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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: bwvianna

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Shruti,
You have outdone yourself. Truly. What a chapter! It filled me with dread as well as glee at the same time. Weird combination of emotions, I know, but what to do.
I loved the way you have shown the inner turmoil of Ragini, Swara and Sanskaar. Ragini really turned out to be something much more than first thought out to be. I loved her thought process so very much. The way you have shown her justifying her actions to herself was truly commendable. She has absolutely no remorse.
Swara, poor girl has no idea what is happening around her. Trying to make sense of all that is going on around her while trying to understand Princes Sanskaar's actions. Brilliant.
Ragini is so damn smart. She so effectively used the words Sanskaar used in order to serve her purpose! Fantastic. Gotta say even though she is evil that was a brilliant move on her part.
Can I say that I am not at all unhappy with these turn of events? Swara finding out Sanskaar is not mad, Sankaar taking her hostage, the stealing of the map, the running away. I am literally dancing with joy.
The whole scene was so much fun to read. I burst out laughing when Swara went all - you killed him! Poor girl. And their conversation was amazing.
The RagSan confrontation! Princess Nagini! Brilliant dialogues here. Swara finally in shock as to what was happening and trying to grasp the situation and its enormity.
Someone was watching from a tower? Who was it? Annapurna or the best friend?
Shruti, what an awesome update. Now I am craving for chapter 8 desperately because this story has finally established all the basic details and I am dying to know what happens next. Awaiting! Update soon :)

-V


V sweetie 🤗

Thank you so much! Can't believe this chapter is being liked this much! Makes me truly pleased. I was especially eager to finish setting out Ragini's inner psyche as after this we will be on a somewhat different plot and more about SwaSan and their story until I again make paths collide once more. She has trampled down on any remorse she may have had yes.

Swara couldn't have guessed this and especially as she genuinely loved her sister- poor thing. I wanted to give Ragini some devious plan that was a bit more finessed than what we see on the show where she now comes across as almost a horrid comic sketch. You can say you are not unhappy- after all it was my intent :) See, Sanskaar may have in one sense "lost" this round but in this is definitely his victory na 😉 as he doesn't need to leave his Mermaid and can be away from the Palace intrigues with her for a while! Haha- you liked the slight tinge of humour despite the seriousness? Glad! I wanted Sanskaar not to explain much to her 😆. Looks like Nagini address is being enjoyed much! You'll have to wait a while to discover the identity of the "watcher" from the Tower but I can reveal that its not the best friend- he is away at some border perhaps? 😉. I am now fine tuning what to include in 8 in my head, will start my outline soon and then to draft! I am so exhausted today as not slept for almost 2 nights and had visitors today too but am eager to write 8 too and deliver some action and romance! 😃

Lots of love xoxo

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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: pearl.16

Awesome updates !! I read all of them in one go !!

Please update soon...


Hello! Thank you so much! I'll be back in a few days hopefully, just need a few to rest up and cope with work:)
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Posted: 9 years ago
Holaa Shruti...
2 updates in 2 days and one at pre dawn !! wah wah...i hope your guests were able to keep you awake during the day :)

Ragini...Ragini...Ragini...I love and hate her at the same time :P Well the love is for the way she's etched out. I kinda get her insecurity and her irritation at 'all sunshine and daisies' people. She feels she's been wronged all her life, being the second fiddle to her sibling and that feeling must be exhausting. It can't be joy when everyone loves the Swara, despite R being the epitome of grace and obedience. I wonder if she showed her true self (not the insane nut who wants to kill her sister), but possibly the one who is not always demure and graceful, she might have had more fans and less hatred for Swara (her festering wound. Btw that description was really apt, it showed exactly how much she hated S, reading it I was like, yup if I ever felt that way I would be making plans to annhiliate 😆)

Also how clever is she, she used Sanskaar's plan against him to further her goal as well as ensure nothing would point back at her. Amazing yaar !

