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Posted: 9 years ago

#71

Originally posted by: DivineDarkness
you updating??!!!☺️

Can't before Saturday 😭. Terrible week- my whole work pattern has had to shift this week and have had lots of other issues too, sorry!! I have to sit down all of Saturday and bash the chapter out. 🤗

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Posted: 9 years ago

#72

Originally posted by: Sanya17
It was really scary but when swara got that knife n hit him I got happy and relieved actually I had guessed smthing like this is coming BT didn't expect so soon this leach evil n all other abuse deserving devendra is gonna be so dead 😡😡 he will have to bear so much torture that he himself is going to beg for death 😡😛
😛Sanskar have swara with him now and sword too the way he is angry this devendra and all his men is gonna be dead and I will dance and blow whistle when he will die whenever he dies BT even in this horryfiying chapter Pawan not being the traitor made me happy 😛 bagri was not on my list because it was mentioned that the person is sanskars friend BT he was the person who had tortured sanskar it was mentioned in part 1 evn here too ap had told in prt 1 that Bagri hated sanskar whn he became sanskars friend i am cnfused 😕if I am not wrong he used to work for maheshwaris BT there was never any mention of him being sanskars friend in fact it was mentioned in part 1 how badly he was torturing sanskar him being sanskars friend once how is that possible when did it happen😲 was he sanskars friend before he got framed n captured😕 or by old friend devendra had actually meant old enemy like he had called sanskar his friend BT he actually meant old enemy the word friend was used as taunt

Update soon I can't wait too see that leach devendra dead😡 😡 I want both our swasan together to puncture sword on this devendra the number of enemy is high but I think if swara got a sword if she have weapon with her no one will be able to attack her she too can fight afterall she is our warrior princess I hope they will be able to escape soon
I had to take more than half hour to calm myself I can't even imagine how you must be feeling but hats off to you👏 not many writers can manage to write like this

Hihi I am a vampire😆its 4:30 here and I am still roaming in forum and don't worry you don't need to feel sad we can wait for replies of comments after all we swasanians r famous for patience😉😆 we understand writing new chapters really need a lot of time and we have works studies personal commitments so its alright if you cant reply to comments i wont mind at all i am happy to get new chapters
I think I rambled a lot ur story is sooo good that I end up rambling too much my comments hardly bcm long but in here it bcm so long update soon I really wanna knw what will happen they are outnumbered n sanskar is alone

Dear Sanya 🤗

Thanks so much for your lovely comments left for me at my sort of hours! I am a vampire too in that sense since writing DK 😆

I was already feeling beyond terrible for Swara's state and could not drag the torture for her anymore. The original planned scene was slightly longer but I myself couldn't contain the excitement of having Devendra's face slashed open 😡🤢.

Haha, you are another one who wants Pawan positive huh? Well with DK- you never know! Anyone can be capable of very unexpected things! Arrey- it was Devendra sarcastically saying it is your friend to Sanskaar, not that it really was! He was taunting. The clue was he said that about an old friend who can extract information etc which was Bagri 😉. So yes the word was just a taunt 😃

I am hoping you will like the action in the next part although there will be some surprises again too so I have warned people! 😲. I did feel very low and almost broken after writing I must admit. Actually I am still not in a great frame and absolutely drained out. I need some time for the next chapter and my work routine this week is very punishing on top of everything but I will do my best to be prompt like always.

And big hugs to you and SwaSan family for patience- yes on that we are experts huh?! 😆. I love the rambling- thank you for that and please keep it all coming, it really helps me!

Lots of love,

Shru x

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#73

Originally posted by: bones123
*Updated for Chapter 17*
Shruuu !! This is a wonderfully written chapter, the suspense, the dread, the feeling of helplessness, I felt it all !! Bravo really !

Swara is my true hero here !! She really went all out in trying to distract that lechorous piece of crap **Devendra...ugh...🤢...totally and completely detest him**

Supremely brave of her to attempt and hoodwink DSR into believing she was an unwilling captive of Sanskaar and wanted nothing more than to go home. She tries to use her innocent face and appearance to further her cause but that has a completely opposite and unwanted effect becuase DSR is a dog and he sees through it all ! He's not baited, infact entraps her into his depraved plans !! *what kind of nonsensical royals do they paalo man* !!

