The simmering pain: Raglak STORY Note 11/3/16

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dreamyjennice

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Originally posted by: alisha17
Loved the concept of ur story
Both of the updates hv bn written beautifully
Can't wait for next part

dont wait...updates are ready😃

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So now laksh is going to pretend..great..the boy want to trap her..but the poor fellow dnt know its him who is going to get trapped in his own plan..he is going to fall for her badly..
Story is getting more interesting...i wish u were the writer of swaragini

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dreamyjennice

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Originally posted by: ShaktiArshaKR
Wow...its too too good yar..brilliant..
Read the three parts..i can totally connect with your story..
I loved how u connected kavitas situation with Raginis..yes u r right..they are in process of making a new Ragini out of kavita...u described Raginiss mental dilemma beautifully...
This is the best ragya story I have read till now.. 👏

r u serious...u have bestowed upon me a huge huge compliment...rag ya have so much scope to experiment with...alas cvz ignore them...Temish have power,chemistry,attitude,everything to rock it..only if cvz tap them...and with this compliment u put on me a big responsibility to maintain my way of work...

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dreamyjennice

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Originally posted by: ShaktiArshaKR
So now laksh is going to pretend..great..the boy want to trap her..but the poor fellow dnt know its him who is going to get trapped in his own plan..he is going to fall for her badly..
Story is getting more interesting...i wish u were the writer of swaragini

thanx a lot...but if given a free hand at creativity the writers would have done brilliant job...after all they r the one who conceived swaragini...respect to them...I stand nowhere...

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dreamyjennice

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Originally posted by: clarity
Last part was my favourite.

I absolutely adored Lakshya's inner monologue on Ragini and how he compares the mousy Ragini to the she-devil she has become now. That was so powerful..

Can't wait for the cat&mouse game to begin.

everyone sees just one side of coin...they need to look into themselves and ask themselves as to y the person changed so much...can't be completely there fault...I still feel as a character Lakshya still needs to grow...to learn...to accept his faults to and become accountable and responsible for his actions...he is thinking his love is weakness of ragini...but he doesn't realise how in this process he will actually come to know the strength her love will give him...but will this realisation be too late...time will tell...

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Part 5

Lakshya was lost deep in thoughts about the changes in ragini...to counter her..swara in pain...Though he had accepted Swasan relation yet he did respect swara. He still had some feelings for her but something had changed...the depth...still he couldn't see her in pain and neither the brother he loved...but it wasn't his place to interfere. So he again diverted his thoughts towards the object of his hatred..Ragini. The cold breeze was hitting his chiselled features hard. The cold was penetrating..seeping into his mind body and soul . He lit a cigarrate and blew the smoke making curls in the air. Nobody was on terrace. All had gone tired with all drama downstairs today. He was lonely or so he thought till he felt being draped in a warm shawl. He knew it was Ragini. Funny..he could recognise her spence her even without watching or touching her. She was like the cold seeped in his heart.

R: The weathers changed suddenly. Its become cold.

L: yeah. Thank for the shawl.gives a smile to her and starts back to his smoking.

R: u smoke like a pro. Can u make those rings again.

L: what's so interesting about those rings..

R;: circles...how those rings get entangled and lost..

L: hmm what r u doing awake yet

R: u r keeping me awake.

L me??

R: u r making me think what u r thinking so deeply. Waisey apart from drinking,smoking...what new talents u have?? I guess only drugs is left...

L: why do I need drugs when I have u. U r more dangerous than drugs.

R: though it was a sarcasm I would take it as a compliment..thank..but let me warn us..am lethal potent..don't make me your habbit.

L: and what if I want to...make u my habit.???

R looks at L sceptically...she was trying to read his averted face..she felt this was first time they we're having a convo without fighting...and this was surprising...she couldn't find any deviousness on his face...she turned to go without answering..but L caught her hand and pulled her back..towards the railing still watching the dark sky...

L: u didn't answer me...what if I want to make you my habit...??

R: can I have your ciggarrette??

L surprised looks at her fully now...he notices..she's still in her part attire just as him...her eyes don't have a hint of sleep..her face bereft of makeup...the moonlight directly falling on her...no doubt she was very beautiful...even without makeup...still carrying g such an innocence on face that nobody will believe the tramp shess been. Her demand surprised him?.. What was she up to now?..there was a certain change in her which he couldn't point..so he let it go...

R: L I asked u could you lend me the ciggarate.?..what r u thinkinflg so much??

L fine take it. R put it in her mouth and tried to smoke..instead started coughing badly..

L: u shouldn't try things which don't suit you? That's the law of nature.

R: hmm...exactly...if you knew it didn't suit me..y did u even give it to me... don't u think u encouraged me. U should have know u am not exposed to these stuff.

L was dumbfounded hearing this . What bomb was this??..what did she actually meant??..what's she playing at now?. But somehow this thought struck him.

L:" smoking is injurious..don't try it ever again and now don't say I didn't warn you..."

R: " so am I..so am I lakshya don't get addicted..am dangerously injurious " and with a calm smile on her face..she poked his nose with her forefinger..threw the ciggarrate from his hands..walked away towards her room while lakshya was rooted on spot..utterly surprised with this sudden talk to her..he couldn't decipher what she meant.. he just understood one thing..this ragini is suddenly a mystery..a dark mystery and he would have to work ASAP on his plan...

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Posted: 9 years ago

#27

Okay what can I say your updates are brilliant smart and mysteries like both Ragini and Laksh. So he is going to use her to get what she took property money etc but I hope she is smart and plays the game with him, I like how she used the cigarette to tell him she has the same loving this Ragini keep posting

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dreamyjennice

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Originally posted by: rbb1
Okay what can I say your updates are brilliant smart and mysteries like both Ragini and Laksh. So he is going to use her to get what she took property money etc but I hope she is smart and plays the game with him, I like how she used the cigarette to tell him she has the same loving this Ragini keep posting

Lakshya is also a grey shaded character...but he's gonna grow and get strong in this ss... he isn't a sidekick intact the only key to hold the storm ragini...ragini turning a mystery a riddle is not what he expected...yupp ragini is like cigarette Burns herself along with burning everything inside u..harming u badly...this is what ragini has become in show...ragya growth will be very strong and painful...

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Originally posted by: dreamyjennice
Lakshya is also a grey shaded character...but he's gonna grow and get strong in this ss... he isn't a sidekick intact the only key to hold the storm ragini...ragini turning a mystery a riddle is not what he expected...yupp ragini is like cigarette Burns herself along with burning everything inside u..harming u badly...this is what ragini has become in show...ragya growth will be very strong and painful...

wow you have thought this through so much I like you explanation this is great agree with Ragini burning herself but I like how she is thinking smart as well

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radha 🦚

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Originally posted by: ShaktiArshaKR
So now laksh is going to pretend..great..the boy want to trap her..but the poor fellow dnt know its him who is going to get trapped in his own plan..he is going to fall for her badly..
Story is getting more interesting...i wish u were the writer of swaragini

Me too. She's adorable

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