DARK KNIGHT- A SwaSan FF- T2- DELETED- AN- PG 1 - Page 23

Originally posted by: Sanya17

wow great update
in the begining i knew tht it was smones dream bt didnt expectd it wd be raginis dream she was sounding like evil creature who hs no guilt about wht she did bt its good that she felt guilty fr her actions i am happy that
ragini is unable to be happy bcz of her guilt
swasan interactions was nice sanskar 😳 its gonna be hard to handle himself whn such a beautiful princess roaming around him
well their imrovement was good they hv started sharing simple things about themselves to each other slowly they will start sharing their secrets to each other
i hp this mansion is safe n no unwantd prsn cn enter i am jst wrd about their safety
i lv dis story a lot waiting fr d nxt prt hp to see u soon with the nxt prt 😊

Originally posted by: tootiefrootie11

Ohhh- have you read my Comprehension Series? There is a Swara dream sequence there you might like 😉. It's in the first OS of that series- titled Unravelling! Here, I will see what I can do but you might find enough supply coming your way to not feel deprived at a dream sequence to show Swara's growing feelings 😉

Originally posted by: bwvianna

Res -Chapter 9 & 10

Unres:

Hey Shruti,
Brilliant pair of chapters! The story is finally moving towards SwaSan and towards Sanskaar's plans to ferret out the real traitor.

Chapter 9:
I really enjoyed reading it. Finally Swara acts like a captive trying to escape, begging and pleading to be let go, even attempting to injure Sanskaar. It was the logical reaction and fantastically worded. Really enjoyed the attempted escape with Veer. LOL! Poor girl! So Sanskaar's has his own small army with a number of loyal friends/soldiers? Looking forward to his plan! SwaSan interaction was a treat to read. :)

Chapter 10:
I want to applaud you for the Part 1 - Ragini. Really! This part gave me the feels. Shruti hats off for this amazing Ragini portrayal. Her thoughts, nightmares! It was absolutely brilliantly worded, beautifully written! You have truly shown her amazingly. This character portrayal is just brilliance.

Part 2 was all SwaSan <3 Their lighthearted truce and the teasing Sanskaar! I was grinning like an idiot at my screen. It reminded me of the Highlander books where the abductor falls for the captive. I was awestruck with the emotions shown. Wow Shru! Sanskaar poor guy is sooo falling for her. I wanna dance! Fabulous update.

Keep writing. Awaiting update no. 11. :)

-V

Originally posted by: MusicAddict

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Okay, so why do you have to get this FF going better and better with each chapter. I mean, dude, whenever I think that this is the best chapter the next one changes that. So as you might have guessed form the above taareef, I loved loved loved this chapter!<3😳 It was too good!

Unlike the show, here total justice is being done with all characters. It's like this FF is more human and SR is... ahem..ahem, you know what!😆😉. The most troubling part of a crime or mistake is the regret later on. That too such a mistake that Ragini did, because of which her family had to face so much.😡 The guilt that she feels deep beneath her was something I wanted to see in the show but they kept on making Ragini devilish, too such an extent that there was no chance of guilt in her. Here Ragini feels a pang seeing Laksh's hatred for Swara whereas in the show, her joy used to know no bonds when Laksh used to call Swara characterless. At first, when I read that Sanskaar slashing Swara's neck, I'm like W*F!!😲, then I'm like might be Swara's nightmare outta her fears but it came out to be Ragini's nightmare. Quite unexpected! It's like just like the ghosts of your crimes folow you lifelong and you have to pay for them here itself. She can attain Laksh but this guilt will definitely eat her, I'm sure. Again as I said pure justice. This Ragini is better than the vile in the show!

Ah! Prince Laksh. He's just the copy of our Lucky! Delusional and immature. He can't change. No words for this man.. Let's go to Part 2😳

SwaSan bond is getting better day by day! Love these two. Swara playing the tanpura and Sanskaar getting too affected. I'm sooo happy! Music when sung by heart is the most pure and beautiful. When you sing for a crowd that nervousness steals away the elegance of the song, but when you sing for yourself, totally contended thats when the most divine from of music with raw beauty comes out from your soul, and thats what I always feel when Swara sings, since her voice always does something to Sanskaar. Oh God! When will I stop ranting about other stuff. Sorry buddy

Coming back to SwaSan, Their friendship is too good! Their camaraderie in such less time is too good. Their jokes and that easiness makes my heart go garden garden! Swara won't change! The detective Princess. Princess Nosy- I like it-😆 Sanskaar's choice of name is too perfect. He's gonna fetch pails of water for her. Ab aur kya chahiye! Sanskaar Maheshwari, the Knight fetching her pails of water! Oh God please give this Dark Knight to me. Again I started my rant.😆 Apologies.

Actually, apart from SwaSan, the two people whom I like the most in this FF are Janki and AP! How nice. SwaSan have got good mummies! I like it. This trust develpoing in them is great!

