OS: Stop Crying Swara

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The.Lannister

@The.Lannister

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Ranjini

@MFRanjini

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Posted: 9 years ago

So beautifully written Shruti ❤️

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PenguinBaby

@PenguinBaby

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Posted: 9 years ago

That was so good! Loved it😉

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PUBALI BASU

@MysticMoon

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Posted: 9 years ago

Wonderful 👏

Loved it ❤️

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

@Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 9 years ago

Lovely Shruti...Just lovely.

It had such a nice flow---Swara holding on to the memories of her moments with Sanskaar---the small SMS'es, the casual photos--all seemingly minor, nothing earth shattering, but now, they mean more than the whole world to her.

I really liked how you portrayed her going about her routine in the day time, with a mask of courage and forbearance in place, but in the privacy of her room, all she cares about, is cherishing those lovely memories with Sanskaar.

And that last para---Girl, you made her get a small note with a smiley drawn on it, and she smiles seeing her husband's written epistle "Stop Crying, Swara".
She started smiling all right, and you reduced me to a blubbering, teary puddle. 😊 Well, at least they were happy tears! 😊

Very lovely touch, having Sanskaar send her the torn pieces of that blasted divorce paper, and the mangalsutra to indicate their bond. BTW, there really was another mangalsutra is it?

Very lovely OS Shruti. You should write more, please. Do you take requests? Please send them on a honeymoon in your next one. Far, far away from crazy sisters, fathers who say "forget him, just move ahead", bade papas who trick them into signing stuff to save his own sorry ***, preventing his liaison of what? 3 decades ago, from coming to light...🤢

BTW Shruti, this is off topic, but I badly wanted to discuss this with ya. See, the Maheshwari family is so orthodox, so paternalistic, really. So even if the truth comes out of Durga Prasad having, well, sown his wild oats 25 to 30 years ago, what is the downside? Annapurna is hardly going to leave him. Ok, his image of the perfect pati, the perfect pillar of their biradari gets dented. Is that worth (even to him), blighting the happiness of 2 people he has repeatedly said are equivalent to being his own son & daughter?

I don't get it...the only excuse I can possibly think of, is that Sanskaar had earlier lied to them that he wants this divorce, and Swara, well, till recently she never let on that she actually loved Sanskaar. So maybe Durga Prasad felt he wasn't really doing them such a huge disfavor?

Sorry for going off on a side track, to end the comment let me again say how much I loved your OS...I am still wiping my eyes with my hanky. 😊

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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Unres:

I was so happy and excited when I got your pm as I know how well you write on other shows so knew that if you ever did write on SwaSan it would be awesome. And it is! I so love this- the sheer simplicity with which it unfolded was sterling but the way you brought in how Sanskaar chose to convey the message to Swara was superlative. My heart has literally melted into a puddle now reading about him sending her the mangalsutra and the torn divorce papers. What a way to scream out ALL he needs to say. The symbolism of the torn papers to the intact mangalsutra shouting out his love and dedication and most importantly, telling her that it will all be ok, he will make it so and she has no more need of tears, almost brought tears to my eyes! Oh and not to mention the poignant humour of the not to cry mandate 😆

Also it was so heartwarming to read of Swara reliving their memories through photos and going through their messages and even though it's such an angsty time, this gesture was so sweet and therefore felt great.

As we have discussed many times, we want to see a strong Swara but all that's recently happened to her is too much to take. We have desperately wanted Sanskaar to give her some sign, whatever it is to help her to keep going as otherwise how can someone survive what she has to? This was the perfect way to do it and kudos to you for managing it so adroitly.

You have an amazing way of expressing yourself concisely, it reminded me of Medhu who has the same skill. I lack the gift, I go into too much detail and reading this was so pleasurable as it had such impact without being overly verbose.

Fab work Shruti and I will now be annoying you endlessly for more so be warned!

Love you! X

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Nalini Ansh

@Bennet.Lizzy

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Posted: 9 years ago

So lovely shruthi..

I'm no critic so I cant write a long reply, though I want to.
But do give us more of these.

Been a pleasure reading.

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misaki

@misaki

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Posted: 9 years ago

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So excited that you have started writing as well. I so badly want to get home and read it

Unres - Shruti I am so very sorry that for this very late reply but kya karoon I feel like 24 hours in a day really aren't enough!

About the wonderful wonderful piece of work. It was seriously beautiful re! 🤗 It was so real and subtle yet powerful. Bravo!👏 The reading all the messages again and again - could totally relate. It's something I think all of us we have done once or twice na? Very very real. Like shruti said it made me remember our Medhu's writing. The parcel with divorce papers torn up and a very small note from our Very own sanskaar. Seriously! Brilliant!

You really should write more Shruti!🤗Loved Loved this one. Put a grin on my face! 😃😃😃 My Sanskaar!❤️

After the madness on the show and all the negativity here this was a much needed breath of fresh air!So more jhappis to you! 🤗🤗

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--Anna--

@--Anna--

Sparkler

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Posted: 9 years ago

Shruti 🤗

When I told you in WA that the title was hilarious, I had not thought that the OS would be just as contrary to it. This was so beautifully written and kudos to you for writing Swara so well. I know how much you love Sanskaar, but frankly, you have done justice to Swara here, completely. Darling, we need to send this to Sharad and Co., for this belongs in the show. This IS the Sanskaar I like. 👏👏 I really can think of no other beautiful way in which Sanskaar can let Swara know how much she means to him. Painful in the beginning but soul touching in the end. 👏👏

A very heartwarming OS. Touched the romantic nerve in me. 😉

Fabulous job Shruti! You need to write more. Really!

Love

Anna

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.FairyDust.

@.FairyDust.

Sparkler

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Shruti !!

First of all, I missed you so so SO much! 🤗

We've got to keep in touch yaar, I miss the fun we used to have.

Coming to the OS, This is so Beautiful!

I didn't know you write so well! The writing was so simple and the words flowed seamlessly and I could actually see all this happening before my eyes!

And Oh My God the ending! ❤️😭

Ah Sanskaar sends her a new mangalsutra and torn divorce papers - could there have been a better way to break his silence?

And aww that little note, those 3 words and that little :) ! It immediately transported me to that time when Swara drew a :( smiley on the window, it felt to me as if this :) was Sanskaar's reply, his assurance that everything will be alright! ❤️

Swara got a smile on her face after seeing that and on the other hand I was muttering incoherent things, smiling and crying like an idiot, It was so touching! 😭❤️

Damn it girl you're so GOOD at this! ❤️

I would love to read more from you!

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