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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#401

Originally posted by: Sanya17
ragini she is so evil n cheap hw cn anyone do smthing like this with her own sister 😡 n the way she she talked about it so casually disgusting 🤢 i ws so worried fr swara whn tht goon attacked her bt our hero reached in time n saved his heroine n beat tht goon 😃 i lv sanskars chrctr he is really intelligent n the way he gv it bck to ragini 👏 lvd it
bt this cheap n evil ragini is nt gonna listen she is nt only gonna ruin swaras life bt also she is going to create a big trouble fr sanskar bt he knws his dulhan dosts real face he knws hw evil this girl is he will cm up with smthng to sv himself n swara thts why he went i think to find smthng tht cn prv him innocent he cnt cntinue his pretence fr too long
i really lv this story u r really a good writer update soon

Hey Sanya!

Ragini is a real piece of work isn't she! You might like some things Sanskaar says to her in chapter 7 😉. Glad you love this Sanskaar- I cannot make him dreamy enough! You will see what happened in Chapter 7 and I do hope you will like it- do tell us:)! x

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#402

Originally posted by: MusicAddict
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Unresing Shru! I'm so sorry to be so late! But now I'm unresing for chapter 6.

Starting with it! What an idiot moron Lakshya is! He's the son of Gadha Prasad after all. He's also a gadha prasad! So prone to influence and so naive just immature. Ragini is so deceitful and shrewd.
She so easily convinced Lakshya and just filled his brain with nonsense. In the show, Sanskaar showed her this way but here Sanskaar has really no hand. She herself is such a nasty cruel and evl creature with a masked innocent face.

Yet again, it's obssessIon! She's so obssessed with Lakshya that she isn't able too see sense. But as I like RagLak, I'll say part one was good! Swara likes horses?? Please give me a SwaSan horse ride in the upcoming chapters hon! Will be waiting!

Coming to Part 2-
My God! Ragini is such a cheap woman! She let her sister being accosted by a mere soldier? Is she a woman? Each woman knows what dignity and self respect mean to the other, but she's here ready to sell her Sister's dignity and esteem for some silver. Disgusting Lady! Ughh..
What would I've done to her, Idk if I wud have been over there.

Sanskaar was soo amazing. Truly like a prince, swift and strong. The way you described his soft eyes and genuine care for Swara was so beautiful. And the best part was that in spite of being given nicotine or being drugged, she could feel his care just through his eyes. Again the beautiful and evergreen SwaSan connect. I loved this.

Sanskaar's care for Swara's was so genuine. She confronted Ragini as to what was she upto because he ddin't want any harm to Swara. AMAZING!! His deal with Ragini was something I loved. His main concern was Swara. Deep inside hearts are melting. Looking very forward!
Sorry for being late once again. Love ya<3

Sakshi sweetie

I ban you from sorries now 😃. I too am late in replying but hope you won't mind - I saw you res asap on 7 so you'll know what was keeping me 😉.

Gadha Prasad 😆. Ahhh- I like Durga Uncle! 😆. But for Lakshya use that by all means! He is naive and immature amongst other things 😉. Ragini - yes totally- obsessed to point of madness but with deeper underlying issues from before.

Ragini is so blinded in hate her relations and even her being a woman wasn't enough to make her skin crawl at what she tried to do! Disgusting! So glad you loved the SwaSan connect and scene with the masked saviour! 😃. Will look for your comment on 7 whenever you get time, pls don't stress.

Lots of love, S xx

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#403

Originally posted by: Nynaeve

UnRes!

Puffing - let me catch my breath. Simply loved the pace👏👏👏

What a chapter - the twists and turns coming in so quick. Ragini - so cold and calculating and such diabolical plans she has laid - I am a reluctant admirer of her (the credit goes to you - for creating such an intelligent persona). It is sheer brilliance.
As for Lakshya, as usual he is dumb - and considered his level of intelligence (negligible to non- existent, it is quite right that he does not even attempt to think.)
Sanskaar - So finally his pieces are in place - he is truly the dark knight - his message to Ragini in the form of having the the guilty guard killed - ruthless but absolutely needed. No one messed with him and gets away.
Finally the title - Love's Lies and Hate's revelations - Ragini lying her way in the name of love, and Sanskaar revealing his feelings inspite of the hatred he has filled his heart with.

