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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: prerulalli



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Hey Prerana 🤗

Swara is so disturbed with the seperation from sanskaar😕😕😕
Uttara trying her level best to cheer her up😊

Yes, being parted for each of them is such a wrench

Sujata nd swar's convo-------It was so beautifully written without any compromising promises made lyk in our telly
Purely logical----I so loved it!!!👏👏👏

Glad you found logic in it, I detest illogical tracks and unfortunately in TV world we get the latter mostly 🤢

Annapurna overheard the convo--Both sujju n annu are stunned with shona's bravery---Aah i so love this girl😊😊😊

I love my Swara too 😳

Ragini Ragini Ragini--😡🤬---I so knew it!!! it can only be she who cannot see her sister's happiness...Hopeless case i say...Well Thankgod someone had an eye on her...😃😃

I think you had a bit of a shock later with the Ragini mystery? 😲

The parchment and the message contained in it...😡😡
First of all better that sanskaar ignored her plea to accept her back..but how can that lady expect him to keep her as his mistress...Damn pissed off iam😡😡
These two girls------Ragini and Kavitha---I swear i would love to dig their grave personally and make sure that they remain in that forever and evr🤬
Swara's anger is quite justified...But i loved the way she composed herself saying that Sanskaar can never ditch...By chance if he wanted to go back to kavitha, she would move out of his life (thats my girl get going...Not lyk that sadu rago...Grrr i so hate her 😡😡😡)

😆 I love the vamps I wrote inspiring such anger and disgust- SwaSan really raise protective instincts don't they? I just wanted a Swara who passes her test as Sanskaar immediately did, their trust in one another and how well placed it is, is part of the beauty of their relation to me.

Swara analyzing the situations in her mind 😊😊😊 That's so quick and impressive yet she was scared...and she was found by the right person at the right time..Annu😊😊
Their convo is so very amazing👏👏👏
The way annu says to swara to remove all her fears from her mind by writing them on the paper and burning it later is so thoughtful 👏👏👏
All the ladies in this part are so impressed with her bravery

I love Annapurna and her sensible and yet often political way of thinking. You will have seen later what she did with that letter, it was not for therapy only 😃

Thats so nice to read
Thanks for the PM
Continue soon

Hope the later chapters have been ok 😊

Love,
Prerana😊


Dear Prerana

Replied in blue above and sorry this has been so late!

Love,
Shruti

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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: lucky.m

What ?? Pawan is dead🤢 ..no no no shru..dont kill him please ..😭😭😭 make him alive na atleast by end of DK ..😕😭😭 keep him in coma, please and I knew it , i knew it was janaki , I expressed my doubts in my comment for chapter 30 but yeah my guess was right ..that means she always despised sharmistha and swara ..she never accepted them ..all this while shae has been acting to be mahaan😡😕


And I hate that creepo devendra .. I hate him ..I knew his death is going to be painful when sasnkars unleashes his fury on him..I am so waiting to read about his death.😡😡😡

The convo b/w sasnkaar and laksh was nothing less than eventful and sounded like much needed one with truths being unfold layer by layer ..

Such a power packed chapter shru👏 👏👏but with a painful part😭😭..only if pawan as alive but I understand his death might be much needed to add fuel to the further chapters but kya kare I love pawan .😭. say I am wrong 😕 He is not going to die without revealing the secrets to sanskaar, right??

I know it might have been so painful for you to put pawan through this , but you penned down the way he fought so brilliantly that it leaves readers with more pride for him than pain

and update Awesome like always 👏

Love
Lucky


Dearest Lucky 🤗

I am sorry to everyone I am so late in replying but in some ways it is just as well as what would I have said then without giving away spoilers?! 😆 Ahh, so hope I made up for the upset I caused with Pawan although I realise after the chapter I just posted that there may be other and perhaps greater upsets caused! Janaki it was indeed! And some had started guessing it, you had too and you were right although I hope I kept that suspense alive and open!

Devendra is a creep beyond description. I will await your verdict about his death; it seemed fitting to me 😡.

Yes, those two were long due a conversation and it had to happen with some interesting revelations coming to light.

So glad you felt it power packed Lucky, and yes it had lashes of angst too. Pawan could have died there and he may still who knows, the injuries were certainly grievous. You saw about the secrets so he did do his job there as you said. It made my week to read how you felt I portrayed Pawan- that was my whole aim and I genuinely believe that some achieve way more by death than living without heart 😃.