True to her Rajput-ness, even though she sees that she's not succeeding as much as she'd hoped to, she still sticks to her story and ploughs on !! Not dwelling too much on DSR's action because...it gave me the creeps and I really worried for her safety !! He's proved that he's a nutjob of the first order and completely bereft of any moral compass !! *still eeewing*

Swara's plight when she faces the worst of it is heart wrenching, and even worse because even at that juncture she's still trying to make sure DSR doesn't hurt Sanskaar as much. I whoooped with joy when she picks up that dagger to wound him and only wish she had done him more damage !! But seriously, to go through all that and still be in her senses to free Sanskaar is only something that the brave and do and I believe Swara through this chapter has proved her worth !! I don't think anyone can now doubt her grit !

Sanskaar...my heart went out to him. It must be horrible to witness such atrocities being committed to the one you love so much, and being unable to do anything about him. Throughout his roars and angry howls, all you can see is how much pain he feels...something that DSR latched on to therefore increasing his assault on Swara !! To know what the man is capable of, and to see the danger that Swara put herself in on his account, must naturally rip him apart !! And then to be visited by the old nemesis *who i hope he kills violently in the next installement*...eeks...

When she frees him, sword in hand as he kisses her forehead...its reassurance to both her and himself and probably also an apology !! Such a small gesture, but so loaded with meaning.

In the last update, I was saying that DSR should basically just kill Sanskaar, because once Sanskaar is freed (thanks to S's efforts and the fact that the arrogance of the stupid man was his downfall), he will not spare him. Even if an army appears *as they are now poised to fight*. I think DSR underestimated teh worth of Swara in Sanskaar's eyes and will feel the wrath painfully !! *whooopeee*

Totally waiting for the blaze of glory in the next part, but also at the same time worried about Swara's PTSD...I only hope that the two of them are able to stay strong and give each other the support. Sanskaar needs to make sure she doesn't shatter !

You've written this chapter so well, even with its less than appealing villain, it still grips you. I kept trying to coax myself to read faster so I could scroll down to the light at the end of the tunnel !! Never wanted a chapter to end sooner...and maybe that's what you were going for ? :)

I'll see you at the next chapter...you take rest and don't worry about the 18...you deserve the break ! Relax, recuperate and rejoice :)

P.S : Thanks for not makign PKJ the traitor...phewww...also are merry men appearing in the next chapter...*i know you'll say wait and watch...so telling myself that :P*

as usual..P&J in abundance for you...mwaaah...

My Pri Angel 🤗

How you always manage to feel on top of the world even after the crappiest of days by reading your lovely words! Mmmwah for that. Thank you as ever for the love!

Swara was truly a hero no? I so wanted her to be and to show this incredible brave warrior Queen so worthy of our DK and I hope I have managed that. She stuck to her guns despite the situation being beyond intolerable for her.

DSR- I don't think we have enough foul words for him no? He is such a sick creep, the world would truly be a better place without him. Yes, I get him giving eveyone the creeps, I am still slightly reeling from having written all this.

I was myself almost in tears and had to keep writing as unfortunately commitment to the scene and plot, means having to see it to its bitter end! I did cut some of the overall scene out- not more drastic things but other little things in it, that I just couldn't face as I was rather eager for his face to get slashed!Exactly what I wanted with Swara- to show the serious steel that runs in her spine- she truly is Sanskaar's soul mate in every which way.

For an action oriented mighty warrior not to be able to do what he can and to witness the worst form of decimation of all he stands for is agony beyond belief and whilst of course nothing can compare to Swara's plight, Sanskaar too has suffered beyond measure . Yes and then on top to be faced with Bagri- I had to explain the Bagri connection and bring his part to be linked in you see.

Spot on about the forehead kiss!! See my comment above. It was a gesture of asking for forgiveness (his guilt is crushing), saying thanks to her and for her, and then reassuring her he will take care of everything now 😳.

