SwaSan TS: 'Old Sins Cast Long Shadows' - Page 8

Originally posted by: tootiefrootie11

Viji 🤗

I knew my day was made when I woke and saw you'd posted the first two parts, hence the rush to reserve. I read the first 2 over breakfast in the hotel I am staying at for work, mechanically shovelling the food as I was engrossed. A piece that has references to Agatha Christie, Jane Austen and Oscar Wilde in it (oh and capped by Sappho) has to be amazing and of course with you writing it, there was no doubt about it. I know you were nervous about the different genre, but I wasn't in the slightest. The writer can make the work and you are of that calibre of writer who doesn't do "bad" writing ever 😃.

Coming to the actual TS, it was brilliant as ever. I knew almost straightaway it would be Lux as soon as I started to read how you began with him and also connecting that to the way the current track is panning out. Great foreshadowing in Sanskaar's recollections of him too and of course the only ones really capable of this type of attack would have to be him or AP and your AP in this wasn't that way inclined, being a retracted version of what you have imagined her to be previously. Truly a nice finish to the SwaLak saga as it death knells any lingering feelings which in any case this Swara doesn't have.

I really liked the way the chapters panned out. The suspense was built up and then we got much needed romance. I loved the scene where Swara is dying with worry. Soul connection again but am working on something (in my head) where similar fear and worry is experienced but not the same situation:). And of course then there's the outcome of all that dramatic tension and worry- 😳. So beautifully described, it made me sigh in pleasure. The finish of course was a perfect lead on from it all. The whole confrontation with Swara and Lakshya was spine chilling, the threat and danger came off the screen almost.

There's so many precious bits that I would like to quote back but typing on iPad at work and of course I can't copy and paste so am content with expressing my overall delight at the whole of it, it's hard to choose one favourite bit when you like so much.

As ever, masterfully done and I think any author who takes their writing seriously should try new things so kudos for having done that and even more kudos for having done it amazingly well.

👏

Love always xoxo

Originally posted by: hp_2006

This was just super duper mega hit...👏
Oh my god..!! I have no words to describe this TS yaar Viji..🤗
I am super excited after reading this..The adrenaline rush is still felt inside me, I cant just compose myself..😲
I never doubted it was Lakshya who was the dangerous stalker..I just scoffed his weak nature after going away meekly after Sanskaar hit him twice in the start..😆
I had my doubts on AP though, she is a powerful character with shades of Grey, in your 'Elements' series..And you seemed to be very much captured by her regal aura..That made me doubt her..Since the villian always have to be powerful.
But man..Lakshya..!!! he sent shivers down my spine, when he revealed himself in front of Swara at the farm house.
I had guessed earlier that it could be him forging Sanskaar's handwriting, since I remembered Sanskar's recollections about their childhood..But he could be villainous to the extent that he killed Kavita and was going to harm Swara.😲😲
Anyways, I loved Sanskaar's heroic entry to rescue his wife..Loved the way he did everything to protect her..👏⭐️
Awesome work dear Viji..Love you and your works very much..🤗

Originally posted by: Kamala05

Thank you Viji for the PM , otherwise I would have missed an opportunity to read an incredible work like " Old Sins Cast Long Shadows"

It is definitely different from your previous work and I loved your narration.

Originally posted by: hp_2006

And I forgot to mention one more thing..😉

The romance between them was awesome..❤️☺️
and the part I loved the most was when they came down the stairs glancing at each other shyly..😳😳
and everyone staring at them curiously😃 How I wish the same happens in our show
Since it was a three shot, my whole concentration seemed to be on the climax part..😃

Originally posted by: TRPS

thrillingly awesome!!!! 😊 again a nice piece of writing by you. 👏 you maintained the suspense sooo well. you know what, I was too curious to know who it was, when farmhouse' scene came, I just scrolled down to see who it is!!! 😛 pheww!! thank God! brainy Sanskaar's ideas for safety of Swara came useful in the situation. loved the bonding and confession of Swasan. 😊 and I think now girlies got the clear idea of how pillow wall was demolished. 😆

I loved the quotes which you used in the story. I never got the chance to read such talented writers' stories. well,now getting the glimpse through your stories.
So dear Viji, in future, I am definitely going to ask your recommendation for the novels. 😊 😳
and would you please explain me the meaning of the quote containing marriage and misundestanding??? 😳 and yeah, keep writing. 🤗

Originally posted by: mistofshadows

Crime and mystery is my second fav genre followed by medical fiction. You successfully managed to inculcate both.

