DARK KNIGHT- A SwaSan FF- T2- DELETED- AN- PG 1 - Page 24

Originally posted by: .Avengers.

Hey Tootiefrootie11 🤗:D<]"> (interesting UN by the way😆)

First of all, thank you so much to Divinedarkness for PMing your earlier story thread's link to me. If she had not, I would be missing such a well written and well researched Fic. Do you know how hard for us hungry readers to find one of them? Rare breed, I tell you😆 I read the 7 parts in an hour and last night found the 2nd thread. Thankfully, you updated the next part just as I was stalking thread to post this reply.

Let me start by saying two things - there are so many things I want to say about the story that I am afraid I will bore you, and secondly, Historial fiction/romance/drama is a genre I avoid as much as I avoid fantasy, post-apocalyptic Earth stories. I always thought how boring those times will be, no Internet and only gossiping 🤣 But i guess, I had not find good enough story to start with. I am glad to find yours to start with the genre.

I never really followed Swaragini from the start. The promo looked different, the real story after a while became cliched. How many times we have seen one bitchy sister ruining her sacrifical angelic sister's life? *Yawn*. For me, story spiced up after Sanskaar entered. Even then I watched in bits and pieces, till now I am confused which actors plays what and what are the relationships in the show😆 Your story thankfully loosely following the serial's storyline, so I am catching up, in a way.

Your writing is very unique. You put widely different adjectives in a single sentence and somehow they have the desired effect on the readers. The accurate descriptions create the exact scenes in our mind like you must be having while you were writing the story. The haveli, the expressions of characters, their internal monologues, the sinister silhouttes, the chilly, harsh weather of Rajputana, the escape and the journey, everything so well described like we are watching it on screen. A big accomplishment, I have to say, something every writers wants but few achieved👏. The amount of research you did for every tiny aspect, it shows when we are reading a single sentence or paragraph. It;s a grand task, dear, and I am so happy the outcome is magnificent and enthralling.

Fanfics are, for me, a way to connect deeply with characters on screen. Often I become obsessed with a show only after reading a few fics of it😆, weird, I know, but for me it's like if the writer is expressing so much through her words about a bunch of characters of a fictional show, how awesome the show actually will be? You managed to do it for me, especially for the characters like Sharmishtha, Janaki maa and Annapurna. I don't think in show they explored Janaki that much, the recent Maasi track doesn't count. Janaki somehow didn't succumb to the dark paths of jealousy and spitefulness and treated badly Sharmishta. Or maybe, there was nothing to fight for, Shekhar was never hers, so why bother? A nice contrast to her daughter, who should have looked up to her Mother more often. Sharmishtha, the other woman who only had her Husband and daughter, who finally managed to have an honorable position in the Royal family thanks to Janaki. But other woman will always be other woman, everyone respect her but with a glint of weariness in their eyes. None will forget her scandalous past or the product of affair, Swara, no matter how good they both are to others. Annapurna, the matron of Maheswari house. Fierece as Lioness, who single handedly managed to find her long lost lunatic traitor Son and brought him home, despite her husband's objection. And yet, she is helpless to the tantrums of Lakshya. The person who is source to our strenght is often our weakness, here, Lakshya is and always will be a weakness., never the opposite.

Both house have power and skeletons in their closets, a perfect match indeed. Annapurna sympathized with Janaki even before she arrived, just by hearing the rumours. What possesed a proud Rajputana woman like the latter to bring her Souten home? I wish you once explore this track, it;s rather fascinating. Both families Mothers literally exchanged their kids😆 Janaki smother Swara just like Shomi does to Ragini, while Annapurna is more a Mother to Sanskaar than Sujata ever will be. Annapurna is epitome of justice, while Lakshya is a master manipulator who backstabbed his own sibiling. No wonder Ragini's instinct to murder her sister became so ferocious here, the haveli smells like conspiracy and betrayal.

No matter how better Swara is, how enchanting, or artistaclly skilled, she will be always a lesser person to Ragini because she was not born into royality. It didn't even cross A's mind to think about Swara because she was fixated on Ragini, the true heir, even though the bubbly girl caught her attention. The feelings Swara evoked was endearment, but somehow A managed to suppress it and tried to feel irritated, a parallel to Daadi ma, who I feel was cross with Swara not because she was a brat, because she herself was becoming soft to the kid and it felt like a betrayal to her morals.