Let's see what you think of the action in 18, although have somethings planned that might be slightly unexpected for everyone! What to do- I have to balance realism with drama too huh? 😃 As for the PTSD- that is going to be bad yes, and it will take time to heal for both in a way. I will have to of course manage that properly- *wish me luck!*

I did want that reaction you described so as a writer, I am glad most seem to have felt all they should have, although as a person I truly cringe at the horror too! Haha- PKJ isn't a traitor in this one dear Priyu, you don't know what the rest may bring *evil laugh* 😉.

Thanks for always asking me to rest along with delivering fast chapters too- really appreciate that. Love ya and catch you soon!

Shru xoxo

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#74

Originally posted by: The.Lannister
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Chapter 17:

Phew what a chapter!😳

Dev is such a twisted bas***d. An intelligent bas***d but still a bas***d😊

Like I told you earlier Swara here reminds me of Sansa Stark. She doesn't fit in the traditional definition of a strong character but she has a certain steel in her which comes to the fore in such situations. She falls in her own trap when she offers her "friendship" to Dev & though she immediately realizes how he has twisted her completely innocent words to serve his own dirty ends she cannot back out. With courage & determination she goes on. And even here Sanskaar & his safety are foremost in her mind. This girl really doesn't have a single selfish bone in her body. She is so brave to actually put herself up as bait in order to distract Dev. It wouldn't have achieved what she wanted (saving Sanskaar from Dev) but it did buy her time & in the end that is what proved crucial😳

I wish she hadn't missed his eye😊 Should have stabbed him right through it😊 but never mind! A kick in the right place & a scar right on his face which will last him his whole life & remind him of what happens when you touch Princess Swara Gadodia are more than enough at the moment

For the first time Swara had my attention to such an extent that I saw everything only from her perspective, even Sanskaar's desperation & grief at her suffering. But now after reaching the end of the chapter I can finally see things from his POV too. How hopeless he must have felt to not be able to save his love, and not just not save her but to see her being treated in such an insulting & gross manner. He who guarded her fiercely for these many days from everything & everyone has to watch her get molested by this monster

The next chapter is going to be a torment of a different kind I guess. Swara is working on adrenaline at the moment & hasnt had time to register what all she went through. When things around her calm down that girl is going to be so broken😭 and even Sanskaar for that matter because seeing her break down is going to increase his guilt by a thousand😭 I really hope they are able to heal each other's wounds, both physical & emotional, like they did last time.

Lanny dearest 🤗

Indeed, about Dev- we had this chat no and agreed that I didn't want a "comical" villain and I certainly haven't got one of those! He is beyond any expletive I can think to aim at him- a true blot on this earth. Sadistic psycho.

Aha- yes we had the Sansa discussion. Sansa isn't one of my fave characters and I think Sansa has an edge of slyness that Swara of course doesn't have but I couldn't agree more about the underlying steel in their backbone. It does make them far more resilient than most would ever believe them to be capable of and partly that is what fooled Devendra too towards the end. Yes, she literally soldiered on and both SwaSan were trying to distract Dev from each other . She genuinely has no selfishness you are right. Exactly- that they needed time or the game would have been up much sooner and now she has managed to get them in a position with a minuscule chance at least despite the odds.

I loved how you focussed on the nub of that injury- perfect place to hit and then the permanent reminder (or well for however long the man lives 😉) of the effects of his sickening debauchery.

I feel truly overcome to read that Swara kept you that griped- that is a testament that I have written a Swara you really love and approve of 😳 and I know here you were genuinely upset for what she had to go through . Absolutely spot on about Sanskaar's reactions- he felt the sheer agony of hell . Yes, in coming times there is much healing but again very complex as there are so many things to deal with too, not least of all the immediate coming battle, where realistically it is so hard to make it out when the odds are what they are!

Love you,

S xoxo

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#75

Originally posted by: manishasatpathy
amazing update!
congratulations for the new thread and thankyou, thankyou, thankyou for giving updates so soon, i had thought there wud be no update before this weekend but i am glad u updated after reading the last chapter i was having a hard time thinking how swasan will escape this mess, there were almost no chances but now even if sanskaar is outnumbered, the hero is free and furious with all the happenings so i am sure h will find some way to escape, i hope they escape soon i loved the way they were in ehsaas nagar, though i am not sure it will be the same again but i wud love to know how things move for swasan so will be waiting for your updates, plzz update soon :)

Hey Manisha 🤗

Thank you so much for your well wishes and for the lovely words! Please don't thank me- I owe it to you guys for all the love and encouragement you shower upon me after each chapter 😳😳, truly means a lot. Yes, in a way Ehsaas Nagar has been left behind but the feelings they found there are not, so don't worry- despite hardships, SwaSan still have a lot to go through, live through and experience together too 😃. Do keep reading.