Swara...lovely juxtaposition of a princess from the deserts who years for waters (reminding her of her legacy from long ago). I feel for her. It can't be easy post that incident...especially since she's quite uncertain about what happened except for feeling his presence and remembering that sense of security. Given that there is an uneasy sense of belief for her story, this lively being must feel caged in that palace. And to think even her friend is avoiding her, Poor thing, him shunning her affected her quite a bit.

Sanskaar : So PKJ arranged for the border disturbance, while he sets his plans at the palace in motion. Too bad he underestimated Ragini. I think there was a clear point where he knew he was one-upped by her. But what R didn't expect (neither did I), was how he'd change his plans and not give her the satisfaction of a pure victory. If she plans to get him and her sister out of the way, she'll get it except it was I think not what she expected and surely that's going to make her sit on tenterhooks now given she knows his own diabolical and merciless side.

S&S : Hurt, Surprise, Disgust, Recognition, fear, Befuddlement...Swara went through all of this in that short time span from when he doesn't respond to her wave until he whisked her away in the darkness. *It was only transitory, and yet seemed to stretch endlessly.* --beautiful imagery
Seeing R's duplicity, loved how his protector angle came forward, but at the same time not letting go of his original goal. He uses S to achieve his goals (and get that map and the mysterious bundlee...what is this bundle)...but at the same time is conflicted on seeing her expressions. This was definitely not the way he wanted her to see him, maybe he hoped she'd forget him as the mad prince who fled (?).

Swara and Sanskaar's rendezvous with R towards the end is my fav part of this chapter (and also because it got Sanskaar to use the choiciest snake metaphors for her 😆). I think when the illusion of love shatters it hurts, and when it comes from your sister there is hardly any balm for it.

So they've galloped away into the night. The palace is filled with R's cacaphonious screaming and one mysterious figure watching the entire drama (who is this other person and how do they fit in within Sanskaar's plans ?)

Awaiting the next chapter to see how the befuddlement clears for Swara, how she moves ahead with the heartbreak and how she interacts with Sanskaar. I know she won't make it easy for him !!

Yayyy for the new beginnings and some much needed freedom from the palace of the Ms.

P.S : I totally agree with your comment on the show never having any friends for the main characters. Also, why does nobody ever go to work, how do they sustain...*what does shekhar do for a living??*. I shall leave you all these questions to answer, in addition to the ones around DK :)

Hope you had a good Sunday and got some rest. See you next week :)
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: manasie23

Can I dance that you have decided to turn this into a fanfic rather than it being a short story? I want to do a victory dance...
By the way I am so sorry for not commenting regularpy its just that sometimes I really have no words to left to say what I feel about the update ...
But all the update till now have been amazing and strangely refreshing too...

I loved how Sanskaar has tagged her 'Mermaid Princess' ohh by the way I loved reading the guilt which Sanskaar is going through while he thinks he is goinf to betray Swara's trust in him and that sparkle that she had in her eyes for him woupd be lost to him forever...

And the shock Swara suffered when she came to know that her innocent friend was not innocent had never been to begin with.. And Ragini mann this girl never fails to render me speechless with her planning and plotting she knew Sanskaar would have to kill whoever will see him leave and so she deliberately sent Swara there because one way or the other she was doomed by her own sister...

But Sanskaar is her guru right he kidnapped her as a for the world to show but maybe Ragini will tell everyone that Sanskaar and Swara have always been in love blah blah and decided to elope at the right moment...

Waiting for the next update... Love yaa Shru... Keep Writing 😳


Manu! Manu! Yay! 🤗
I thought you might be reading as saw you liking and oh pls don't worry, as long as I know you like it and are happy, I am too:) But you letting me know has pleased me so much so thank you! Your happy its now a FF? Yeah, too much still left na?!
Liking the nicknames? 😃 Ahhh yes I felt that he would struggle with losing his new friend even if he pretends otherwise! Yes Swara is indeed a babe in the woods compared to many but the Ragini betrayal was particularly brutal no? And Ragini- ah yes I wanted her here to be much more chilling than in the show. And you are absolutely correct about what tale Ragini will spin about SwaSan which Sanskaar got when he said to her that of course she won't tell everyone that he's kidnapped her! Swara won't realise this yet of course but Sanskaar- he saw that at once and that's why told Ragini what he did then.