Thanks so much for sticking with DK always Lucky xoxo

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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Zephyr8

Thrilling update to say the least. Amazing how this story progresses. I always had a reservation about Janaki...seemed too good to be true. Pawan...leaving aside the realistic outcome of those injuries...I do hope he comes out of this alive and eventually well. Not for a happy ending but just so because not every other good, brave person should die in this story. However, it is your story and you will do it justice as you have done so far. As always, looking forward to reading the next one.


Thanks a lot Sagarika 😃 It makes me so happy you like the story so much. Janaki was one who could have stayed good all along but I had planned from the start that she would be the wolf in sheep's clothing. You will have seen what happened with Pawan but the danger of course is not totally past. Thanks for keeping faith in me and the story and I hope I didn't disappoint you with the later chapters 😃

Love,
Shruti x
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: dilwali

Hi Shru
Oh so much in this update. First of all i would like to mention this here my inner voice never trusted Jaanki n i always tried to find out any clue where i could say yes she is a villain but hats off to u by writing in such a way that it could not be guessed but in my heart i always found Jaanki a villain n now my instincts proved right but it was so heart breaking to see her like this. Swara loved n trusted her so much n she is such a cruel n selfish lady. I would like to say something if she did not like Sharmishtha she should have stepped back if his husband did not love her but doing such henious crime is unacceptable even if she felt cheated. Everyone has right to move on in life even if Shekhar wanted to with Sharmishtha n Jaanki should have self respect for herself n move on in her life rather than accepting them n doing henious things with them later on. I just cant tolerate double face people. Sorry for writing so much n coming to update i am horrified and trembling just by thinking poor swara alone with that devil Devender n i just wishing for some miracle to take place. Right now even i want to be a part of DK n just go there to save her from that devil and kill that bitch Jaanki with my own hands. Not to forget how Pawan fought with so many people despite of getting wounded. Poor soul still could not save his bhabhi n i m hoping he will be ok not dead as i want his love story with Uttara to blossam. Plz continue soon as i will be worried like hell about swara n i want to request you though you leave Ragini or not its upto you but i want Jaanki be given death sentence plzzz
ohhh still shocked n horrified
with love
regards - Kawal


Hey Kawal 🤗

Thanks a lot for this comment. Yes Janaki was a character I tried to sketch with care and use as I saw fitted this tale the best. It would have been nice if she was genuinely good but all thing sugar are not my style, I need other flavours and I felt it was realistic to the drama for it to go this way. It made me so pleased to read you thought I never gave any clues away in error 😳. Swara was the real victim and it broke my heart to think how the girl would feel at this betrayal, I carried that forward in 33 just posted . I totally agree with your very accurate assessment of Janaki's actions which even if they can be understood can never be justified, after what she did and the depths to which she fell 🤢. Please don't apologise for writing much, it was a pleasure to read 😊. I will await to hear what you think about later chapters 😳.

Love,
Shru xoxo

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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: bilvyina

Powerful update..when janaki got that msg frm her chamber..frm that time onwards i feel that she is the culprit..but i never imagine she wil hand over swara to that devil...plz update soon...otherwise wait karke mai marjavunga...plz dnt kil pawan and save swara from that dirty creature keep her safe...loved the update...but feel very sad 4 swara...in her life she face 2 betrayal from her loved one...kil that devandra bruately...plz sanskar safe your..swara update soon


Hey Krishna 🤗

Thanks a lot for your kind comments. Yes, Janaki stooped beyond most people's expectations I guess 🤢. I hope you read the update, as painful as it was. Swara has really had a raw deal, poor thing- sister, Janaki - urge 🤢. You will have to tell me what you thought about what came later!

Love,
Shruti x
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Posted: 9 years ago
nooo swasan cannot die...I have been a silent reader until now but chapter 33 forced me to comment...I wait impatiently until u update each chapter...but swasan cannot be dead...they still have to get married...ohh my now I feel like crying...somebody has to save them...anyways this was an awesome chapter...well u guess kavita felt guilty enough to save them one last time...she oddly enough in her own way loved sanskar...but it made me so happy seeing devendra die but not swaan please...anyways awesome update n cant wait for a new update...this cliff hanger is going to kill me...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Dear Shru,

Dark Knight - Chapter 33: Till death do us apart - it did not, did it?

"and my red rose has turned to white" - that was what first came to my mind (it is a line from the book - Fear is the Key , by Alistair Maclean, and a story that I have read multiple times). Despite my oft-expressed desire for love stories with happy endings (the more candy and sugar types, the better), I agree that it is the tragic ones that are immortalised. Further, you, as an exceptional author have written the chapter so well that the conclusions seem natural given the flow of events that took place.👏👏👏 I can understand you being fatigued creating it, I am tired in mind and spirit after reading it.

