DARK KNIGHT- A SwaSan FF- T2- DELETED- AN- PG 1 - Page 16

Originally posted by: Princess_Mansi

Awesome update Shruti

I loved the whole descriptions of the haveli

I have a liking for historic stories

Thanks for the pm

Continue soon

Originally posted by: tootiefrootie11

Nyna xoxo

*Hi5* on the fetish for titles- me too!! And thank you for always noticing- I am obsessed that the title should reflect the story and many would find it strange to realise how much thinking I expend on them! Arrr- glad to have you entangled in this story mmmwah.

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right, the insult to his loyal friends cannot be borne. You like the sound of Pawan aka PKJ? And uh oh- you don't like characters being killed off? 😲 Do you read/ watch Game of Thrones? I love that series and if you are familiar with it- you will know that almost everyone that you start bonding with is polished off, usually in a terrible fashion! Not that I intend to unleash mass murder on my characters so rest easy but a few casualties in a tale like this cannot be a surprise?! 😉 Oh and PKJ is very interesting! 😃

I am sorry pehle mein swara ke taraf sochne mein itna busy thi ki kuch aur likh hi nahin payi.tho ehsaas nagar tak ka rashta sanky ka yeh samjhna ki swara thaki hone k bavajud ekdum makam baithi hai.aur us vajah se respect karna who sanky kitna observe karta hai who dikhata hai.aur swara ka itna thala home k bavjud uspe na girna uska rajput khoon volta hai.dach bolu main hoti tho main uspar hi gir jati hayee kya scene hoga who. And who haveli simple hai par khubsurat hai kehte hai na simplicity mein ek adbhoot sakhti hoti hai.phir who flower pot baba maine aisa bahut pada hai dekha hai.par yaha kuch alag jaadu tha.ab sushena who aacha insaan hai loyal to sanky aur acha laga swara ne use traitor kaha tho bi usne use samjhdari se jawab diya.aur haan ragini ka tho kuch bolna hi nahin hai.par mujhe yeh baat samajh nahin aayi k laksh ne swara ko disown karne k liye ku kaha.and old man at moud usne ku ch bi bola ku samajh nahin aa raha.aur ab pawan kahin tum jaize ragini ne swara ko jhatka diya waise sanky ko pawan k hato jhatka dene ki nahin soch rahi na. Jaise abhi sanky swara ko sahara de raha hai tab shayad swara usko de. Aur who knife attack aur sanky ka puchna k tum sachi pagal ho .mujhe hasi aayi.and den swara ka sanky ko dekhna jab who pawan ke baare mein sunke reaction de raha tha.swara ne sach socha traitor shayad itne ache insaan na ho.and den swara ka exit plan veer ne kharab kar diya .aur sanskaar k alternate ways of dismounting ne tho jaale par namaak chidak diya aur phir who conversation shayad iske baad swara ka dimaag saant ho jaye aur who maan se mehsoos kare shayad isiliye ehsaas nagar.thanx for pm.

Originally posted by: MusicAddict

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Dude, I know it's a late unres but I'm really tired of saying sorry buddy! So no sorry this time! Lol

Chapter 8

Poor Swara. I feel so bad for her. My poor SwaSan have bore so much pain and sufferings in their lives when none of them was ever wrong. What Swara must be going through?? She comes to know that Sanskaar isn't mad and she had to steal for him, her sister wants her dead and right now she is supposedly eloping with a mad' prince. Seriously that's too much for a person to take in a few hours.

Dude, she's showing too much of an attitude. She can't take Sanskaar's help to get down, huh? But I guess her mental condition is such! The thing that I love the most about the way you right is the perfect description of a character's mental condition and that justifies his or her every action.

Sanskaar is too smart. He knows his plans and actions all too well. Just like a strategical and therefore victorious prince!! How can I resist drooling over this guy??!! He's too amazing! I'm waiting for Swara to come to know about his past, that he's not a criminal and a traitor.

Ragini Ragini Ragini!! This chhori is such a cruel shrewd and no words... type of a woman. The way she manipulated everything against Swara and this time nobody believed her! How bad. I expected atleast Janki to trust her but not even her nor Sharmishtha believed her. *sigh*

Back to SwaSan, Sanskaar lies so easily! And yet again I help adoring him. Such a crazy gal!! LOL Anyways that story about SwaSan being in love and eloping was so cute<3 I was literally smiling like an idiot. Sanskaar you're soon gonna fall for her! He can't stay even a moment without her yeah!! ;)

Swara is acting too smart. Dropping the gold bangle huh? Not a bad idea though. But my girl, you are supposed to stay with Prince Sanskaar only, so its no use dropping your bangles. The way Sanskaar made her wear the bangle was so fhjkghjdskh! These two are too too too adorable and lovable<3<3

That man! The last para was AMAZING!! I loved it.. The way that man said that there might be deeper shades to Sanskaar and what appears may not be true. The way he said that Sanskaar cannot be a traitor because of honesty twinkling in his eyes! I loved the last para. Let Swara know the truth soon please!

Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum

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BTW Ehsas Nagar was uber cute 😉 As was the prize stallions name: Veer. 😃 Is there a love story for Veer too, perhaps Swara has a mare named Vani or something like that? 😳

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A most captivating chapter, Shru. 👏 👏 Very well crafted and described, and the pace is galloping now, much like Prince Sanskaar's prized steed, Veer. 😉

I loved so many things about this chapter: Swara's feisty, never say die attitude being one of the major ones. I just loved how she kept trying to get free, first by raging at Sanskaar that he didn't need to hold her hostage anymore, he could let her go; by actually trying to attack him with the knife 😆 and then the last, spirited attempt to mount the horse and flee. Sanskaar himself, full of valor and determination, cannot help but admire how spirited and full of fortitude she is. 😳 A match made in Heaven, if ever there was one. Shru---please, pretty please, DON'T resurrect Kavita in this Fic...and even if you do, PLEASE make Swara fight for Sanskaar and not hand him over; and of course, Sanskaar himself to see the contrast between a spirited Swara and a simpering Kavita! 😛

Like I loved your delineation of Ragini's character in an earlier chapter, loved how you fleshed out Swara's nature here. We had this discussion on one of my earlier comments on DK thread, about the hints you had given about the deeper shades to Swara's character---which Lakshya was of course too shallow to fathom properly. As you put it so well here, Swara has been so careful to conform to propriety, behave in a manner "worthy" of a Princess, because she feels indebted to her Baba and her Janki Ma for taking in Shomi and herself, giving them that stamp of legitimacy. She has been curbing her own free spirited, vibrant nature, in the belief that she needs to aspire to the fairly bland, colorless, run of the mill kind of "perfect princess" that Ragini embodies so well.

She is just SO meant for Sanskaar 😉 : who admires her spirit and vivaciousness so much, sees her and admires her for what she is, not like Lakshya, who kind of fit her into HIS image of what he would like his bride to be.

Coming to Sanskaar, he certainly is moving to "Ehsaas" fairly quickly. 😳 Or he would, if only he would relax his barriers a little bit! I really loved how you described his self loathing and disgust at having to behave like a menacing cad to Swara; threatening her to ensure her silence. Her resentment and possible low opinion of him has started flaying him a great deal...☺️

BTW, I loved how you described the deserted haveli and its environs. I could almost see it materializing before my very eyes! And once they reach there, the way Sanskaar again felt, subconsciously, hurt that Swara could fear his intentions towards her; the way he so concernedly covered her with a blanket to ensure she was warm----this man is falling in love...I just hope he realizes it, before any daayan from his past (Kavita 😡) returns!

Swara's sheer heartbroken state when she heard what her family and the Maheshwaris thought of her, was so painful to read. Ragini is really a sly viper in this piece, isn't she. She knows just what buttons to press.

But Shru, I do have a doubt here about that wise old man in Moud. Why did he tell the search party that he suspected the couple who came by earlier had gone west rather than east, as they had told him? He seemed to recognize Prince Sanskaar, seemed very favorably disposed towards the two of them, to the extent of giving Swara some very cogent advice. Could he not simply have told the pursuers they had told him they would ride east? Also, he could have instructed his daughter in law not to gossip about the pair...

Is there a mystery here? As to why he spilled the beans? Do tell me na...😃 PM me if you don't wanna reveal on the thread. Pretty please! 😉

The way Sanskaar planned that diversionary trail as regards the map, attempting to draw an attack, and thereby find out who has been plotting against him from behind the scenes, was awesome. This man has brains as well as courage, skill as well as might. Swara...my dear little mermaid, hold on to this one, as firmly as you can! 😳 😉

I just loved that last stretch of subtle, gentle SwaSanliciousness. Sanskaar both admires Swara's indomitable will and spirit in trying to ride away on Veer; and is really empathetic towards her pain at being misunderstood by her family like this. In a sense, they have become kindred spirits now; bound by the same pain, of being doubted and condemned by their own families, on rather contrived evidence and biased testimony! That's the dard ka rishta connect coming in----Loved how you did that Shru...👏 👏 🤗

And the way he reassured Swara, promised her that once his mission was complete--either way, if he succeeded or failed, he would ensure that she returned to the palace, her reputation cleared and the slurs on her disproved---was so awesome.

Swara could not help but trust him again, his sincerity and innate goodness shining through. The way they reverted to his affectionate terming of her as "Mermaid Princess", and the way she noticed his sunny smile, let him hold her hand in a comforting manner...😳 ☺️ I got waves of SwaSan feels here. 😉

Loved it, Shru. Waiting for the next chapter eagerly. 🤗

Originally posted by: Sakkiyah

Nice update

It was a swasan centric update.