Nyna

PS: You have introduced a new character - Pawan Kumar Jaiswal - wonder what role he plays out?

Nyna 🤗

So happy you liked the pace and the chapter! I was worried at the beginning about this genre as its not usual for me but I am rather enjoying putting in the twists now:). Ah how glad it makes me to read that you admire Ragini in that sense! My job is done! Hope 7 will build on that. Haha re Lakshya- no more comments 😆.

I felt that killing the guard was necessary for someone like Sanskaar and exactly for the reasons you say. Ah the title!! Doing a skip now- it makes me thrill no end when people like titles and exactly spot on re the reasoning! 😳😳.

PS: You will meet Pawan in coming parts and as to his role- hmmm, it will unfold gradually 😉.

Lots of love xoxo

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#404

Originally posted by: Forum.Maniac
Shru, thank u so much for posting Chapter 6! But let me tell you my wait hasn't ended! Now I want Chap 7 soon!
Leaving a very brief comment due to time constraints!

You have nailed the characterization in this one. Every character here has so many layers. You just proved by this that I love SwaSan in every form. Sanskaar as the Prince turned Dark Knight is perfect ❤️ Same goes for Swara as the slightly misfit Princess with so much innate goodness in her!
Even Janaki's character came as a surprise, a pleasant one.

I loved that the SwaSan bond exists way before Sanskaar is on a path to redemption. The fountain scene and the recent one in Chapter 6 when he became saviour, those scenes are
Sanskaar is already so protective over her that he warned Ragini after her henious act. I don't think she's gonna back down though.

Waiting to see who is behind framing Sanskaar. Frankly you make me doubt everyone related to him 😆 First it was Laksh, then AP, then Adarsh, then Kavita and now its currently Pawan, his ex-best friend.
Btw the whole conspiracy against him and the way that played out in the tent is by far your best work. Seriously I was blown over while reading that part!

Plz do continue soon, Shru.

PS: I'm missing out many points but I managed what I could with a preoccupied mind. Sorry 🤗

Sana my sweet 🤗

Please don't worry about brevity and all, I am truly grateful as I know your busy. I didn't actually know you were reading this and liking it till you told me on twitter so am thrilled to read what you have to say. Haha- you have chapter 7 too so hope it was worth it!

Thank you hon! So glad the characters and plot is being liked! Sanskaar is impossible not to love huh?! I want a slightly more layered Swara so let's see how I do as I go on.

You like Janaki too? Glad!

Yes, I deliberately wanted their connect from day 1 and then to build on it. Ragini- we know her too well right?! .

I'm rubbing my hands in glee- am so happy you think it could be anyone! That is the intention and I hope the end will really be a good surprise/ shock! Wow- you liked the tent scene that much?! I'll have to see if I can better on it!

7 now up:) Lots of love for this xoxo

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#405

Originally posted by: hp_2006
Shruti dear..I am sooo sorry for late comments..I was a bit busy for some days..I read all four updates from PART 2-5 yesterday only..😳

I loved all updates dear..Brilliantly written..👏 And the setting in Royal era is mind blowing..I felt that the story till now is a bit similar to the story of our serial, but still most of the situations are too different and fresh to read..😊😊

Sanskaar is a dark knight indeed..but I am sure he will be a knight in the shining armour for his "mermaid princess" soon😉 I loved the terms dulhan dost and mermaid princess..😃😃

I loved the whole idea of the 4 parts of a map and a secret key..Blends well with the ancient times setting..👏
In this story also Sanskaar doubts Lakshya for cheating him ..But I guess the cheater is someone else..😛

I loved the part where Sanskaar is disturbed by hearing Swara play Sitar..The way it influenced his thoughts was beautifully described..
And the way he felt angry at her for dancing in drenched clothes in front of Lakshya was😆 even though it was felt unintentionally..😳 he is falling for her..
Hmm and now his heart too loves to spend time with Swara, unknowingly..that is so sweet Shru..😳

Sorry for not commenting for individual parts..From next update onward I will try to comment individually..

Yet to read PART 6..Will read and comment soon dear 🤗

Love,
Naina😊

Nainu sweetie 🤗

Please don't apologise- makes me feel terrible! I have so much reading, including yours to still get to! Im just seriously not getting time! I am going to take a short break when I finish this story I think 😆.

