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Viji, I have been wanting to pen this down since the day I first went through your TS, very avidly, and with bated breath !😛 How can I thank you enough, for not keeping us in suspense over the next 2 parts? Love your taking the effort and the time, to do it for our satiety ! God bless.😊
I will start with my Hearty Congratulations, Viji, for a par excellence penmanship of what you've said is a completely new genre for you ! For those who dont know it, you would appear to be a past master ! 👏
I loved the way you started this TS..the 1st para sets the tone immediately and definitively...its ominous, grave and dark. And gets more so, when the sinister shadow appears and hides again. Wow..you have written it so well, I can picture it unravelling...👍🏼 And the meanness, the fury, the frustration and the malintent is so strong, it hit me hard...to the extent that I felt like walking into the scene and sheltering our sunny duo from this evil force.😲
The AP para was a complete red herring, at the start, at least for me😆. I guess I havent got out of your take on this powerful queenly force even now..but you toned her down beautifully. And while she retains her regal aura, she is also all woman, and mother thankfully, to Sanskaar.
The beautiful take on Sanskaar and on Swara.😳..Our Sunny boy is so aptly portrayed...his boundless love for his beloved wife is wonderfully written. He is truly bewitched..and so are we, with him, his quiet, infinite, selfless and oh so endearing love ! And you, my dear, make him even more loveable, with sketches like these ! 😃 The "friend-zoning" that he has done, is superbly etched out..and is so frustrating to us readers, even as we admire him even more for being superhuman in his efforts to retain his iron self control! And those cracks in his defence, as you described them, are completely adorable..! 😳And parallely, you have our Golden girl, still unsure, still confused, and still hurting but healing in his unending love and care. Sensitively and superbly portrayed, Viji!
The 2nd shot was a complete contrast from the inaction of the 1st...the 1st was all thought, the 2nd all Action..! And thankfully, what was most active, for once, was Swara's brain..in that she finally realized what Sanskaar means to her ! The agony that you made her suffer, was worthy of her love...and soo needed for this love story to take the next step. Sanskaar's realization of what her scold really implied, was very welcome. And so typical that he was immediately swamped by concern for her, when he saw her in tears. 😳
Umm, the next bit was most satisfying❤️..my heart craves to see it on screen..and I know we WONT get to see it ! 😕 It was enchanting, ethereal and oh so beautiful, Viji ! And the last line, almost a benediction, gave hope of a long lasting, love.😳😳
And what a return to the the looming darkness, the terror and the sheer evil of the start, again...the sun of our golden duo's love seemed to have been dwarfed out by the evil..vague though it remained. When you said Sanskaar was leaving, one knew, that this was it. And while some friends in this forum did catch on, I didn't, so the denouement when it came, was a complete surprise for me! (I guess I couldn't ever attribute genius to Lakshya...and an evil genius, mad to boot, is what you've made him!) And the extent of his evil, and his insanity was blood curdling..well done Viji..this is a villian far superior than I can ever imagine Lakshya to be.⭐️
Am I glad, that Sanskaar being his smart self and had done all he could to keep her safe ! With pepper sprays, army knives and detectives to boot? Thankfully she was smart enough to create the right opportunity, and to use them ! Hurray! And hurray too, to her final deliverance. 👏
The wrap up, frankly, was unwelcome! I so love to delve into the make believe world you create, I'd like it to go on forever ! So, selfishly, I'd have liked to see further discussions between our love birds, a bit of the shock and pain of Sanskaar and her sharing her shoulder, the revelation to the family and DP/AP's reactions, and a final word from Sanskaar on Kavita too..for closure with Swara..perhaps even what happened with Ragini. And of course lots of more Swasan...(sorry..but ye dil maange more!)😃
I read this and a number of superb stories and posts, right through my fever last week..and they really kept me going, upliftng my mood, giving me positivity and friendship, in the gloom of being ill..I cant be thankful enough to you and to all the other pals here, for making me feel so good. 🤗
Keep em coming, Viji..as soon and as often as you can! 🤗🤗
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