Love ya too hon and I'll try and be quick with the next one. Just have to get though some hecticness at work! Ugh- want to write next part! 😆 xoxoxo
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: KawalArora

wow Shruti its awesum update n u covered so much. U tried to show Why Ragini felt like this n why she feels so insecure n i m desperate to read how swasan gonna be together alone. U work so hard on stories n update till late nights. All i can say is THANKU FROM BOTTOM OF MY HEART for updating soon.


Awww Kawal! 🤗 You don't need to thank me and I'm touched at that! I love writing and getting the fantastic reactions from you all makes it all totally worthwhile so my thanks to everyone for that! I am really pleased this chapter is being liked so much, it's made it all rosy! X
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: simsen23

Shruti...
This chapter 7 is simply wow 😊
i mean its shocking...
Princess ragini is very cunning..
Real princess snake is the perfect title for her
princess swara has feelings for sanskar..
But soon it will be more intense...
Take your time and update soon dear
lots of love
simi 😊


Hey Simi!! Thank you! So it was a big surprise for you- didn't see it coming type?! So glad you liked it and I'll do my best to update asap, just have a few busy days at work but will work around that:) Please keep reading! Love,
Shru x
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Javeria3991

fantastic update and full of thrill.

I am eager to know about the person who was at the window.
can't wait to read more.


Thank you Javeria:). The "watcher" at the window will be revealed in due course, wish I could hint but it will spoil things so please keep reading and see if you can guess?! 😃
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Apudeep

Hi shru! Remember me? I'm Aparna.

I have decided that I will comment at the end of this FF, but you have made it impossible for me to be silent. I can't wait to express my gratitude any more for writing this .It is presented very beautifully and it's grand style has really helped it's royal background. Unfolding of characters and their mindset is interesting to read. I am one of many fans you have garnered through your writings. Keep writing more .Bye 😊
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Hey Aparna 🤗 Of course I remember! How are you? Glad to see you back and am very grateful you broke your resolution to only comment at the end! Please don't express gratitude- writing is one of my greatest pleasures and am so happy to see everyone's reactions! 😳😳 I am thankful to have such nice friends here! Lots of love and wishes,
Shru x
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Shuchi2013

Chapter 7 -you have left me wanting for more.Wow!!Sanskar-Dark knight in shining armour for Swara?Never expected this!!Awesomeness-a word for this chapter!!!


Thanks ever so much Shuchi 🤗
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: indrani7495

Hey shru dear... 🤗
thankew for d pms dear...cudnt comment on the previous chapters cz i hv been a bit bsy of late ...but i have read them all...
but chp 7 juz cudn stop myself from saying that it was marvellous...it was written with so much detail that i could imagine the whole scene being played out in front of my eyes...sanskar
ragini this vile woman how can someone hate her sister sooo much... 😒
but wanted to ask how did swara end up in sanskar's chambers...did ragini send her there deliberately ...by saying something??? n y did swara agree to go to sanskar's bed-chambers late in d night...she shudnt have after all that had commenced the day before how could she venture out on her own late in d night...!!! 😒
N in d last part sumone else other than the sister duo was looking at sanskar...was that sujata?

neway ...once again i would say wonderfull update...will wait eagerly for the next update!! 🤗


Hiya Indrani 🤗

Oh please don't worry- I totally understand, look how long its taking me this time to catch up with my replies . A huge thanks for the lovely comments on this part- so glad you enjoyed the rest and especially this one, this one was special for me 😃.
Ah- well, I will explain in detail in the next chapter but as it's not a spoiler and I explained to Shruti a few pages ago, basically it could be that Ragini messaged Swara to meet her in Sanskaar's chambers saying he was not there and as to safety, Swara will recollect this later but ah well it could have been that someone else was with her till almost the door of the Chamber? 😉 Effectively a set up and despite being clever, Swara is rather naive and if her sister summoned her, she would go! The identity of the person watching I cannot give away at this stage for fear of spoiling suspense but AP or Sujju are currently top guesses by everyone! 😃 Thank you and I'll be back as soon as I am able!
Love,
S x

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