Thank you thank you! Glad you are liking the story so far. I have just taken the story totally off serial plane in chapter 7 which was posted late yesterday but yes until then, broadly the same themes:).

Glad you liked the nicknames. The map and key angles took ages to construct and phew was a relief when I did that in my head! You don't think its Lakshya? You will see 😉

You liking their early on connect too? Good!! Keep reading and don't stress, whenever you let me know I will be happy:)

Much love xoxo

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_InDreamWorld_

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Posted: 9 years ago

#406

Hi shruti

I read all the parts all r awesome👏

I loved it😛

Sadhana😊

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#407

I'm so overwhelmed with the comments on chapter 7! Thank you! You'll see I am behind again and still replying to the kind people on chapter 6 but am getting there! Chap 7 responses will be made too and with deep gratitude! Till then am reading them and it's making the all nighter plus beginnings of bad headache all totally fine:)

Lots of love xoxo

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geetkumar

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Posted: 9 years ago

#408

"Oh Ragini, Ragini, How I hate... you. But you fascinate me so much". Like a cobra, so deadly and ready to strike. But we still can't move our eyes from it. How does her mind work? So beautiful and so innocent looking but actually so devious and evil from inside. But still I can't help being fascinated by her. Some how she reminds me of the witch of the Beowulf. who slowly and steadily is shedding her lovely veneer and emerging into an ugly devil.

Swara, a caged bird, doesn't know yet how to break the walls of her cage. I am waiting for the day jab sayiad ko bulbul se aur bulbul ko sayiad se pyar ho jay!!!!!!!!

Sanskaar, he is a double edged sword, isn't he?Ready to attack and protect in the same time.so the attacker had started to turn into a protector. He might be burning in rage and the fires of revenge but he can't change is core character' The goodness in him', which will come forth. All he had been lacking was his guiding light, his Swara.

Sorry weaved my own fantasy here. But what to do, you are that good in casting such spell.

Forgive me. I am falling short of words here. All I can do is👏

Eagerly waiting for the next installment.

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#409

Originally posted by: bones123
Aah that diabolical DD (this makes her DDD now)...her plans have become more sinister than innocent message witholding or redirection of Swara...she's truly focussing on her goal now and crossing over more to the dark side each time. I think little things like wondering how her potrait would look, its just that right level of insane (if I may say so). Hate that she succeeded in her plan, even though S managed to save Swara but inadvertently played into her hand.
Intriguing new entrant Pawan Kumar Jaiswal..and Lakshya's hatred for him is quite strong as well...wonder if it was just as he says the treason, or something more deeper than that. I've just realised I don't know what Lakshya thinks of Sanskaar, I'm hoping you'll dwell on that in your future chapters.

Something tells me PKJ, will be critical to your Chapter 7. Will wait and see...

Sanskaar...can royalty be better :) Loved him in this installment (actually in all), but the whole element of action and proactiveness in his moves this time were very refreshing. After being outed in front of DDD in the last chapter, he took a back foot. But now he's back and in control...and setting the rules. I wonder if the promise of marriage and the murder of the guard are enough for DDD to retreat...but you can almost hear the cogs of her brain trying to piece together all of these bits of information...Sanskaar's behaviour, the mention of friends, the messengers and his promise.

Swaraaa, uff what can i say. Unaware of all the machinations, almost fell victim to DDD"s plotting. I wonder how much she'll remember of her savouir when she comes in front of him. Those eyes...not easy to forget I bet. Dot the dots my princess...I am super eager to see the progress of S&S's relationships. She feels for the child prince for his fall from glory and past, but how will she react to the other face of him...

Future...where isss Sanskaar going, what plans of his have taken off that he no longer needs the crutch of the palace and leave ? Also, who will he use to get DDD that coveted place? I wonder if there is another who knows his truth...

So many questions Shruti :) you've left us all wonderfully hanging by your tale...Amazing update as always...

Hey Priya 🤗

DDD is really making people hate her huh? And how to not dislike her so much? She's so low isn't she? How can anyone just not see that there is need here for real looking within? You like the portrait bit?! Yayyy!! I was just showing the inner workings of her delusional mind and therefore how she keeps getting in deeper and deeper. Pawan? Ha yes- me and Shruti (Lannister) often said that the show lacks the angle of friends for all characters no? Yes, I've not dealt much with the psychology behind Lakshya, I will fill in those gaps but not until possibly later on in the story and there is good reason for that:). PKJ will have a role for sure but chapter 7 was way too long so maybe some chapters later although we will hear of him in between.