So SwaSan fall asleep together. Ahem.. ahem. Nice progress huh! I like it😳 Sanskaar wakes up to see Swara beside him and the way he literally drinks her features☺️ OMG!! I knew it! He'll fall for her first. The picturisation of Swara's features was too lovely! Amazing.. It was as if she's an angel with a divine aura around her for Sanskaar. Loved it. Aww... He was aching to kiss her. Sanky baby go ahead! No one's stopping you, Prince. ☺️ Negligence is the first sign of true love. I loved it when he went away with Veer, to calm himself down and his GM😆😳

Waiting badly for the next update as ever. Do post it by Tuesday please. Got an exam so will be able to read. Rest others are tough ones!

Originally posted by: NitaReid

Hi Shruti ,

Awesome update dear, i loved Chapter 10👏 . I always admired the Ragini here for being more evil than the one in the show. But i was surprised that she has a consioucs that pricks her too😆. And i loved it. This is how anyone would behave if they did betray there sister. Her constant nightmares , Her sadness when realizing how much her parents were broken , Constantly thinking about Swara and the time she spend with her, the guilt when everyone blames her sister for her mistake, lastly not being able to actually enjoy getting married to her love . I really like how you portrayed Ragini turmoil and inner conflict ⭐️.

I was thinking this Chapter will be dedicated solely to Ragini ,after all she deserves it but when i saw part 2 i was more happy to get my fare share of Swasan😳. Liked Swasan when they are on the truce. They are soulmates but still loved how inspite of there pain , they each make the other one laugh. Swara trying to focus on simple tasks to keep her mind oocupied , this girl really is strong and i am proud of her👏. Loved the growing awareness between this two. Swara is finally seeing the glimpse of the Real Sanskar, and Sanskar is busy trying to divert his mind from Swara . Loved how they both had different past yet somehow share the same pain . Also admired how they both keep each other from getting sad by changing the topic once i becomes too much for the others to bear, be it Swara diverting him when he thought about is Maa, or Sanskar diverting her from Ragini betrayal. i love this Swasan😳.

Once again Awesome update dear. Waiting for the next chapter . Do continue soon .😊

Originally posted by: krishuuu

Shuru dear... awesome update...cant tell u how desperately waiting for this update...finally read it...ahhh im at peace now...😆😉😊

Coming to chapter 10 ...ragini how convincingly u made us hate her...nice...nightmares haunting her...serves her right... but i love her too...bcoz of her swara will get her prince charming sanskaaarrr...😳😳

Liked her n lakshya convo...n her fears...👏

Coming to the bestest part...MY SWASAN...❤️

I just love their slowly blooming friendship...their confusion...gazes...hesitation..smiles...OMG... im getting addicted...muahhh😳🤗

Thank u for update n pm...love u...

Keep writing...waiting for next...

1thing can i request something...can u give us a scene where swasan encounter bandits...n they demand swara...for safe release of sanskaar...but our hero..fake accept their demand...swara panics...but in minutes kill each one of them...plzzz☺️

Originally posted by: Nynaeve

Shru, I have read all your stories - no way I would have missed any😊 but I just thought, maybe... Well - poochne mien kya harz hai😉. And now that I am here will re read the whole chapter again ( ok well- only the SwaSan part)

Nyna

Originally posted by: tootiefrootie11

Sakshi dearest 🤗

I love you for these comments and especially making time for DK when you are studying hard too and well just generally too- mmmwaah.

Thank you so much Sakshi, I love that you are so into DK- you tell me and ask me about the next parts and I just love the enthusiasm, it fires me up too- truly does! And as for the taareef- 😳😳, I read comments on this thread sometimes and get an odd feeling of "are they really saying this about me?"! 😳

Say no more about SR 😆😉

Ragini- yes, totally. We can do things and even want terrible things but the actual result of our actions, for most people, is something that can really eat you up after the deed is done. On the show- they literally butchered Ragini for me. They showed her overtly good first and then a monster- both totally unrealistic IMO. There was so much scope for Ragini- she remains one of the more interesting characters but in the show- I have no more interest in her. She is ridiculous to me. Here, I wanted to take double care to ensure I show her as I feel she is understandable, never justifiable, but you can see where her twisted mind is and why. Haha- you got a shock with the nightmare scene? Thank Shruti Lannister- it was her idea really 😆 To me, it was a rather Macbeth-type scene? Prince Lakshya ko choddo- even I am bored of him 😆😆

Part 2- my dil is garden garden reading your comments now 😆😳. I knew you would like the music touch!! And I used that despite the slight impracticality of it- with noise in the deserted area etc, but I just wanted that romance created so had to include. And what better way to make our Prince feast his eyes on his Princess with multiple nicknames. And yes, a famous Prince being her slave- ah the possibilities! Oh there is such a line for our Prince na?! Challo- we all share- in that time, a Prince/ King would have a whole bevy of ladies na?! 😆😆

Glad you like the Badi mummies! Yes, our duo shared their "first night" I guess! As Viji says, one of many in the future but she and me and I am sure all of you want more action in the future 🤣 but we have to control- long before we get there! 😳. I just wanted to try to show the sheer mix of his desire but almost worshipful feeling for her. The riding away- his alternative to a cold shower I guess! 😳 Ok- need to stop- this is getting too GM now!!! 😳😆

I hope I'll finish 11 by late tonight as new week and more work crap tomorrow . Will be praying for your exams too as ever. Lots of love xoxo