Ragini has everything, and yet she thinks Swara has it all. We truly have no idea what we have until we loose everything. She is first chosen for everything, people treat her with respect and sing praises for her grace and beauty, and yet she is jealous because her half sister manage to capture attention in way she can never. It only increased when Lakshya started noticing her sister more than his soon to be fiancee, and became full blown hatred when he broke it off. If only she had shook off her shyness. If only Lakshya had given her one more chance. How different things would have been? It must be her Mother's genetics, that she didn;t break down after Lakshya ended it, but unlike her Mother she started scheming the ways she can win him back, ironic considering she never had him in first place. She was so blind in hatred that she didn't notice her own sister was not happy with the sudden turn of events, she was so sure Swara was out to ruin her happiness

Swara, the sweet innocent soul, who managed to remain pure when circumstances were forcing her become bitter and dark. It is not hard to imagine the whispers she heard while growing up, then her migrating to Rajputana and harsh treatments from elders, still she and her mother tried to please everyone, loved everyone with their whole heart and poured them in the relationships. Ragini is an ideal sister, Janaki maa a second mother, and the rude Daadi maa is just a strict senior member of family. She has little regard to how to behave, not binding herself in rules and proper behavior codes, but it's not because she was trying to become rebel, it's who she is and what she believes in unimportant. Her free spirit is what captured the Maheswari Princes attention, which Ragini mistook as something improper.

Sanskaar, the fallen Hero. Once hailed as a leader, now a lunatic, a disgrace to family. The flashbacks to the event which destroyed him, his madness, the secret mission he has, you wrote it all beautifully. Like a moth to flame he is attracted to Swara, but disguised it as irritation because he could not avoid to be diverted from his mission. He was determined to stay away from her, which was futile once Ragini discovered he is pretending to be crazy. She protected his secret, he returned the favor by capturing all Swara's time and leaving Lakshya to sulk😆 poor Brother, he can't even shout at his mad sibiling. The world think him as a monster, deep down he also believes it, but he draws the line when Ragini attempt assassination of Swara. He realized there is a devil in the palace, with whom unfortunately he made a deal, and he had to pay now.

Swara was always so intrigued by Sanskaar, who is, to quote my favorite show Castle ''A mystery I never gonna solve." The mad prince who instantly disliked her, throwing tanturm at her and prefering his 'Dulhan Dost'. When her and Lakshya's relation was fixed, suddenly Sanskaar bestowed all attention to her and she was a captive. Not hard, I imagine, seeing his beautiful smile and excited eyes😳 She was so lost in him and she was unaware that the air of palace was changing, a dark spell was cooking somewhere. She put too much faith in Ragini to become a communicator between her and Lakshya, who took the advantage and created more MU. The attempt on her life came as a blow, but Sanskaar's true face and Ragini's cruel eyes only threatened to push her over the edge. How she is still standing and not falling apart? From where this inner strength is coming, when her family disowned her and she is out with a Man who is the reason of most of her problems?

And despite the facade Sanskaar put up in past, despite his warning in front of strangers disguised as a devoted lover's full attention, despite him taking her with him and possibly ruining the rest of her life, not unlike her Mother, she can't fully hate him. She tries to hurt him but he doesn't hurt her back, only disarm her. She hurls rightful accusations but he is not angry, instead sympathatic to her plight and promise her to bring home the first chance he gets. She is cross with him and he take it all silently, being a gentleman all the while and never crossing the line even as he is attracted to her. They call it a truce, because what other choice does they have instead of bickering and hurt each other all over again? Swara sees the other side of Sanskaar, who is not putting up a mask of Crazy, or even the fallen hero on whom many people are still counting. Just the person, Sanskaar, who adores his Veer, who laughs and teases her, helps her in daily work, sits with her and listen to her playing instrument, answers her questions with the patience of saint, share his childhood stories and pull her back when she is falling into unpleasant thoughts. Unknowingly to her, she is doing the very same. Her questions and antics stop him from falling into dark thoughts, her innocence and humility slowly pulling him to light. Also invoking some foreign emotions which he had buried long ago. Better luck next time for a Kiss, Sanskaar😉 she will be yours soon.