Sanskaar whilst all the things we know of him is honourable so DDD I feel can take him by surprise as it's shocking even to him how she can act against her own sister. But yes he won't let her be ahead of him too much.

Swara is rather innocent and at the moment- oblivious but perhaps she won't be as dense as in the show. You will see her initial reaction to the non-mad face of Sanskaar in 7 but that too will change:).

Sanskaar you will see from 7 is on his way but you have to read 8 to find out where 😉 and also for the rest of the questions- the coming chapters will start to shed light more and more!

Thank you so much Priya xoxo

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#410

Originally posted by: MusicAddict
Res for chapter 7

Unresing-

OMG SHRU!! This was a surprise package.! I NEVER thought it would go this way! Amazing man! It was FREAKING AWESOME!! Starting with Swara coming to know the truth and I'm like Oh shit! She knows it what now?? And Sanskaar's reaction at that, I thought he might tell her the truth that he was never a traitor but had been punished for the wrong, he'd never done. But this was TOTALLY unexpected. He grabbed her, shut her up and forced her to follow his instructions. How exciting!!
You made it like a thriller movie man! Just keeping me glued to it.

Here while comes Ragini. This lady can;t get peace with anything. Because Lakshya trust Swara she want her sister dead. So she sent Swara there. I mean she's so clever. Appearances are so very deceptive! How docile she looks and yet how evil and selfish she is. Her wrath was so full of hatred. I mean her fury was so like that of a daayan who couldn't get wwhat she wanted with her jhaados and powder so she wants that person dead finally. Reminded of Mohini from SSK😆Lol.
But seriously, you described her anger was so well described. The true wrath in vamps was so superbly described.

Coming back to SwaSan! OMG! How much evil Sanskaar tries to be, I can't resist having a crush on this heroic prince. I seriously wanna steal him from Swara all for myself😆. He knows how to answer back Ragini. Ragini has totally crossed my expectations. She is so...no comments! I ain't got any adjectives to describe her but she's very smart and has outsmarted Sanskaar. But our hero is not going to kill Mermaid Princess at any rate, whoever he might kill! His connection with Mermaid Princess is so magical.

Swara, the pawn, who's always suffered, now saw the real side of the sister, whom she's loved so much. Her eyes full of steel and malice must have given her shivers and it might have broken her. She doesn't know that the sister whom she's always loved and trusted is the biggest villain and vamp in her life. So Sanskaar has taken her hostage! YAYY!

Finally it's only SwaSan together! Me SOO HAPPY! 😃 Looking forward to upcoming SwaSan track. Who saw them? I think it's either Lakshya or DP and my inclination is more towards Durga Prasad. I don't know why, but I feel this way? Am I right?

Anyways, this part was very very AWESOME AND FANTABULOUS! And I can't wait for the update soon. Please please please please please update very very very soon!

Love you lots
Sakshi

Sakshi hon 🤗

Ahhh!! I am so happy reading your reaction, am grinning like an idiot! 😃😃. You really found all the twists that thrilling? Me glad, glad, glad! See it would be too easy if Sanskaar told her in that moment and anyway, why would she believe him in the heat of the moment so I thought this would be better:). The taking hostage track was planned right at the start when I thought of the idea of this FF, but I hadn't built everything else in.

Ragini is well, a snake like Sanskaar said! She thought if Sanskaar killed Swara nothing could come back to her but of course our hero turned the tables on her, however unwillingly.

Sanksaar is so easy to have crushes on, fancy and love totally right?! Haha! Yes, a dream man so of course we all want him! Sigghhh. His taking her was perhaps fated and Ragini as usual played unwitting Cupid? 😆

Swara will now have to digest the unbelievable hatred her dear sister has for her . But yes well, I wanted them away from Mental Mahal here even like I do in the show so they can truly get to know one another.

How I wish I could tell you who saw them! 😛. Interesting you say DP as everyone else has automatically assumed that as most of the men were away, it can't have been one of them 😉.

Thank you so much Sakshi and I'll recharge and start on 8 soon, am already mulling things over.

Lots of love xoxo