The simmering pain: Raglak STORY Note 11/3/16 - Page 2

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Posted: 9 years ago
#11
Loved the concept of ur story
Both of the updates hv bn written beautifully
Can't wait for next part
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Part 3
Finally for the first tym ragini had beaten Lakshya in the eye game. She could sense his confusion.his dilemma. But in her this journey she knew one thing Laksh never loved swara the way sanskar did and neither swara actually loved Lakshya with a depth with which she could clearly see she loved sanky. Rather she thought actually sanskar and her were very similar...deep...loyal..extremist but the difference was the power.balance.exposure...which she didn't have...the bubble had burst now for her. Ragini once again looked at running crying swara and sanskar doing what he shouldn't have. She could feel every tear drop of swara and her heart bled...but her mind still in evil grip had a satisfying smile...of course she was the one who put her on this illusionary world...promised her a dream which could never be realised...forced to accept it even though she had come to terms with Lakshya rejection. She felt humiliated...just thinking about the way her life had turned...the witch she had become...she felt disgusted at herself...at everyone...at the situation,circumstances...she had become a total new devil person in the name of love when actually love made you strong ..not the weakling shrimp she had become. Her madness had led to spoil each and everyone's life...not one person was happy. She couldn't understand to feel happy or sad for Swasan...fear from Kavita or see an other heartbreak,...continue loving Lakshya with an obsession or finally set him free ...she didn't understand the changes her feelings were going through. The scene playing in front of her was making her puke...Kavsan getting blessings,crying swara,same puppets of MM...in place of Lakshya we have sanskar...she couldn't stand more and left the place. She had never expected this from sanky...the man she had known was firm clear on his stand and likes and dislikes unlike confused lucky and swara. For once she wanted swara to stand for her faith,her love..for herself...the guilt was eating her...her heart was crying a river but her mind was still tap dancing with a satisfaction...this fight which had begun between evil and righteousness had started making her crazy. Atm she just needed peace,loneliness. Which she was destined to be...lonely..
Edited by dreamyjennice - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Part 4
Lucky had enough of this charade now. His patience was being tested to limits by ragini. He couldn't understand how the sweet,innocent,extremely shy,introvert and utterly traditional mousy girl could change into such a devious creature. The girl who loved her sister and dared to fight for her half sisters right could hurt her own family the way she's been doing. Her stare today was giving him goosebumps and very mysterious vibes. How the utterly boring and homely ragini had become a puzzle a mystery to him which kept and decided his every next step nowadays. He always thought swara to be the strong.utterly smart,fun loving girl...whom he had fallen for and this ragini was such a boring and weak kind...but now though swara remained the same with addition to crying buckets this girl had become one man army. Only if she was positive and used this strength not for the crimes she had done...how this girl didn't let him sleep just making him puzzled over her next step. He had to put a stop to this...he had to get everything online and for that this was the last thing he could do. He knew that what he was Gina do would be ethically morally wrong but he had no choice. He had to follow and break ragini and now he understood only and only him could break her...only he had the power and now he would use it to get back everything from ragini what she took away by cheating...everything is fair in love and war. Now ragini...before u plan ur next step..I will sly you totally...this house will get back its peace..swara back her smile...me my freedom. She always knew I never loved her..love is never got by force...she needs a taste of her own medicine...she will know now what backstabbing is..what heartache is...what happens when u r left and jilted by ur lover...what happens when the prey becomes the predator...This morning will be a new morning in our lives wifey dear...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Wow...its too too good yar..brilliant..
Read the three parts..i can totally connect with your story..
I loved how u connected kavitas situation with Raginis..yes u r right..they are in process of making a new Ragini out of kavita...u described Raginiss mental dilemma beautifully...
This is the best ragya story I have read till now.. 👏
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Posted: 9 years ago
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This is brilliant. .
U r not writing dialogues n that what happens in every story. .
Ur story is unique ..u write feelings which literally.touch the heart..
U r amazing 👏
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Posted: 9 years ago
#16
Last part was my favourite.

I absolutely adored Lakshya's inner monologue on Ragini and how he compares the mousy Ragini to the she-devil she has become now. That was so powerful..

Can't wait for the cat&mouse game to begin.
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Posted: 9 years ago
#17

Originally posted by: Radhadreamlove

Seriously both the parts are lovely..
U must write ragini's redemption part in the show.. if it is shown on screen it'll make everyone's spines shiver. ..

Plz continue soon..n if possible do pm me..

thanx...this is a huge compliment coming from a brilliant writer like ur self...frankly...ragini is a character to be experimented with and thanx to teju...keeping her innocence intact without being loud or getting hyper she's portraying a spine chilling evilness which makes u hate her,pity her,and even feel for her...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: rbb1

What can I say Hun amazing brilliant love the emotions that you gave described for both Ragini and Laksh, can't wait to see what happens next I think Ragini will do something to make the situation good hope you post the next part soon

Ray...thanx a lot for ur comment...this is a very painful ride..not an easy one...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: mansinarang95

woww i loved it..keep writing 👏👏😆

thanx
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: clarity

This is brilliant.

I love the way your words flow.

PLEASE CONTINUE.


this is me ragini and this is my heart speaking directly to u all

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