I got sidetracked, but it should be mentioned. The description of Moud, the old man and his DIL, the haveli that appeared out of nowhere, Swara exploring the mansion and finding the musical instruments, beautifully described. Make me ache to suddenly see this version of Swaragini on my screen ]">

Ragini, Ragini *shaking head* what she wants? And when she gets what she wants, what else she wants?😆 Swara was here, she needed to kill her. She is now disowned and far away, and she is having nightmare of her getting killed! Did not she want this? She is getting all attention now, getting to keep both Mothers, getting her love of life, going to marry him soon, even the guy admitted how wrong he was to reject her and so thankful he is that she accepted him. Then what, Ragini? Her thoughts make me feel if only she had thought about her family when she was consipiring against Swara. She made Swara look like she is having affair with Sanskaar, that she is characterless, even before the attempted murder. She never stopped to think how shattered her family would be, seeing one of their daughter killed. Now she is, but it's too late, Ragini. The cards are out of your hand now, you have to stand with others and witness as the next scene unfolds. She will get it all, the man she wanted, her family's and soon to be in-Law's respect, but at what cost? Even if her family never knows how far she went to destroy Swara, the guilt that is eating her inside, it's worth it. Recently in the show Ragini was lamenting how Swara gets everyone's love. Umm, maybe it has something to do with not being a bitch and try to kill your sister? Once Swara returns, can things go back the same way as they were? Can Swara forgive and forgets what she did to her? Can Sanskaar forget what devil she is? I hope not. She needs to realize how far she went, maybe even gets punished for it.

A question, so Lakshya is really over Swara?😆 Don't know why, but I feel he was attracted to Swara only because she was bubbly, spirited girl and so different than him or Ragini. There was really no deep feelings, maybe a hint of arrogance that he should get what he wants. When Swara started spending all time with Sanskaar, his ego was so hurt. I can't believe he could not have reached out to her if he wanted to, he was busy being so butt hurt thinking she is playing him When she was gone, he wasted to time to declare her a lost cause and get back with Ragini, again for the arrogance and weird need to control things at his own wish. Where is your heart, Lakshya? When can we see it? Are you really the traitor, because then your jodi with Ragini will be perfect example of Satan's match-making⭐️

Speaking of traitor, Ram Prasad is on my list. For the whole suspect-who-is-least-expected thing. I am fully prepare to be wrong about that as well😆

Once again, a brilliant piece of work👏 Looking forward to next update.

Originally posted by: bones123

*aaa^9999*...that is a small testament of how much I loveddd this chapter . Easily my fav one (wait..do I say that for every chapter...but trust me that's how well you've written it so far...each one more rewarding !! )

Ragini in this is 👏👏. Love this new facet of her. The DDD succeeded in her goals. Her ambition to become the queen, to be wed to the man she loves and grace that position she covets is all coming true soon. Coming to her glee...like I said earlier I somehow get her. Being second fiddle (even though Swara never intended it) wouldn't have been fun. Now that she's the helm of all the attention, the love...she can bask in it finally...free. It's funny how she saw true love in Shomi's action but didn't feel the same with Swara. Maybe because Swara got the love she craved from her own mum...(also I love how she finds freedom in this attention and glory and Sanskaar finds freedom away from it while being alone with S)

But how does one squelch that niggling piece of guilt, shun that fear of being caught, the burden of what you've done to your family. Every occassion of happiness is still tinged and tainted with Swara (she can't really escape can she ?) I totally did nto expect her to sprout that conscience, and think of the fate of her sister. However have absolute faith that if she's threatened again, all this will go to the backburner...DDD won't let Ragini win that easily. Who wins the final battle will remain to be seen, but love that she has her own demons to fight in addition to everything else.

Now for the dreamy part ❤️

How amazing is this truce ?!! His sense of freedom that is elevated because of her company is so fitting !! Them falling into this easy camraderie is only testament to the perfect nature of their match. Love how Sanskaar is trying to ease the tension...a prince with a sense of humour ❤️ (i need to find new words to say love...but loved that whole exchange in the kitchen...thoda sa dard...thoda sukoon)

He lets her play only to see that smile on her face, what a wonderful gesture. She shares her music with him...abandoning all other thoughts and he gives in to that joy...that she brings him.

Swara's intrigue of what makes the prince is a joy to read. She's conflicted about what he experienced to make him what he is...but glad that she's following her gut instinct about what she believes he is.

His secrecy annoys her...but you gave us readers such a cute conversation ! I literally want to be a fly in the Haveli's wall and see all this transpire for real *waise i hope in the future she mulls over the part where he says she'll have to go alone, back to the palace...and then resolves to only go back with him...adding to my wishful thinking bucket :)*

Princess Nosy...me thinks Swara needs to give Sanskaar a name as welll...Prince Charming bhi chalegaa..

Them sharing their experiences (or how much ever he could share) set another stone in the foundation of their relationship. Whether its him missing his mother, or her being reminded of her childhood and Ragini, its touching that each is able to gauge what makes the other uncomfortable/sad and spring to teh rescue. The beginning of their journey is just beautiful, and the fact that neither feels out of place or improper in the other's presence is giving me all kind of heartbubbles !!

