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Posted: 9 years ago
#51

Originally posted by: bloomnskyrules

I loved this! Loved how Swara confessed and loved your description about Sanskaar's personality!

You should really do the 'Air' OS. But who in the show has a personality suiting air though? Swara is water, Annapurna is fire and Sanskaar is earth but who is air? Durga Prasad?
Please wite more on SwaSan.



Hi...Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to comment. 😊 Yes, I wanted to show Swara confessing her love in front of the entire family, mirroring what Sanskaar had done earlier.
Sanskaar really IS an Earth persona, isn't he? Solid, dependable, patient. 😊

Frankly, am not sure I will do "Air" at all. I had initially thought of doing it on Lucky (or perhaps Ragini). But I am feel too irritated right now with these characters to want to write about them. Maybe later, as an epilogue of sort, perhaps...

In the meantime, I have started biuncing ideas for an SS in my head. 😊 I will need time to flesh out the plot though, at present its all rather unclear. I will let you know as soon as its ready to be posted.



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Posted: 9 years ago
#52

Originally posted by: Prionti26

Awesome 👏👏👏


You are a amazing writer



Thank you 😊 Glad you liked it.
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Posted: 9 years ago
#53

Originally posted by: rithika2015

aweeesommmeee awesome this is the only word that came out of my mind after reading this.

just so beautiful and loved it too bits..
swara and sanskaar were just spot on. i loved how they stopped annapurna that too without insulting her.



Thanks so much Rithika. 😊 BTW I thought I saw your post about an OS you'd written, is that right? If so, please PM me the link, I would love to read it but not able to find the post.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Umm viji, I un-resed my comment on the 2nd page. Sorry it took so long😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hey Viji.. I am reading your work for the first time as I didn't read Fire and Water. This is one of the best story I have ever read it's because of your writing, you wrote so beautifully. 👏 This is a series but I started from this, the last one and I really loved this one. You portrayed the characters wonderfully. When Swara confessed I felt Aww at that moment she confessed it in front of the family. ❤️ The flashback was nice. I'm so inspired from your writing and I should say that keep writing and post more but this is the last part of the series. I make sure that I will read your Fire and Water anytime. What an amazing writer you are? I know this is short but I have lots to say about this story. 😆 My network is so worse that it doesn't allow me 😛 Do make a new one 😉
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Posted: 9 years ago
#56

Originally posted by: Cintila

Umm viji, I un-resed my comment on the 2nd page. Sorry it took so long😳



Hey Tuhina...NP at all dear. 😊 I already saw your comment late yesterday and replied too. I guess my reply is on page 6. 😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Viji, this was outstanding !👏 The entire series was !! ⭐️
I read it in one breath yesterday, when it first came out..but was in the middle of work and didnt want to revert in a hurry..because this deserves so much more !
I have loved all 3 parts of the series..and I just read all 3 together AGAIN, to link them up as I read them..Your series is a beaut of a continuum, effortlessly flowing from one to the next. I loved how deeply you have though through the key characters, highlighted the beauty of the strength of one character against the other and the interplays between the 4 key characters here..😊

While DP didnt get his due (I am sorry, but would have loved to see him as one of the elements - the Hindu concept of Air or even better the Sky perhaps?) he held sway right through, cause that IS his right ! And its his word that you have used as the final decider, very rightfully.👏 I loved that, because if anybody, he is the only elder in this entire drama who has won my respect ! (ok Shomi does get my esteem too - but her brainless obsession with her doltish, spineless😡 husband, washes it out).

You portrayed the characterization of Swara as Water, beautifully in the 1st part - it was apt, because, to my mind, Swara has been that eternal giver..filling up the hearts and minds of whoever she meets with her joy and warmth..as water fills up wherever it turns..Water knows no boundaries and sweeps out all when it rushes out, much as she swept out all the darkness in the hearts of so many people when they get to know her - Sujata, Sanskaar to just name a few..and even others cant remain unaffected by her warmth, her strength and her complete honesty - DP being one of them. Hats off for that one..

But the next took my breath away ! Fire and AP !! WOW ! What a take on this one supremely enigmatic, regal, all powerful diva ! And your background research was a classic piece of extremely good writing ! ⭐️I often think that I'd love to write..and I am known to be an extremely creative story spinner (verbally thought)..but the one thing I realize when I read well studied stories like yours, is that I cannot hope to reach this class...coz I do not have the patience to do the pain staking outlining of the context, this kind of serious research, ever ! And since there is no point in doing something you cannot do well, I have abstained from it ! So hats off to your dedication to doing a good job really well ! I can see there is a master here...and I am glad we're getting to read it, through this forum !😃

I have loved how you've built the story from Water to Fire and to Earth now...the rising tide of love in Swara, the self awareness and then the self realization of what she feels for Sanskaar..the entire evolution has been heart warming and lovely and is outstandingly outlined.. Sanskaar himself, as an Earth sign (and since I am one, and my hubby tells me that I define all of these very same attributes, I can identify with him) is perfectly cast. Solid, dependable, resilient and oh so all embracing ! This part of the story was outstanding..!👏

The tidbit with Kavitha is very intelligently placed...because you have defined Sanskaar so well..there could be no Sanskaar without his background of Kavitha..she has shaped him, as has her loss..moulded him into becoming a man with a sterling character of strength and steel and high courage. And the evolution of Sanskaar from his darkness to his current self, is etched out very succintly but comprehensively, nevertheless. Swara's thoughts and his, the interplay with AP's resolve and the final confession...Wow...!

