Trial By Fire- A SwaSan 3 Shot - Page 5

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Posted: 9 years ago
#41
Beautiful narratiion shruti, I will post my comment in detail after reading the whole story . But so far so good .
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Posted: 9 years ago
#42

Originally posted by: Sakura24

Shru,🤗( That's for turning red!)

I was dying to read something from you and then whoo! 🥳You just made my Diwali!
But please, don't tell me that evil duo did something that had effected their bond very badly fragile heart you know❤️ can't take it!💔
Then the growing attraction...my my I was blushing myself as I read on. Swara is such a cute pie isn't she, she has no idea how much her responses (Unintended) encourages him to be more mischievous? And Sanskar...the first class flirt!😳
Then comes the bad part of Swara's innocence, I mean can't she sense something is cooking between her sister and her assumed 'best friend' ?As usual Sanskar is the most sane one of the two, he notices everything doesn't he?
Then the diwali scene...
Did they just kiss?????😲
Am I still reading this or hallucinating?
God! How can a kiss be so romantic, alluring, innocent and pure at the same time? Only Sanskar would have managed to hold himself that moment and Swara...as usual queen of oblivion!
How did you just stop it at that? Fine, I'll wait for the next part but something tells me, it's going to be rather dark stuff, I'm afraid of it at the moment.
Continue soon Shru, I'm dying in excitement here!


Saku 🤗 for wishing me on the red and 🤗 for the ever lovely comments!
You were waiting more ramblings from me? How sweet! And hope this TS won't disappoint! The evil duo 🤢- plotting and planning and causing trouble. Read on to see how low they can go!
Swara's naivet is too much and she needs to be "cured' of this, hence it is important for harsh lessons to be taught unfortunately. Sanskaar of course- no flies on him.
And yes, I felt a kiss was much needed, rather than unnecessary drama between them as they already have enough of that going on. Next part is up and yes, you were right- very dark and angsty but...
I'll do Part 3 tomorrow at some point! Thanks Saku and love x
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Posted: 9 years ago
#43
Awesum as ever.. loved it.. and waiting for the finale.. 👏👏👏

While I was reading the 1st part.. I felt that you have explained quite a bit of swara's behaviour with her sister from a psychological point of view .. it actually clarified a lot of things for me.. why swara has been behaving so trustingly.. 👏👏👏
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Posted: 9 years ago
#44
I hv no words shru.i m speechless!
Its lk i said...spellbound.
Each n evry emotn u xpresd brilliantly.
I read both parts 2gethr.atleast here swara strtd 2 figure out her feelings.
Aww!swasan 1st kiss.
Thn d drama!hw much i hate ths mr.&mrs.psycho.
Here also sanskar stnd 4 swara.hw much i love ths man.
Tbh,swara deserve ths smway.whtever she is doing blindly,she got it bk.
Bt wht z sanskar planing??
Waiting 4 nxt part.updt soon.hw swasan overcm ths lets c.& pl dear gv a beautiful cnfessn.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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I knew this was going to be a bitter dose😕 But...I'm waiting for the happy ending now.
The part was so stressful that I felt like kneeling on the ground and sobbing along with Swara I mean I get Ragini but Lakshya? How pathetic can this guy be? And such an idiot, does he still think that after this act of his Swara would ever look at him let along love him? His logic is beyond my understanding
And Sanskar❤️
How can one survive this Mad MM, without him? He is so strong in his stand that his trust is almost overwhelming! You portrayal is outstanding here Shru⭐️
so what is he going to do? How is he going to put everything right?
Well you'll reveal with the 3rd part right?😃 So I'm waiting for that, breathlessly!
Please, please, please update soon😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
#46
How easily have u used the scenes nd created ur own version. I'm hooked.
Love when passed the trials of life gets more stronger.

RagYa r disgusting. Hv no words fr thm.

Do continue soon
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Once again Shru- you really are one of the best writers in the forum! That little trick with Sanskaar not saying anything after those photos were revealed made me believe that it might have been that little fact that caused him to get away from the madness for a while, so that he can actually make sense of all of it and get back at Ragini - that was what I had in my mind when I commented earlier. Of course that never meant that he did not believe in Swara - My Sanskaar and not believing his Swara? Ain't happening. Especially something like that. My guy is smart enough to realize how shady all of it was.Documents of non-existing house, a pendant and a tickets to Manali and those photos and video? I mean who would take them if not to use it to create this exact situation. He and Ragini had done it several other times hadn't they? It was such an old and obvious trick. He is the guru afterall!
So there was absolutely no question of him doubting Swara at all!
Now if only the other MM wasis were blessed with actual brains. Too much to ask I know! Do you blame me for doubting if Sanskaar is actually adopted! Would make so much sense. 😆

BTW I loved how you used Suju and AP to make Swara realize that even though she hadn't committed a sin in the way Ragini has made them question her, the way she so carelessly behaved with her devar was clearly not right. I was so happy to read how she finally realized how unbecoming of her it was as his "bhabhi" - brother's wife and also Mr. LRG 's ex-fiance. I loved the line from Suju that talks about crossing a line and having to prove yourself later. Totally fitting title to the FF btw😃 I mean why create that situation.? Haven't anyone learnt anything from Ramayan? Swara needed to hear that and mere dil ko thandak mila! Yass! I hate the way Suju is defending Ragini on the show after everything that has happened but this here was very nicely done. Loved it for some reason.😆

