SwaSan TS: 'Old Sins Cast Long Shadows' - Page 9

Originally posted by: someonelikeyou-

Wow..what can I say about this,when you've left me speechless in a really awkward manner! its so awkward that I can't even tell how I love the way you add the quotes,and be so philosophically good.

The feelings,Swara's feelings...they are the best thing in this TS

Good one Viji

Love

Falaq

Originally posted by: RUQAIYA10

Viji!!!!!!. 😊

You are without a doubt a master story teller. The likes of Sydney Sheldon. My all time favorite writer of thrillers. While reading part 3 you took me straight down memory lane to the first time I read his book which was coincidentally also about split personality disorder.

Thank you so much for dedicating this fantastic piece to me. I am wholeheartedly grateful . this is a perfect concoction of romance and suspense. One thing I love about your stories are that they are so meticulously written.

Sansku yaar this guy always makes me feel for him. Relegating himself to love his wife only from a distance and living with the improbable thought of ever crossing the threshold is a feat only Sanskar can possibly achieve. So when when the blasted pillow wall was finally blasted off the bed the laddoos in my head were exploding at an alarming rate😳😆.

The Maheshwari boys do have a penchant of falling for the same girl. Laksh's love for Kavita was an unexpected revelation. And his entire transformation to a fully fledged psycho was chilling. I think it was his feelings of inferiority and hatred towards Sansku that could have triggered the genetic defect in him. And I loved the sun and moon quote. I felt a tad bit of sadness when Laksh said that.

And now I am really running out of superlatives to describe your work so I'll say something in French. Tres Magnifique!!!

🤗

Ruqaiya

Originally posted by: xoanyaxo

hi Viji ,

I loved your TS...read it in morning actually before leaving for college and forgot to comment later...anyways

I loved the combination suspense and romance. It was a TS but everything was flowing so gradually. Their emotions were laid out so beautifully and at the same time the suspense was building right from the start. I was sure it was between laksh and AP

You are attempting this genre for the first time wow! You nailed it...You are so goood

xoxoxo,

Anya

Originally posted by: moonstonespirit

Hi 🤗 This was simply brilliant!!! Absolutely loved it. Lakshya's madness was brilliantly written. How it all stared with his inferiority complex and grew into this deep rooted hatred.

Annapurna's thoughts on Swasan relationship and her thoughts on Sujatha's relationship with swara was finely blended into the story. Annapurna's character analysis 👍🏼

The progression of Swasan's relationship was beautiful and seamless. It was subtle, yet heartwarming. Good that Swara initiated the kiss!! Otherwise our Sanskari Baba would have never come out of his self imposed restrictions and see that she wanted something more than friendship 😆 His need to protect her from the brewing danger that was about to strike them and their restlessness regarding the same was brilliantly put.

I loved the way you built Lakshya's psycological disorder here. For someone who is as fickle and weak minded as Lakshya, jealousy and inferiority are bound to resurface. In fact, Swara choosing Sanskaar could trigger these hidden issues. Also with the elders accepting Swasan's relationship, Lakshya would take this as a sign of them choosing Sanskaar over him.

I do hope that they would touch upon Kavita's death on the show and also explore the bond between the brothers.

I loved it!!! And thanks for the PM 😊

Originally posted by: bloomnskyrules

You had me speechless as always and you had me at the edge of my seat until the end! I was reading it on my tab instead of listening to my teacher!

I did not guess it was Lakshya until I reached the third part. You built up the suspense really well.

Your description of the weather at the start was beautiful. I could actually imagine it!

My fav part is obviously the second part when Swara finally gives in to her feelings and SwaSan become one. I loved how the tension in the house made them come closer together. I think that this is what will happen in the show too. The adverse forces will bond SwaSan together!

I loved this TS! Awesome work!

BTW what happened to the SS you mentioned in one of your comments in your previous work? The one that diverges from the show after the Sindhoor scene? Will we get to read it soon?

I can't wait to read your next fic!

Originally posted by: samiya.059

Viji I don't write poetry myself but remember hundreds of verses..lol
there was a time when I was in high school I rememberd nearly all verse of dr iqbal .And these days am reading english translation of faiz Ahmed faiz urdu poetry...the poem I shared is basically the English translation of his famous poem "mein kya likhun"
Again thanks a ton for writing such a masterpiece.
It's a request do write more...I have become too greedy

Originally posted by: Javeria3991

awesome TS 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏

Originally posted by: ketty84

v. good keep it up

Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum

Hey dear...Thanks so much for that lovely comment. 🤗 🤗 BTW, please tell me your name, too.

I'm very glad that you liked the suspense part of it, as well as the part dealing with the way Swara & Sanskaar come closer together. I was in SwaSan dreamland when I wrote Chapter 2, so I guess that showed! ☺️
Your warm words of appreciation assured me that I got this mystery genre fairly right. 🤗 Thanks very much for that.

This was the SS I was talking about dear. Remember, I said that I was working on an SS that could have 3--4 parts, which diverged from the serial plot after the "fake wedding". (Not the sindhoor scene). This ultimately had 3 parts, so posted it as a TS and not an SS.

I am working on a 2 part OS series at the moment. Its not so intense, intended more as a light hearted Fic, since I need a small break from the intensity of this TS. 😉 I will have the first one up pakka before Diwali. Shall PM you.