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Posted: 9 years ago

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Di I'm so sorry I don't know about your work...take your time di

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Chandana, Manu- working on it as fast as I can:) I am writing now and will carry on after work tomorrow too, so hopefully it will be done by end of the day tomorrow. Work has been truly awful, have had no choice- sorry lovelies xoxo

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Shivani Priyam Kumar

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Posted: 9 years ago

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^^In that case I need to edit my spot here as well! Bring it on already!

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The.Lannister

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Chapter 33:

SwaSan fans ke bure din aa gaye hai. Hum sab jagah bas ho hi rahe hai. Waha VaHe rulaate hai n yaha tu😭 😭

I loved your description of the Mahaakaal Haveli & how the home reflects the true nature of its owner. Dev looks like the Indian version of Ramsay Bolton🤢 Much like this chapter, I can say so much about this man but I just do not have the correct word with me. A whole night's sleep & even now Dev's cruelty leaves me speechless🤢

Like I told you once before I feel very very protective of DK Swara. How many times will her heart break? How many times will she be betrayed? For how long will she suffer for her parents deeds? My heart breaks for her. Such a pure innocent soul & all the people she meets are such utter snakes😡

I hate to admit but Kavi is fully redeemed in my eyes. By the time she died I almost felt sorry for her. In her short & sorry life she at least did two good things: first she saved Swara from Dev & then she saved Sanskaar. I hope she finds some peace after death & is born to a better mother in her next birth.

Veer! 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 The tears came in earnest when he was injured & Sanskaar had to find a place for him to rest😭 😭 😭 My brave horsie xxx

Dev got the death he deserved. I would have loved it had wild animals feasted on him while he was still alive 😡 I hope they throw his corpse to the vultures😡 The code being Sanskaar was awesome.

The end was touching. Even here Swara has to bear the trauma of watching her love die. How much more pain have you planned for my Princess 😭 😭 😭 Please no more now. She has to find happiness now & that happiness has only name: Sanskaar❤️ Pawan, Veer, Sanskaar, Swara...they all have to come back! They all have promises to keep...there are people waiting for them😭

Edited by The.Lannister - 9 years ago

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

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My dearest DK Family 🤗

Chapter 33 is up and posted on pages 1 and 2! Yes it was so long it had to be posted in two posts so hope you will accept the slight delay with the update as trade off for its gargantuan size 😳.

Guys, am utterly shattered and dead on my feet. This one has been murderous in more ways than one and I hope you will all forgive me for not being able to keep up wth replies to you wonderful people. With only a couple of chapters left to finish the saga, I hope you will think it better I concentrate on that and then reply to you all at leisure once I am finished.

But I read and re-read all replies and they truly are my life blood! Please let me know what you think of 33!

Love to all,

Shru x

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Res 😊

Hey Shru 🤗 🤗

You know how bad I felt about not being to comment at length for the last few chapters. So was really eager to grab the time to comment on this one.

Chapter 33 was such a dramatic, forceful chapter, knitting together so many emotions. There was a lot happening in this chapter, and true to your writing, the intensity never dropped for a moment.

As before, the way you describe the war/ battle scenes in DK is awesome. You really make us get into the thick of the action, as it were, and see those combats happening before our eyes. My heart was racing and fists were clenched almost all through this! And once again, what a superb way you have described Sanskaar, the way he literally becomes a righteous, avenging force, wreaking havoc upon all those who have trespassed and sinned.

That subtle mahakaal---mahakali analogy, the ying and yang parallel you drew, found its echo in Sanskaar and Swara here. Such valor, such courage, forbearance and raw power. Amazing.

Like you said, Sanskaar dons different roles in combat--sometimes, the cool, strategic General planning out the thrust and parry of various tactics. Sometimes the bellowing, fierce knight in the heat and dust of a righteous war, were he literally annihilates those who were vile and conniving enough to threaten his love and country. At other times, he is a skilled guerilla, slipping silently to mete destruction against a bevy of foes who outnumber him by far. All as if he is in a sense, different versions, avatars if you will. 😊 Nice touch there.

And Swara...what do I say for such a valiant Princess with a heart of gold? Even in the grasp of a monster, she never allowed her fortitude to shake. And she viewed Kavita with genuine sympathy, and that complete lack of bitterness and contempt was what made an impact on even such a cynical, self centered and selfish person as Kavita.

That soul connect between SwaSan---the bond that pulled them together, which ensured they are literally one soul in two bodies, two hearts that beat as one, was amazing. That moment when they see each other in the haveli, the emotions coursing through them---God, I must have read that sequence a half dozen times already. 😊

And here again, you imbued Kavita with several layers and shades to her character. Indeed, what a life ill spent and ill guided she has had. She was putty in the hands of her conniving mother, but she herself, never allowed her affections for Sanskaar to sway her from her quest for material comforts, her self centered obsessiveness to ensure she could lead a life of luxury. But in her way, she did feel "love" for Sanskaar. A shallow, grasping emotion it might have been, but perhaps it was the feeling most approaching a genuine love which Kavita was capable at all, of feeling.

She did redeem herself to a large degree by her act in her last moments. As you put it so well, it was perhaps not a thought out plan from Kavita, it was an instinctive move arising from an impulse of at last, putting someone else's interests before hers. Even if it was a fleeting, momentary impulse, she acted on it. Bolstered of course, by her rage and hatred towards Devendra, who had subjected her to years of indignity and torture of the worst kind.

For that act, as well as her earlier attempt to delay Devendra's torture of Swara, she does leave behind a legacy which softens the harsh light of judgement on her. Her acts of selfishness and betrayal would never be completely washed away, but at least, there is something on the credit side now.

