you cannot get a visual (like when you know it is Swara or Sanskaar or Ragini - their images automatically pop into the mind) you tend to focus more on the characters / locations etc. or not (that is the risk).

Chapter 2 will definitely pin the names to most of the characters - at the children - as to the adults - over the course of the story, though you would be able to piece the events much better.

I already have a rough draft, though some chapters are in a better shape than the others (for a couple I only have the plot outline for that chapter😭), so some would be up quite fast and there might be a delay for the others. I shall try to be regular, though.

love,

Nyna

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Anahita_Leve

@Anahita_Leve

Navigator

Posted: 8 years ago

#120

Dearest Nyna,

Oh my my!

What a fascinating start! Suspense and cloaked identities, vengeance and compassion... Going to be an amazing feast I can presume. . Prologue made me think may be Swara was physically abused.. but neXT chappie relieved Me. The girl with short bob is Swara I guess? May be I'm wrong... So many characters that I've to turn a detective I can see. The Rebel is Laksh? Two other girls are mentioned. One Lakshmi, one the uncared.. wonder who are whom.

Update soon! Otherwise I'll forget the derails of Forgotten Memores!
With love
Dyuti

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