Originally posted by: vaishnavi77
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Viji🤗!
What an uncanny ability u have, in all the superlatively good way.😃
Well, I knew you were a little apprehensive about this piece and was attempting a different genre!
Truth be told, I had fully well known that whatever you would write would turn out to be beautiful as always but, dear, this genre of suspense was a big surprise for me!
I ended up reading this piece thrice and every single time i observed how you have so diligently written each sentence, each, serving it's rightful purpose in completing this wonderful shot (as in ,a real suspense shot)
I am not going to write the points that i loved this time, given , practically i would end up musing over every little line that u would have added and also, this being a three shot, i would as well as end up copy- pasting the entire of it, instead!
The quote of zero hour! Mind-blowing. It indeed summarized the entire writing of yours!
I would very briefly, again i say, very briefly sum up what i loved.
First of all , what caught my attention apart from the fact that this piece had your author name was, the atypical titles that each shot had!
"A dark night dawns"- Even your preface perfected the theme you wanted to convey! 👏
A creepiness started to set in with the dawn of the darkness this piece would contain
"Their intimacy blooms--but amidst a sleepless malice" , "Zero hour" - The titles just so apt. And of course "The growing intimacy" grew on me like a dream 😳.
So, kudos for such thoughtful and apt titles. It isn't an easy task to summarise and nail it, both perfectly😊
PREFACE- Had all the elements that would set up the stage for the act to take place. I just loved..LOVED the entire of it!
I could so well imagine the scene of rain pouring hard and it did , with the realisation that it's a thriller , pounded my heart beats in anticipation of what could happen further! This indeed provided the edge that preface should provide.
You have always been a master in attending those little tad bit details , that convey much more than just the story. That scrupulous writing on setting the scene itself blew my mind. ⭐️
..."Painted blue on blue , one stroke at a time, into deeper and deeper shades of night!"
l couldn't understand whether it was eerily romantic or romantically eerie. That sentence was just very poetic!
I just have to rate this to be the best preface for any genre of writing!
PART 1- With all mental preparations to grab the slightest clue that u trail behind, i begin reading , only to find myself admiring Sanskaar and the inner determination the poor chap had to bring out!
The AP and sujju part, i found extremely well thought as if ,you had delved into the layers of their thick brains, of course thick for different reasons😆
In all senses, this was a deadlock -- between his fear of losing his world , and her fear of facing hers. - I am simply in awe with the way this conveyed the equation of Swasan of 'your story 'as well as the show.
PART 2 -- Here i scroll down in anticipation, again, waiting to recognise every trail u leave behind with a pounding heart (after reading the title)and what do u do ,Viji? Direct somersault of my heart! 🤪
There is such a beautiful realisation hidden here but all that i remember very lividly is the dismantling of the pillow wall
I am glad, Swara took the first step🥳
I also saw how just a few lines brings out the hush and blush that arises after reading something in detail! I believe, this is the best trait of a romantic author,in which, you already hold a black belt😆
PART 3-- As much as i enjoyed the Sanskaar's revelation of Lakshya's skills (I was like - Oh this Lux ji is also talented!😆) and the way you had written about it as if it was just a flow of the topic and is inconspicuous, I appreciate.
But, i had this sense that it had to be our Talented Lux ji only, from the preface and i was just glad to see it getting confirmed. I kinda instantly knew the moment Swara read the letter and also when she spoke to Sanskaar ..well ..errr ..Lux over the phone! 😊
But the best part of surprise was the association of Kavitha with Lux as his love interest and batch -mate. I say so, because, that put a full-stop as to how , when, and all the 'Wh' question that would arise to know the reason of Lakshya falling in love with Kavi!
The story supporting the reason behind this vengeance seeker Lakshya isn't baseless or superficial. It can only arise as a result of complete understanding of Lakshya, DP, AP and Sanskaar.
The conversation between Swara and Psycho Lux-👏👏
Well, for someone who could have guessed the culprit, the dialogues and the extent to which his madness has settled deeply was the suspense Or must i say, a shocker?!
The conversation was eerieee! It sent nah , scintillated psychic vibes all around.
That is where indeed you have triumphed with your writing. 👍🏼
It isn't about finding the culprit..it is about the feeling that arises making him a culprit, a criminal..Those lines on him burying swara and yelling that he would visit her regularly..also, asking her about her choices of flowers! ...Girl, what a deep post-Mortem have u done of a criminal mind!😕
The story just oozed psychological imbalance and creepiness! 😲
I am so very glad u gave a happy ending. 😆
Viji, a true writer is his/her own competitor and that, I see in you!😊
Your writings reflect the amount of time, thoughtfulness and sheer hard work you assiduously put!👏
I remember, you had said, "Now i will burn my midnight oil for this SS as I want it to meet your expectation!"
If this isn't called meeting above expectations, then, I honestly do not know what is!🤗