Ah! so now I see why they are not together, can't wait to see how my smarty is going to become his damsel's Knight in shining armor yet again and rescue her in phull philmy style ! Yayy! Can't wait to read the next one. A very nice 2nd part Shru! Loved it as usual!🤗

Ah! How did I forget to mention this- I love how you got both Laksh and Ragini to play equal part with it. I absolutely love watching them stoop to higher lows every time! It gives me so much sadistic pleasure! 😈
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Posted: 9 years ago
#48

Originally posted by: The.Lannister

@Laksh: flotsam, never clear judgment 🤣 badi izzat se insult ki hai 🤣 keep it up 🤗


@Swara: her desperation to play happy families, best friends is sickening. it borders on being abnormal🤢 she behaves as if she never had a family or friends. what were dida & shomi? who was sanskaar? she thinks she is being modern, but she comes across as cheap. also i will never understand why her sense of freedom has to depend on what laksh thinks? why attach so much importance to him? he can think whatever he wants, but if you are firm it really shouldnt matter right? it is good to have support when u r all alone, but from whom? and at what cost? who needs that worms support?😡 all i see when i see swara is a girl who doesnt want the responsibilities of being a married woman (and i dont mean the housework!) but wants all the rights & benefits of being a wife.

@ragini: i wouldnt compare her with any genius army general tbh. she is stupid in her own way & short sighted in the extreme. her soldier: laksh😆 her aim: laksh😆 take laksh away from her & she is left without a defense and without an aim. and the aim isnt even worth the effort & time she is putting into. most of her plans succeed because she is always surrounded by idiots like swara, laksh, sujata, AP, shomi, shekhar, pari, daadi🥱 throw her to DP & sanskaar & we know how that turns out😈

@sanskaar: i like this new sanskaar who isnt giving up on swara. long ago i had made a post that instead of going on to the mahaan mode he should try to win her love (in a decent manner, unlike laksh).

That dream of sanskaar was great in the show but your version is even better. it would have looked so so good even your way ☺️ and then that kiss ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️

@divorce: dont u think wrt the divorce she is like an alarm clock which has to go off after regular intervals😆 and sanskaar shuts her up the same way we would shut a clock.😛

While reading this one more thing struck me. Sanskaar did have all the signs to believe that she was leading him on, didnt he? Her sudden shyness, acceptance, not getting irritated or angry everytime he mentions his love for her. Anyone would have thought that why the sudden change? Is she lulling me into a false sense of security so she can carry on with my brother too? But even then he doesnt believe it. He trusted her. What a man yaar

I am curious about the next parts. Wonder how sanskaar goes from kissing to ignoring her. Btw where is Swara? In MM or in her beloved baadi? Jaldi Jaldi likho plz😆

P.S. I hope you saw my other comment yesterday in the AT abt me being sarcastic about why AP not questioning Lakshji (I think u did, but i need it confirmed. its imp! Cant have anyone thinking that i will ever side with lakshji and annapurnaji😛 )


Shruti 🤗
Thank for as ever for detailed feedback, you know how much I like to read what you think 😳. Let me deal with the end bit of your comment first- urrff of course I realised the sarcasm hon, I was just in hyper mode at first generally and thought you were saying something else. Ofc I know you enough by now to know how some of us supporting especially Laksh ji is a virtual impossibility and AP's attitude at present- 🤢

Ok- so you like my nice descriptions of Devar ji? 😆 I don't know why, even if I try I cannot make this guy look isshmaart! And Ragini was described as a brilliant general only in so far as her soldier Laksh is concerned. But in my stories and this one too, she is smarter than in the show- more verging on dangerous insane than petty stupid as she often is shown in the show.
I am making Swara progress as much as humanely possibly through fiction as I sort of despair of this in the show. I too think Sanskaar should go all out to fight for Madam as if left to her, our grandkids will be writing FF about their union 😆. Glad the kiss is being so liked, just seemed to flow 😳. Re divorce- exactly! I just think its a threat without teeth and that is what I want to show with my story, it ain't gonna happen and even Swara needs to let that one go. You have read part 2 as I just saw so assume where Swara goes is now cleared?
I'll work on Part 3 tonight/ tomorrow! Lots of love x
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Posted: 9 years ago
#49
awesome as usual...
Loved Swasan..
Hated Ragini and lucky..
I wanna Kill them..

Continue soon..
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Forum.Maniac

Shru, this is so not fair.

I want to know what happens next 😭 Leki is ryt, you shld have posted all 3 parts at the same time, but chalo koi nahi, make it worth the wait! 😉
That kiss was so romantic. Loved how you described Swara's growing feelings and her reactions as of late to Sanskar.
Ragini & Laksh's plotting is way better here then on the show, I'm satisfied 😆
Also loved the fact that the Sanskar here acknowledged the fact that Swara is exasperating 🤣
Continue soon!

PS: My battery is really low. Cannot leave a detailed comment this time 😆


Sana 🤗
Maine tujhe rula diya?! Sowwwiee! You know I always have this dilemma- I write one part and want to post all 3 together but then get impatient. I took a straw poll on the AT and Anna and Shonali wanted me to post the first part so blame them 😆. But challo, by the time you see this you'll have possibly seen part 2 too. Glad you liked what you read and yes RagYa are in proper cahoots in my story! I need LRG dealt with once and for all too. Thanks for the comments despite low battery hon x

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