.. - Page 6

First Previous

Page

Next Last

Frequent Posters

Aayat23

@Aayat23

Voyager

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#51

Originally posted by: Messi2
aww how cute mukthai pm keliye🤗...loved her exploration description
dont u dare say dis🤢...for me it was❤️☺️

do write more buddy i like how u write

U like mine work...aww that's really very encouraging...thank you so much!

Quote

Aayat23

@Aayat23

Voyager

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#52

Originally posted by: MusicAddict
Loved the second part veryyy much
Swara's growing feelings for him and Sanskaar assurance was very well written
Beautiful👏

thank you so much dear!

Quote

Looks like you are new here. Register for free, learn and contribute.

Aayat23

@Aayat23

Voyager

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#53

Originally posted by: gayu6
Loved swasan s always cute. He made her tension free. Awesome do write more.

thank you so much!

Quote

isha

@ishanita

Navigator

Posted: 9 years ago

#54

well cannt say anything about swara but i was feeling everything and sanskaars dialogue gave me goosebumps. ..
plz give either an epilogue or consummation as end of this ts
ishanita

Edited by ishanita - 9 years ago

Quote

Kelly08

@Kelly08

Navigator

Posted: 9 years ago

#55

no no this part actually turned good.even i wasn't expecting sanskar was awake.nice display of her strange unsaid feeling

Quote

Gangaaaaaaa

@SanaHolic

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 9 years ago

#56

👏

Edited by SanaHolic - 9 years ago

Quote

ritika52

@ritika52

Explorer

Posted: 9 years ago

#57

plz another part or an epilogue plz...

Quote

Anu

@anu91

Dazzler

Posted: 9 years ago

#58

It was totally awesome and cute os...

Loved it to the core...

Quote

sharmi

@lucky_princess

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#59

Superb update dear...perfectly expressed emotions..really romantic...hayyee 😳 pls try to continue

Quote

Cogito_Ergo_Sum

@Cogito_Ergo_Sum

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#60

Hi Mukta

Thanks for the link to this piece. I really liked both the chapters.

Swara's concern for Sanskaar's back and neck pain owing to his sleeping on the couch, and the way she then literally forced him to share the bed, was very touching as well as hilarious. 😊 And sub consciously, she is getting increasingly comfortable with him, hence she cuddles up to him in her sleep, treating him as her favorite teddy bear. 😆 😉

The 2nd chapter was quite sensuous as well as romantic. You portrayed Swara's growing attraction towards Sanskaar so well. She would like to caress him, touch his lips, kiss him, but is feeling so nervous about these reactions! 😳 The way Sanskaar reassures her that he is always with her, she needs to just take some time to get used to her emotions, they are completely normal since they are connecting on an emotional as well as a physical plane, was wonderful. Truly it was a very cute portrayal of a lovely husband--wife relationship beginning to blossom.

Edited by CogitoErgoSum - 9 years ago

Quote

1 ... 3 4 5 6 7

.. - Page 6

Related Topics

Explore Topics