Devendra got the end he deserved, the way Sanskaar battled and destroyed him was really a war of good versus evil, light versus shadow. After a life spent in depravity and inflicting shocking pain and grief upon others, delighting all the time in their terror and helplessness; Devendra deserved nothing less than this.

You know, Shru...The ending seemed so sad, and seemingly indicating that our Golden couple could go the way of Samarjit and Kalyani. But I don't know why...I am not feeling depressed at all. I just KNOW, that the next chapter is going to see them fight their way back to life together. Lead a long, happy life together. They deserve this, more than anything else in the world.

Destiny is cruel sometimes, but even fate cannot deny them their togtherness in the here and now...not in the afterlife. As you said, theirs is a love that defies life and death, across time and space. This love, this divine, pure, intense love, is going to come to fruition in their life now. 😊 I have full faith in you. 😳 😉

Loads and Loads of Love,

---Viji

Edited by CogitoErgoSum - 9 years ago

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Sree

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Posted: 9 years ago

#447

Res chapter 33

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Shruti 🤗🤗

I'm late as usual but wont be apologising as I believe you to forgive me as this has become constant. So to begin with I thank you a lot more for tell me to brace myself repeatedly. Had you not be that persistent I would be sulking here crying my eyes out just like what happened when you injured Pawan. All the preparations have finally paid off and I for one now is actually happy with this chapter more than I can express. It weird I know but I'm seriously not effected by them lying there.

I was really wondering whether Swara had realised that her Janki Maa is behind her so called kidnapping but seems like she came to realise the cruel betrayal in the worst way possible. I knew she was strong and will defend herself from that creature. She has proved time and again that when it comes to her heart she is far more pious than anyone else, the way she addressed Kavita took her to a new level

"Kavita! You? You are Sanskaar's Kavita? Oh God, how does this monster have you?" Trust me I read this line twice to make sure she said "Sanskar's Kavita" I can very well imagine the shock Kavita might be in.

I told you once that Kavita will turn to protect Swara or help her and see that did happen to some extend. But that didnt make me love her, just the hatred is reduced by 0.01%. She redeemed her actions by saving Swara at one point and Sanskar at the other.

Devendra deserved what he got. He needed to suffer all that hatred for some silly reasons when I look at it. I know that is not as silly as I see them to be. It's a reaction of a collection of jealousy and loathing he had harbored over the ages.

"I can't let you die before me and without me Sanskaar," How can she live without him? He is her soul.

"No, no! Please - it's better this way Sanskaar. All I want is to be together. There is no life without you anyway. Maybe we are the Samar and Kalyani of this age? That story had so touched me and it started there in their place, in a way for us, so maybe it ends like this. But together in death is worth so much more to me than living apart. Please just hold me and let me lie next to you."

They are not Samar and Kalyani of this age. This time ending is going to be different from last time and I strongly believe that help is on the way. They are there, all Swara and Sanskar has to do is hang in there just a little while longer. Great love stories are not the ones written by others after your death, but the ones you live to show others. And Swara and Sanskar will just do that. I refuse to believe other wise. Also there are too many unfinished business to tend to so they can't just die in peace and be the "twinkling stars" they are meant to be just yet. Lets say they live for 60-70 years and then turn to stars and continue their love there how about that?

I've not quoted most of the lines as I didn't want to quote the entire last part. I love each and ever dialogue between them and I truly understand where they both stand. The need to save the other and the need to join your love in life or death. Been there so I do understand that.

Love

Sree

P.S. My Epic Love story needs a happy ending with Swasan marriage I won't settle for anything less Just so that you know. And also I need Para part. I wouldn't mind a thread 5 😳 I'm too greedy. If this was not causing you so much pressure I would have requested more and more of it.

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krishuuuuuuuuuu

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Posted: 9 years ago

#448

Res shruuu babes

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Shruu love...😉

Chapter 33 was par excellence...i had mirage of emotion while reading it..excitement..nervousness...tention...disgust..hatred...aweee n finallly love n contentment...

It was one big roller coaster ride...sansku my hero turned saviour n protector..using his skill n mastery in stratezizing he envaded the haveli...n like valiant brave soldier killed entire enemy..with his few loyals...he reached his love n life swara...he witness kavita his first crush with that creep devendra was little shocked but composed himself n rescued swara...👏

Even kavita understood his love n sacrificed her life to protect swasan..🤢helped them in way which help sansku to bought enough time ..n then with brutality he killed him..was horrifying but that creep should die like this ...how many women n men this man had tortured for his sadistic pleasure...😡

Loved whole climax...beautifully woven...amazing lines...both swasan tookmy breath awayfor their love n devotion for each other...n finally we witnes two loving souls entwined together..ready to embrace death..but content n happy with the time they shared..happy that both are dying in each other embrace..i cried soo much...😭

Waiting for rescue n miracle..want them alive...live together..have kids...😭

Shruu u r the epitome of brilliance...thanks for DK...waiting for next installment n surprises...😭

Love

Talia😊

Edited by krishuuuuuuuuuu - 9 years ago

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#449

Thank you for the super quick Res's guys, hope I don't disappoint you all 😳

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Sree

@Sree8410

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Posted: 9 years ago

#450

Originally posted by: tootiefrootie11
Thank you for the super quick Res's guys, hope I don't disappoint you all 😳

Disappointing chapter from you and that too in DK, impossible!! It's worth the wait Shruti. I kind of had a feeling whether history will repeat but now when you have actually managed to write it I'm not buying this time. They are not going to be twinkling stars spreading their love through all eternity, they will live to tell the tale. I'm sure of it. Now I'm going to go and re read the chapter. First was in a bit of haste😳.

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