The Dandelions - Memoirs #3 page 12; A/N on page 15 - Page 9

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Res - after I read😊

And Unres...which could be earlier since I was the first to Res😕

Dear Nalini,

That was roller coaster ride - I had to read it three more times before I could gather all my thoughts sufficiently to express my comments.😊

We start where we left off in the previous memoir - a token of memories which now is the strength for both of them, a constant reminder of the long journey they have been together. From this slight nostalgia we jump into a memory of the kiss - though having a spoiler alert it was dreamy - So Sanskaar both initiates the act and the recompense for the same - he bribes Uttara to pull out the pins from Swara's tied up hair (those stringed - there / not there choli must have wrecked havoc on Sanskaar) and then demands a kiss to allow Swara to pin her hair up again. And how determined is he to get it - willingly or forced, she should have realised how determined her soon-to-be hubby could be. But he was in for a surprise, a kiss initiated by him soon turned into one that was taken by her. Loved this spunky version of Swara and her chagrined realisation of what she did (He loved it, I am sure)😉

Then we land with thud - that was unfair - no warning either 😡- the whole scene was so ominous and appears to a foretelling of what is coming; Swara being brave, she was prepared and content??? and Sanskaar unwilling to let her go - after all, how can one give up that which is our life and soul and continue to live. There was so much of raw agony in his protest - "no" but it encompassed all the fervent pleas that he could voice.

The ending is then an uplifting one - both actually falling asleep ( I suppose) in each other's arms and on noticing her now dried palms reveal his name on both her palms - exhilaration and pride! Of course, he won't take long to claim his waiting bride, decked in red.

Loved it and am now greedy for more


love,
Nyna
Edited by Nynaeve - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#84
Res Nalini:)

Drowning in work today and lots of other thing but will comment at some point in the weekend:) Mmmwah for this X

Unres:

Dearest Nalini

I am really embarrassed about the time it has taken me to unres this! As you guessed in your other reply there were battled and wedding that isn't yet happening that are giving me headaches but also work and family and just generally a sense of ennui due to the show being in such a sorry state at present! Apologies and here is my take on yet another stirring Memoir, i.e. No 3 in the collection! Also as usual IF reminded me why I get so frustrated with it- I typed a mega essay and in the main para it deleted more than half of it when i tried to swap the order around . I've tried to retype from memory but if I miss some of it off and the post doesn't read that well- sorry! 😕

So we start with the present and a Mr and Mrs Maheshwari so adorable even when old! Their teasing banter about their age and the sweetness of that whole scene belies their age in a way nothing else could. At heart they are still the SwaSan they always were and will be- the age affects the body but not the mind and soul 😳.

And I so love how the album is literally a visual representation of their walk through their eventful but very meaningful life 👏👏. You called it a treasure chest which it is and I almost feel privileged to be taken along too! So thank you as the chronicler for that!

We then get that lovely scene of their sheer longing and passion for each other before the wedding and their stolen moments which was all so romantic and yet sexy I was 😳😳, and reading with a huge smile too! I absolutely loved that touch of Sanskaar being so overcome by her bare back during the day that he has to actually bribe his sister to make her cover up with the ingenious method of letting down her hair- this whole thought is so ☺️☺️☺️. I actually find touches like that more powerful sometimes than an obvious kissing or physically expressive scene. But here the scene that immediately followed was equally errrmm stirring! ☺️ Those kissed and the way Sanskaar cannot literally keep his hands off his to be bride, and her shyness but her answering passion too as well as the "bargain" struck for a kiss and Sanskaar's enforcement of that- 😳

And then back to the present 😭😭- I can't write too long about this as it hurts too much! Literally the stuff of Sanskaar's nightmares and ours too! No matter how inevitable you know something is, when it was so beautiful and brought with it such memories it literally hurts with a pain you cannot describe. I feel you really bring that out with your writing on this amazingly conceptualised series and I know how difficult it is to express such angst without making it seem morbid- so you deserve a bow for that! 👏⭐️

And I want to say a huge thanks for ending this really charged one on the note you did- the flashback again and to such an anticipated and wonderful moment- the upcoming wedding and the start of that part of an unforgettable life!

Lovely work again Nalini and look forward to more! Have you planned how many there will be or are you going to play it by ear?

Loads of love,
Shru xoxo

Edited by tootiefrootie11 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#85
Another set of Memoirs!
Res: Will try to unres as soon as possible :)
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hey Nalini,

Couldn't come here before. Just arrived and stepped right in to the feast! Wow, the softer interludes of a fainting evening like present and the blazing sunny daylight of the past merged in to one colorful evening.

I can't really take Sanskar's pain. It sort of makes my heart too heavy. I wonder sometimes, will he make it for many more days if Swara leaves him in between the promised life long journey.

Swara...poor soul. It's heart breaking to see her fragile old self. But, still the bond they share and all the caring, affection, love is overwhelmingly there. I know nothing is eternal, but these two is so perfect together that it is so, so, painful to imagine one of them leaving the other forever one day.

The light moments from the past is too good. Each with a different color of their love, a different shade and a different promise. But always the same outcome, how much they belong with each other.
Enjoying the journey too much, but in the same while the pain is killing me. I fear this series will end with Swara's passing, oh God! How Sanskar and I take that much pain?

I adore your writing, so heart touching they are. Please continue soon.

Love,
Sakura
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hey Nalini!! 😃Wonderful update!! The past n present.. Sanskar never wants to let Swara go, didn't then doesn't now.. Both such different situations yet enriched with the same love.. Swara wants to be strong for him.. You have worded it so well.. Sanskar's pain, panic, frustration, desperation all portrayed so well through his nightmare.. In contrast, their pre-wedding memory, laced with romance n pure joy... Their love has truly just matured with time, just like wine, and now its one of the finest.. Beautifully written👏
Love,
Akshata😊
Edited by Krishnabhisarik - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hello !
Nyna, shuru, Nupur, sakura! Thanks 😊for the quick replies! I'm in a rush too. So you all can unres at your own pace!! 😊
We are all in the same boat so no worries!


Sakura!! Welcome to my lands. To my sadistically sweet lands.. You made my day today .in two big ways, one with this comment, I' ll come back you shortly for that(saying as an when time permits me to give you a decent reply ;p).

The other .. I just had an oh so yummy piece of chocolate cake. Forgive my manners for sneaking on such a sweet moment but the cake was so good and you invited me!!

Lots of love guys
Now gotta go

Thanks a ton!
Yours
N



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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hi Nalini.😊
Awesome and heart touching update.👏 Loved both the past and the present parts. OMG! SwaSan r going to get married in the past part. Eagerly waiting for it.😳 And in the present part, I really feel sad for Swara. She became so weak and fragile in her old age. And OMG! Towards the end of the present part, was that Sanskar's dream?😕 Feeling very bad for Sanskar.😭 But loved their bonding. The same love, bonding, care and concern for each other.😳 Plzz continue soon.😃
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Res..will Unres soon dearie ...
So sorry..

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