Your writing is absolutely enthralling. Your manipulation of the language is so artful that it makes the abstract very concrete for me. Hence your writing eggs the visions even more powerfully.

I loved the plot as a whole. Swara and Sanskar's bonding is something that has immense depth and flexibility that it can be twisted to fit any genre.

If this is your first trial of this genre than its a very good effort.

However perhaps its the result of too much exposure to this genre I seemed to expect Lakshya. The moment Sanskar said about Lakshya imitating DP, it started giving me gut feelings.

Another thing is the Lakshya and Swara confrontation. He harped on how he loved Kavita nd killed her but the aspect of his and Swara's relationship was touched very slightly. I would loved a glimpsed to how his broken mind had reacted to Swara's apparent "betrayal". He is a psychopath and rationality is not his strong point. So I wish you had focused on that point a bit.

Sanskar is as much as intelligent and able minded as I had expected. So good work on the character out there.

I liked Sujatha and Annapurna scene. Specifically Annapurna's contemplations on Sujatha's vehement rejection of Swara. I nearly fell for the red-herring there.

My fav expression is the sudden evil feeling swirling in the atmosphere. I loved the way you depicted the negativity and the rottenness of someone's nature and thought polluting the whole environment and even giving Swara inklings of something bad coming her way. That really shook me up. Your articulation was brilliant there.

Lastly, your fic was yet another masterpiece and Ii feel honored to read it. Thanks for the scrap. Actually something is wrong with my account. Inbox is empty yet no pm comes through :(

Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum

<font face="Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif" size="2">Samiya, my very dear pal...🤗🤗 Thanks very much for this absolutely lovely comment. I was smiling so wide when I read it on my phone, if there was a smiling competition going on at that moment, I have no doubts I would have won the cup without any trouble! 😳

Cross my heart, there are two motivating factors making me write as much as I am doing on this forum. One of course, is SwaSan-- a truly magical on screen couple. And another, is the warm encouragement from friends like you. Thanks for that. 🤗

Am very glad you liked the suspense aspect, as well as the SwaSan relationship aspect of this TS. That made me feel reassured, that I'd got this genre fairly right. I did try to throw some suspicion on AP and Sujju as well, just as a red herring! 😉 And then of course some clues pointing to Lucky.

I just loved, loved, loved the poem you quoted. Who is it by? I have noticed that you refer a lot of poetry in your comments. Do you write poetry as well? If so, you should consider writing a few on SwaSan and sharing it on the forum. We would love to read it.


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Originally posted by: manasie23

I dont even know what to say but the way you have a described Lakshya's character sent chills down my spine... the way you have penned down everything, every detail got to say you have done an amazing job..
I dont even know what to comment because my words are falling short... I am in awww of this TS... keep writing more... Just one thing true love always wins and truth has a way to come out one way or the other.


-Manasi 😳

Originally posted by: misaki

Viji!!🤗

If it is you, I know it just has to be brilliant. No two thoughts about it

I loved how you got Swara to realize her growing feelings for him and finally the acceptance of their marriage. It was all so nicely done. I was at work when I started reading it and I almost got told by my team lead for not hearing him call for me. 😆 And of course I hated that I had to leave before I could finish the last part. The suspense of it all seriously was distracting me from attending my status call. I had this feeling that it was Laksh and I really wanted to know if it truly was him. If it wasn't AP, it had to be him. I did have my doubts about Suju initially but then if Swara did get killed, anyone would immediately doubt the "bangali bahu - despising saas" . Too obvious of a choice but could work in a way (I can totally see it, but that Suju would have to be a mastermind who could fool everyone into thinking she was silly and less than ordinary. OMG! imagine that?😆). However I kinda knew it had to be Laksh especially when I got to the part where Sanskaar talks about Laksh. YAYY!!! I am so very happy that I got it right!😆

When I started off reading your brief about the theme and plot, I never expected it to contain so much romance. I was pleasantly surprised😃. I loved how you got them to do away or completely forget about the "pillow wall" Such amazing stuff ! Makes my day so much better. So very happy to be reading them.🤗

Also I have always meant to say this several times but I somehow keep forgetting to. I love the fact that you always manage to post the entire story at once. I'm a sucker for happy endings and I also am a binge reader who loves to finish a story once I start reading it no matter how big the book is or how long it takes. That feeling that I get having completed a good story..total bliss! Thank you so much for this one again Viji! I am always looking forward to the next one from you🤗