Sanskar wanted to find the real traitor. And he had a group.

But in this update, I felt bad for swara. Because she was innocent. But her sister snatch her happiness. She became characterless for family. For a girl, who always wanted her family's happiness it is hard to face such a situation.

In the update a new character is introduced. But he is sincere to his prince.

And the escaping plans of swara failed twice in a day.

But in this update we got a new sanskar. Who really care for his friend. He was worried for her life.

And you beautifully described the journey in the desert. And the palace in the moon light.

Veer, the horse of sanskar was also a important character in this update.

Waiting for your next update

Originally posted by: Honeypot

Hi Shruti , how r u ? I thought u were busy in ur work as I hardly see u in main forum nowadays ..but now only I knew this dark knight is keeping u busy 😊.

I rarely read the stories in IF as I don't know why most of the times I can't connect with it ..but urs and viji s work is different ..I think I read ur resolved and did leave a comment there too when u were in vacation ..I chanced upon this yesterday only .i read everything in one go .and ended up with neck pain Shruti 😆 it is an amazing piece of work Shruti and left me with wanting more .i really don't have words to express how much I liked ur work set in historical era ..

It's going to a long post and please bear with me ..Read it when u have time ..

The torture Sanskar had to endure was painfull..happy the torment ended when Annapurna came to his rescue ..

The connection swara and Sanskar felt was adorable ..telepathic connection. Immediately he knew she is somebody who should be kept at a distance 😆.he knew she has the capability to foil his plans can make inroad in his heart ...swara was eager to meet him after all the tales she heard about him. Ragini the same but a lot more cunning ..

I don't know why I felt Kavita was no match to Sanskar eventhough u showed only glimpse of her ..she appeared quite childish considering the mature Sanskar ..why oh why he chose her ..looks like I am possessive here for my swasan as nothing appears perfect other than them ..but that childishness saved his life ..Kaveri has a much in depth role to play as I felt she is part of conspiracy ..that made him a traitor in his own country .

I really loved that Sanskar has a friend pawan who stood by him and the time he spent in palace he used it for his planning ..want to see a determined Sanskar who will restore his lost glory and save his country too..u have kept the surprise element fairly intact all through the narration while we will keep guessing to see the actual conspirator behind all this ..

I liked how u kept swara away from Laksh after engagement 😆 By keeping her in company with Sanskar .swara had her doubts regarding him but he was so masterful in keeping it away from her .i am glad that they were able to spent some time as it would help in the long run ..and Sanskar is already too much caring towards her .the way u explained the changing feelings in him was brilliant ..

Ragini carefully weaved all the stories about swara and played the friend part real well with Laksh ..

I loved it when Sanskar was suspicious of ragini and became the knight in shining at our for swara and rescued her from that monster ..and here u surprised me he killed that man who dared to touch her ..wow .he must have known by then she is really imp for him ..

Chapter 7 was brilliant with it twists and turns ..ragini did play a master stroke but he caught on to it at the right time. his decision to take swara with him was sudden and he knew she will die if she stays there ..she was shocked after the events eventhough her spirits were intact .i do hope to see her as a strong character Shruti , one who is perfect match to Prince Sanskar .i hope when situation arises she will show her worth .

She already is in confusion searching for the real prince behind all the facade ..hope she sees the real him sooner as she was perfect in reading his eyes while he saved her .

I loved chapter nine too as it was the first one which was swasan centric and really loved it .the attempts she makes to break free is cute . His horse also have a soft corner for her as horse knows his master really well ..hope he saves pawan too in time .eagerky waiting for the mysteries to unfold .along with progress in Sanskar and swara relation.,

Waiting for the next chapter .no pressure take ur time ..😊

Saji

Originally posted by: Sanya17

in this prt i wanna mntn veer especially d horse is soo cute 😃 he is so like sanskar kept all shouting jumping scaring bt didnt dropped her in floor as far as i knw horses dont like if sm1 other thn their ownr sits on them bt looks like sanskars horse too likes swara 😉
i felt so bad for swara mentalwashewris n gadodias bhvng like brainles puppet undr raginis spell as expctd
i lvd d end scn swara any1 in her place wd hv tried to run away bt she didnt thought about d danger she will face frm her sister nagini if she goes bckragini bein nagini didnt left any option fr her good dat sanskar politely md her understood dis lvd der intrctn d mnsn dey r stayng its sanskar own right d one he wntd to stay bfr all dis hpnd

i hp pawan is a positive chrctr i dnt wnt him to be ngtv he sounds much more brav n intelligent thn mntlwshwris hp he is ok real criminal is dfntly mor thn 1 prsn its impsbl to do all dis alone
hp u will gt tym to update soon i lv dis story so mch its hrd too wait u knw 😉