And if the ending of this chapter would lead to the conclusion it hints, I am sad and angry.

Why am I sad, apart from the 'right-in-front-of-your-face reason that they are dying, it is because their deaths would be in vain.

In vain for - Pawan, the lionheart, how would he live without his king? He has held on to what should be his last breaths so that he does not fail Sanskaar, if Sanskaar does not come back with Swara, how can he face himself? Notwithstanding the promise he made Uttara, he cannot go on.

In vain for - all the lives laid down by Sanskaar's men in the rush to reach Swara in time - how many brave men died in that fight, that they fought knowing that it was futile, their numbers were just not enough, and yet it was raw courage and absolute loyalty that spurred them to the very end. Their deaths would go in vain. Valiant Vali and Brave Veer - what of them, how could they survive, his death would mean death to them too.

In vain for - Kavita, the last minute sacrifice of her absolute worthless life - she redeemed herself - from all her poor choices, from her determination to hate Swara, from her foolish belief that Sanskaar did and does still love her, from her stupidity at choosing to believe her mother's words and with the final realisation that Sanskaar and Swara deserved each other. She managed to buy Sanskaar the few precious minutes. It was indeed the only act of selflessness that she had done and it goes in vain.

In vain for - Ragini, who made a somewhat half-hearted attempt to save Swara - I am not sure as to what prompted her, whether it was that the burden of guilt she bore, or terror at seeing what her mother had transmuted to or a small realisation that she loved Swara. Whatever her reasons, she did initiate the events which led to Swara being saved. Their deaths would sound the death knell for her too - there is no way Lakshya will forgive her, not over their deaths. She will not be able to forgive herself either.

In vain for - Annapurna who was a statesperson and a Queen - the one who had the foresight to keep tabs on Kaveri, the one who could convince Swara to arrive at the correct conclusion regarding Sanskaar and the one who was responsible for Sanskaar reaching Swara in time. But above all these things, she is a mother also, how will she survive?

In vain for - the preists and the soldiers accompanying Pawan who were massacred at the Mahakali temple (am I being a little dramatic?)

In vain for - all the soldiers fighting at Baadigunj - was it worth that the battle was fought when it was - for now, it appears that Janaki's insistence that Baadigunj be reclaimed was part of the larger plan of getting Sanskaar out of the way (I have to read to confirm but she started to insist only after Sanskaar returned with Swara and decided to marry her) - okay this is a little far fetched, but I stick to it. (drama quotient in my argument)

Why am I angry? Not only because you appear to be killing my beautiful Swara and Sanskaar, the cause of my obsession and the illogical unashamed shipping of this magical couple.

It is because, if you do kill them then it would mean that Janaki has won. And that is simply not done. Janaki has spent all her life channeling her resentment at being rejected by Shekar into hating Swara. Nothing would give her more pleasure than the news that Swara is dead. I do not think Sanskaar's death means much to her, she has spent that last twenty years hating Swara and the last few months plotting against Swara. For her, Swara's death is worth everything, even sacrficing her own daughter. She is demented but this would be a victory for her.

It would also mean that Kaveri won, though not in the same lines as Janaki. Kaveri never seemed to have any true affection for her daughter, she sacrificed Kavita, the day she was born when she ensured that Kavita was brought up as a courtesan. But with Sanskaar's death, Annapurna's pain and angst would certainly bring her joy.

I repeat, I am sad and angry and despite appearing childish cannot stop myself from requesting you - is there no way you can turn my white rose back to red? 😭😭😭

love,
Nyna

PS: And thanks a ton, for not having Sanskaar kill Devender, I would have liked it if Devender could not summon the courage to kill himself, but then he is also a Rajput so must have some amount of bravery.

PPS: Is it not somewhat ironic, that Swara and Sanskaar die of poison in the presence of Shiva, the god who drank poison to save the world and whose consort the great Kali (which is another manifestation of Parvati) is actually the kindest of all the goddesses despite her outward appearance?



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Posted: 9 years ago
Hi shruti
I am a silent reader of thw forum but I feel it will be injustice to a great writer if don't pen two words of appreciation for this great work. I am a voracious reader but never expected a story of such class in the forum. Thanks for the beautiful treat u present us every week wishing everyday was a saturday😆

Do continue to write even after u wind up DK

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Posted: 9 years ago
This was beautiful! I'd come back with a detailed outline of 31, 32 and 33!!!


P.S. Did I tell you I completely dig incomplete stories????😃
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Posted: 9 years ago
Awesome... unexpected twist but nice twist... do continue n U ve penned it well... waiting for next update

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