SwaSan TS: 'Old Sins Cast Long Shadows' - Page 12

Originally posted by: Sakura24

Hi again Viji,

Can you believe I'm rereading this? That too for the fifth time? Can't get enough of it yet. So captivating, each word a different charm...still feel a rippling sense of suspense and a thrill of mystery. I'm soo much deeply in love with this...

Originally posted by: SONAL30

Hey viji😃

finally I got time to read ur TS

n OMG what a masterpiece unhave written...I must say this the bestest OS I have ever read👏

the way u have written the iniatial stage of their relationship was so excellent😃

swara was trying to understand her feelings n sanskaar was unknown towards her changed feelings

laksh tried to impose himself on swara but sansku punched him n swara shouted on her😡

n he stormed out of the house in anger...swara was scared n finally they took next step in their relationship😉

but the most shocking part was laksh's true face😲

he was a psychopath who killed kavitapoor girl😭

n he also tried to kill swara just because she has fallen for his brother...god he needs some mental treatment

thanm god sanskaar has brains n he reached in time otherwise

loved it so much

thanks for the pm🤗

Originally posted by: Smilelicious

Viji, mindblowing 👏
I personally love intriguing stories with lots of suspense till the end 😳😆
Sheer brilliance. It was like reading a book, suspense, romance ☺️ Everything was there.
The initial quote was really beautiful and the whole part was very nicely described.
The second part ☺️ Ohmygod, so so so beautiful ❤️ Their feelings were brilliantly described. You left me speechless.
The 3rd part, left me quite shocked. I'm very honest i never expected Laksh to be Kavita's murderer 😲 I had a doubt on Sujata at the beginning, but i was wrong. This came as a surprise to me. You maintained the suspense element till the end, well done 👏 This might happen in the serial as well 😉 Laksh is turning into an obsessive lover, so i won't be shocked to know that actually he was the one who killed Kavita 😆
Swara and Laksh's confrontation gave me goose bumps. He really needed a psychiatrist.
The whole TS was simply outstanding and a special thanks to Medha for convincing you to post this, otherwise we would't read this masterpiece 🤗

Originally posted by: kaku17

Phew...you took me by surprise ( though I should not have been 😆 )...what a scintillating story ⭐️...I must admit I love mystery more than romance and when these two genres are clubbed together its a win win for me...😛

Loved the way the story unfolds...and though I am one of the many people who suspect AP to be the one behind kavi's death in the show...I must say I did a double take when it turned out to be lakshya...I shuddered at the description...gosh I am terribly scared of psychopaths 😭...the simmering hatred which he concealed for so many years for his bhai...the thought with chilling conciseness that he would make his bhai rot in hellfire which he has been doing since childhood...😲...omg I was dead figuratively and scared .out of my wits ...

Now I think it would be so out of box to eventually prove lux as a pschyco instead of rags in the show also...it would surprise the hell out of everyone...ragi and yucky are definitely made for each other...t

Originally posted by: rerose

Wow ,Viji,I am completely lost in ur TS land,it was just awesome yaar👏

Thanks a ton for the PM ,lovely work😛😛

Wow cute,awesome philosophies,exclaimed in ur TS,mindblowing work,Awesome yaar😃

Originally posted by: rithika2012

hi viji,

a big tight hug to u dear for this wonderful piece of writing🤗

i just loved the whole 3s to bits.. u really maintained the suspense very well and it never like u were new to this genre. i enjoyed the whole story and the suspense really thrilled me.. i could really imagine all those scenes and that is the impact ur writing had on me.

i just loved the way u continued ur connection of AP background from ur previous works. finally swara had developed feelings for him and i really loved the way u describe her feelings for him.

i really loved the whole scene where sanskaar punches lux and swara scolds him. for me it was like swara was in her full wifey mode and scolded sanskaar as this what usually any wife does when her husband enters into a fight. i loved the way u described her feelings when he left her and the way sansku realised that what ever she did was for his sake. so finally the epic pillow wall was collapsed for ever and ever.😳

i just loved how sanskaar gave her all instructions when is going to be out on a trip and those weapons 😉 needed for her safety. hayee.. such a protective hubby.. i hope i get a husband like him and swara like acchi biwi followed his instructions.

i just loved the way u knitted the whole plot. the letters in sanskaar's writings then the call , then swara sensing that some was eyeing her then to the letters in swara's hand writing and finally the person who planned this was in front of her. i must admit i never thought that it would be lux and it was surprise for me.

swara was clever enough to understand his plot by keeping 2 and 2 together. was just spell bound by the way u established a connection between their childhood habits of doing homework and mimicing others.to presnt scenerio.

swara was smart enough and waited for the oppurtuinity to attack lux and she did that when she got the moment and saved herself. i was really relived when i read sanskaar was outside with police and the way he knew the whole something wrong happening with his wife and the way he reached there. i can say that even cv's could have never show us something so clearly without a blooper like the way u wrote the whole scenario. 👏👏👏 kudos to u for that dear.

finally kavita and laksh got proper closure and now its time for swara and sanskaar to face some troubles with the family but im sure they will emerge stronger.

sorry for such long rant but kya kare couldnot stop myself from posting what all i liked in it.. i read this in late night and went to sleep only thinking about it.. u are such a gifter writer viji.. please do write more..

thanks for the pm..and keep writing...

Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum

🤗 🤗 Hey Shru...

I was so very happy and touched to see you res'ing like within a few minutes after I'd started posting. 😊 Thank you so much for all those wonderfully warm words about my writing. I'm glad after all, that I decided to embark on this voyage 😉, in terms of this relatively unfamiliar genre as far as my writing is concerned.

I did put in some clues pointing to Lucky in Chapter 2, but before that, I did leave some red herrings pointing to Sujju and AP. 😉 Yeah, I mellowed AP a little here, compared to my portrayal of her in "Fire", but I did want to put in sufficient grayness to have at least some suspicion on her. Glad you noted that.

Am also really happy you liked the menace and danger in the last chap, Shru. I wanted that to come out, and I had a fair bit of chills running down my spine, when I wrote about Lucky's psychopathic behavior. So as you can imagine, I was kinda sadistically pleased you felt it was spine chilling while reading it! 😉

Am really, really happy you liked the SwaSan romance, too. Right after I finished Saudade, some of the girls were urging me to "bring down the pillow wall", 😛 and I was like, chalo Berlin wall itself came down, so why should we keep this absurd pillow wall in place? 😳 ☺️ Waise, on screen SwaSan will take maybe 60 to 100 episodes minimum to get anywhere near this stage, so may as well write about it and dream about it, no? ☺️.

And the earlier Swara worrying about Sansku bit, I did want Swara to have a push into acknowledging how deeply she feels for him. Sansku worries about her all the time, I wanted her to be equally concerned for him. 😉

😆 So you're planning a work with the concern and worry aspect? I really feel sometimes that Medhu, you & I have this connection going on, the way we look at things, the way we get things. Its uncanny, sometimes. BTW are you making Sansku worry about Swara, or the other way round? (Please, whatever you do, don't make anyone worry about Yucky, except worry about WTH the moron may be capable of doing!) 😉

Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum

Kaku, my dear friend...🤗 🤗

Thanks for this lovely comment yaar. Am so very happy you liked this TS. I always look forward to your comments, and here where I was attempting a different genre for my writing, your warm words reassured me, that at least I've managed to do a fair bit of justice to it.

I'm really happy that you liked both the mystery and the romance part of it. 😊 I did want to make it a mystery thriller, with of course, a liberal dose of SwaSan romance! 😳

Frankly, I was shuddering and shivering myself, when I wrote that climax scene. I wanted that feeling of menace and danger to come through, so I am glad when you said that it worked.

Thanks so much again, Kaku. Do check out my last OS "Saudade" when you have the time. I think you may have missed reading that?

well now that you are attempting different genres, may you can try your hand...ah rather pen...in writing a story laced with humour, wit and satire...

ahh you took me by surprise...you realised that I did not leave my views on your splendid os "Saudade". ...first of all let me thank you immensely for introducing me to this hauntingly beautiful word "saudade"...what a beauty this word is......

Originally posted by: kaku17

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Viji 🤗

my dear...you should not have been worried...infact if you would not have mentioned that you are attempting this genre for the first time, no one would have guessed it...you not only have a stunning command over the language but also the way you weave in your story is phenomenal...every element in your story is at the right place...you are a master story teller in every sense...

well now that you are attempting different genres, may you can try your hand...ah rather pen...in writing a story laced with humour, wit and satire...😳

ahh you took me by surprise...you realised that I did not leave my views on your splendid os "Saudade". 😲...first of all let me thank you immensely for introducing me to this hauntingly beautiful word "saudade"...what a beauty this word is......

I have read "saudade' more than twice 😃...but for the past few weeks I have been a bit busy...I usually use my phone to read all the stories and in general browse through the forum, but when it comes to writing a detailed note, I prefer my lappy...I absolutely detest typing from my phone...I would definitely leave my note on "Saudade" in a few days...in the story you so beautifully described the Oberoi grand...such a lovely grand hotel...it has a certain old world charm...Calcutta has so many places like that which transports you in to the era by gone...if only the authorities took care to preserve the heritage which Calcutta has, instead of blatantly defacing it...😡