The bond that you've mentioned...stranded survivors of a storm that bound them in shared desolation is great imagery. One day when Sanskaar voices his sufferings, she'll be there..mooring him..being his support in this storm.

The effect even a sleeping Swara manages to have on him...😆😆 beta tu toh gaya !! The desire, the allure is all the beginnings of love Prince S...where ever you go...whatever distance you try to create, it will always follow.

I SO want to know more about Swara's mind now. What tumult is her brain and heart going through. Intrigue is fine, but what comes next ? Waiting to see how she reacts to his absence, and if she'll make a run for it (but a princess doesn't go back on her word...and me thinks she won't either)...

This was such a wonderful update Shruti...loved it to pieces...seriously cannot wait for the next one...The progres you are making with the S&S relationship is an absolute work of wonder. Every emotion, every glance, every flutter is felt. Truly !!

Until the next update :) Hope you are having a fun weekend as well and getting much needed rest ! 🤗🤗

Originally posted by: nut-kut-86

res part 1 pe no comments karna hai mujhe part 2 mehmaan jaane k baad karenge sowie

Originally posted by: Forum.Maniac

Res!

Shru, too many submission deadlines n exam season not letting me comment on the chaps as I have so much to say!

I have read both the chapters n absolutely loved them! Will reply by tmrw when I finally get some free time! 🤗

Originally posted by: maaneetfan

Hi Shruti...so sorry have not been able to reply to ur last 2 beautiful updates...in fact read chapter 9 completely just today morning...will reply in detail very soon!! Cheers n have a relaxed weekend!
Tas

Originally posted by: tootiefrootie11

Hey Nita 🤗

How are you? Oh and the Mikaelsson is now Reid? 😃

Thank you so much for the lovely comments on 10- so pleased you loved it!! Aha- Ragini's internal introspection and resultant guilt somewhat surprised you huh? I wanted that- I showed how she had got to her hatred of Swara but also dropped hints before that it wasn't always like that with her and whilst Ragini will never be a pure soul like Swara, I wanted to show the buried deep guilt she has too.

Oh yes, part 1 became rather long but I can't be cruel yet and give you all only that so went on and made it mega long with the SwaSan scenes too 😃. So glad you liked the shifts in the evolving relationship between SwaSan- they are literally on a roller coaster. I wanted to show them really understanding each other without the pretence now of a mad Sanskaar. More equal footing in that sense so am so happy you felt that bond and the shared pain and comfort each gave to the other come across!

I'll work on 11 today and subject to how long it takes (it is long!!), will post it soon! Lots of love always xx

Originally posted by: tootiefrootie11

My dear dear Priya 🤗

I was grinning when your comment came through as I always look forward to it and by the end it was an ear splitting smile! Thank you for this and for loviiing this chapter 😃. You saying each one if the favourite is the highlight for me so long may that happen!

I hoped you would like the Ragini part! Some of you I have come to know well through this and I know you like the exploration of other characters too, especially ones like Ragini, who have so much going on in them! I distinctly remember your comments about Ragini and thought that this would make sense to you and some other friends too. Exactly- you can get what you thought you wanted and find it hold no joy! It also gives me pleasure to ensure that Raging cannot enjoy the fruits of her evil. And yes! Swara despite her efforts is now at the best place she can be at, with the best person 😳

You liking the "truce" huh?! So glad!! I just so seem them as perfect for each other, not in a boring and predictable way but with a mix of all that is right in a relationship. Their connect, their ability to share pain and give each other relief and distraction and then comfort, and just that lovely glorious feeling you get when you are falling in love, a deep and meaningful, type-

I cannot imagine a man as perfect if he doesn't have a sense of humour and dry wit! So Sanskaar of course has to 😳 So pleased the whole interaction between them is being so liked- I find them so adorable and want everyone to feel the same so often worry if how it sounds in my head, comes across! And aha- you too want her to panic about returning alone?! Shruti (Lannister) too and I personally also want that so I think you know that we shall find that bit delivered at some time 😉 Nickname for Sanskaar?! Guess what, have been already on that and am trying out numerous ones in my head 😆

Oooh heart bubbles, I like the sound of that a lot! I am getting some just with talking about them like this 😳 Glad you like the "dard ka rishta" angle explored. And "beta tu toh gaya" made me 🤣. Indeed!! You are so going to like 11 reading your comment about what Madam will do with the Prince gone 😉.

Thank you once more for this! Chapter 11 is a project for later today, after my tasks are complete and hubby leaves again for his work week away! Am so looking forward to writing! Rest nowadays seems like a precious commodity! Once I finish DK I think I will be be a slight hiatus from writing and will sleep a few weekends! Love ya,

S xoxo