The confession is sheer brilliance ! The very idea of a public confession is so right, so "Karmic" even ! The similarity of the confession (a very public one, amidst a sceptical crowd, a first time acknowledgement of love,,) is juxtaposed brilliantly with the dissimilarity of the context and the feelings of the recipients..! So while he was drunk, she is "cold stone sober"...😆 He confessed in a stupor, she confessed in her fullest senses..She was shocked, dismayed, betrayed even, by his confession. He is overjoyed, on top of the world with hers..and while all the spectators disregarded his love confession as secondary to his larger confession that evening..today her confession was THE key turning point !😃

The blessing from DP, his tad bit of partiality for Swara, warmed my heart..its those lil touches (the twitch/uplift of his lips (you had depicted this in "Ek Chutki Sindoor" as well - another very dear favourite) that delight me and make me realize the degree of detailing you etch out in your characters. Bravo !👏

I have rambled long and loud..so will wrap this up. Please do continue to delight us with your superb Swasan stories..they are much awaited..as much as the serial itself !

❤️ Pic.

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Posted: 9 years ago
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as I always says u r the brilliant writer it was awesomly written dear sum do write more u r tooo much good writer and thanks for pm dear :)))
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: azira07

as I always says u r the brilliant writer it was awesomly written dear sum do write more u r tooo much good writer and thanks for pm dear :)))


Thanks so very much Azira. 😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
#60

Originally posted by: piccola1

Viji, this was outstanding !👏 The entire series was !! ⭐️

I read it in one breath yesterday, when it first came out..but was in the middle of work and didnt want to revert in a hurry..because this deserves so much more !
I have loved all 3 parts of the series..and I just read all 3 together AGAIN, to link them up as I read them..Your series is a beaut of a continuum, effortlessly flowing from one to the next. I loved how deeply you have though through the key characters, highlighted the beauty of the strength of one character against the other and the interplays between the 4 key characters here..😊

While DP didnt get his due (I am sorry, but would have loved to see him as one of the elements - the Hindu concept of Air or even better the Sky perhaps?) he held sway right through, cause that IS his right ! And its his word that you have used as the final decider, very rightfully.👏 I loved that, because if anybody, he is the only elder in this entire drama who has won my respect ! (ok Shomi does get my esteem too - but her brainless obsession with her doltish, spineless😡 husband, washes it out).

You portrayed the characterization of Swara as Water, beautifully in the 1st part - it was apt, because, to my mind, Swara has been that eternal giver..filling up the hearts and minds of whoever she meets with her joy and warmth..as water fills up wherever it turns..Water knows no boundaries and sweeps out all when it rushes out, much as she swept out all the darkness in the hearts of so many people when they get to know her - Sujata, Sanskaar to just name a few..and even others cant remain unaffected by her warmth, her strength and her complete honesty - DP being one of them. Hats off for that one..

But the next took my breath away ! Fire and AP !! WOW ! What a take on this one supremely enigmatic, regal, all powerful diva ! And your background research was a classic piece of extremely good writing ! ⭐️I often think that I'd love to write..and I am known to be an extremely creative story spinner (verbally thought)..but the one thing I realize when I read well studied stories like yours, is that I cannot hope to reach this class...coz I do not have the patience to do the pain staking outlining of the context, this kind of serious research, ever ! And since there is no point in doing something you cannot do well, I have abstained from it ! So hats off to your dedication to doing a good job really well ! I can see there is a master here...and I am glad we're getting to read it, through this forum !😃

I have loved how you've built the story from Water to Fire and to Earth now...the rising tide of love in Swara, the self awareness and then the self realization of what she feels for Sanskaar..the entire evolution has been heart warming and lovely and is outstandingly outlined.. Sanskaar himself, as an Earth sign (and since I am one, and my hubby tells me that I define all of these very same attributes, I can identify with him) is perfectly cast. Solid, dependable, resilient and oh so all embracing ! This part of the story was outstanding..!👏

The tidbit with Kavitha is very intelligently placed...because you have defined Sanskaar so well..there could be no Sanskaar without his background of Kavitha..she has shaped him, as has her loss..moulded him into becoming a man with a sterling character of strength and steel and high courage. And the evolution of Sanskaar from his darkness to his current self, is etched out very succintly but comprehensively, nevertheless. Swara's thoughts and his, the interplay with AP's resolve and the final confession...Wow...!

The confession is sheer brilliance ! The very idea of a public confession is so right, so "Karmic" even ! The similarity of the confession (a very public one, amidst a sceptical crowd, a first time acknowledgement of love,,) is juxtaposed brilliantly with the dissimilarity of the context and the feelings of the recipients..! So while he was drunk, she is "cold stone sober"...😆 He confessed in a stupor, she confessed in her fullest senses..She was shocked, dismayed, betrayed even, by his confession. He is overjoyed, on top of the world with hers..and while all the spectators disregarded his love confession as secondary to his larger confession that evening..today her confession was THE key turning point !😃

The blessing from DP, his tad bit of partiality for Swara, warmed my heart..its those lil touches (the twitch/uplift of his lips (you had depicted this in "Ek Chutki Sindoor" as well - another very dear favourite) that delight me and make me realize the degree of detailing you etch out in your characters. Bravo !👏

I have rambled long and loud..so will wrap this up. Please do continue to delight us with your superb Swasan stories..they are much awaited..as much as the serial itself !

❤️ Pic.


Pic...😳🤗Thanks so very, very much for this comment. It made me feel as if I was floating on air, in the sky (there's the 2 remaining elements now. )😉

Am traveling at the moment so I will reply in detail to your very lovely and encouraging comment later tonight. But I just could not wait to tell you how incredibly moved and humbled I am, by your comment. I do not claim to be a master, but I am passionate about writing, and when it's about a pair I am so emotionally invested in, it spurs me on to write the best I can.

Warm comments like yours motivate me to do the absolute best I can, so thank you so much for that. I will reply in a bit more detail soon. 😊

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