Love,

Shru x

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#76

Originally posted by: Kamala05
I was eagerly waiting for this chapter as chapter 16 was ended in a cliffhanger. It's been long since a fiction had an impact on me.

Swara though a child at heart, she showed courage in fighting against the evil Devendra. The man is disgusting enough with his nasty thoughts. But even in this unfortunate situation Swara was concerned about Sanskaar ,perhaps that gave her courage to confront .I felt bad for Sanskaar's helpless condition, but I am relieved that the chapter ended on a hopeful note

Hey Kamala 🤗

Thanks for reading and for saying this Fiction moves you 😳. Swara was the true hero almost of this Chapter- the poor brave baby . Yes, the point was that even at the worst of times, they were both consumed by fear and concern for the other and not for themselves - true soul mates. I had to end on some hope as the chapter itself was so grim. Hope you will enjoy the coming chapters.

Love,

Shru x

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#77

Originally posted by: Soundless_mirth
I cringed reading the whole thing. I mean i love swaras strength but could she be more dumb! I think she shouldve opted for silence because the outcome wouldve been same nonetheless but our sweet princess is too naive for the dark world. Oh my poor sweet swara! I want to hug her and make sure she forgets about this asap and sanskar too! The man in him wouldve been tortured by this,a noble soul he is. Is it bad to hope that sanskar gets mad at swara a tiny bit for talking when he told her to shut up? The poor girl is shaken though, the comfort our prince will offer will do the job no?! Wow you're updating quickly and im so psyched about that!! I hope you dont stress yourself too much. Keep bringing the lovely updates whenever!! I cant wait for the next chapter :)

Hello my dear!

Yes, I am sorry- it was a brutal chapter but like I said at the beginning note, it was not gratuitous, I wanted to bring so much out but I am so overwhelmed with how much you all absorb and give back on this story 😳. Swara is rather impulsive and way too naive for her own good yes. She didn't realise that Devendra would be that low- Sanskaar had and that is why he had all along been freaking out but the die was cast and the price had to be paid . They still have a lot to face but yes, after this will be the challenge. Living through something like this is beyond hard and Sanskaar too (in a totally different way) will have his own demons to fight. As for him getting mad, I see what you mean but also as you say, he will probably have to keep her from the cliff edge .

I like to get the chapters written asap but this week has been a killer for me, I haven't been able to work on it in the week therefore and am out all day Sunday too so my only hope is Saturday! Please keep reading and competing, it keeps me going:)

Love,

Shru x

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#78

Originally posted by: Chexa123
Wooowww...
First and foremost congratzzz on the new threaddd...👍🏼
And what an updateee...
Really felt sad for Sanskaar and Swara 😭...
And just hating Devendra more n more...😡😡
But thank God that Sanskaar is free...
Cant wait for the next update...
Plsss updateee fast...

Hey dear 🤗

Thank you so much! And I am so pleased you liked the update. Yes, it was a brutal and tragic chapter but SwaSan are together and even the worst of experiences are all part of them growing and getting stronger. Sanskaar is indeed free and I hope you will like the action in the coming Chapter 😃. I just need some time to sit and write and hopefully by the weekend I will get that.

Love,

S x

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Posted: 9 years ago

#79

Originally posted by: Shuchi2013
Beautiful,amazing and awesome was what chapter 17 was.Chapters15 ,16 and 17-beautifully painted emotions of both Swara and snacker.This story is getting interesting chapter by chapter and every chapter makes me want to read the next.😊😛

Dear Shuchi 🤗

Thank you so much for the kind and lovely reply and for enjoying the story so much! It makes my day to read such enthusiasm- I so appreciate it! Keep reading!

Love,

Shru x